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Some people think that the effective way to reduce industrial pollution is to tax the companies which cause them. Others think that there are better ways to do so. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
You should write at least 250 words.

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With the advent of industrial revolution, Companies grow up in countries. Companies have undergone massive change in economic, scientific development, medical and etc. Important case for factories product pollute in city. Pollute have type air,...

With the advent of industrial revolution, Companies grow up in countries. Companies have undergone massive change in economic, scientific development, medical and etc. Important case for factories product pollute in city. Pollute have type air, sound, water and soil. Pollutes have important effect in health and safety for social. Therefore there were NGO (Non-governmental organization) for disagree and struggle with pollution. I think that many ways for control pollution in factories, for example tax, equipment filtering and etc.
Governments receive tax of factories that they spend for environments and reduce pollution. Tax can take full advantage of social and economic and Infrastructure in cities. For this reason tax has most important factor in development. In my city (Ahvaz), Company oil and Sugar cane factories give tax for it spend in Infrastructure.
Air purification equipment has potential impact on redact pollution. Big problem is Repair and equip parts .Many factories do not tend to spend money for Repair and equip. For example many factories translate pollutions to river without spray and filtering.
Always discussion about pollution is the most important in society. My opinion use tax and equipment filtering altogether is useful for redact pollution.

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Pollution, as a global issue, is one of the unsolved problems in our industrial world. Some people believe that enforcing a tax on some companies is the efficient method to decrease industrial pollution; however, other think there are...

Pollution, as a global issue, is one of the unsolved problems in our industrial world. Some people believe that enforcing a tax on some companies is the efficient method to decrease industrial pollution; however, other think there are alternatives to overcome this vital matter.
Those who are in favor of performing tax may have various reasons. The most outstanding can be the fact that companies mostly are profit-oriented so that the pollution created by their industry is not very important for them. In developing countries, industrial productions are the most contributing cause of pollution. In this point, imposing a tax on their own business profits can be the best way to reduce these pollutants created by them.
Conversely, there are also opposing points of view which are contrary to the issue. Other people suggest that there are another ways to lessen industrial pollution. Governments can provide incentive plans for companies to encourage and motivate them to decrease their pollution levels. Imagine the same situation for the afore-mentioned industries, if governments support firms instead of forcing a tax on them, they will be persuaded to slow down the rate of producing of air pollutants.
In my point of view, governments should apply a reasonable combination of both sides. I think companies are not allowed to increase the rate of atmospheric pollution, otherwise, they should be fined but if they decrease the amount of pollution, they should be encouraged to continue this trend.
As a summary, there are two opposing views on ways of controlling industrial pollution who disagree with each other about the issue. Personally, I support both of them if there is an understandable correlation between them.

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Without a doubt, amount of pollution in our beloved planet has been increasing conspicuously in recent decades. Some subscribe to the view that governments legislate some tough laws which companies producing pollution should levy a tax, the...

Without a doubt, amount of pollution in our beloved planet has been increasing conspicuously in recent decades. Some subscribe to the view that governments legislate some tough laws which companies producing pollution should levy a tax, the amount of pollution will decrease dramatically, while others believe the contrary. In the upcoming paragraphs both sides will be presented, followed by my opinion on this matter.
As industrial pollution, including noise, water as well as air pollution have caused a wide range of destructive damage, there are a common assumption that forcing industries to pay more tax can act as deterrent against them. Since their main goal is to make profit and these penalties get away them from their aim. In addition, there can be found the sheer number of citizens keep breaking laws until they have to pay financial penalties or be sentenced to some years’ imprisonment. As a result, in many occasion people should feel their capital or personal life are in danger to obey laws.
Nevertheless, as conserving environment is a crucial subject, governments are blame about tackling this irreparable problem. Many do not sufficient information about the negative and long-term impacts of pollution on our life expectancy, overall health and natural resources. If states increase public knowledge about the importance of having clear water and air, owners’ factories place a premium on removing some environmentally- damaging activities in production processes. Furthermore, environmentalists and governments are able to encourage industries to reduce their hazardous and toxic fumes, contaminated water, and waste by providing some amenities for them such as subsidized membership of some organization, awarding prizes and giving an interest-free loan.
In conclusion, I aver that although high tax and financial punishment have enormous significant impact on reducing pollution which arise soil erosion, desertification and degradation of environment, other methods like awarding people and promote managers, who are usually educated and environmentally friendly persons, able to play more effective role on addressing this problem.

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Without a doubt, amount of pollution in our beloved planet has been increasing conspicuously in recent decades. Some subscribe to the view that governments legislate some tough laws which companies producing pollution should levy a tax, the...

Without a doubt, amount of pollution in our beloved planet has been increasing conspicuously in recent decades. Some subscribe to the view that governments legislate some tough laws which companies producing pollution should levy a tax, the amount of pollution will decrease dramatically, while others believe the contrary. In the upcoming paragraphs both sides will be presented, followed by my opinion on this matter.
As industrial pollution, including noise, water as well as air pollution have caused a wide range of destructive damage, there are a common assumption that forcing industries to pay more tax can act as deterrent against them. Since their main goal is to make profit and these penalties get away them from their aim. In addition, there can be found the sheer number of citizens keep breaking laws until they have to pay financial penalties or be sentenced to some years’ imprisonment. As a result, in many occasion people should feel their capital or personal life are in danger to obey laws.
Nevertheless, as conserving environment is a crucial subject, governments are blame about tackling this irreparable problem. Many do not sufficient information about the negative and long-term impacts of pollution on our life expectancy, overall health and natural resources. If states increase public knowledge about the importance of having clear water and air, owners’ factories place a premium on removing some environmentally- damaging activities in production processes. Furthermore, environmentalists and governments are able to encourage industries to reduce their hazardous and toxic fumes, contaminated water, and waste by providing some amenities for them such as subsidized membership of some organization, awarding prizes and giving an interest-free loan.
In conclusion, I aver that although high tax and financial punishment have enormous significant impact on reducing pollution which arise soil erosion, desertification and degradation of environment, other methods like awarding people and promote managers, who are usually educated and environmentally friendly persons, able to play more effective role on addressing this problem.

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paragraphing is skillfully managed and both sides are discussed. but the level of grammatical errors is too high unfortunately
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#من -کپی-نمیکنم
Recently, there have been many proposals on how governments should be controlled air pollution .In this regard ,some people believe that governments must tax the industrials which produce pollution and this way causes to decrease...

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Recently, there have been many proposals on how governments should be controlled air pollution .In this regard ,some people believe that governments must tax the industrials which produce pollution and this way causes to decrease it, however, some others have different idea and they think there are better ways to do. In this essay, I am intending to discuss all visions and scopes.
Those in favor of tax on companies may have various reasons and the most significant reason is that when a company which have environmental contaminants should spend percent of it’s income for tax, they decide to change the method and machinery to reduce the industrial pollution .Imagine the factory whit a lot of product must tax to the government for pollution they should close the company or make changes to their devices to decrease the pollution.
However, some people present their disagreement for their own proofs. They mostly think if the governments have financial support to the company they will encourage to renovate the machinery of their company and it leads to reduce the air pollution and finally because of the devices are new the quality of products improve as well and as a result raise their profitability. This is something that some developed countries do.
In my point of view, government should apply a reasonable combination of both side. I think government must close the factory which have low profitability and have high range of industrial pollution and support the companies which want to improve their machinery.
In brief, there are two opposing views on taxing who disagree with each other about the issues. Personally, I support both of them if there is an understandable correlation between them.

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#من -کپی-نمیکنم
Recently, there have been many proposals on how governments should be controlled air pollution .In this regard ,some people believe that governments must tax the industrials which produce pollution and this way causes to decrease...

