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The Pros and Cons of Working Remotely 

In recent years, it has become increasingly common for some employees to work from a remote location, such as their home or a work-sharing space, thanks to the power of personal computing and high-speed networks. But remote work is still a subject of debate among human resources professionals and administrators who want to know: does remote work affect organizations in a positive or negative way? Does working remotely offer benefits for employers, employees or both?

Advantages of Working Remotely

Increased opportunities for employers to attract talent

Employers that offer candidates the possibility of working remotely have an advantage when it comes to recruitment. Remote work tends to be very attractive to prospective employees, especially for those workers who want to establish a good balance between their work and family life.

Reduced work-related expenses for employees

One of the primary benefits of remote work for employees is a reduction in work-related expenses, such as transportation.

The ability to work remotely in another city

Have you ever come across a job opportunity that seemed ideal, only to be disappointed to find out that the position is based in another city? Remote work allows employees to live in one place while working for a company based hundreds of kilometers away. Some employers want their remote workers to come in to the office on occasion, which can afford employees the opportunity to travel.

Reduced stress for employees

The ability to work from a remote location can considerably reduce the stress that some employees experience. Being in a comfortable, non-public environment that provides a feeling of privacy can be a major benefit for people who feel much more at ease when they are by themselves.
It is also worth noting that remote employees can benefit from fewer distractions of the type that are commonly found in an office environment, including background noise, non work-related conversations among co-workers, and the comings and goings of fellow employees.

Downsides of working remotely

Employee isolation One of the disadvantages of remote work is that it can be difficult for remote employees to develop a sense of proximity with their in-office colleagues: there’s no opportunity for off-the-cuff conversations at the coffee machine, or to head out for lunch together. Remote employees can also suffer from the perception that it is harder for them to show the value of their work to their superiors, making it harder to get a promotion. The suspicion of non-productivity

The potential for absenteeism is an aspect of remote work that employers find worrisome, especially among controlling managers. Because remote employees are not subject to direct supervision, some employers think that this automatically means that they will not be as productive as they would be in the office. To remedy this situation, employers can implement a system of Key Performance Indicators (KPIs) to evaluate the productivity of employees; however, these KPIs must be tailored to employees’ unique positions. Managers must also learn to trust, and have faith in their employees.

The risk of distraction

Although the benefits of remote work make it an attractive concept for many people, the fact is that it is not for everyone. Many people are simply unable to stay productive when working remotely, usually because they cannot remain focused on their work. Some people need to be in a supervised environment to reach their full productivity.

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Remote working has gained currency in recent years due to the company 's access to state- of-the- art technologies and the fast speed Internet.This trend posses advantages as well as disadvantages for staff and employers. Remote working enables...

Remote working has gained currency in recent years due to the company 's access to state- of-the- art technologies and the fast speed Internet.This trend posses advantages as well as disadvantages for staff and employers. Remote working enables employees to diminish their work-related expenses such as transportation costs, besides it leads to minimizing over head cost such as providing spacious and large office for employers; the more workers in the field, the less demand for office space and facilities. In spite of the fact that, working remotely can remarkably reduce stress and tension related to workplace, it can deprive the employers of interpersonal interactions and mood- boosting conversation with the other co-workers. On the plus side, the lack of opportunity to monitor employers directly specifically for controlling managers causes inconvenience and perturbation for them. However it can be rectified by some productivity evaluation systems and also fostering trust power within team members and managers.

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In recent years, it has become increasingly common for some employees to work from a remote location, although it has some advantages and disadvantages. Looking at the values of working remotely, prospective employees, especially those who want...

