IELTS Cambridge 11 - Test2 - General Writing - Task2

Some people say that in all levels of education, from primary school to universities, too much time spent on learning facts and not enough on learning practical skills. Agree or disagree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
You should write at least 250 words.

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Arguing that time spent on theoretical facts is not commensurate with that of practical skills, pedagogy for all levels is at risk of lacking core skills that can be used to apply to real life situations. This deepening polarization is demonstrable with some reasons.

Firstly, today's employers apprehend a lack of practical skills among recent graduates. These skills are cited as integral to workplace success. A good example for this is the design companies and publishers that cull through the list of candidates by asking them to accurately mimic the work they would do on the job. Often, fresh graduates see themselves eliminated since practical subjects are greatly undermined in curriculum planning. According to Iran Labor Statistics, last year, the employment of graphic designers holding a mere relevant formal education dropped, then reasserted as practical training courses were introduced. Ergo, Students’ incompetence in job market stems from curriculums condensed for learning facts.

Secondly, in many countries learners are instructed using orthodox methods of teaching in schools and universities. These methods have hitherto used obsolete techniques that are based entirely on facts and figures rather than practical experience. In my country, Iran, it is ludicrously easy to see traditional approaches being adhered to at all levels of education. Here teachers dispense knowledge, and pusillanimous students need to be filled with information that has no particular use or function unless applied and tested in a practical fashion.

On the whole, I aver that learning facts wastes a considerable amount of time in all educational stages. Sadly, I am sure I am not alone in saying there are many practical skills I wish I had learned in school or university.

شرکت‌کننده محترم،
تا ساعت 17 روز پنجشنبه 1396/10/07 فرصت دارید، برای این موضوع رایتینگ‌های خود را نوشته و به صورت کامنت، در زیر پست، ارسال نمایید. تمامی رایتینگ‌ها توسط ممتحنین بیان برتر ارزیابی شده و به آنها نمره داده خواهد شد.

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For many years education has been all about teaching a lot of core subjects to students. It seems in our time we need to start thinking about new methods and go toward more practical ways to educate students.

There are several reasons why...

For many years education has been all about teaching a lot of core subjects to students. It seems in our time we need to start thinking about new methods and go toward more practical ways to educate students.

There are several reasons why students would not need to be taught for core skills. Pedagogical pioneers used to believe that subjects such as math, science, and language should be an integral part of any educational system. While this notion might be valid for a time, in our age, they are not clearly considered as a necessity. Thanks to advancement in technology especially in computer and software, those skills should not be normally acquired and memorized. Having all this knowledge available at our laptops and smartphones, we can make use of them endlessly.

I believe there are many other practical things to learn which is more beneficial for students. Whereas we do not need individuals who brought up with rote-learning methods, the demand for creative and innovative graduates are rising. In addition, It is not just that creativity and innovation that companies are looking for. They are constantly trying to recruit graduated who are able to come up with new ideas for enhancing their profitability. So demand for school and university students whose curriculum based on practical knowledge is rising all the time.

In conclusion, my view is that we need more and more people with practical skills and schools and university administrations should anticipate society requirement all the time and adapt their syllabus with those needs.

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خواهش میکنم استاد حسینی رایتینگ هارو ارزیابی و ارائه دهند

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رايتينگ نمونه بسيار قوي ميباشد
اما كاش اينجور نوشتن ها در كلاس هاي آموزشي هم مدنظر قرار گرفته بشود
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من تقریبا سه هفته پیش یک ماک آزمون دادم از یه موسسه متعبر دیگه و با همین سطح نوشتن اونجا 6.5 شدم . خیلی عجیبه که یک نمره تفاوت بیافته از یه متن به متن دیگه. در هر صورت سپاس

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من تقریبا سه هفته پیش یک ماک آزمون دادم از یه موسسه متعبر دیگه و با همین سطح نوشتن اونجا 6.5 شدم . خیلی عجیبه که یک نمره تفاوت بیافته از یه متن به متن دیگه. در هر صورت سپاس

""دوست عزیز هرچند تمام نمرات براساس Band Descriptor عمومی داده میشود و صحت آن مورد تایید کل تیم رایتینگ بیان برتر است، اما رایتینگ شما دوباره بازبینی شد. متاسفانه سبک نوشتاری شما بسیار قدیمی و پر از جملات Waffle و کلیشه است. این سبک رایتینگ را Thoughtless Writing میگویند و متاسفانه نمره TR خوبی نمیتواند در آزمون های فعلی کسب کند. نمره 5 تا 5.5 مورد تایید تیم رایتینگ است.""

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خوشحال میشیم نمره بیشتری رو زبان آموزان در آزمون اصلی بگیرند. حتما ما رو در جریان نمره اصلی خودتون قرار بدید

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مى شه خواهش كنم ، خود جناب حامد حسينى بيشتر رو بخش رايتينگ كار كنن ، تشكر از زحمات شما

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رايتينگ اتون جدا يونيك است و اصلا شبيه سمپل هاي نت و كتابهاي ايلتس نيست
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در صورت امکان درخواست تصحیح مجدد دارم
توسط یک استاد دیگر .
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دوست عزیز هرچند تمام نمرات براساس Band Descriptor عمومی داده میشود و صحت آن مورد تایید کل تیم رایتینگ بیان برتر است، اما رایتینگ شما دوباره بازبینی شد. متاسفانه سبک نوشتاری شما بسیار قدیمی و پر از جملات Waffle و کلیشه است. این سبک رایتینگ را...