#من -کپی-نمیکنم
Recently, there have been many proposals on how governments should be controlled air pollution .In this regard ,some people believe that governments must tax the industrials which produce pollution and this way causes to decrease it, however, some others have different idea and they think there are better ways to do. In this essay, I am intending to discuss all visions and scopes.
Those in favor of tax on companies may have various reasons and the most significant reason is that when a company which have environmental contaminants should spend percent of it’s income for tax, they decide to change the method and machinery to reduce the industrial pollution .Imagine the factory whit a lot of product must tax to the government for pollution they should close the company or make changes to their devices to decrease the pollution.
However, some people present their disagreement for their own proofs. They mostly think if the governments have financial support to the company they will encourage to renovate the machinery of their company and it leads to reduce the air pollution and finally because of the devices are new the quality of products improve as well and as a result raise their profitability. This is something that some developed countries do.
In my point of view, government should apply a reasonable combination of both side. I think government must close the factory which have low profitability and have high range of industrial pollution and support the companies which want to improve their machinery.
In brief, there are two opposing views on taxing who disagree with each other about the issues. Personally, I support both of them if there is an understandable correlation between them.

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some implications of your first language. sentences in some parts lack coherence and reduce communication
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some implications of your first language. sentences in some parts lack coherence and reduce communication
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These days, companies are known as a main cause of environmental pollution. Whether government officials are able to manage industrial pollution by using the way of imposing hefty fine on the factors that cause pollution, or they should take...

These days, companies are known as a main cause of environmental pollution. Whether government officials are able to manage industrial pollution by using the way of imposing hefty fine on the factors that cause pollution, or they should take other drastic measures to solve this problematic issue.
There are many commentators that are of the view that tax can act as a deterrent measure against companies that pollute the ecosystem. From their point of view, it is of paramount importance for authorities to pass some strict rules that put manufacturers under strain pressure to pay heavy tax in order to compensate the pollution they cause. In this regard, the money can be a source of revenue for government to invest them in battling against environmental pollution. Therefore, this solution not only discourages factors from making pollution, but can also offer a financial source to government.
There is a widely held belief that other measures should be taken to solve industrial pollution. Some people argue that, in order to reduce toxins it is imperative that authorities encourage companies to relocate to outlying areas. In addition, manufacturers should be rewarded to use environmentally friendly fuels that are renewable like solar panels and wind power. Moreover, recycling waste produced by firms is more likely to be a great way of diminishing the pollutants that contaminate air and water. In this case, companies and government should collaborate to make the suitable conditions for recycling process. Thus, there are other actions that government officials can consider to reduce industrial pollution as opposed to imposing hefty fine.
In conclusion, it is better to consider other functions so as to decrease the pollution of industries, because tax cannot be solely the effective way of reducing toxins.

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good use of collocations. maintain balance in presenting both views. some sentences have poor coherence and are not sufficiently flexible
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Pollution of any kind could endanger the environment, human being, and animals. Thus, it is important to find out some solution to preserve the nature. One of the major sources of pollution is industrial pollution which is caused...

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Pollution of any kind could endanger the environment, human being, and animals. Thus, it is important to find out some solution to preserve the nature. One of the major sources of pollution is industrial pollution which is caused by factories and manufacturers. Some people believe that if we punish these companies by imposing a high tax on them could decrease the amount of pollution. But, I think there might be a much effective solution for this issue. I will discuss it in this essay.
Taxation of the companies which produce pollution may be not a practical answer for this problem; because potentially, every factory is producing pollutant materials at some level, but some of them are a major pollution contributor. Consequently, this solution might just increase the cost of the production of these companies and does not have a major effect on the reduction of the waste.
However, there are some other ways that might have a paramount influence on the reduction of industrial pollution; for example, using renewable energy sources like wind and solar powers instead of fossil fuel which has a high rate of pollution production.
Another efficient and quick to control industrial pollution is installing filters. Using a variety of filters to decrease some amount of pollutant materials that emitting from factories is a short-term solution. There is a concrete evidence that installing filters could decline industrial waste up to 50 percent.
To sum up, I do not believe impose a tax on the companies is a functional answer, however, installing filters and exploiting renewable energy sources could be the alternative solutions for industrial pollution problem.

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Nobody can’t deny that air pollution causes plenty of diseases and problems that effect lives in various aspects and can makes it difficult and suffering. Cases like lung cancer, heart problems and other diseases that kill people...

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Nobody can’t deny that air pollution causes plenty of diseases and problems that effect lives in various aspects and can makes it difficult and suffering. Cases like lung cancer, heart problems and other diseases that kill people in the world just because of improper using of natural resources!
Like many of countries in the world, Even Iran has big cities that people agony of air pollution, for instance Tehran, Tabriz, Mashhad and Ahvaz… There are a lot of ways that can arrest to occur some air pollution, like levy, closing factories which are old and make a lot of pollution, improving and upgrade company instruments and equipments and also finding other solutions that lead industrial products without using fossil fuels, And of course firm managers should be made to follow air clean features in their activities and for all of solutions. For example electronic/ hybrid or cars that work with water can be used in the public transportation or personal cars in state of common ones (in the car industrial), the ways that is doing by many countries (but in Iran not or less and causes some days off in a year). Therefore one of the urgent cases that need to solve in big cities is pollution. Indeed I believe that human can find best ways to conquer all problems that is created with others not by him! So using advanced technologies and innocuous tools in the industrial and create strict rules can decrease air pollutions and save people and animals that live in the earth.

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The recent decades have faced a rise in the number of various industries leading to a great deal of industrial pollution. Although some countries receive high taxes from companies as a solution to lowering industrial pollution, better ways can be...

The recent decades have faced a rise in the number of various industries leading to a great deal of industrial pollution. Although some countries receive high taxes from companies as a solution to lowering industrial pollution, better ways can be considered so as to address this problem.

The effectiveness of paying tax by factories generating a myriad of hazardous waste materials can be twofold. Firstly, states can invest paid tax in some improvements on other sources creating a large amount of pollution. A case in point is a boost to public transit from an increase in the forms of transportation to the replacement of obsolete motor vehicles. Furthermore, other approaches have to be taken by companies to prevent industrial pollution as they would be usually reluctant to pay further expenditures like tax. Actually, tax can control the operations of companies caused pollution and can act as a deterrent.

Nonetheless, states can adopt more effective policies to reduce industrial pollution instead of taxing companies. One of the leading measures should be imposing strict rules on waste disposal of factories. They should avoid dumping and landfill that contribute to water contamination and soil pollution, and recycle polluted water rather than throwing away detrimental sludge of factories into the rivers. Moreover, inasmuch as a vast majority of utilized technologies in factories can be run by fossil fuels giving rise to air pollution, out-of-date equipment should be replaced with advanced technologies.

To conclude, despite the efficiency of paying tax by companies resulting in pollution, strategies such as efficient waste disposal and applying state-of-the-art machines can play a pivotal role in lowering industrial pollution.

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both views have been considered. the use of cohesive devices seems mechanical. occasional inaccuracies
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both views have been considered. the use of cohesive devices seems mechanical. occasional inaccuracies
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#من_کپی_نمیکنم
Industrial pollution reduction has been one of the essential concerns that governments take into account due to improving public health. A majority of people are inclined to believe that higher-rate tax on whom polluting...