In recent years, it has become increasingly common for some employees to work from a remote location, although it has some advantages and disadvantages. Looking at the values of working remotely, prospective employees, especially those who want to establish a good balance between their work and family life, will be more attracted to working remotely. Also, remote work will lead to the reduction in work-related expenses, such as transportation. It can, moreover, give the employee an ability to live in a place hundreds of kilometers away from the company he is working for. Reducing stress because of being in a non- public environment and fewer distractions due to the office environment noises are other two benefits of remote work. On the other hand, not having a sense of proximity with other in-office colleagues is one of the disadvantages of remote work. In addition, working remotely may cause employers to become worry about the productivity of remote workers which is solvable by having faith in their employees and implementing a system of Key Performance Indicators to evaluate their employees’ productivity. Besides, it is true that some people need to be in a supervised environment to reach their full productivity.

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Working remotely has been a subject of debate among professionals who are investigating advantages and disadvantages of this approach as it has increasingly become popular in labor market. When it comes to benefits reviewing, we firstly come...

Working remotely has been a subject of debate among professionals who are investigating advantages and disadvantages of this approach as it has increasingly become popular in labor market. When it comes to benefits reviewing, we firstly come across the fact that employees tend to engage in a remote job which enables them to establish balance between their work and family. Then, they are not forced to spend their money on work-related expenses. It worth considering the fact that they are not distracted by happenings in the work environment. The last but not the least, they can choose employers even from a distant city.
Going through downside we face the fact that there is no interaction with their co-workers and superiors. Moreover, employees are not under an outlined supervision which might lead to irregularity in affairs. Eventually, some people get distressed and not remain focused when they have to work on their own, they more likely cannot reach to their full productivity.

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Over the past decade, remote work has become increasingly common among companies and workers. Thanks to personal computers and high-speed network, employees can work from a remote location. Although some people prefer to work remotely and...

Over the past decade, remote work has become increasingly common among companies and workers. Thanks to personal computers and high-speed network, employees can work from a remote location. Although some people prefer to work remotely and consider many advantages for it, it has some disadvantages.
The most important advantage of remote work for employers is recruiting talent. Work remotely makes opportunity to establish a good balance between work and family life and it is an advantage when it comes to recruitment. For employees, reduction in work-related expenses such as transportation expense is one of the benefits. It makes opportunity for employees to work from another city. Indeed for many people working in comfortable place like their homes causes feel much more at ease.
Employee isolation is a disadvantage of remote work. Employees who work in office have opportunity to communicate with their in-office colleagues and off-the-cuff conversation. In addition, lack of good supervision is another downside of remote work. Although comfortable work place is good, some people need to supervision in order to reaching their full productivity

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working remotely is still a subject of debate among professionals. when it comes to work from
a remote location or a work-sharing space, people have divided opinions about advantages and disadvantages. on the one hand, it is believed that...

working remotely is still a subject of debate among professionals. when it comes to work from
a remote location or a work-sharing space, people have divided opinions about advantages and disadvantages. on the one hand, it is believed that employees can establish a good balance between their work and family life. in addition, employees can reduce work-related expenses. furthermore, employers who come across a perfect matched employee from another city can benefit from remote work even if it costs them occasional travelling expenses.finally, this set up leads employee to feel much more at ease when they are by themselves. on the other hand, employees may lose a sense of proximity with their in office colleagues because they have no chance off the cuff conversations. Also, the common perception that superiors miss the hard work which makes it harder to get promotion.

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However work from a remote location is still a subject of debate, it has become increasingly common for some prospective employees to work from their home or a work-sharing space. Working remotely has some advantages and also some disadvantages...

However work from a remote location is still a subject of debate, it has become increasingly common for some prospective employees to work from their home or a work-sharing space. Working remotely has some advantages and also some disadvantages which are related to character and personality of every person.Two aspects of the constructive effects are increased ability to establish a good balance between their work and family life and also reduction in work-related expenses. Another advantage of remote working is the ability to work remotely in another city. It is also worth noting that remotely working has another benefits; reduce stress for employees who feel much more at ease when they work remotely while, it can be difficult for them to develop a sense of proximity with co-workers and fellow employees and also it causes some distraction for whom cannot remain focused on their work when they are working by themselves. In other words some people should be working in office environment to reach their full productivity. Second negative effects is lack of perception when employees want to show the value of their work to their superiors. The potential for absenteeism is an aspect of remote work that employers have. There is some solution to remedy this situation.

