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What Are the Disadvantages of Advertisement?

Is advertising a good or bad thing? What are the pros and cons of various forms of advertising? Marketing strategies have shifted in the last decade to use social media as a primary advertising platform. With these changes and aggressive campaign strategies, ads have made their way into our digital lives — large tech companies track our every move and bombard us at every corner.

But even "successful" advertising has its demerits. So, it's important to take a look at the repercussions of product or service marketing and how they affect an audience.

1. It Is a Costly Function

One strong objection to advertising is that it is a very costly function. Many studies have proved that the cost of ads exceeds that of sales by a small but significant percent. In theory, the high cost of advertising is covered by increased sales of the advertised product, but this usually is not the case.

2. Misleading Claims About Products

Some advertisers cleverly create misleading impressions of their goods—they present a very rosy picture of their products with the object of increasing their sales. In reality, their item is of inferior quality.

3. Encouragement of Monopoly

Advertisement restricts competition among products. Big industrialists and manufacturers can use advertising to increase their monopolistic control over the market against the public interest. Advertising increases awareness about a few products but causes all other options to be overlooked.

4. High Prices of Products and Services

It is undoubtedly true that effective advertising increases sales volume. These increased sales require more products. Large-scale production brings down the cost of goods per unit, which in turn reduces the selling price. But if the producers do not lower the prices, the burden of advertising falls on the shoulders of the consumer.

5. Small Businesses Have Restricted Access

Small businesses cannot properly advertise their products due to limited resources. The entire market for many goods and services is dictated by the whims of large advertisers. This makes it virtually impossible for small businesses to compete, so they eventually disappear from the market.

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Concurrent to shifting of marketing strategies in recent times, ads have found their way into our daily life and bombard us in every nook and cranny.
To check out how service marketing influence on prospective consumers .
In the following ,we...

Concurrent to shifting of marketing strategies in recent times, ads have found their way into our daily life and bombard us in every nook and cranny.
To check out how service marketing influence on prospective consumers .
In the following ,we enumerate a number of advertisement disadvantages: first of all it is an expensive function and beside of creating some misleading impression that can confuse the buyers or even encouragement of monopoly can make a bad influence.
Also the result of high prices of products as increasing sales volume is the burden of advertising falls on the shoulder of consumer.
Another serious problem is limited resources of start-ups may lead them to expulsion from market under the shadow of numerous advertisement.

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Taking a look at the demerits of advertising and the way they affect an audience is essential because in the last decade, marketing strategies have been changed to use social media as a primary advertising platform. First of all, advertising is a...

Taking a look at the demerits of advertising and the way they affect an audience is essential because in the last decade, marketing strategies have been changed to use social media as a primary advertising platform. First of all, advertising is a costly function result in increasing sales volume which requires large- scale production. Cost of advertisement is covered by increased sales of the advertised product and if the producers do not lower the price, consumers have to bear the burden of advertising. Second, some advertisers present a misleading claim about an inferior quality product by demonstrating a rosy picture of their products. finally, advertisement can lead to the monopolistic control of big industrialists and manufacturers over the market which can eventually cause small businesses to disappear due to limited resources available to them and impossibility of competing with big manufacturers.

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Having been added to our daily life as an active section in social media platform, advertisements embrace pros and cons and their effects have raised questions whether they are helping people or misleading them for deciding upon their needs.
Alth...

Having been added to our daily life as an active section in social media platform, advertisements embrace pros and cons and their effects have raised questions whether they are helping people or misleading them for deciding upon their needs.
Although they are making sales increase, they are costly functions and devour businesses’ funds. Rather than this main objection, they tend to make a rosy picture of products of inferior quality; this could be considered as a moral hazard for the industry. Moreover, smaller firms are more likely in subject to a restricted competition as their products would be overlooked by consumers, who are mostly bearing the burden of advertising expenses by themselves, whereas they are not aware of it. Eventually, small business are condemned to destruction thanks to lack of resources.

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Everyday people come across with a significant parts of advertising which bombard them through aggressive campaign strategies that made their way into human digital lives. The repercussions of product or service marketing is the subject of debate...