دوست عزیز هرچند تمام نمرات براساس Band Descriptor عمومی داده میشود و صحت آن مورد تایید کل تیم رایتینگ بیان برتر است، اما رایتینگ شما دوباره بازبینی شد. متاسفانه سبک نوشتاری شما بسیار قدیمی و پر از جملات Waffle و کلیشه است. این سبک رایتینگ را Thoughtless Writing میگویند و متاسفانه نمره TR خوبی نمیتواند در آزمون های فعلی کسب کند. نمره 5 تا 5.5 مورد تایید تیم رایتینگ است.

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سلام و خسته نباشید
با اینکه میدونم مهلت ارسال رایتینگ ها تمام شده ولی با توجه به اینکه هنوز نمونه توسط استاد ارائه نشده، فک کردم شاید شانس ارسال و‌تصحیح رو داشته باشم
ممنون از خدمات و زحماتتون

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The last decades has witnessed considerable growth in the percentage of educated people. A high- quality education must be considered as a major factor of a huge concern to each society. Learning practical skills shares equal importance just as...

The last decades has witnessed considerable growth in the percentage of educated people. A high- quality education must be considered as a major factor of a huge concern to each society. Learning practical skills shares equal importance just as learning facts and both are indispensable parts of a good education but at deferent levels, they require different levels of heed and concentration.

The main reason why some people tend to spend much time on learning fact is with which students are bound to strengthen their scientific foundation. They would acquire the power of analysis of scientific matters. Numerous scientific discoveries and inventions, in addition, are result of strong theories. Certain fields of science, for example, like quantum and string theories would be considered as a theoretical field, and it inevitably would require much more time on theorizing. This type of studying should take place on university at undergraduate or graduate degree.


One should not close eyes upon the fact that one of the goals of education is acquiring life-skills and having a higher level of standard of living. The role of practical learning, here, would become striking. Children should be better to familiar with hands-on experiments from primary school. They should learn applying their knowledge in their life. This education equips them with a more practical skill of life for the future. Students particularly in primary and middle school should quit formal methods of education and turn to practical education. One of countries with this approach is Finland and it surprisingly has the better education method throughout the world.

On the other hand, every society needs enough number of technicians. So that, some developed countries are only accepting skilled worker immigrants. The young with a particular practical skill has a more chance to compete with others in today's marketing. They could find much more opportunities to find a good job in their own country or other countries. This education is often done during high school or some course in colleges.

In brief, the education fails to place great emphasis on focus on only learning fact. There should be a management to distribution of time between learning facts and practical skilled during the education ranging from primary school to university. Each government could do this depends on the society needs and students willing and talent.

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improper punctuation and grammatical mistakes have ruined the response. some supporting statements are very good. task requirements are almost fulfilled
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ضمن تشکر از شما بابت زحماتی که میکشید ی سوال داشتم جواب این رایتینگ هوایی که ارسال کردیم رو میشه لطفاً بزارید .ممنون.همچنین خواهشمندم رایتینگ جدید رو هم اعلام فرمایید .باسپاس

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No one can ever deny that education has long been a backbone of every society , disciplining students in different level of education, ranging from primary schools to university levels. Some individuals are convinced that these educating...

No one can ever deny that education has long been a backbone of every society , disciplining students in different level of education, ranging from primary schools to university levels. Some individuals are convinced that these educating institutes allocate huge time for learning theoretical subjects, regardless of its practical aspects. I completely agree with this notion and I suppose that practical skills are likely to be in higher consideration.

First of all, the majority of institutes are not well-equipped, driving students to assimilate theoretical subjects, rather than experimental ones. This is mainly rooted in the sheer number of deprived province, compelling students to intake knowledge in book-based methods, while few affluent areas are presumably enjoy the educational facilities, including laboratories, computer sites and to mention but a few. In this sense, that is why education systems, especially the state ones, have to rely on theoretical subjects.

Another contributing factors in learning facts at schools or universities are associated with a common myth of paper qualification demand of prospective employments. In other words, some people and also educational authorities are believe that in taking facts and theoretical skills, broaden students' mind , and turn them into analytical mind which can have a profound impact on their career prospects, as most of the prerequisites of companies are closely linked to schools' grades assessments, while the reality is that spending whole of education life merely on studying books are unlikely to make students a professional plastic surgeon or competent engineer, indeed requiring high practical experiences.

In conclusion, although there are few advocators to imparting practical skills, I would reaffirm that spending a lot of time on theoretical subjects in educational institutes seems futile.

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Owing to the fact that most educational systems focus on theoretical knowledge, an array of students fail to find or choose suitable occupation. It is said that students in schools and universes are heavily loaded with learning theoretical...

Owing to the fact that most educational systems focus on theoretical knowledge, an array of students fail to find or choose suitable occupation. It is said that students in schools and universes are heavily loaded with learning theoretical science than practicable skills. I am strongly on the opinion that it is required to place a premium on practical skills.
Firs and most importantly, one of the overriding reasons that students graduated from university are not able to find proper job is they dabble in taking in practical knowledge. To clarify, in modern world the attitudes regarding to studied have been change significantly and most companies prefer to employ staff whose performance is precisely and efficient. For example, the students of software or hardware computer engineering are required to keep abreast of the latest developments in state-of-the-art technology of computers and be excel in associated executable knowledge.
Not only this, a great number of students’ aptitudes and talents can be flourished by training practical knowledge, and also theoretical knowledge can be fostered by learning practical sciences. In developed countries, by establishing a well-round education there is a equal concentrations on both theoretical and practical knowledge. In contrast, most of obstacle in developing countries and underprivileged people are stemmed from lack of proper equilibrium between two mentioned sides of knowledge.
Apart from this, personality features of young learners might be affected as a result of lack of practical knowledge. Not only are not the students skills compatible with job market, but also their confidence are shaken by bad experience in interviews. To clarify, in modern societies most of interviewers pay more attention to the executable skills in the resume of interviewees than their grade point average. For example, in industrial companies an engineer with 5 years’ work experiences outperforms a student with an acceptable GPA.
In conclusion, although for research it is necessary to have enough theoretical knowledge I believe that practical knowledge should be considered as a first priority.