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Industrial pollution reduction has been one of the essential concerns that governments take into account due to improving public health. A majority of people are inclined to believe that higher-rate tax on whom polluting environment is an effective solution; however, others think in different way. I personally believe that raising tax may cause higher costs for consumers. This essay will discuss both views.
Paying taxes is an essential running cost of factories which it has taken an account while the final price of goods has been estimated. High profitable factories which add huge amount pollutants into air or water may increase their products’ final price in order to cover the higher tax. Obviously, dropping factories’ pollution is a costly task. Thus, who have to pay extra taxes, is going to compare the costs of reducing pollution with extra mandatory payment. For instance, installing purification equipment on metal factories’ chimney causes not only direct costs but also indirect costs. Therefore, the overall costs may lower than the taxes, so it leads them to pay extra taxes instead of less polluting environment.
Encouraging is a proven solution that fulfill governments’ vital aims. Setting down the standard of amount of pollutant as well as monitoring pollution of either factory makes governments powerful to decide district punishment for who not fallow those environmental standards. The governments should not only provide the ground of reducing pollution for factories but they also establish tax incentive for who pollute less than the standards. For example, the costly installing industrial sewage treatment package should subsidize by governments.
To conclude, the variety of solutions to persuade factories to less polluting may make it difficult to choose the most effective one. In my opinion, obligating factories to reducing pollution will lose their effects over the time, whereas incentivizing will extend creativity to find brilliant way of pollution reduction.

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problems in sentence forms particularly passive in some parts. both sides have been discussed. try not to get affected by your first language
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It is an obvious fact that the number of clean days across the world has fallen sharply. It is easy to see that many industrialized countries, especially big ones, are producing more and more industrial pollution year by year....

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It is an obvious fact that the number of clean days across the world has fallen sharply. It is easy to see that many industrialized countries, especially big ones, are producing more and more industrial pollution year by year. Moreover, there are a few explicit recommendations from environment experts to governments for adopting strict laws to get rid of smog and industrial waste. However, some people contend that authorities should levy a huge rate of tax on all companies which they have detrimental effects on sky and environment, while many others believe there are many preventive and interactive ways which can be taken by states. However, I agree with the second group and the following compelling reasons can justify this view.
To begin with, undoubtedly, the amount of concentration of contamination in big metropolitans with sizable number of factories is increasing dramatically. Take Tehran, for example, the municipality of the city in 1993 approved a complex system to get more tax from old companies in order to control industrial pollution. Surprisingly, the newly system backfired and worked against expectations. To explain more, many huge companies, with a lot of working capital and unfortunately obsolete equipment, had accepted to pay more tax because of non-stop production and poor condition. They produce a lot of wastes and air pollution because they think it is their right when they pay tax. After that, individuals who are living in Tehran have never seen blue sky.
On the contrary, there are many factors which are the root causes of pollution. According to the reports, a large proportion of smog stemmed from industrial areas which are known as engine of development. Furthermore, from for corners of the world, many factories suffer from out-of-date producing lines, lack of total productive maintenance (TPM) and a strong organized culture which are the main causes of pollution. Additionally, taking preventive actions and interactive way and help factories to improve their facilities are more likely to be one of the most effective ways.
To sum up, a majority of cities surrounded by smog and contamination, some people contend that taxing is an influential way to lower pollution, but others believe the opposite. In my opinion, although taking tax will help to decrease industrial pollution temporality, it is not the best constant way. By the way, I believe that governments should allocate certain subsidies to industries and assert them to improve their facilities’ overall effectiveness.

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The agony with industrial contamination has challenged politicians to consider draconian measures against this predicament. Amongst all measures some people advocate that the imposing of heavy taxes may lead to the clean and pristine earth quite...

The agony with industrial contamination has challenged politicians to consider draconian measures against this predicament. Amongst all measures some people advocate that the imposing of heavy taxes may lead to the clean and pristine earth quite in converse, however, there is a notion which strongly opposes with in some cases unsuitable rules and seeks the solution in other paths. In following paragraphs, I will try to assess both notions and express my own view as well.
If I am to consider the advocates of introducing heavy taxes on corporates who are contributing to air pollution and also every other sort of contamination, this notion is most likely prevalent amongst environmentalists and ordinary people who have enormous concerns about the way mankind is polluting planet earth. Earth demands us to eradicate the contamination we have produced and this process of eradication requires vast financial resources. Provided that a corporation, as much as it is facilitating our lives with creation of massive amount of technology, is simultaneously contributing to the earth pollution it will have to be fined by heavy taxes in order to offset the expenses of contamination which it has engendered at first place.
But quite in converse, there is another social strata which deeply opposes such imposed rules. Such advocates are widespread among big corporations and politician who are beneficiary of the corporations work and they are likely to be millionaires who are investors in variety of industries which are contributing to the contamination. They try to deviate the discussion and seek the solution in contribution of all layers of society. They might be right in some instance ,however, the weight of contribution to pollution is utterly different and therefore expectations are varied from an ordinary household for example to massive petroleum corporation. obviously these sorts of companies need to compensate in higher levels.
In the way of conclusion, I strongly concur with the notion asserts the necessity of introducing heavy taxes on corporations which are unstoppably contributing to such agony and have always tried to evade the taxation rules.

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People have different views about measures that could be taken in order to reduce industrial pollution. While imposing a green tax on polluting factories would be beneficial, I would argue that other steps should be taken in tandem with it.
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People have different views about measures that could be taken in order to reduce industrial pollution. While imposing a green tax on polluting factories would be beneficial, I would argue that other steps should be taken in tandem with it.
On the one hand, if governments consider a high tax rate for companies that cause pollution, it will have dramatic positive effects on mitigation of pollution problems. A higher tax means a larger amount of costs for a company. Therefore, business people would take some radical actions to cut their costs. They definitely try to be more environmentally-friendly by reducing the amount of pollutant particles or carbon emissions that they produce in order to decrease the amount of tax should be paid. As a case in point, Britain has introduced a green tax rate by 5% on corporations and drivers which has led to 20% decrease in emissions.
On the other hand, there are some other helpful measures that could be introduced. Firstly, governments shoul have special plans to remove the consumer culture from society. For example, a campaign for buying long-lasting and recyclable products could be considered. Secondly, governments have to invest on renewable energy sources such as solar and wind powers much more than they did. Finally, some motivations such as tax exemptions could be presented for non-polluting factories.
In conclusion, although increase in tax burden on environmentally-damaging manufacturers could have positive impacts on ecosystem, some other actions should also be taken.

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Air pollution has become a crisis issue all over the world. Probably the single biggest contributor to this problem is factories. While some people consider tax based on companies contribution into this trouble as a deterrent, others believe that...

Air pollution has become a crisis issue all over the world. Probably the single biggest contributor to this problem is factories. While some people consider tax based on companies contribution into this trouble as a deterrent, others believe that there are more effective ways to tackle this issue. According to my way of thinking, stimulation ways to control this worldwide concern can be more productive.
I understand why some people are of the opinion that boosting tax rate based on company’s attribution to this disaster, which has caused the enormous number of diseases and death within human, animals, and plants each year, an effective deterrent. Since this kind of retribution has a diverse effect on company’s gross margin, all the top managers would be involved to find the root causes in an effective way, which leads to allocating enough budget for variety of environmental projects with the aim of reducing the polluted effluents of their industry, such as Co2 emission control or treating the industrial wastewater to achieve their expected margin. Although fining enterprises within tax might alleviate the side effects of this problem temporary, fundamental preventive measures need to be considered to eliminate the roots of this problem.
Scientific approaches have proven that increasing the awareness level in the society is a counterproductive to face with this worldwide concern. For instance, considering several facilities for industries who are concerning the environment in their production, announcing the best companies as the clean or green industry, might stimulate other factories to play their role in this international adorable competition. This positive contribution would be due to the fact that people show more eagerness to buy products which are produced by a company which shows an enthusiasm to play its role in protecting, and preserving the environment.
According to my perspective, boosting the tax level not only cannot be considered as a long lasting corrective action, but also it might have some detrimental effect on country’s economy. As a result, suggesting incentive plans to make all companies involved, regardless their size or nationality, might be the best way to tackle with this universal matter.
All in all, although punitive plans can be considered to control the air pollution, increasing the level of company’s contribution to face with this problem by stimulating them to suggest innovated ways to control the pollution would be an effective, and long term corrective action.