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In the modern lifestyle and globalization phenomenon, people have to face remote work to give new opportunities for employees and employers. It brings some advantages as well as a drawback for them. For instance reduction, work_related expenses...

In the modern lifestyle and globalization phenomenon, people have to face remote work to give new opportunities for employees and employers. It brings some advantages as well as a drawback for them. For instance reduction, work_related expenses and less stress of discutionwith co-workers foe employees and find out professional talented individual-based hundreds of kilometers away are some benefits of that. Despite that disadvantages to both they can be mention to off the cuff need to a relationship with colleagues to deal with information and experiences then find worrisome to monitoring employees for administrators are worth noting issues.

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Remote working is an issue that thanks to technological advancement has been became increasingly common in recent years. However, it is a subject of debuted for some downside aspects. The most important advantages of remote working declined...

Remote working is an issue that thanks to technological advancement has been became increasingly common in recent years. However, it is a subject of debuted for some downside aspects. The most important advantages of remote working declined work-related expenses for both employer, such as electricity price and required equipments, and employees, say, transportation. Also, it afford employees the opportunity to do their job from remote location. It is also worth noting that employees create balance between work and family. Despite advantages presented, there are some disadvantages. Employees can be distracted by non work-related conversation or follow employees, so they fail to reach their full productivity. Moreover, having were in supervised environment, employees permote to show their ability.

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working remotely has become a growing trend in recent years and posed a question whether it can lead to more beneficial results or not . Undoubtedly , working in remote location will contribute to several advantages including reduced work-related...

working remotely has become a growing trend in recent years and posed a question whether it can lead to more beneficial results or not . Undoubtedly , working in remote location will contribute to several advantages including reduced work-related expenses for employees , the opportunity to establish a good balance between work and family life . Moreover employers are likely to recruit more gifted staff. On the other hand , this phenomenon have some serious disadvantages as well . The primary downside can be employee isolation . consequently , employees productivity may decline progressively without direct supervision.

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Recently, remote work has become increasingly common but it is still subject of debate if affects organizations in a positive or negative way. Actually it has several advantages. Firstly, increases opportunities when it comes to recruitment;...

Recently, remote work has become increasingly common but it is still subject of debate if affects organizations in a positive or negative way. Actually it has several advantages. Firstly, increases opportunities when it comes to recruitment; additionally, reduces work-related expenses, as well as employee's stress. In contrast, remote work has some disadvantages. In fact, it contributes to employee isolation; moreover, employers find worrisome due to absenteeism, and it has risk of distraction for who cannot remain focused on their work.

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Remote working has become a nascent trend on workplaces. Despite its popularity in today's offices, it has instigated a great deal of debate among human resources professionals and administrators regarding its positive and negative impacts. While...

Remote working has become a nascent trend on workplaces. Despite its popularity in today's offices, it has instigated a great deal of debate among human resources professionals and administrators regarding its positive and negative impacts. While for prospective employees, it is an opportunity to balance work and family life, reduce the work-related expenses and provide occasional travel at no cost, it might induce a sense of isolation, non-productivity and distraction.

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What have become increasingly common today is working remotely. When it comes to this phenomenon, redressing balance between pros and cons is a matter of fact. Although having manifold advantages, coming across with this situation has various...

What have become increasingly common today is working remotely. When it comes to this phenomenon, redressing balance between pros and cons is a matter of fact. Although having manifold advantages, coming across with this situation has various hassles. Take the proximity to workplace as an example; employees feel much more at ease and it leads to reduce work-related expenses among fellow employees. Suffering from lack of perception and proving the potential for absenteeism, in contrast, are the chief results of remote working. In conclusion, both sides should be remedied to reach co-workers' full productivity.

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While Tele-working is a phenomenon which is on the rise in recent years, it has got some effects on employees as well as employers. To begin with, for those who are looking for a balance between their professional and private life, remote work...