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In education there has always been divided opinion regarding the quality and quantity such as arabic

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Educational institutions used to teach diverse subjects to students in earlier times, whilst the recent decades have witnessed an increase in the number of practical skills taught. Although learning theoretical facts can have merits, gaining...

Educational institutions used to teach diverse subjects to students in earlier times, whilst the recent decades have witnessed an increase in the number of practical skills taught. Although learning theoretical facts can have merits, gaining knowledge about real situations and events is set to be more useful and efficient.

Progress in different fields can stem from studying scientific ideas in schools and universities. To clarify, learning facts help students understand natural phenomena surrounding their daily life. They are highly likely to show their interests when studying various subjects such as mathematics, chemistry and etc. If young people develop their talents, this will lead to an array of achievements in future.

Nonetheless, training and practical experience play a crucial role in having skilled occupations. Inasmuch as recently employers have been considering the skills of job applicants rather than university degrees, individuals who do not have necessary abilities have to spend time acquiring sufficient expertise. Jobholders having more practical skills may usually be promoted to higher positions in workplaces and enjoy more salaries and perks.

Furthermore, people demand to learn interpersonal and social skills in educational centers. Ordinary people will have challenges in their private life if they are not educated about these skills. They require to take particular courses in schools and universities so as to develop strong relationships with the members of family and colleagues. For example, when facing problems in home or society, they should know essential reactions and measures.

To conclude, states should adopt some policies to boost educational system and children should broaden practical experience.

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the main part of the question is about time allocation, but you rarely have talked about it. paragraphing is good,
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The main aim of all educational systems is to prepare students by the most up-to-date techniques which contribute to sort out real-world problems. Many experts believe that a great deal of importance should be placed on theoretical aspects of...

The main aim of all educational systems is to prepare students by the most up-to-date techniques which contribute to sort out real-world problems. Many experts believe that a great deal of importance should be placed on theoretical aspects of issues while others thick the practicality needs more attention. Overall, in my opinion, there should be a balance between these two aspects regarding each field of study.
There are a lot to be said for the theory that students learn at college or university. In fact, it is the heart and soul of any education all over the world. The reason is that all techniques that we acquire have been characterized by those who had struggled with real issues. Moreover, if people want to overcome difficulties that they are encountering in the industry, the agriculture, the environment and so forth, they will need to employ theories have already learnt at university. Without theoretical progress human beings seemingly might be unable to launch cutting-edge technologies ever before.
From another point of view, if students are not accustomed to the applications of what they have been taught at university, they might scramble to expend what they have already learnt in practical situations. For instance, agricultural engineers cannot protect crops if they have not experienced appropriate methods to eradicate a variety of pests and herds in practical sessions.
In conclusion, although the theory paves the way for further developments, the practicality of lessons should not be underestimated in curriculums. That is to say, both sights should be received enough attention by educational authorities. However, one aspect might be more crucial than the other in some field of studies.

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Being proficient in a special field after getting graduated is momentous and occupational future comes from this time study.while knowing basic issues help people to understand some natural existing laws ,I believe that practical study has more...

Being proficient in a special field after getting graduated is momentous and occupational future comes from this time study.while knowing basic issues help people to understand some natural existing laws ,I believe that practical study has more effectiveness in their life.
On the on hand, theoretical courses which most of them will not apply in future, would impose extra expenditures to government.since these courses should be taught by related - educated teacher who receive salary from an employer .moreover while there are a shortage in trainedteachers,it is considered as an opportunity to resolve consequences due to workforces .Besides, student's schedules will be planned on more limited time so they could spend their time to more benefit issues which will be applied in future.
On the other hand,practical skills impress pupile's social and interpersonal skills.Firstly this skills boost their confident as well as creativity and personality.Given practical courses would require to share different point of views and students would learn communications without biase.Secondly they could be able to find either job or commencing their private occupation without attending to further education.for instance a technician how learn piping from whose father experimentally.Lastly practical courses are a preferrence rather theoretical issues because they are either tough and complicated or discouraging children to learn more.
In conclusion,understanding basic knowledge is necessary but amount of this should be adjusted.however education systems should be emohasized on practical courses to graduate more people who are proficient.

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The question asks whether learning facts occupies more time or practical skills, but you have talked about the advantages without referring to the aspect of time in your thesis . Minor errors
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These days,although business markets significantly require skillful Labours,unfortunately there are still a huge number of of educational centers where they concentrate on theoretical trainings more than practical acquiring.Contrary to this...

These days,although business markets significantly require skillful Labours,unfortunately there are still a huge number of of educational centers where they concentrate on theoretical trainings more than practical acquiring.Contrary to this opinion,many believe for gaining experimental abilities,perfecting businesslike knowledge would be considered as a priority,and this is highly agreed with this notion.

As many socialist assert,most of countries is confronting high rate of unemployed job seekers who have graduated from university while theydo not have learnt enough skills towards practical aspects of their major.There is a distinct fact that most of universities specially in developing states,do not pledge adequate investment for providing and improving laboratories and workshops.As a result of this dismanagment.the country would be tackled recession and unemployment.For instance,my country suffers from unprecedented high number of unemployed educated youngesters because of insufficient applied capabilities and knowledge which they must have grasped during their academic courses.
What is more,technological development and innovative achievements seem impossible unless the industrial sectors would be conducted by skillful principals and their professional staff.Thus,educational system s should consider vocational courses as a sensible approach for training and preparing expert and creative workforces.This perspective now is held by developed and industrial countries.For example,in China every job seekers in industrial business es have to pass practical and vocational instructions in advance.