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There is no doubt that the amount of industrial waste is swelling to dangerous level which cause environmental problems. While some people believe that imposing tax to these companies is effectiveness, others argue that other...

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There is no doubt that the amount of industrial waste is swelling to dangerous level which cause environmental problems. While some people believe that imposing tax to these companies is effectiveness, others argue that other possible measures to tackle the problem would be more efficient.

People who support the first idea believe that higher tax acts as a powerful deterrent for those companies involved in environmental pollution. In other words if companies have to pay extra tax they stop their activities and operate in an environmentally manner . This can be helpful as their primarily goal is making profit in their business so paying money make them sensitive and cautious about the environment.


From the other side, tax is not the only way to address this problem. Since many wealthy companies break the laws and pay fines in exchange. I personally believe that there are better ways. To begin start , the companies’ names should be announced in the mass media because businesses care much about their publicity and do not want to tarnish their reputation. Besides, introducing some legislations in regard with using recycled materials or packaging process should be more beneficial in long terms.


In conclusion , if governments take a range of measures argued above we should hope the amount of industrial waste would be decreased in near future.

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Without any doubt, pollution produced by industries has far-reaching effects on human life or any other living beings. It is argued
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Without any doubt, pollution produced by industries has far-reaching effects on human life or any other living beings. It is argued
that to reduce industrial pollution companies causing this should be taxed, while others believe that there are better measures to be taken. There are cogent arguments on both sides, which will be discussed in detail, followed by my own perspective on the matter.
It is true that taxing the companies which are responsible for pollution is one potential way of punishing them and consequently encouraging them to lessen their emissions. This fact also should be considered that Companies put their financial benefits the top priority and in cases the profit and survival of a company is inextricably linked to producing pollution, taxing strategy will not work effectively. The tax will be paid and industries will continue to produce pollution, irrespective of how detrimental they are.
On the other hand, more beneficial and constructive ways can be implemented to tackle this problem. Authorities should force companies to allocate more budget on designing and providing more efficient equipment and also encourage them by offering various forms of financial incentives. However, this seem to be insurmountable in near future and will take time to come to action, admittedly is considerably more constructive and feasible for industries.
By way of conclusion, my personal belief is that although taxing pollution-causing industries can be somehow beneficial and may have short-term and minor effects on reducing the amount of pollution produced, it would not be the only and the most effective measure to be taken.

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There are a few measures can be taken to dwindle the pollutants associated with industry. Many people have been intrigued by the idea of whether taxing producers is the best contributor or other ways might be more efficient. Overall, I strongly...

There are a few measures can be taken to dwindle the pollutants associated with industry. Many people have been intrigued by the idea of whether taxing producers is the best contributor or other ways might be more efficient. Overall, I strongly believe that there are some procedures rather than enforcing tax which are worthwhile. Both sights are discussed in the rest of this essay.
There is common myth that taxing manufacturers would cut down pollution. In fact, some people argue that the government can impose heavy fine on those producers who create fumes to make money for resolving pollution issues. Although this may be a good source of income, it does not act as a deterrent and would not make industrial firms to reduce the emissions they produce. The reason behind this is that when producers are forced to pay too much tax, they will not have enough budget to develop their infrastructures such as sanitation system, fume collector and so forth. That is to say, they could not afford huge capital needed to employ eco-friendly equipment and to update their technology.
From another point of view, there are more productive ways to get rid of pollution. Firstly, the environmental officials can make industry to perform monumental projects for reducing emissions over a given period of time. Secondly, the government can entice industry to stop using outdated technology by some forms of rewards like loan with low rate of interest. Finally, the industrial companies should be forced to plant trees in surrounding areas to offset the fumes produced by them.
To wrap it up briefly, although taxing industrial producers can create money for tackling some environmental hazards, it can be counterproductive and deteriorate the situation. Nevertheless, other ways such as encouraging the industry to employ environmental friendly technology or making producers to cultivate trees would be more efficient to diminish pollution.

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Some individuals believe that the blanket solution to plummeting industrial degradation is to tax the ones which cause them. Nevertheless, others assume that there are whole ranges of measures to tackle this. I personally think there is the...

Some individuals believe that the blanket solution to plummeting industrial degradation is to tax the ones which cause them. Nevertheless, others assume that there are whole ranges of measures to tackle this. I personally think there is the variety of ways to mitigate factories impact.
Some group believes that tax to the pollution maker companies with the intention of intimidating them to reduce deterioration of environment is a cure-all. The report speaks of plunging the factories waste caused by tax them, for example, many of those launch the full-scale investigation into the root causes of the pollution and get rid of it; as they found paying taxes is an extra burden on their shoulder.in addition, these companies will encounter a series financial problem if they do not address this issue; and leave a good chance to be tax-free at the expense of evading to decrease industrial output dirt might not be a wise decision.
Contrastingly, there are some opposite views which assume that there should be more drastic actions against these companies. Thanks to some unscrupulous factory owners who know the way of tax fraud and some poor legal system, it is less likely that penal system wins. Moreover, with the advent of state-of-the-art technology the obsolete method of producing and as a result their remaining waste have to be vanished and traditional factor should be replaced with modern labor with the cutting-edge scientific method.
In conclusion, forcing factories to reduce their industrial pollution by tax them as a solo way could not be a comprehensive solution. And there must be a variety of rules to deduct indusial pollution.

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Industrial pollution has become a major concern for the public in recent years. Some society members allege that more tax would be a cure-all for this irritating challenge. Contrastingly, the others argue that there are efficient ways to reduce...

Industrial pollution has become a major concern for the public in recent years. Some society members allege that more tax would be a cure-all for this irritating challenge. Contrastingly, the others argue that there are efficient ways to reduce this notorious pollution. There are cogent arguments on both sides which will be discussed in detail, followed by my own perspective on this issue.
For many people financial punishment is the blanket solution for any difficulty. By this stated claim industrial factories are bound to be under pressure to revolutionize their policy to achieve a huge success in lowering pollution produced. While Companies are constantly looking for ways to cut their expenditure, more tax forced them to logically encounter the problem or eventually shown down their factories.
Industrial pollution, nonetheless, imposes a tremendous threat on people from all walks of life. It required authorities take the initiative and immediately harness it. Since fuel used has made an essential contribution in pollution, a renewable fuel source would be a substantial substitute. By replacing fossil fuel with solar or wind energy the amount of pollution will be reduced. Equipment malfunction, furthermore, is likely to be another contributing factor. By utilizing environmentally friendly equipment as well as cutting-edge technology addressing this difficulty could be accessible. Admittedly, relocating factories is tend to bring about outstanding changes in order to plunge pollution. Although it might have no economic justification, it would be affordable in long term.
In conclusion, industrial pollution is not an insurmountable barrier, but increase tax is highly unlikely to be a practical solution; however, I would contend that some ways including qualify fuel, environmentally friendly equipment, and relocation factories potentially alleviate this immense challenge.

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In the modernity world, with developing industrial factories, it is going to be commonplace to see some companies are contaminating environment. Many people argue that the best way to avoid offender companies is to tax them. While,...

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In the modernity world, with developing industrial factories, it is going to be commonplace to see some companies are contaminating environment. Many people argue that the best way to avoid offender companies is to tax them. While, in my opinion recycling the industrial litters is more influential to decrease pollution.