While Tele-working is a phenomenon which is on the rise in recent years, it has got some effects on employees as well as employers. To begin with, for those who are looking for a balance between their professional and private life, remote work seems appealing.in addition, it can significantly reduce the costs of transportation when it comes to commuting to work. Moreover, if employees ‘work and live based on their own choice they will feel at ease as not being distracted by background noises in an office should not be overlooked. The lack of direct communication with co-workers and superiors is strongly tangible for tele-workers. Furthermore, absenteesomis a huge concern among managers due to the fact that workers are not being well supervised. The lack of supervision on home working not only does dramatically reduce the remote worker’s productivity and efficiency remote , but also makes them unfocused.

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Thanks to the PCs and high-speed internet, different types remote-located work such as home-based works and work-sharing space have become increasingly common. However, it is still a subject of debate whether remote work affect organizations and...

Thanks to the PCs and high-speed internet, different types remote-located work such as home-based works and work-sharing space have become increasingly common. However, it is still a subject of debate whether remote work affect organizations and employees either positively or negatively. On the plus side, benefits accruing to both employees and employers are by no means negligible (OR on the plus side, employees and employers equally reap benefits of remote work). In the first place, working remotely probably can grantee the less work-related expenses for employees, such as commuting expenditures. Additionally, working within comfort zone and non-publicly, employees feeling much more at ease when they are by themselves, are bound to end up less stress. In the same way, remote work attributes to giving a rise to focusing on work, owing to less background noises and lack of non work-related conversation with fellow employees. Correspondingly, remote work provides the opportunity for employer to recruit talented professionals living in far cities or preferring to working at home to redress the balance between family and work life. On the other hand, remote work can negatively influence employees in one way or another. For one thing, they will be put in the jeopardy of isolation. That is to say, not working with in-office colleagues, remote employees would not develop a sense of proximity with their fellows, and also they suffer from the perception that it is harder to represent the value of their work to their superior and consequently getting promotion. Employers, also, are susceptible to worrisome that remote employees are not the subjects to direct supervision, which is down to the potential absenteeism. However there are some down-to-earth solution to remedy the situation. Take Key Performance Indicators (KPIs) which should be tailored to employees’ unique position, as an example. The last thing worth noting is, mangers should learn to trust and have faith in their employees.

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Despite the popularity of working from a remote location in recent years, it is still unsure whether employers, employees and the organization as a whole would be the beneficiary of this form of occupation; thus knowing about its positive and...

Despite the popularity of working from a remote location in recent years, it is still unsure whether employers, employees and the organization as a whole would be the beneficiary of this form of occupation; thus knowing about its positive and negative aspects seems to be helpful. From a positive point of view, not only would employees gain such advantages as a reduction in work-related expenses and strains while working from their living places even in other cities, but employers also could have the higher opportunity of recruiting talented and prospective employees interested more in work/life balance. However, there are many downsides in this respect, ranging from the employee's isolation and resultant difficulties in getting promotions, to the risk of distraction and less productivity for those unable to remain focused on their work in an unsupervised environment. What is more is the suspicion of non-productivity that managers might have toward this staff, resulting from the potential for absenteeism of this job, although as a remedy, a performance evaluation system tailored to each employee's unique position could be implemented, with managers learning to have more faith in their workforce.

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downside is uncountable

what is more is WHAT'S MORE and is informal for an essay writing context.

I really love your writing. I think you can achieve a 7+ with this style. Keep going

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Even though having turned to an increasing popular issue, remote working comes with diverse critiques. First and foremost, distant serving must be rewarding because it lessens restrictions not only for employers to engage high qualified workers,...