To sum up,however,theoretical knowledge are really worthwhile for primary education,but at the higher levels of training students must learn regarding businesslike skills.Apparently,theoretical orientation towards education system can cause unpleasant consequences for economic prospect of countries.

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Mehrdad:
Some people say that in all levels of
education, from primary school to universities, too much time spent on learning
facts and not enough on learning practical skills. Agree or disagree?



It is believed that not adequate time is...

Mehrdad:
Some people say that in all levels of
education, from primary school to universities, too much time spent on learning
facts and not enough on learning practical skills. Agree or disagree?



It is believed that not adequate time is allocated on practical
skills in educational programs. I tend to agree on this opinion that practical
lessons are not planed as much as theoretically based ones.



It has been a great controversy exists as to whether the time
allocated for practical courses enough or not. These beliefs are best
understood when it comes to getting a job. As work force rises, this subject
becomes more noticeable among employers to place a premium on skilled workers.
Undoubtedly those excelling in practical skills are far more marketable in the
job market. Numerous studies have shown that a vast majority of alumni are not
evaluated as skillful job seekers during assessment process for applying the
vacancies. It can be proven of being stress on theoretical knowledge rather
than practical ones ranged from primary school to universities.



Furthermore, educational system’s syllabus offered by schools
and universities shows that core skills are not delivered in a way that
students are able to make an excellent use of their knowledge. It is obvious that
most of what they take in will be forgotten right after graduation just due to wrong
training methods forcing them to memorize the subjects. Whilst, practical
training causes their experiences to be settled in their mind and make them
ready to bring their professional skills into effects.



To conclude, regarding to above mentioned reasons, I contend
that the time allocated on practical training courses is not enough for
different range of education.

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It is undeniable that education system plays a pivotal role in developing a country, which should be designed carefully and fundamentally by the curriculum planners and reformers. In this regard, many people argue that there are more of a focus...

It is undeniable that education system plays a pivotal role in developing a country, which should be designed carefully and fundamentally by the curriculum planners and reformers. In this regard, many people argue that there are more of a focus on theoretical aspects compared to practical issues in education levels; likewise, I strongly believe that students should be taught more practical skills than facts, and I have convincing arguments, as will now be discussed.
It is completely true that students at school or even at universities do not learn that much practical skills which are necessary for them when they enter the working world. As a result, we witness that a lot of graduated students are without employment and often migrate to big cities in search of work that is relevant to their qualifications. So, it is clear that if more time were devoted to learning core subjects practically at schools and tertiary level education, there subsequently would be more potential employees who would benefit the society in later future. Hence, in this case, finding a good and relevant job would be easier.
In addition, the lack of practical knowledge which is vital for finding a good career would lead to serious problems in students who have worked hard to obtain a diploma or degree. To clarify, students may lose their self confidence and self esteem mainly because most of employers assert to practical skills than theoretical knowledge. For instance, my niece got a master degree in commerce about 4 years ago and could not find the relevant occupation; consequently, this issue not only made her to lose interest in trade, but also she suffered from depression for two years in a row. So, it necessarily should be taken into account by curriculum developers that teaching units and syllabus need to contain more practical lessons in order to match with the needs of society.
To sum up, I would like to reiterate that practical skills nowadays take a big part in employment, and curriculum designers should strike a balance between theory and practice.

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all parts of the prompt are covered. try to use a wider range of vocabulary specially when describing your personal experience or knowledge. some minor errors
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Education has never been only about delivering theoretical information, as students should also practically be taught how to put their knowledge into practice. Nevertheless, I agree that the time scheduled for educating practical experiences has...

Education has never been only about delivering theoretical information, as students should also practically be taught how to put their knowledge into practice. Nevertheless, I agree that the time scheduled for educating practical experiences has always been too much less than that allocated to theoretical knowledge due to some evidence.

Perhaps the major reason for scheduling too much time for teaching facts would be the huge amount of subjects in both pure science and math as well as arts, which should fundamentally be learnt by students. Obviously, scheduling for this amount of basic knowledge would lead less time to remain for practical subjects such as sport, music and life skills.

Furthermore, the lack of resources and practical methods might make schools and universities to adopt the conventional method of education, which heavily relies on pure facts. For example, most of books and references in almost all courses have been designed on teaching and examining facts rather than practical skills, and they are taught and examined based on the traditional method of education. This means ignoring teaching practical skills, including the ones which are taught in schools’ or universities’ laboratories.

Moreover, a shortage of facilities in education centers alongside a low number of educators trained in teaching practical skills would result in less focusing on practical training. To illustrate, in my country, Iran, there are a huge number of schools and universities which suffer from lack of adequate laboratories and expert teachers alike. These shortages would even involve sports facilities.

Due to the aforementioned reasons, I am convinced that theoretical subjects would inevitably occupy more of the education institutions’ timetable despite their curriculum context, in which practical training involved.

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occasional minor errors. ideas are excellent but not always sufficiently supported. a wider range of vocabulary gives you a higher band score.
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While the world place a premium on educational system to acquire needed skills and knowledge , some people believe that practical skills despite its importance are less considered in all of the educational system . I utterly agree with this...