Everyday people come across with a significant parts of advertising which bombard them through aggressive campaign strategies that made their way into human digital lives. The repercussions of product or service marketing is the subject of debate which is became
increasingly common between advertising consultants and sociologists. Being costly function is one of the strong objections to advertising. The second opposition reason is
about creation misleading impressions of products, while most of them have inferior quality. Giant companies and manufactures restrict competition by having monopolistic control over the market and it is another problem that occur by advertising. It is obvious that advertising affect on sales volume so it would be caused to decreasing of products price, whereas producers refuse to decrease the price and eventually advertising expense is on the shoulders of the consumers. Since that the entire market is dictated by whims of advertisers and also due to limited resources, small businesses have restricted access to advertising options.

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The pros and cons of advertising has been a controversial issue in recent years, by shifting from newspapers to mostly smartphones, bombarding us at every corner. This means, one strong objection to display rosy picture of products, which create...

The pros and cons of advertising has been a controversial issue in recent years, by shifting from newspapers to mostly smartphones, bombarding us at every corner. This means, one strong objection to display rosy picture of products, which create misleading impression made their way into our digital lives. In fact, advertising is costly function, paid by consumers. Moreover, small companies are eliminated in the restricted competition in order to limited resources for advertising.

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In the last decades, advertising made their way into our lives through media and track our every move; thus, it is important to take a look at its repercussions.
Firstly, the strong objection of advertising is a costly function, and sometimes this...

In the last decades, advertising made their way into our lives through media and track our every move; thus, it is important to take a look at its repercussions.
Firstly, the strong objection of advertising is a costly function, and sometimes this burden falls on consumers' shoulders. However, it creates misleading impression, along with rosy picture, of inferior quality. Additionally, it restricts competition, so small businesses eventually disappear due to limited resources and big manufacturers' monopoly.

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Marketing business strategies have shifted from television or newspapers to social network web pages and applications as their primary advertising platform, however the opponents toward this new trend assert that doing such ads is a costly...

Marketing business strategies have shifted from television or newspapers to social network web pages and applications as their primary advertising platform, however the opponents toward this new trend assert that doing such ads is a costly function and as not all businesses and companies have the ability to compete , they will gradually disappear which means a huge failure. not only small businesses would be ruined, but also, big manufacturers will gain a monopolistic control over the other options. concerning the products which are ardvertised, the producers create a misleading picture of their products to impress the audience, particularly youngsters.

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Logically speaking, advertisement the same as other social phenomenons enjoys merits and demerits. Actually, we are engaged with diverse moods of advertisement in each corner of our life inevitably thanks to a variety of social media tools...

Logically speaking, advertisement the same as other social phenomenons enjoys merits and demerits. Actually, we are engaged with diverse moods of advertisement in each corner of our life inevitably thanks to a variety of social media tools surrounding all people throughout the world. However, in spite of the positive changes that advertisement have made in lives, there are a couple of definite downsides which can create serious problems in community. The most significant objection to advertisement is its excessive expenditures which in accordance with theories, it would be made up by increase in sales, whilst, these anticipations will not be lived up in real world. Apart from that, growth in sales trend caused by efficient advertising methods must be led to falling in prices in terms of economic analysis, but unfortunately, prices remain constant and that is taken into account as a partial profit. Another issue is related to monopoly markets which be strengthened with expansion advertisement by great corporations, therefore small and medium-sized ones would not have any chance to present their products in the market and gradually would be vanished. The last minus outcome of advertisement is exaggerated claims which create a rosy picture about a specific product, while there is not such a product in reality. As a result it leads to outbreak of this sort of cheating in the society followed by potential disappointing repercussions.

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downside is plural....

must lead to a fall in prices.....

check the punctuation for THEREFORE

OUTBREAK is countable and so you should use an article like THE or A before.

I love the way you have organised the paragraph... Keep going, I am...

downside is plural....

must lead to a fall in prices.....

check the punctuation for THEREFORE

OUTBREAK is countable and so you should use an article like THE or A before.