Basically, environment has been jeopardised by several delinquent companies. It is undeniable that one of the measures should be taken by government is to penalize them. In other words, taxing my has horrific impacts on their approaches but the main issue will not be addressed practically. Unfortunately, there are some factories which afford high taxes or bribe irresponsible governors in order to authorize to continue contaminating environment.
In contrast, there should be permanent ways to diminish industrial pollution.For instance, recycling produced litters in appropriate areas for regenerating reinforced plastics which have domestic uses. Meanwhile, it is in charge of government to legislate strict rules to enforce factories in order to utilize environmentally friendly fuels to develope their industrial functions and distribute their crops to main markets.
To sum up, it is inevitable to avoid establishing industrial companies which affect adversely on our ecosystem. Nevertheless, there are several permanent practical solution to descend industrial pollutions regarding to recycle litters and use genuine fuels.

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People have differing views with regard to the question of how to tackle severe industrial pollutants. In my view, both imposing tax and a range of other measures can be used together to conserve the environment.
On the one hand , it is an...

People have differing views with regard to the question of how to tackle severe industrial pollutants. In my view, both imposing tax and a range of other measures can be used together to conserve the environment.
On the one hand , it is an inevitable fact that industries that are involves in manufacturing sector are the major causes of air,water, and sound pollution. During manufacturing process , the release of pollutants introduce an element of Co2 which indeed open up an opportunity to raise global warming in the long run. This is particularly happen in developing countries , where regulations regarding the industrial pollution are not being enforced thoroughly. It can be therefore be argued that the introduction of economic punishment , such as pollution tax , has become one of the effective means to slow down the pollution rate.
On the other hand , I believe that some other preventative measures can be introduced to reduce the environment pollution. Firstly , taking initiatives like the substitution of environmental friendly material can be proven as a cogent method to solve this issue. This is required that the environmental factor has to be considered at the beginning of the product life cycle. Furthermore , green energy should be implemented ,and green energy generator should widely be equipped to meet the energy demand for manufacture industry. For example , by increasing the amount of incentive to install solar panels for factories , therefore, the amount of air pollution from electricity generation could be significantly reduced.
In conclusion , while imposing a higher tax on industrial pollution can help to prevent contamination from industrial waste , I am a firm believer that to achieve a better results , high technologies and green energy should be adopted to work alongside the economic punishment.

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The issue of whether industrial pollution should be banned by imposing tax on companies is partly a question of governments. However , the question of taking other measures also plays an increasing part, and so this debate is rather complex ,as...

The issue of whether industrial pollution should be banned by imposing tax on companies is partly a question of governments. However , the question of taking other measures also plays an increasing part, and so this debate is rather complex ,as we shall see.
On the one hand , those who support the idea of heavy fines point to the higher level of pollution which are caused by industries that are involved in manufacturing sector , for example in times of production process, pollutants have been identified as a source of air , water and sound pollution. Furthermore, it is also true that a considerable amount of Co2 may be released into atmosphere , offering global warming which indeed will occur in the long run. This is particularly happen in developing countries , where regulations regarding the industrial pollution are not being enforced thoroughly. Finally , it seems that tax paying would pay a burden on different industries , but the opposing view is desirable as it will be considerably less costly in long term so as to authorities will not have to allocate a huge sum of money on dealing with environmental crisis.
By contrast , supporters of the other side of the argument often state that alternative measures like the substitution of environmental friendly material should be introduced , as this suggestion may guard against industrial contamination. They also say , another decisive action is that green energy can be widely implemented , for instance , by increasing amount of incentive to install solar panel for factories , which in turn , the quantity of air pollution from electricity generation could be significantly reduced. As a last point , it is also true that the prohibition imposed on using private vehicles is an objective criterion , meaning that air freshness may be expected.
Overall , it appears to me that the stronger argument is in favour of introducing a new way of financial punishment , with all the advantages of less pollution and achieve better results. This is provided that this kind of tax payment allow entrepreneurs to work and produce more efficiently , without risk or fear of environmental pollution.
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People have different views about how to reduce industrial pollution. Some people feel that the best way is introducing a tax on companies, while others believe that there are some efficient methods to tackle this issue. I...

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People have different views about how to reduce industrial pollution. Some people feel that the best way is introducing a tax on companies, while others believe that there are some efficient methods to tackle this issue. I assume that other ways can be efficient and productive.
In the one hand, owing to industrialization and globalization, industrial pollution such as air pollution and water pollution is the main source of pollution in big cities and some people believe that tax should be imposed on big companies to reduce levels pollution. They argue that tax could encourage companies to apply better technologies for cutting down or controlling their pollution and waste material. In my country, for example, Iranian Oil and Gas Company install the cutting edge technology such as filter as so to remove pollutant substance such as CO2 and SO2. But I think some companies unable to pay this charge and this may have a negative impact on their production or revenue. Therefore, most companies do not support this way of dealing with pollution.
On the other hand, governments and local authorities can introduce others ways which helpful than taxation. Firstly and foremost, tax incentive and tax exemption would be the efficient method to tackle with industrial pollution. In this way, companies can invest part of their tax in installing state-of-art technology filtration system which utilizes in removing air pollutant and treating chemical and toxic by-product which is produced in industry process.
Finally, besides of this way, subsidizing is considered as a useful way of combating industrial pollution. Governments and environmental protection groups would provide professional help for companies to manage their waste and how to deposit toxic substance or control the levels of the chemical particle in the air. For example, Environmental Protection Agency in the USA has hired engineers, scientists, and environmental protection specialists which work with government’s bodies and companies and has provided them with guidance and suggestion.
In all in, although imposing the tax can make some companies to involve in reducing industrial pollution, I believe that tax incentive and subsidizing can be more lucrative and attractive for companies to involve actively in these projects.

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It is suggested that, this can be useful to tax industries which make air polluted to reduce the amount of pollution . Where as another suggestion is that , there can be found plenty of favourable ways for reduction of air pollution. I personally...

It is suggested that, this can be useful to tax industries which make air polluted to reduce the amount of pollution . Where as another suggestion is that , there can be found plenty of favourable ways for reduction of air pollution. I personally think to have fresh air , there should be taken serious measures rather than heavy fine or tax.

Tax and fine have often make people be aware of the adverse consequence of their action. If we consider making air pollution as a disobedience, then factories’ tax will help as a fine to decrease the number of pollutant. For example, it is necessary for drivers to obey the legal instrument, Other wise heavy fine which was previously approved is expected for them. In addition, if we have deep look on school regulation , we find out that there has been some competitive progress among students to be obedience of regulation due to fines or presents , even in terms of tidiness and clean the campus. As a result, it is extremely effective for awareness of industries to be careful about the pollution they cause environmentally. Obviously , tax can be a favourable point in this way.

However, regarding to the environmental destructions increasing Nowadays, tax would unfortunately be nothing that paying money and the condition would continue as the same. So there would be a cascade of ways to reduce pollution. The first one has to with modern equipment proper to environment for factories .it is certainly a scientific project that should be conduct by engineers and scientists. Secondly, the major factor for pollution undoubtedly is fossil fuels. Instead of tax, it can be a good idea to invest in changing fuels and deal with problems basically. It has become a challenge for our lives these days so timid measures seems to be taken necessarily.

To sum up, I think , to say the least, tax is nothing but making people more irresponsible and it is a public task, including the government and society, so that not to expose air to pollution.
It is a public task, including society and governments, so that the air is not exposed to pollution.
It is a public task, including society and governments, so that the air is not exposed to pollution.

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In the state-of-the-art world, governments encounter the rising amount of pollution causing by industrial factories. Some people tend to think that the additional tax is a cure-all in order to reduce the industrial contamination,...