Even though having turned to an increasing popular issue, remote working comes with diverse critiques. First and foremost, distant serving must be rewarding because it lessens restrictions not only for employers to engage high qualified workers, even those who want to work at home to balance between career and family lifes, but also for the applicants who cannot move to another city for the sake of a new occasion. However, on the one hand, who drastically proved in favor of working remotely are comfort-loving workers claiming that this opportunity brings obout superfluous merits including higher secure and lower work pressure than in-office method. clients and managors, on the other hand, claim that efficiency and productivity might droped owing to the lack of direct supervision to hinder from worker's trauancy and absenteeism, keep their mind focused on the subject, and either punish or promote them. Along with these, colleges and fellow employees, if serve from remote spots, indeed deprive themself to well interact and have off-the-cuff conservation with each other to consilidate relations, thus unluckily keeping individuals far from society.

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While there are persuasive arguments in favor of benefits to working remotely, there are downsides to be considered. In this paragraph, both advantages and disadvantages of remote working will be briefly discussed. On the one hand, supporters of...

While there are persuasive arguments in favor of benefits to working remotely, there are downsides to be considered. In this paragraph, both advantages and disadvantages of remote working will be briefly discussed. On the one hand, supporters of working remotely opine that remote working is beneficial because employees who work remotely are more productive than those staffs who commute to work every day owing to employees feel at ease more when they work at their homes. Therefore, the more employees work remotely, the more productive they are. On the other hand, critics of working remotely claim that employees deprived of developing a sense of proximity with their in-office colleagues suffer from work-related tension because they are unable to relieve them by having off-the-cuff conversations with their co-workers, thereby reducing their productivity. By way of conclusion, after discussing both a benefit and a drawback of working remotely, it seems advisable that the disadvantage of remote working outweigh its advantage.

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DOWNSIDE is a plural noun

staff is plural too

every day is one word EVERYDAY

both benefitS and drawbackS of ...

The paragraph is well-organised

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it has become increasingly common for some employees to work from a remote location, especially for those workers who want to establish a good balance between their work and family life.employees is a reduction in work-related expenses, such as...

it has become increasingly common for some employees to work from a remote location, especially for those workers who want to establish a good balance between their work and family life.employees is a reduction in work-related expenses, such as transportation.Remote work allows employees to live in one place while working for a company based hundreds of kilometers away. feel much more at ease when they are by themselves.
It is also worth noting that remote employees can benefit from fewer distractions of the type that are commonly found in an office environment,

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I think there is something wrong with this sentence:
between their work and family life.employees is a reduction in work-related expenses,

I like the way the paragraph is formed.

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Working remotely has recently become a subject of debate among individuals who are seeking ideal jobs. However, thanks to the power of personal computing and high-speed networks, people being able to work remotely without any need to leave their...

Working remotely has recently become a subject of debate among individuals who are seeking ideal jobs. However, thanks to the power of personal computing and high-speed networks, people being able to work remotely without any need to leave their cozy and convenient armchair or their work-sharing places. A further advantage of working remotely is that remote workers may be endowed with the chances to recruit in some company and they are able live in one place while working for remotely locations. Moreover, the primary benefit of the working remotely is a reduction in work-related costs. A good illustration of this is transportation.
Conversely, there are some downside aspects associated with this trend. Two most particularly salient example of this remote employees suffer from developing the sense of proximity with in-office colleagues and the suspicion of non-productivity due to absenteeism
To conclude, considering the points discussed above, the most logical conclusion to be drawn is that working remotely is regarded as an attractive way of work by many prospective employees. As a matter of fact it is not appropriate for everyone because of conspicuous differences among human.

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You could be more creative for the first sentence rather than being a memorised cliche.

Except for the beginning, you are perfect to achieve a 7+ score
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Some guilt-inducing aspects of working in a remote location have attracted employees to work in far places, however, there are some other major drawbacks as well. It was always the subject of controversial which wether working remotely offers...