I love the way you have organised the paragraph... Keep going, I am sure you can achieve a 7+

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Over the last decade, as a primary platform of advertising, social media have caused people to be bombarded with various ads at every corner. Besides the advantages that advertising has, its drawbacks should not take for granted.
First of all,...

Over the last decade, as a primary platform of advertising, social media have caused people to be bombarded with various ads at every corner. Besides the advantages that advertising has, its drawbacks should not take for granted.
First of all, advertising is very costly. It means the cost of ads which were to be compensated by increasing in sale volume does not bring back to the manufacturing, and advertising expenses exceed that of sale. (alternative: Being a very costly function, advertising expenses exceed that of sale and is not usually covered by an increase in sale volume). Another objection to advertising is misleading impressions they have on consumers by concentrating on the rosy picture of products only. In addition, it may cause restriction on competition, for big manufacturers and industries as a kind of media tycoon can monopolistic control over the public market. This may lead small businesses to be on the verge of extinction due to limited resources. Finally, increasing the sale due to advertising will bring about more demand for products and so large-scale production. Thus the final prices of goods should be decreased, while producers do not reduce their interest and put the expenses of ads on the shoulder of the end user.

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should not be taken for ....

by an increase in sales volume

what do you mean by: does not bring back to the manufacturing,

use SALES instead of SALE Volume....

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Modern marketing is significantly influenced by advertising, which stimulates people to by latest and newest trends. Despite benefits of advertisement demerits of that should be taken a look. Mass media like TV commercials and glamorous magazines...

Modern marketing is significantly influenced by advertising, which stimulates people to by latest and newest trends. Despite benefits of advertisement demerits of that should be taken a look. Mass media like TV commercials and glamorous magazines are primary advertising platform that most of them by showing rosy picture of products,with objection of increasing sales volume,encourage people to purchase their goods,however,their products are of inferior quality. Beside this,advertising in turn leads to conspicuous consumption in which consumer demanding is increasing as well and it needs more production on the head of corporations. It brings down the cost of goods in per unit,as a result the selling price should be reduced,although manufactures,regarding high cost of advertisement,do not lower the price,in conclude the burden of advertising falls on the shoulder of consumers. So marketing needs customer's fully appreciate for that government have to formulate new marketing policy.

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Check the punctuation for HOWEVER << their goods,however,their products are


Also the punctuation for AS A RESULT OF, IN CONCLUSION

Customer's ??? Do you mean Customers?

I love the organization within the paragraph; though you need to be more...

Check the punctuation for HOWEVER << their goods,however,their products are


Also the punctuation for AS A RESULT OF, IN CONCLUSION

Customer's ??? Do you mean Customers?

I love the organization within the paragraph; though you need to be more careful with the minor mistakes in grammar as well as punctuation.

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Advertisements,using the media's platforms, have made their way into human's life, these days; hence, it is worth noting their potential repercussions on marketing and the audience alike. To begin with, it is perhaps a strong objection that...

Advertisements,using the media's platforms, have made their way into human's life, these days; hence, it is worth noting their potential repercussions on marketing and the audience alike. To begin with, it is perhaps a strong objection that advertising, although theoretically leading sales volume to increase, is in fact a costly function; thus, in turn, probably ending up supplying people with products and services at a higher price- a burden on customers' shoulders. Added to this is a restricted competition, through which not only might the market be monopolized by huge corporations against people's interests via advertising particular products while overlooking other options, but also small businesses having limited resources for advertising might eventually disappear from the market. Last but not least, misleading claims about products is another noticeable demerit. Indeed, many advertisers are bound to create misleading impressions with a rosy picture of their items which in reality are likely to be of inferior quality.

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[*]Due to the advent of the internet, and in particular, social media we are bombarded by advertising. This prosperous industry possesses its own merits and demerits. To begin with, despite the theoretical view of the high contribute amount of...