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In the state-of-the-art world, governments encounter the rising amount of pollution causing by industrial factories. Some people tend to think that the additional tax is a cure-all in order to reduce the industrial contamination, whereas, others are set to believe that it is not a blanket solution. Decreasing the industrial contamination via increasing taxation is a doubled-edged sword; which we will launch a full-scale investigation into it.
In practice, rising taxation has forced industrial companies to diminish the pollution; chemical factories, for example, have created a large number of pollutant particles and it has led the environment to be seriously tainted. Afterwards, they will be highly likely to be motivated to have undergone massive changes in terms of replacing out-dated equipment through contemporary ones. This idea, albeit, could reduce industrial contamination; these factories might be faced with down-size or restructure; because of this that might be closed due to higher expenditure. A textile factory in our local place, for example, has been closed; inasmuch as it could not afford to pay more tax and eventually it led to a great deal of people losing their job.
Government can enjoy on alternative potential solution to decrease the industrial smog. Take, for instance, if governments used tax-incentive instead of additional tax, producers would seriously be motivated to change their old-fashioned equipment as well.
In conclusion, the challenges presented with booming tax are numerous and complex. Although they are not insurmountable, they are highly unlikely to be solved in a foreseeable future.to the whole, it is seen that reducing taxation as a remuneration is set to be better alternative.

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Pollution has become one of the indispensable parts of our lives recently; a considerable proportion of this pollution is caused by various industries. Some people assert that enforcing polluting factories to pay more taxes is a way to reduce...

Pollution has become one of the indispensable parts of our lives recently; a considerable proportion of this pollution is caused by various industries. Some people assert that enforcing polluting factories to pay more taxes is a way to reduce pollution, whilst, others go against this outlook by emphasis on allocating some governmental financial aids to them.
It is explicitly stated that, having a substantial impact on polluting the environment, industries should be brought into justice along with should be convicted to pay more taxes. This could be counted as a practical measure leading them to lower their polluting emissions. The obsolete food factory in the 1980s in India which was enforced to pay more tax - as its punishment- is a case in point. Being negatively well-known for its exhausts, they commenced to priorities replacing their equipment with the cutting-edge ones eventually.
Nonetheless, allocating some money to these industries generally seems more preferable; and can make a profound contribution to reduce pollution. To clarify, due to some potential economic problems which the companies have, helping them to prevail over their difficulties is a more down-to-earth measure. Taking more a tax is a myopic solution which is bound not to solve the problem; it just triggers them to split apart sooner owing to numerous fees. I personally aver that financial state aids are highly likely to act as a precursor to defect the problem as soon as possible. This also stimulates polluting factories to render their way or equipment obsolete with the modern ones.
in conclusion, industries with the polluting procedures urgently need helps to create a new method which never had they experienced before rather than making the situation worse to them by taking more tax, I assume.

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In spite of the fact that some people assume that the best way to cut industrial contamination would be that to impose an immense tax on factories, others believe that there will be a wide range of measures to be carried out. I, however, think...

In spite of the fact that some people assume that the best way to cut industrial contamination would be that to impose an immense tax on factories, others believe that there will be a wide range of measures to be carried out. I, however, think that will merely not be influential and other drastic actions should be implemented.
On the one hand, it is argued that if governments impose strict regulation especially the tax on companies which contribute to pollution, these factories are potentially forced to lower the level of its catastrophic emissions. In other words, the longer official authorities inflict lucrative costs upon environmentally-damaging manufacturers, the more manufacturers abide by the rules. In fact, these groups of people are motivated to propose that financial forfeits can be working in view of the fact that the beneficiaries take charge of industrial companies and they fear for enormous compensations. So, the disciplinary action plays a vital role in reducing factories' pollution.
On the other hand, several people are believed that although states can take full advantage of financial punishment strategies, there will be a variety of distinct ways to overcome notorious air pollution. For example, company owners should be convinced to bring in beneficial measures such as using renewable resources namely sun and wind powers. As a result, not only are factories able to save up their expenditure, but they are also encouraged to boost their production while conserving the environment. Moreover, industrial companies should be simultaneously rewarded by the government when they reap the benefit of those effective and environmentally-friendly techniques.
In conclusion, I can understand why people allege that polluting factories should only be forfeited, but it seems to me that this issue can be considered as a multidimensional problem.

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On the one hand, it is argued that if governments impose strict regulation especially the tax on companies which contribute to pollution, these factories are potentially forced to lower the level of its catastrophic emissions. In other words, the...

On the one hand, it is argued that if governments impose strict regulation especially the tax on companies which contribute to pollution, these factories are potentially forced to lower the level of its catastrophic emissions. In other words, the longer official authorities inflict lucrative costs upon environmentally-damaging manufacturers, the more manufacturers abide by the rules. In fact, these groups of people are motivated to propose that financial forfeits can be working in view of the fact that the beneficiaries take charge of industrial companies and they fear for enormous compensations. So, the disciplinary action plays a vital role in reducing factories' pollution.
On the other hand, several people are believed that although states can take full advantage of financial punishment strategies, there will be a variety of distinct ways to overcome notorious air pollution. For example, company owners should be convinced to bring in beneficial measures such as using renewable resources namely sun and wind powers. As a result, not only are factories able to save up their expenditure, but they are also encouraged to boost their production while conserving the environment. Moreover, industrial companies should be simultaneously rewarded by the government when they reap the benefit of those effective and environmentally-friendly techniques.
In conclusion, I can understand why people allege that polluting factories should only be forfeited, but it seems to me that this issue can be considered as a multidimensional problem.

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Air pollution has become a crisis issue all over the world. Probably the single biggest contributor to this problem is factories. While some people consider tax based on companies contribution in to this trouble as a deterrent, others believe...

Air pollution has become a crisis issue all over the world. Probably the single biggest contributor to this problem is factories. While some people consider tax based on companies contribution in to this trouble as a deterrent, others believe that there are more effective ways to tackle this issue. According to my way of thinking, stimulation ways to control this worldwide concern can be more productive.
On one hand, boosting tax rate based on companies attribution to this disaster, which has caused enormous number of diseases and death within human, animals, and plants each year, might make them to consider some corrective actions to alleviate the pollution they have made. Since this kind of retribution has a diverse effect on company’s gross margin, all the top managers would be involved to find the root causes in an effective way, which leads to allocating enough budget for variety of environmental projects with the aim of reducing the polluted effluents of their industry, such as Co2 emission control or treating the industrial waste water to achieve their expected margin.
On the other hand, scientific approaches have proven that increasing the awareness level in the society is a counterproductive to face with this worldwide concern. For instance, considering several facilities for industries who are concerning the environment in their production, announcing the best companies as clean or green industry, might stimulate other factories to play their role in this international positive competition. This positive contribution would be due to the fact that people show more eagerness to buy products which are produced in an environmental friendly atmosphere.
According to my perspective, boosting the tax level not only cannot be considered as a long lasting corrective action, but also it might have some detrimental effect on country’s economy. As a result, suggesting incentive plans to make all companies involved, regardless their size or nationality, might be the best way to tackle with this universal crisis.
All in all, although punitive plans can be considered to control the air pollution, increasing the level of company’s contribution to face with this problem by stimulating them to suggest innovated ways to control the pollution would be an effective, and long term corrective action.

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With emerging industrial revolution in nineteen century, all industries have been improved day by day. This rapid industrializationlead to environmental contaminants. Some individuals believe that tax can be best solution to reduce...

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With emerging industrial revolution in nineteen century, all industries have been improved day by day. This rapid industrializationlead to environmental contaminants. Some individuals believe that tax can be best solution to reduce these pollution but the others think there are alternative ways to solve this global problems. In the course of essay I will discuss both the viewpoints.
First of all, some people believe tax and raising tax is a push factor to force companies reduce their pollution. These people think financial fine is always best measure and governments can threaten the companies which do not observe environmental standards with financial fine, raising tax and depriving authority. As environmentalists believe these deterrent and prevention solutions are not useful any more. Sometimes it causes many financial problems for people and companies because they have to lay off their labor. Also the companies find ways to violate the laws. So tax is not a sole good way to struggle with pollution of industrial.
On the other hand, some individuals believe contaminants of industries are the controversial issue all around the world since they can threaten continuing human existence. The essential measures should be approached by governments and national authorities. In present time many researches have been done by scientists to reduce the pollution of industry. As scientists believe, decreasing the industrial contaminants it means optimization our natural resources. According to the Dr. Jason – environmentalist – we have various kind of industries that they have specific contaminants. We need infrastructural programs cope with industrial pollution. Governments can encourage companies to enjoy innovative ways which is provided by scientists or tax incentives is another way.
To conclusion, tax and financial fines are not applied solution to stimulate companies to decrease their level of pollution. There are many effective measures based on science which need our cooperate to implement. There is no doubt that Protecting this blue planet is our duty.