Some guilt-inducing aspects of working in a remote location have attracted employees to work in far places, however, there are some other major drawbacks as well. It was always the subject of controversial which wether working remotely offers benefits for employees or employer or both of them or not. A striking positive aspect of remote locations is included a rewarding job , making employees satisfied in terms of receiving high wages.In addition, reducing work-related expenses such as transportation is the other merit .what is worth to mention is reducing stress for employees by a feeling of privacy.However there are some drawbacks , employee’s isolation can be difficult for employees to make a sense of proximity with their in office colleagues as well as this they suffer from the perception that is harder for them to show the value of their work to their superior ,making it harder to get a promotion.

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what do you mean by GUILT-INDUCING

Check the punctuation for HOWEVER

Remote Working cannot be a Controversy! CONTROVERSY is something more serious.

what is worth MENTIONING

employees'

The paragraph is great Amir

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Remote work has come increasingly common a subject of debate among employees. Working remotely has some advantages. For example, there is a good opportunity for employers to select talent employees or it will reduce employees` work-related...

Remote work has come increasingly common a subject of debate among employees. Working remotely has some advantages. For example, there is a good opportunity for employers to select talent employees or it will reduce employees` work-related expenses. Also, remote work can afford employees the opportunity to travel. It is also worth noting that reduced stress is other benefit for remote employees. Employee isolation and indirect relation to supervision are considered as disadvantages.

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The first sentence seems to be a memorised cliche. You can be more creative for the Topic Sentence.

talentED employees

The paragraph is great Faezeh, though you need a wider range of GRAMMAR to achieve a high score.

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In cutting-edge world one of the opportunities for employees and employers is remote work,thanks to the power of personal computing and high-speed Internet. Employees who want to establish a balance between their careers and their family life...

In cutting-edge world one of the opportunities for employees and employers is remote work,thanks to the power of personal computing and high-speed Internet. Employees who want to establish a balance between their careers and their family life size the accusation in which employees could stay in their home and work remotely for a company and they more keen to be in remote location to have fewer distractions of the type that are commonly found in an office. Also being in a comfortable and non-public environment increases the productivity dramatically and in conrast reduce the stress that maybe employees suffer from. Despite the benefits of remote work there are some drawbacks as well. Take employee isolation as an example; it can be difficult for remote workers to develop sense of proximity with their colleagues and also it is hard to get promotion because they cannot show the value of their work.less ability to supervisione and the risk of distraction also are mentioned as disadvantages. So,regarding to employee’s characteristics,haveing an indicator system to higher supervision and considering strict lows for remote workers could make remote work as an attractive concept for many jobs.

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REMOTE WORK is not a good collocation (with WORK being a noun)

they ARE more KEEN

that employees MAY suffer from

remote work, DONT FORGET THE COMMA FOR SUBORDINATES

employees' CHECK THE APOSTROPHE FOR PLURAL

LAWS check the SPELLING


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REMOTE WORK is not a good collocation (with WORK being a noun)

they ARE more KEEN

that employees MAY suffer from

remote work, DONT FORGET THE COMMA FOR SUBORDINATES

employees' CHECK THE APOSTROPHE FOR PLURAL

LAWS check the SPELLING


The framework for the paragraph is great

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These days,working remotely has become increasingly common more than ever before due to the non-borders networks.concerning pros and cons of this article exhibits that the prospective employees would stablish a good balance between their career...

These days,working remotely has become increasingly common more than ever before due to the non-borders networks.concerning pros and cons of this article exhibits that the prospective employees would stablish a good balance between their career and family life,would reduce work-related expenses,would work for a faraway company without compulsion to travel there and would feel much more at ease with working in their own place.reciprocally,the workers would not develop a sense of proximity with their colleagues and would not be evaluated and elevated later on deservedly by supervisors.also the controller masters would find worrisome and suspicion about the productivity and performance of employees.this thought-provoking concept,although,may not be appropriate for everyone.remaining focus on something by somebodies requires a supervised environment to reach a desirable outcome.

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I really love the paragraph. Though, there are two big problems:

You need to start your sentences with CAPITAL LETTERS.

Also, the first sentence seems to be too long and use of WOULD is repetitive.