[*]Due to the advent of the internet, and in particular, social media we are bombarded by advertising. This prosperous industry possesses its own merits and demerits. To begin with, despite the theoretical view of the high contribute amount of money on advertising the more selling sales of the advertised products, studies have shown it is impractical costly function. In addition, they grab customers’ attention by a rosy picture of their goods leading to manipulate purchasers to follow inferior products. What is more, advertisement curbs keen competition amongst products? To put it differently, this industry is dominated by multi-nation manufactures having large market shares, and giving targeted products on exaggerated account. Meaning that customers’ awareness is increased regarding specific products, but, nonetheless, other options appear to be overlooked. High prices of products and services are one of the drawbacks of advertising. It is obvious that effective advertising strategies lead to increase sales volume, on the contrary, what will happen if they fail to implement their targets? The burden of advertising falls on the shoulder of the buyers. Finally, small companies are less likely to promote their service owing to a tight budget, as a result, they are bound to face bankruptcy and potentially disappear from the market.

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Try to omit personal pronouns like WE in your formal essays.

What is more is WHAT'S MORE and is always informal for such a context.

check the punctuation for ON THE CONTRARY

I love the style of your writing.... Keep going... You can achieve...

Try to omit personal pronouns like WE in your formal essays.

What is more is WHAT'S MORE and is always informal for such a context.

check the punctuation for ON THE CONTRARY

I love the style of your writing.... Keep going... You can achieve a 7+

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Disadvantages of publicity have been the subject of a global debate for recent years. It is believed by many that advertising has various detriment. From a household economic standpoint, many advertisements lead to economic pressure for families...

Disadvantages of publicity have been the subject of a global debate for recent years. It is believed by many that advertising has various detriment. From a household economic standpoint, many advertisements lead to economic pressure for families because there are a vast number of commercials which promote various merchandises that are of inferior quality. Owing to poor quality of them, very soon, people will be obliged to spend a lot of money in order to fix the product or replace them with another one. This means that persons several times spend money on a same good, causing economic difficulties for them. Furthermore, publicity has various negative consequences for consumers. Advertising results in additional costs for consumers because although advertisements boost demand for advertised commodities, and in turn decrease the cost of producing products, producers do not bring down the price of their productions; hence, it falls the burden of publicity on consumers’ shoulders. By way of conclusion, after considering an economic perspective of commercials, it seems that advertising has different adverse impressions on people.

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Change the first sentence... Again a memorised cliche... You will lose marks

the second sentence can be: the advertising is believed by many to have ...

use hedge phrases: advertisements lead to economic >> advertisements might lead to...

Change the first sentence... Again a memorised cliche... You will lose marks

the second sentence can be: the advertising is believed by many to have ...

use hedge phrases: advertisements lead to economic >> advertisements might lead to economic

persons?

what does IT refer to in this sentence: hence, it falls the

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Shifting over the last decade to use social media as a primery advertising platform, marketing strategies throughout these aggressive campaignes have made their way into our digital lives. Since we have been bombarded unceasingly by the wide...

Shifting over the last decade to use social media as a primery advertising platform, marketing strategies throughout these aggressive campaignes have made their way into our digital lives. Since we have been bombarded unceasingly by the wide range of advertisemens, it is well worth taking a look at the repercussions of products and service marketing. To begin with, the strongest objection to the phenomenon is that advertising is a colossal costly function. To put it differently, the expenditure of ads surpasses (exceeds) the profits which theoretically is believed will be compensated by the rise in the amount of sales. However, more often than not, it is not the case. Secondly, companies display acumen by creating misleading impression attributing to deceive audiences, thus leading them to believe in rosy picture of advertised merchandises. The other demerit of advertisement which is of great importance is the increased monopolistic control over the market. Raising awareness about a few products, although, advertising causes all other possible options to be overlooked. In addition, the more the effective advertisement run, the demands are highly likely to skyrocket, which in turn requires more production. If manufacturers do not lower the cost of production, unfortunately the burden of advertising will fall on consumers shoulders. The last but not least downside of advertising is as a result of the limitation in advertisement resources for small business, they are in jeopardy of going out of question.

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I really love the way you have organised the paragraph
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Shifting to use social media as a primary advertisement platform, ads have made their ways into our social life, meaning that we are constantly bombarded with the advertising messages of aggressive campaign strategies. In spite of some benefits,...