While the world place a premium on educational system to acquire needed skills and knowledge , some people believe that practical skills despite its importance are less considered in all of the educational system . I utterly agree with this opinion and I think existence of balance between theoretical and practical skills in educational system is essential .
The key reasons behind includes :Firstly , since most of the countries are faced with economic challenges , they fail to invest enough budget in educational system and due to lack of money , practical skills cannot be as priority in all of the levels of education . Without emphasis on practical skills , individuals will dabble in their education ;because only with integration of theoretical and practical skills , learning materials can stay in mind forever.
Secondly, in some countries there are no skilled teachers to teach practical skills ,thus they cannot be successful in their learning exception in theoretical skills .Finally , there is obsolete educational system in some countries , mostly in developing countries when there is a gap between traditional educational system and modern technology ;in old system , creativity of individuals will be stifled .
As can be concluded, to keep abreast of technology, practical skills should have more priority and instilling practical skills as well as theoretical knowledge should be considered to prevent from lagging behind the modern world .

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In all years which we study, we learn many rules and facts, some people believe that it was unnecessary and I think the same, it is really important for everyone in our modern and science-based world to use time more efficient. I will describe my...

In all years which we study, we learn many rules and facts, some people believe that it was unnecessary and I think the same, it is really important for everyone in our modern and science-based world to use time more efficient. I will describe my reasons in this essay.
First of all those rules and facts that we learnt in our educational time, is the base of our knowledge. Although we do not our works with rules and facts. Knowing the fact that every string in a music instrument has a frequency may be do not lead us to be a good player, for example if I don’t know the frequency of all string of my guitar, but still I can play a music. There is a philosopher who said if I can prove that God exist or not, I have no effect on his existence.
Secondly if we read history of science we can see that there is many facts in some era that is not a fact in ours. In our new modern world, science is increasing with a huge speed, TIME magazine publish an article last month and claim that the volume of science which produce in a month will be twice in next month, and the period of this change will be an hour in 2020. So we can imagine that in next decade there is many facts that we spent time and money to learn them and there are no facts anymore.
In conclusion, I describe that the speed of changing our science is raising and in this situation it is better for us to learn skill instead of some facts who will be unreliable in next decades. And also without knowing some facts there is many successful people in every field.

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Schools Curriculum has always been controversial in the eye of people and experts. some people say that educational system is not pragmatic and do not prepare students for their professions, instead, it is just teaching theories. I agree that it...

Schools Curriculum has always been controversial in the eye of people and experts. some people say that educational system is not pragmatic and do not prepare students for their professions, instead, it is just teaching theories. I agree that it would be better to spend more time on empirical lessons.
First of all, we should have a good understanding of education system goals, does this curriculum reach their achievement and prepare pupils for what they desire, then we can discuss whether schools should spend more time on practical skills.
It is said that, unfortunately, because teaching practical lessons are costlier and schools have restricted financial support, so they could not afford purchase facilities required, if they have adequate funds, they would have spent more time and energy to educate more practical lessons.
On the other hand, students required to assimilate lessons and skills that help them to find proper profession after they graduate from university. Therefore, it is better to consider more appropriate education system. A recent survey conducted in 2011 indicated that 76 percent of fresh educators had trouble finding a career, and the vast majority of participants said lack of skill was the problem, since companies do not have time or training program, refuse to employ them.
So as a conclusion, I believe it would be better to reconsider the curriculum in all levels of the education system from elementary school to universities, and spending funds and time on preparing pupils to what communities and corporates expecting would appear to be a logical way.

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The issue of conveying suitable material to pupils and students from the very beginning of the education process till the end has been an important cause of concern for a long while. Either current policy is cumbersome or drastic; it has been long...

The issue of conveying suitable material to pupils and students from the very beginning of the education process till the end has been an important cause of concern for a long while. Either current policy is cumbersome or drastic; it has been long criticized with one group and backed up with another. Both views are coming forth; however, I tend to agree with those who are against ongoing procedure.
The proponents of current system, not necessarily those who have established it, admit that they have mixed both practical lessons and facts in a balanced way. They mention what is on the process, is as wise as possible. For example, they refer to workshop units of lessons as those that could be labeled practical, and in parallel, mention units such as physics and mathematics as the fact parts of education. It is maintained in this view, that even if they have missed a low percentage of each side, still it could be addressed as drastic and proper in all terms of standard appraisals.
Conversely, the school of taught that refute current education system insists, not only does the current policy will not be suitable in long terms, but it also confuses graduated students, especially whilst confronting tough applying restrictions and choosing a suitable career. To elaborate, it has been seen widespread, that this group faces many job professions in the market that they have no idea about it and how to handle it; however, they have been so called “trained” in that major for some university years. It could be seen in terms of high unemployment rate, which mostly stems from improper knowledge and unfamiliarity of university graduates with job professions; eventually, this group of people will have to pass some extra courses, so that they will be able to acquire a job. To add more detail this view admits that, a generation of well-trained experts could not be created, unless the system uses proper mentors and pedagogical experts in parallel with suitable material; other than that, system proves futile.
To sum up and not radically suggesting, I agree with second group, and I believe that a group of studied measurements needs to be taken to tackle this issue. Metaphorically speaking; a revolution in education system seems a must, to get the most of what could be called potential energy of youngsters.

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Given how much ink has been spilled on enough time has not been devoted to learning practical knowledge in all stages of education, it is a wonder that still too much time has been allocated to learning facts. I personally believe that practical...

Given how much ink has been spilled on enough time has not been devoted to learning practical knowledge in all stages of education, it is a wonder that still too much time has been allocated to learning facts. I personally believe that practical experience is just as crucial as theory, which leads to success in your chosen vocation. So, maintaining a balance in the amount of time devoted to theoretical and practical learning is significantly important.