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Working remotely has been turned into an oft-argued controversy of late, and while there are some merits imbued with that, some demerits are involved with this hypothesis as well. Having worked remotely and not in an office, employees do not need...

Working remotely has been turned into an oft-argued controversy of late, and while there are some merits imbued with that, some demerits are involved with this hypothesis as well. Having worked remotely and not in an office, employees do not need to commute everyday, thereby costing less for work journeys, relaxing more and having more productivity, and enabling individuals to shoulder responsibilities from far cities. Turning to possible drawbacks, home working and as such, might result in the lack of physical interaction, lasting friendships and direct supervision on employees’ productivity that may not favor employers. X

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Your first sentence seems to be a memorised cliche. Try not to use such topic sentences.

Also, telecommuting is not a CONTROVERSY; Controversy is something more serious.

The paragraph is great, except for the starting point (I mean the Topic...

Your first sentence seems to be a memorised cliche. Try not to use such topic sentences.

Also, telecommuting is not a CONTROVERSY; Controversy is something more serious.

The paragraph is great, except for the starting point (I mean the Topic Sentence)

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Telecommuting has become far more common among employees, tending to work from a remote location, but this trend has raised a question of whether working remotely can leave a positive of negative effect. To some, there are several advantages to...

Telecommuting has become far more common among employees, tending to work from a remote location, but this trend has raised a question of whether working remotely can leave a positive of negative effect. To some, there are several advantages to working from home, including opening up opportunities for employers to attract gifted people, being able to work remotely from other cities and reducing stress for workers. When it comes to disadvantages, employee isolation, leading workers to develop a sense of proximity with their in-office colleagues, the potential for absenteeism, resulting in less productive employees, and the risk of distraction, meaning that some cannot remain focused on their work, can be referred to.

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I really like the way the paragraph is organised. The only problem is with the use of BUT in the second sentence. I think you have to use BUT as a coordinate conjunction here; I mean at the beginning of the sentence, which is informal.

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I really like the way the paragraph is organised. The only problem is with the use of BUT in the second sentence. I think you have to use BUT as a coordinate conjunction here; I mean at the beginning of the sentence, which is informal.

By the way, the paragraph is great in terms of lexical resource and grammar range.

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Although remote working has introduced as a common issue, it is still a subject of debate. Remote working for prospective employees and those who feel much more at ease would be more productive and less costly and stressful. While, the employers...

Although remote working has introduced as a common issue, it is still a subject of debate. Remote working for prospective employees and those who feel much more at ease would be more productive and less costly and stressful. While, the employers may have the perception that their employees should be subject to direct supervision rather than having faith in them to prevent their potential absenteeism.

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The first sentence seems to be a MEMORISED CLICHE. Try to write it based on the topic.

WHILE does not need a COMMA. You can check the Punctuation for Subordinate Clauses.

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Over the last years, working from a remote location has become increasingly common, which has both positive and negative points for employers as well as employees.
What makes working remotely attractive for some employees is its flexible and...

Over the last years, working from a remote location has become increasingly common, which has both positive and negative points for employers as well as employees.
What makes working remotely attractive for some employees is its flexible and convenient type of working specially for those who feel more comfortable when they work in solitude. Moreover, it allows workers to accept a tempting job offer in cities other than where they live.

Employers, also, take advantage of a reduction in work-related expenses such as transportation, and having the chance of employing some prospective employees who seek balance between their work and personal life.
Having said that, remote working has some down points too. Firstly, the remote workers will be isolated, failing to develop a sense of proximity with their in-office colleagues and missing the opportunity to present the value of their job to their superiors properly.
The potential for absenteeism makes some employers, who do not have faith in their remote employees, worry about their productivity.
To sum up, although remote work may seem beneficial in some aspects, it is not suitable for every one.

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check the difference between SPECIALLY and ESPECIALLY

The writing is perfect. I really love the way it is organised as well as the range of lexical resource and grammar range used. You can achieve a 7+

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