Shifting to use social media as a primary advertisement platform, ads have made their ways into our social life, meaning that we are constantly bombarded with the advertising messages of aggressive campaign strategies. In spite of some benefits, the repercussions of product and service marketing can not be overlooked. To begin with, the high cost of advertising cannot be compensated by the increased sale of advertised products. Added to this, the inferior quality of some products is sometimes concealed cleverly behind the rosy picture to create a misleading impression. Also, it is often said that the more sale, the more produce and the more produce the lower prices. But, should the cost of a commodity is not reduced due to the large volume of sale, the financial burden of advertisement will fall on the shoulder of consumers.

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the more sale is not formal enough THE HIGHER SALES VOLUME

BUT at the beginning of sentences is informal. Use something else instead

The organisation is great... Keep going

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Social media, a primary advertising platform in the last decade, has brought a significant change in marketing strategies. Such a revolution in advertising method along with the aggressive campaign strategies has triggered ads to make their way...

Social media, a primary advertising platform in the last decade, has brought a significant change in marketing strategies. Such a revolution in advertising method along with the aggressive campaign strategies has triggered ads to make their way into our digital lives, and since we are bombarded with advertisements of large tech companies at every corner, a question arises whether the advertisement is good or bad. Accordingly, it is of the essence to take a look at the repercussions of product marketing and the way they overshadow not only the target audience but also manufacturers. Admittedly, despite the benefits accruing to consumers as well as producers, the demerits of advertising are by no means negligible. One strong objection to advertising is that some advertisers present a very rosy picture of their products, and cleverly creating misleading impressions of their inferior goods in order to increase their sales. Advertising, furthermore, is considered very costly function leading to the encouragement of monopoly. That is to say, the high cost of advertising is unlikely to be covered by increased sales of the advertised product. Having limited resources for product publicity, small businesses virtually fail to compete with those overwhelmingly dominated the market. This means the entire market for many goods and services is dictated by the whims of large advertisers, making small business to be disappeared over time. Thus, monopolistic control over the market by big industrialists causes all other alternatives to be overlooked.

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platform of advertising is more natural

media is plural. Use a plural verb

have triggered

check the exact meaning for TRIGGER

I really like the Coherence and Cohesion along your paragraph. Perfect enough to achieve a 7+

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Forms of advertising have changed in recent years .Social media has become the advertising platform while ads aggressively made their way into our digital lives, and large tech companies track our every move and bombard us at every corner.It is...

Forms of advertising have changed in recent years .Social media has become the advertising platform while ads aggressively made their way into our digital lives, and large tech companies track our every move and bombard us at every corner.It is worthwhile to have a look at repercussion of products or service marketing .to begin with ,it is not only cost in terms of functioning but also there are claims about misleading of products.It has proved that the cost of ads exceeds the amount of sales which it is likely to burden of excessive expenses of advertising falls on the shoulder of the customers.Moreover, monopolistic control over the market by big industrialistic and manufacturers leads to restriction of competition which consequently causes overlook of other options

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Forms of advertising? Weird and awkward

media is plural; use a plural verb

be more careful with parallelism. MADE way and TRACK should be in the same tense.

You seem to translate most of your sentences directly from Farsi into English. You...

Forms of advertising? Weird and awkward

media is plural; use a plural verb

be more careful with parallelism. MADE way and TRACK should be in the same tense.

You seem to translate most of your sentences directly from Farsi into English. You should better read more texts and study more authentic texts

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Shifting marketing strategies to use social media in advertising has been considerable growth in the last decade. With the fast-changing technology advertisements have made their way open to our digital life, thus those can get stuck us at...