First, when students do not acquire a proper amount of time for learning practical skills, they will not certainly be furnished with the skills they need to climb the career ladder. Because practical experience puts education theory into practice and makes it more relevant. For example, when I graduated from university, I found a job in a company. As I did not learn any practical experiences in the university, I had to enhance my practical knowledge that I required in my job, which was in turns time-consuming and as result, I cannot fulfill my task which I was responsible for.

Second, learning practical skills improve self-esteem among students, so they will be ready for entering in their own business. While some students cannot concentrate on studies and therefore, fail to achieve degree required for getting a job in a company, learning some practical experiences is beneficial. For instance, one of my students was not able to complete his graduation even after several attempts. Then, he established his own business just by having one computer. Now, he is a professional programmer and he knows what is what. Because he had written several programs when he was a student, therefore he has a self-esteem which is the necessity for doing a career.

In conclusion, it is clear that devoting the right amount of time for learning practical experience is a vital factor, and brings advantages to the learners. So, it is expected that educational system will have considered the proper amount of time to such skills. (330 words)

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Education system has always been a contentious topic. When the question arises whether learners should be taught theoretically rather than practically in every grade, society members seem to have divided opinions. I strongly allege that educators...

Education system has always been a contentious topic. When the question arises whether learners should be taught theoretically rather than practically in every grade, society members seem to have divided opinions. I strongly allege that educators should place a premium on practical subjects in order to save individuals’ time.
Acquiring knowledge is said to be the major role of students. One convincing explanation in favor of this opinion is that curricular vitas must pay fully attention to subjects such as Math, Physics, History and Literature so as to provide student whit an overall outlook on general or fundamental information. Besides, when receiving tertiary education, they will take in about their majors in detailed.
It is true that schools and universities have to deliver either core subjects or advanced skills. This can be planned as extracurricular activities which recommended by educators to become both children and university students involved in. One particularly salient example of this is Art subject. Despite assimilating facts about Art History, an array of workshops might be arranged; visiting museum in succession could lead to enhance the competence in the future career.
Accordingly, vocation-oriented systems train versatile workforces. If you were well-educated and skilled, chances for future success in your job might be enhanced. To simplify, a student, who is accepted in Travel and Hospitality program, has to work in relevant workplaces such as Travel Agencies as well as Hotels to obtain experiences in advance. They will be more successful in the face of keen competition.
Admittedly, I urgently believe that practical skills teaching should be highly considered in educational legislations. Allocating at least 60 percent of school time into learning how to be more practical in each lesson may be of value for students.

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the question lucidly asks your opinion about the allocation of time in class not the advantages of practical skills. a very good range of vocabulary with some errors
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The recent decades have seen significant changes In education.Thus, when the question arises whether school have placed premium on theoretical subjects or not, people seem to have divided opinions.I strongly believe that schools give priority to...

The recent decades have seen significant changes In education.Thus, when the question arises whether school have placed premium on theoretical subjects or not, people seem to have divided opinions.I strongly believe that schools give priority to academic lessons.

Educationalists have all been the idea that many aspects of people’s life have undergone massive changes because of the recent development in technology .Therefore to keep abreast of the latest development ,which has revolutionised job market,children should be excel in core subject including mathematic and physicsIt .it is of the essence to allocate much time in students ' time table .Recently,sport and art such as music, dancing ,and painting have cancelled in exchange for more serious lessons.Furthermore, bringing up genius children has received wide currency among modern families.Despite children's reluctant ,mothers insist that the children should participate in specifics activities such as calculating training.

Moreover,it is undeniable fact that people failed to cope with stress in workplaces.Although parents send their children to excellent school,lack of ability to control strain leads to countless difficulties for society.Student,when physical activities were cancelled of their curriculum,could not foster personal and interpersonal skills.In addition,isolation has accelerating growth among children .If school had emphasised on sport and music ,children would not have gotten depression.a cursory examination of deferent education system across the world reinforce this belief that some practical skills play a pivotal role to bring up creative and happy children who can manage sophisticated situation.

In conclusion,modern education system is science base .neglect of physical activities exerts pernicious influence on students in years ahead.I hope that educationalists appreciate the importance of practical skills to breed all kind of human skill .

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While in earlier times, youngsters used to learn most things practically from elders, the last decades have seen a rise in the amount of time which is spent on learning facts which has caused some challenges such as lack of practical skills. I...

While in earlier times, youngsters used to learn most things practically from elders, the last decades have seen a rise in the amount of time which is spent on learning facts which has caused some challenges such as lack of practical skills. I completely agree with this idea that a huge amount of time has spent on learning facts and in this essay some reasons for this phenomenon are to be discussed.

First of all, teachers and students fall into the habit of schools’ traditional education system. To clarify, from teacher’s point of view, learning facts and written exams are generally easier to deal with. Students, therefore, try to achieve satisfying results in this obsolete system which is rooted at assessing theoretical subjects.

Furthermore, it is clear that conducting practical classes requires more budgets. If schools and universities want to organize these classes, they will need more facilities, computers and laboratories. The New York Times reported in March 2012 that in less-affluent countries most state schools suffer from lack of facilities for practical courses and their students usually fall behind with their studies.

Finally, many people claim that practical skills will be achieve in work places. That is to say, today any employee is faced with threats posed by unskilled graduates. Without doubt, learning facts alone do not prepare students for various opportunities that a real work place provides. Students learning theory knowledge not only unable to engage in team working but they also suffer from lack of abilities such as interaction skills.

In conclusion, I believe that in the whole academic years a huge deal of time spent on learning facts. Authorities should make some changes in timetables and add some practical courses. With boosting our education system we could have more subject specialist graduates in near future.

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There is no doubt that students have learned some facts in various stages of education. Thus when the question arise whether learning these facts have been tacking a lot of time of students and they do not have enough time to learn practical...