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A considerable portion of people hold the idea that controvertial issue of contamination in industry can be tackles by levying tax on companies and plants. However, opponents believe that other measures should be taken to...

#من_کپی_نمیکنم
A considerable portion of people hold the idea that controvertial issue of contamination in industry can be tackles by levying tax on companies and plants. However, opponents believe that other measures should be taken to remove pollution from industry. From my point of view, even though tax can be effective in order to decrease pollution, other approaches would drastically successful to stop this problematic condition. This essay will present cogent reasons to support these two different viewpoints.
Paying high taxes could act as significant deterant to the problem of pollution in industrial sectors. Nowadays, due to the inappropriate economical situation in countries anything about reducing the expenses of firms has been acting as a strong motivation for company owners. As a consequence, it is quite probable that companies would oblige themselves not to produce huge amount of pollution ranging from water to air in order to avoid raised taxes. As well as economical justifications, high rate of taxes and lack of any governmental subsidies, can cause companies to do research more than before in the field of chemicals and othe contaminated substances. In fact, this approach can make a company more stronger in the pollution making preventation. Hence, It can be seen that tax can have sensible influence in solving the problem.
A majority of people think differently and declare that more organized research in other fileds such as pollution capturing systems can lead better results in order to disappear industrial contaminations. Indeed, the more detrimental waste components are captured by state-of-the-art technology, the less pollution will be added to the environment. One further alternative which can be proposed is decomposing chemicals and other unwanted waste products to beneficial products. Tehran Times has recently released a feature revealing that Alumina waste material can be divided to Aluminum and sulphuric acid In new plants which both will useful in an array of industries. Hence, the impact of other methods such capturing and decomposing waste material can be very conspicuous.
In conclusion, other alternatives of industrial pollution tax can cause companies to be more eager to reduce ther all kinds of produced pollution which can be very harmful for mother nature.

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A considerable portion of people hold the idea that controvertial issue of contamination in industry can be tackles by levying tax on companies and plants. However, opponents believe that other measures should be taken to remove pollution from...

A considerable portion of people hold the idea that controvertial issue of contamination in industry can be tackles by levying tax on companies and plants. However, opponents believe that other measures should be taken to remove pollution from industry. From my point of view, even though tax can be effective in order to decrease pollution, other approaches would drastically successful to stop this problematic condition. This essay will present cogent reasons to support these two different viewpoints.
Paying high taxes could act as significant deterant to the problem of pollution in industrial sectors. Nowadays, due to the inappropriate economical situation in countries anything about reducing the expenses of firms has been acting as a strong motivation for company owners. As a consequence, it is quite probable that companies would oblige themselves not to produce huge amount of pollution ranging from water to air in order to avoid raised taxes. As well as economical justifications, high rate of taxes and lack of any governmental subsidies, can cause companies to do research more than before in the field of chemicals and othe contaminated substances. In fact, this approach can make a company more stronger in the pollution making preventation. Hence, It can be seen that tax can have sensible influence in solving the problem.
A majority of people think differently and declare that more organized research in other fileds such as pollution capturing systems can lead better results in order to disappear industrial contaminations. Indeed, the more detrimental waste components are captured by state-of-the-art technology, the less pollution will be added to the environment. One further alternative which can be proposed is decomposing chemicals and other unwanted waste products to beneficial products. Tehran Times has recently released a feature revealing that Alumina waste material can be divided to Aluminum and sulphuric acid In new plants which both will useful in an array of industries. Hence, the impact of other methods such capturing and decomposing waste material can be very conspicuous.
In conclusion, other alternatives of industrial pollution tax can cause companies to be more eager to reduce ther all kinds of produced pollution which can be very harmful for mother nature.

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Industrial pollution has become one of the most serious environmental problems in the past few decades. There are differing views on the issue of whether taxing the companies which produce this pollution is the most effective way...

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Industrial pollution has become one of the most serious environmental problems in the past few decades. There are differing views on the issue of whether taxing the companies which produce this pollution is the most effective way or not. Although this course of action can be justified by persuasive reason, I would contend that there are better ways to overcome this ongoing and daunting problem.
A huge amount of pollution would be reduced if governments considered taxes for companies. Some people subscribe to the viewpoint that this is the most effective way, for this is considered as not only a motivating factor for polluting companies to cut their expenditure by decreasing the amount of pollution, but a stumbling block for other companies not to produce industrial pollution to excess. In other words, desiring to make larger profit, companies will make a real effort to limit the amount of industrial pollution such as toxic fumes released to the air from their sites or industrial sewage disposed from their companies.
Opposing view, nevertheless, asserts that there are better measures which can be taken to reduce this amount. First of all, financial incentives could be more influential than taxes due to the fact that the larger number of companies might increase the price of their products to cover their costs if they have to pay taxes. These motivations, however, can stimulate competitiveness among companies to reduce contamination as much as they can in order to reap the benefits of these subsidies. Along with these motivating factors which can play a pivotal role in reduction of industrial pollution, governments ought to consider an ample amount of governmental investment money if they want to achieve success in persuading companies to use eco-friendly methods. Green energy, for example, should be harnessed and made more available to reduce dependence on fossil fuels, this would not be achieved unless governments made contribution to companies financially because these ways are so expensive that companies can merely pay their immense costs.
By way of conclusion, despite enormous benefits which can be derived from taxes, I once again reaffirm my position that other measures such as financial incentives and governmental budget for environmentally friendly ways of generating energy can be more beneficial.

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Industrial pollution is referred to undesirable outcome. There is a widely held perception that imposing high taxes is an efficient method to stem the tide of emitted pollution from industries. Others, on the other hand, have found adhering to...

Industrial pollution is referred to undesirable outcome. There is a widely held perception that imposing high taxes is an efficient method to stem the tide of emitted pollution from industries. Others, on the other hand, have found adhering to environmental standards a neat idea as taxing is so ineffective method that not only minimize pollution but also give rise to the problem.
The solution of taxing about manufactures has been suggested in a belief that industrials would minimize emitted harmful-by products and waste into the environment not to pay taxes if they succumb to so very taxing. This notion is rejected as on no account could companies make the environment pollutant. One further reason of imposing this solution associated with the fact that taxes would be reallocated to environmental –related issues therefore, industries would remove some burden placed on the government to revamping the environment. This idea is consider a short-term solution that is unlike to resolve the problem effectively.
Turning to the other site of the argument, there are strongly reasons to hold the opposing idea. To start with, emitted pollution will be definitely reduced, if industries adhere to environmental standards. it comes in a form of adopting environmental equipment, improving product lines as well as make optimal use of materials. While, it is preferred to pay taxes as a result of the fact that industries finds facilitating equipment much more expensive than paying taxes. The expense on adopting environmental friendly would be paid off in forthcoming benefit. Adhering to environmental standards not only reduce deceleration rate of machines but also reduce emitted waste and pollution so that profit margin increases.
All in all, although there is a widely held perception that makes a valid point that a significant obstacle to producing undesired pollution is imposing high taxes, I personally tend to think that following environmental standards not only reduces emitted pollutants from industries but also gives a rise to profit margin as makes the optimal use of materials and resources.