Shifting marketing strategies to use social media in advertising has been considerable growth in the last decade. With the fast-changing technology advertisements have made their way open to our digital life, thus those can get stuck us at every situation. But it is noticeable point that advertising , even if it is marketable case, has demerits. Therefore, it is totally required to people pay attention sufficiently to reperecussions of product or service marketing. The first drawback that can be mentioned is in terms of high cost of function. It is a costly industry causing wide range of objection to it. In theory , despite, high investment on advertising can be followed with augmentation in sales, this often is not the case. The second and most important thing is misleading claims about products - deceiving consumers by rosy pictures while , in reality, their goods are of inferior quality. The third point is about encouragement of monopoly. Big industrialists and manufactures possess high ability to spend an array of money on presentation of their merchandise by colorful advertisements, thus the smaller companies will be ignored inevitably. Fourth aspect is about, high price of products and service. It is undeniable fact that effective advertising bring about rase in sales volume. The more sales , the more produce. The consequent not only does factory expenditure rise intensely, but also it would soar cost of products as well. As a latest point, since the entire market for many goods and services is dictated by the whims of large advertisers , it virtually makes impossible for small business to compete , thus they disappear from market, eventually

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A considerable growth

I cannot understand the purpose of WITH in the second sentence Neda.

get stuck is informal for such a context.

therefore, people are required to pay sufficient attention to ....

Try not to use CERTAIN phrases in your...

A considerable growth

I cannot understand the purpose of WITH in the second sentence Neda.

get stuck is informal for such a context.

therefore, people are required to pay sufficient attention to ....

Try not to use CERTAIN phrases in your body paragraphs like: It is undeniable fact that... You might lose marks for Overgeneralisation.

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Advertising, apart from its benefits, has a number of demerits for audiences, one of which is miss information. As you will have seen, advertisers employ a myriad of techniques to channel shoppers’ choices toward specific products such as catchy...

Advertising, apart from its benefits, has a number of demerits for audiences, one of which is miss information. As you will have seen, advertisers employ a myriad of techniques to channel shoppers’ choices toward specific products such as catchy slogans in advertisements. These short phrases create misleading impressions of the goods so as to spur customers to purchase them. Indeed, advertisings conjure up a rosy picture of the products while they are of inferiority, in reality. Another strong objection to advertising, in addition, is its costs. The company pay a fortune at the expense of reaching the object of increasing their sales, with the price advertised products increasing. Needless to say, the burden of advertising, for this increase cover its expenses, falls on the shoulder of consumers.

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MISS INFORMATION???

I like the structure in your first sentence

I love the way the paragraph is organised

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In recent years, marketing strategies has changed magnificently, due to the role of social media that is known as a primary advertising platform.
Although advertising is a successful way for representing companies products, its demerits on...

In recent years, marketing strategies has changed magnificently, due to the role of social media that is known as a primary advertising platform.
Although advertising is a successful way for representing companies products, its demerits on audiences can not be denied.
It is claimed that, cost of advertising is a objection leader among the other cons. Moreover, in some cases what manufacturers represent as a rosy picture of their products is far from the costumer's expectation.
While the range of advertised products is limited, some specified products would be overshadowed therefore, small businesses are to die out through the monopoly of giant leaders because of not being able to advertise their commodities properly.

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platform of advertising is more natural

also it is better to say companies' products

cannot < can not

do not use COMMA after THAT

I love the range of collocations and grammar you have used

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Advertisements have increasingly made their way into peoples' ever-growing digital world such as social media. Shifting the way of marketing to an aggressive campaign strategy, the ads are bombarding people every moment and every corner in their...

Advertisements have increasingly made their way into peoples' ever-growing digital world such as social media. Shifting the way of marketing to an aggressive campaign strategy, the ads are bombarding people every moment and every corner in their routine life, which will have some repercussions on both individual's life and good's marketing.
Initially, advertisements not only are too costly, but they also may mislead the consumers through presenting a product that is of inferior quality as a rosy picture. Moreover, although more and impressive advertisements may enhance the sales volume, it doesn't guarantee to reduce the product's price. Finally, some big and powerful companies with plenty number of ads can obtain the monopolistic control of the market, while low income companies with limited financial resources, virtually might be either overlooked or disappeared in the long run.

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You need to work on Parallel Structure: advertisements not only are too costly, but they also may mislead...


Perfect introduction Fatemeh... I like everything in your paragraph. Keep going

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Advertising is known as a promotion activity which plays vital role in fostering economic outlook of companies. So people constantly encounter various sorts of advertisment. With advent of the internet, advertising
methods have been undergone...