There is no doubt that students have learned some facts in various stages of education. Thus when the question arise whether learning these facts have been tacking a lot of time of students and they do not have enough time to learn practical skills, people seem to have divided opinions. I strongly believe that learning facts are essential for most students.
A good reason to learning more facts and academic subjects such as mathematics, science and languages are some abilities of students has enhanced during education and these can help them to develop thinking and problem solving skills which will be vital for their future careers and plans. For example, mathematics learns them that there are different ways to overcome a problem.
Another point to consider is that learning practical skills need to spend more time and costs. There are several practical skills that if they just are considered as a lesson in student curriculum, will not be really useful for them. In addition, it is not necessary for everybody to learn these skills. For example, students who want to be a doctor do not need to learn practical skills such as plumbing or mechanical from early stages. It would be a waste of student time and money.
Finally, it is true that universities are duty bound to teach practical skills exactly when students choose their major specifically and need to boost their skills and abilities in order to become expert. Therefore, most of student's energy is channeled in to their major and will be skilled.
In conclusion, I believe that not only learning facts are essential for students from early stages of education until universities but also, practical skills play a vital role for them to get expert.

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While much of the world place a premium on knowledge and skills one can obtain from educational system, it is critiqued by some people that practical courses are given less priority during all educational levels . I am inclined to agree with this...

While much of the world place a premium on knowledge and skills one can obtain from educational system, it is critiqued by some people that practical courses are given less priority during all educational levels . I am inclined to agree with this notion , despite there being a few practical courses offered in either schools or universities.
First and foremost, many educational authorities seem to be oblivious to the essence of practical skills , since lower proportion of budget have been allocated to these courses. Having invested less money ,laboratory and workshops in schools , for example, are not well-equipped , and consequently, pupils struggle to acquire valuable practical skills. It is also evident that internship period are no longer offered , as workplaces are reluctant to adopt inexperienced students to serve as an apprentice. Accordingly, students are set to graduate from university without adequate vocational qualifications, which could have a negative effect on their career prospect.
Furthermore, although some courses in schools and universities are obviously practical by nature , sufficient time and foremost consideration are not devoted to these courses. This attitude make them inapplicable to real job market , perhaps that is why a huge number of graduates are unable to find a decent job , notwithstanding the fact that they have graduated from prestigious universities with flying colors. The high rate of unemployment , therefore, embodies this idea perfectly.
To conclude, even though there might be some practical courses available in educational system, I do believe that due to the negligence of authorities , many of these courses are inapplicable and irrelevant

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Education has been the most significant argued issue these days. Some people believe that practical courses are more beneficial than theoritical ones for children at school or even till university. Another argue that just...

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Education has been the most significant argued issue these days. Some people believe that practical courses are more beneficial than theoritical ones for children at school or even till university. Another argue that just being aware of some lessons will do for education. It is after gtaduation to be fully skilled. It seems that to practice while you are studing can abviously be more instrumental.
It is often said that students have to memorize the concepts of school books. As a concequence having just top level or mark might be regarded. Studing hard have basically been a common way of education that is why it is somthing has to do with spending more time in curriculum of educating. It is a kind of constructive criticism by teachers to some students who are not studios. For instance , when you read extermly hard like a bookworm, it would be easy to take an exam simply therefor you will ace it. Gradually, it would be a kind of acceptable habit to learn. Undoubtedly, the aim of studing is fully occupied in lessons and school's book.
However, memorizing and reading can not be enjoyable for children. It does not make them enthusistic to learn. After a while school and education would be govern by tiredness and a sort of frightening. It is bound to question the aim of education. Instead of that studing practically would be favorable way to encourage pupils. In addition not only studing can not be boring for them but also they will graduate fully prepared to enter workplace properly.
All in all, education have alwayse been respecting by people most of the time.while some school subject is theoretical qualification , the advantages of practical knowledge outweigh the disadvantages.

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you have misunderstood the question. the aspect of time is important not the pros and cons of both methods.
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The recent decades have faced a significant decrease in the quality of educational system.thus when the question arises wether the educational scheme is dedicated more time to theories than practical skills or not . this is a matter of...

The recent decades have faced a significant decrease in the quality of educational system.thus when the question arises wether the educational scheme is dedicated more time to theories than practical skills or not . this is a matter of opinions.i don't hesitate to go along with this idea and believe that skills should considered equally in schools curriculum.
First of all,theoretical lessons which have thought to students are said to be significantly different from their empirical one.it means that students just dabbled in theories which not only doesnt make any perception of concepts but also dont learn how they can utilize these courses. Take a laboratory test as an example,it is less likely that pupils despite enough aquired knowledge know how to apply them into work because they aren't trained for practical lessons.
Secondly, when it comes to education aims studing is supposed to be nothing less than paving the pupils way to foster their skills for career prospect while this pedagogic method which concentrate on basic science took many times to qualify students as experienced staffs in labor market. Thats why after graduating individuals fail to meet the employers need.
Moreover, training system should consider all students that means they must take an approach to Improve aptitudes of all them with various interests because too much theoretical aspect dosent hold for everyone.a case in point is pupils with artistic turn of mind who seek to specialized in arts or music.lets face that they dont require to take in an array of irrelevant theoretical courses which waste their precious time that could consider as an opportunity for exceling their tallents.
To conclude, i believe that practical skills should be regarded as same as facts to assist individuals to lead a balanced life.

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To begin with i am totally agree with this issue.Its crystal clear that students in our country dont have facilities to do practical works and increas their skills.Everybody knows that oral informations arent enough.Because if someone want to...