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These days,pollution,especially industrial pollution ,has become a controversial worldwide issue. A wide range of solutions are suggested to tackle this problem.While some people argue that governments should impose taxes on...

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These days,pollution,especially industrial pollution ,has become a controversial worldwide issue. A wide range of solutions are suggested to tackle this problem.While some people argue that governments should impose taxes on law-breaking companies,I believe that there are more effective initiatives to resolve this environmental threat.
On the one hand,heavy taxes would be taken into consideration as a way to deter factories from devastating environment.The advocates of this point of view believe that this approach has practical benefits. Firstly, the offending companies would endeavor to put an end to their law-breaking activities so as not to pay taxes. to put it differently,this way would persuade such factories to operate in a more environmentally-friendly way.Secondly,These taxes could be allocated to environmental activities. For example, a fraction of this money can be donated to environmentalists' campaigns which can promote the awareness of societies about detrimental repercussions of air and water pollution.
On the other hand,some people particularly the environmentalists claim that forcing companies to pay heavy taxes is not efficient at all as lots of factories and companies are paying taxes regularly. Meanwhile ,besides emitting poisonous gases into the air, they are dumping their industrial waste to the rivers ans seas. This group suggest that encouraging policies and other punishments are more effective. To illustrate, obedient factories should be awarded tax rebates. Also, governments should encourage factories to move to the suburbs by providing incentives and financial assistance.Furthermore,when a company persists on breaking the rules the authorities should compel it to close unless the managers become committed to the environmental rules.
In conclusion, while heavy taxes may be a deterrent in some limited cases, however, I believe that there are other approaches which can lead to industrial pollution decrease and consequently protection of environment.

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Some people believe in the fact that imposing taxes on manufacturing is a neat solution in order to minimize emitted pollutants from industries. Others, on the other hand, believe that on no way could industries reduce pollution unless adhere to...

Some people believe in the fact that imposing taxes on manufacturing is a neat solution in order to minimize emitted pollutants from industries. Others, on the other hand, believe that on no way could industries reduce pollution unless adhere to environmental standards. there are arguments on both side of this debate. I will discuss them now.
Those people who argue that imposing high taxes is a good idea have one main reason manufactures will make an effort to minimize pollution if they succumb to pay high tax. This notion is likely to be rejected as companies have been producing so much pollution that needs huge cost to be reduced. Therefore, industries prefer to pay high taxes rather than working out a long term solution coming at a huge cost.
Turning to the other side of the argument, there is strong reason to hold the opposing idea. To start with, adhering to environmental standards not only reduces pollution but also increases the profit margin. The best example to illustrate this is the fact that it is possible to make optimal use of materials and resources in order to produce so fewer pollution and waste if environmental friendly equipment be adapted. Moreover, although the expenditure in facilitating product lines is high, the expense will pay off in forthcoming benefit. For example, the costs of disposing waste and reducing pollution will be considered profit margin.
All in all, although some people make a valid point that increasing in taxes is a brilliant idea to tackle irrational pollution, I personally tend to think that following environmental standards-an expensive long-term solution- not only brings benefits for companies but also reduces the rate of pollution from industries

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Growing concern about disposing waste comes as no surprise, considering the fact that irrational waste increasingly being produced by industries. Some people believe that it is an ideal solution to increase taxes on industries to tackle this...

Growing concern about disposing waste comes as no surprise, considering the fact that irrational waste increasingly being produced by industries. Some people believe that it is an ideal solution to increase taxes on industries to tackle this problem. Despite, it is believed that there is a great deal of neat solutions such as: facilitating equipment, improving product lines as well as adhering to environmental standards. There are arguments on both sides of this very topical debate, and I will discuss them now
On the one hand, a significant part of budget for revamping environment is provided by taxes on companies. Whether higher taxes are likely to lead to be allocated to tackle environmental-related issues or not is beside the point. On no account should not companies dispose industrial pollution into natural areas. Secondly, imposing high taxes not only minimize emitted industrial pollutant but also pave the way for companies not to adhere to environmental standards and produce much pollution as they pay high taxes. Finally, while it is believed that industries would make an effort to reduce the rate of waste not to pay high taxes. This notion is rejected in a belief that minimizing waste come at huge cost rather than paying taxes and it does not worth the cost.
On the other hand, prediction is better than cure. it is belief that adhering to environmental standard not only reduce the risk of environmental degradation but also is likely to lead profit margin to increase. Therefore, environmental friendly equipment should be installed and product line should be improved in order to make optimal use and a limited deal of pollutant emitted. While in initial stage companies succumb to high costs for facilitating equipment. It will be paid off by forthcoming. Moreover, the only way industries could reduce waste effectively is adhering to environmental standards and thus, yes, disposing pollution costs decreases and will be allocated for other sectors.
In conclusion, My own feeling is that there is no fact in favor of rising taxes to deal with irrational waste. Despite adoption of environmental friendly equipment and facilitating product lines as well as following environmental standards are effective solutions in order to reduce waste.

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There is no doubt that, industrial pollution has become a major problem for almost all megacities. While some people believe that the best way for dealing with this issue is to increase tax for companies which cause it, others argue that there...

There is no doubt that, industrial pollution has become a major problem for almost all megacities. While some people believe that the best way for dealing with this issue is to increase tax for companies which cause it, others argue that there are more effective ways to solve this problem. In this essay, I will discuss some both sides of the argument and explain my support for the former idea.
On the one hand, there are some offers such as force all factories to move in countryside’s but it is a costly solution and of course it is not much effective the reason it that. By this approach, factories will release their emissions in nature of outskirts. for instance, if a refinery moved near a river, it would release all its emissions in to the river and it will cause bigger problems in the future.
On the other hand, increasing tax for factories has several merits. firstly, increasing the tax will force companies to change their old equipment and use new one, for example, if government increase the tax for a steel company because of its high amount of exhausts, it will it will replace its filters by new filters which are more effective and environmentally friendly. in addition to this, increasing the tax will force companies to do some investigation and create innovative methods to reduce their emissions such as better air condition for their company or recycle some of their useless releases.
By the way of conclusion, although at a glance replacing companies seems to be a good idea, it might have various downsides. I believe increasing the tax on companies which causes pollution would be the best remedy for reducing industrial pollution.

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Parallel to cities industrialization, pollution caused by some companies has consequently become problematic. While some argue that imposing taxes on those companies can settle the matter, others believe other measures could be...

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Parallel to cities industrialization, pollution caused by some companies has consequently become problematic. While some argue that imposing taxes on those companies can settle the matter, others believe other measures could be more efficiently productive.

When implemented, taxation can eminently function as a pre-emptive measure to inhibit companies from polluting the environment. It is an axiomatically true that manufacturers are in the business of making money and thus would virtually conform to any financially punitive law. This puts a tremendous pressure on those companies to actively try to minimize their pollution and brings tax money to the state to possibly invest in environmental programs in the interim. A good illustration of this can be seen in many companies in metropolitan areas which their pollution emissions have remarkably reduced as a result of such legislations.

Others, however, argue that alternative approaches could be more effective. Industries, if tax cuts are given, would voluntarily try to reduce their emitted pollution for instance. Other incentives such as subsidizing companies which are moving towards replacing fossil fuels by green and renewable energies, can also be significantly effectual. By using such state-of-the-art technologies which are more environmentally friendly, companies will also enjoy an overall higher efficiency. A great example for this is Scandinavia, where the least amount of industrial pollutants exists as a consequence of government-funded programs towards combatting pollution.

In conclusion, although taxing companies might seem effective, I think it is not a lucrative long-term solution neither for businesses nor environment. The state can tackle the issue by encouraging companies to upgrade their facilities in a way that results in less industrial pollution.

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