Advertising is known as a promotion activity which plays vital role in fostering economic outlook of companies. So people constantly encounter various sorts of advertisment. With advent of the internet, advertising
methods have been undergone considrable changes.take social media which is a prime advertising method as an example. People show interest in virtual word and it encourages marketing managers to place a premium on it and bombard people with wide range of advertisments. Despite the merits such as increasing awareness of potential consumers, it has brought upshots . which can be boiled down in 5 cases. Companies have laid out sizable amount of money for advertising whereas, sometimes fail to improve economic aims.2 many advertisements axaggrate about quality of services or goods.as a result they dont make accurate portrayal of them for consumers.it easily leads to discontent and beyond all dispute have irreparable consequances for çompanies.3 many opine that advertidments confine competition among goods, for big
companies can dominate markets. Thus leading to foster monopolistic. 4. One of the indicating functions of advertisment is increasing sales volume which can spur less price for buyers.but companies are reluctant to do that and unfairly the burden of advertising falls on the shoulders of the buyers. 5 numerous small bussinesses fail to tackle advertising expenditure .so they presumably would disappear and markets would be managed by indicating companies

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plays A vital role

with THE advent of ....

have undergone < no need for using passive voice

check the punctuation for WHEREAS (subordinates)

also check the punctuation for THUS

Perfect paragraph Eli You only need to proof-read your...

plays A vital role

with THE advent of ....

have undergone < no need for using passive voice

check the punctuation for WHEREAS (subordinates)

also check the punctuation for THUS

Perfect paragraph Eli You only need to proof-read your paragraph. But I am sure you can achieve a 7+ in your writing with this knowledge of vocab and range of grammar.

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Marketing strategies have shifted in recent years. Several pros and cons have been detected in these trends. For example, companies are apt to increase their sales volume by the use of different advertising platforms such as Instagram, Facebook,...

Marketing strategies have shifted in recent years. Several pros and cons have been detected in these trends. For example, companies are apt to increase their sales volume by the use of different advertising platforms such as Instagram, Facebook, Linkedin, which in turn create misleading impressions of their commodities in the society. In fact, they want to paint rosy pictures of their products among consumers making their way into the upmarket. This means that they would consolidate their position assuming that they are in the right path. It is possible to become precursor of a special good, yet it would be a costly function which eventually restricts competition, facing with the limited resources by putting the burden of astronomical cost on the shoulder of an organization. Lastly, the strong objection to it is that small businesses are affected by those businesses which increase their monopolistic control over the purpose market as they restrict competition. These points were the repercussions of product or service marketing during this era.

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Your paragraph is a WOWWW! I really like the way it is organised
Keep going! I am sure you can achieve a 7.5+ in your writing Hedieh

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No one can deny that we, lately, have proved stuck more under the influences of advertisement than ever, for being surronded and bombared by digital promotions in makerspaces. Despite success and advancement of these features, relevent...

No one can deny that we, lately, have proved stuck more under the influences of advertisement than ever, for being surronded and bombared by digital promotions in makerspaces. Despite success and advancement of these features, relevent repercaussions should not be overlooked and inattentioned. To begin with, the achilles heel of this platforms is their expenses; owing to being far-reaching money-consuming, they are not only excusively under the invasion of affluent companies and brands, thus restricting the small and new-born business to make their way into trade, but aften take their tolls on consumers who are forced to compensate dedicatec costs by expending higher final prices. Along with this, the other objection of advertisement is its vogue exagration and deafraud; Those are gorgously picturing the positive features of products while deliberately and trustlessly covering drawbacks as though those are flawless to attract the masses to obtain them and raise sales volume. The imagined impression may even remarkabely differs from protype in reality.

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Try to use Hedge phrases in your body paragraphs instead of being so Certain: No one can deny that we,

You should break your structures (repetitive structures) into smaller pieces of structure. Take a look at this sentence (it is only ONE...

Try to use Hedge phrases in your body paragraphs instead of being so Certain: No one can deny that we,

You should break your structures (repetitive structures) into smaller pieces of structure. Take a look at this sentence (it is only ONE sentence!): To begin with, the achilles heel of this platforms is their expenses; owing to being far-reaching money-consuming, they are not only excusively under the invasion of affluent companies and brands, thus restricting the small and new-born business to make their way into trade, but aften take their tolls on consumers who are forced to compensate dedicatec costs by expending higher final prices

You are so perfect in use of Collocations

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Recently, marketing has shifted in the world. The media is known as a primary advertising platform in this field. Advertising has pros as well as cons and maybe the disadvantage of it, is shown about the effects of it on the audience.
The...

Recently, marketing has shifted in the world. The media is known as a primary advertising platform in this field. Advertising has pros as well as cons and maybe the disadvantage of it, is shown about the effects of it on the audience.
The strongest objection to advertising has proved by many studies which are about its costly function. Furthermore, some advertisers create misleading impressions of their commodities.Although they try to demonstrate the rosy picture of products, in fact their goods are of inferior quality.
on the other hand, advertising brings a compete among small businesses and big companies in which small ones cannot properly advertise their goods due to limited resources and they eventually disappear from the market.

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PLATFORM of ADVERTISING seems more natural in this context.

I cannot figure out the meaning beyond this sentence: maybe the disadvantage of it, is shown about the effects of it on the audience.


The organisation is good, though you need a...

PLATFORM of ADVERTISING seems more natural in this context.

I cannot figure out the meaning beyond this sentence: maybe the disadvantage of it, is shown about the effects of it on the audience.


The organisation is good, though you need a wider range of grammar to achieve a higher score.

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Advertisement in modern life is imbued with some detrimental repercussions. Firstly, when it comes to the function costs, this method stands out among the other alternative marketing tools. Secondly, in many cases, the presented rosy pictures...

Advertisement in modern life is imbued with some detrimental repercussions. Firstly, when it comes to the function costs, this method stands out among the other alternative marketing tools. Secondly, in many cases, the presented rosy pictures might create misleading impressions on people’s minds while it is, to all intents and purposes, not the case. Finally, not only does it encourage the monotony in business, but also it may lead to the removal of small businesses. To clarify, when the entire market is dictated by the whims of giant companies, smaller ones do not have enough resources to present themselves, thereby disappearing from the market.

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I really like the NEAT organisation along your paragraph, though you need to support each idea sufficiently.

Good use of collocations! Keep going bro

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Thanks to the social media,marketing trend has been immensely changed in last decades and adds have made their ways into our digital lives.however,even successful advertisements have nemerous demerites that deserve consideration here.
The most...

Thanks to the social media,marketing trend has been immensely changed in last decades and adds have made their ways into our digital lives.however,even successful advertisements have nemerous demerites that deserve consideration here.
The most convincing objection to advertisement is the fact that it is an overly costy function and there is no guarantee that all the budget assigned to advertisement would be recoubed by the higher sale.
Furtheremore, it is always claimed that most adds have a misleading impression on customers,for suppliers just present a rosy picture of their items. Thus,customers lose their trust in the long run.

Regarding to the price of products,it goes without saying that the more advertising a product the higher sales volume and the more demand lead to more supply by the manufactureres which is expected to a significant decrease of the price of products.nevertheless,the whole burden o advertisement would be put on the customer's shulders.
Moreover,advertisement restricts competition of the quality of goods. In other words those industries who are leading in advertisement can get the market while small campanies owning to lack of financial resources to interduce their products, will gradulally disappear from the market.
To conclude,although advertisement plays a key role in introducing a product to the public,it has uncountable downsides as well.

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has IMMENSELY changed

in THE last decades

ADDs >> ADs

regarding TO << TO is not needed

which is expected to a significant decrease <<< I cannot figure out the meaning

check the difference between ALTHOUGH and WHILE and the use of each.

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has IMMENSELY changed

in THE last decades

ADDs >> ADs

regarding TO << TO is not needed

which is expected to a significant decrease <<< I cannot figure out the meaning

check the difference between ALTHOUGH and WHILE and the use of each.

Try to organise all the content in one paragraph. It will help you with the organisation

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