To begin with i am totally agree with this issue.Its crystal clear that students in our country dont have facilities to do practical works and increas their skills.Everybody knows that oral informations arent enough.Because if someone want to acheive a good occupation should learn applied skills as well as facts.I mean they should reinforce their abilities Because if they dont do this they should accept that maybe they will face with varied problems.for example suppose that you studied in computer i mean you were graduated in computer and your oral information are more than your practical skill in spite of this reality if you go to a massive and big company to get a brilliant occupation you are aware that maybe they will not hire you but if you be greek in both i mean practical and fact i can asure you that they will accept you undoubtly because you have enough knowledge.unfortunetly in Iran most of the students are hopeless and worried about their final occupation because from primary school until they graduate they just study awkward lessons and memorize them.You know that this is very boring and monotonous.In conclusion you should bend over back wards to fullfill your goal and learn practical things by your heart.In conclusion i understand that we just lose our youth for learning lessons without any practical thing.and we have a repetitive life without any hobby and we should try by ourselves to reach a brilliant occupation.

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Some people would argue that nowadays theoretical studying is more common than having some experiences in specific vocation during all section ranging from primary school to tertiary education. This essay agrees with this idea to some extent. It...

Some people would argue that nowadays theoretical studying is more common than having some experiences in specific vocation during all section ranging from primary school to tertiary education. This essay agrees with this idea to some extent. It will discuss that both perspectives are equally important. It will explain that practical skill is considerable, also it will demonstrate that learning facts is a strong base that someone needs to know about their future practice.
On the one hand, if someone succeeds to get a job as an unskilled person, it is more likely that he will not be useful in that vocation at least for a long time, and maybe they fail to hold their job. Consequently, being a competent jobholder is a contributing factor to get a good job in the future. For a salient example, In Iran in 2016, 58 percent of occupations need experience, and these statistics have increased in the recent year. As it previously mentioned, to be an expert in some jobs is so crucial for career seeker.
On the other hand, from my point of view, in the first stage, it is clear that primary information in a subject plays a vital part to perceive that field. It means that schools and colleges have to place a premium on learning some facts as well as, teaching practical skills. For instance, as shown in one societal magazine published in 2017, there is approximately 32% job seeker in Paris that they did not find convenient vocation because of not having essential academic knowledge about those duties. So having basic know-how can improve their job status.
By way of conclusion, fostering in facts is very important, while having job experiences are also absolutely pivotal.

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It is indisputable fact that educating juveniles either at schools or universities has always played a significant backbone role in every society. While some individuals are convinced that these educations should be more focused on practical...

It is indisputable fact that educating juveniles either at schools or universities has always played a significant backbone role in every society. While some individuals are convinced that these educations should be more focused on practical aspects rather than theoretical ones, I would contend that spending time on learning facts and theoretical materials are likely to be feasible and highly beneficial for students' career prospect.

First of all, theory learning promotes cognitive abilities of students, attempting to assimilate their main knowledge about various facts. If spending more time of real facts theoretically, students ,specially the researchers at tertiary levels, would have more analytical mind when encounter to some issues at real practical world, since their knowledge is broaden in basis appropriately. In this case, institutes tend to educating pupils to raise their knowledge and academic performance, Versus practical experience which presumably can be acquire in first year at workplace.
In another perspective, some lessons have a profound impact on the youngsters adversely and might have a irreparable implications. In other words, some practical skills are not conceivable to achieved for an underage person or not feasible in a small campus or school's yard. To illustrate the point, in an examination of composing to chemical material which might be resulted in exploration or exhaustion of a poisonous smell, its detrimental side effects are inevitable, such as asthma , respiratory ailments, to mention but a few. That is why too much time mostly spend on various facts without any examination.

In conclusion, theoretical learning can be highly regarded, specially when the practical skills are bound to pose the potential threats to students.

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talk about the amount of time spent on learning facts compared with learning skills, not the benefits of learning facts.
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Nobody rejects this reality that in each course knowing of practical skills are important even sometimes it is important than theorical skills. This can be seen that both skills are crucial and they are complete together. It is agreed that at all...

Nobody rejects this reality that in each course knowing of practical skills are important even sometimes it is important than theorical skills. This can be seen that both skills are crucial and they are complete together. It is agreed that at all levels of education, enormous amount of time is spent on teaching theories.This will be proven by analyzing that having university education is essential for academic job while having skills and experience are more useful in bussiness

In the first place, it is considered that having university educations puts people one step ahead of others who do not and this can persuade them for going to university.For example, the competition to get in to universities and the increasing number of graduates show how significant this matter for people.So, people tend to go to university for having better future in the security of work and having a paid well.
In the second place, having work experience is crucial for getting a good job which can help them for their promotion.For instance, in relation to some courses such as computer it is necessary a webmaster who is going works in this field have enough skills which can put one ahead whenever applying for a position.Thus, all of employer consider to have a excellent curriculum vitae which shows person's experiences in that field as sometimes the employer ignore distinguished scores in person's academic degree.
Following the analyzing of having high level education or skills, it is clear that can not strongly say which one is more important because it deponds on the type of work.However, people should make sure they attain the necessary skills or degree before applying a job in order to be sure of their success..

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The process of gaining skills during education time from learning facts or doing some workshop has been a highlight matter for many years. While some people believed the majority of students' time spent on knowing theory, rather than proper time...

The process of gaining skills during education time from learning facts or doing some workshop has been a highlight matter for many years. While some people believed the majority of students' time spent on knowing theory, rather than proper time on doing practical skills, I am totally agree with this assertion that the educational system is exaggerating on learning facts.
On the one hand, there is a cascade of books with the variety of subjects which must be teaching during school and universities. This process takes the majority of pupils’ time, and undoubtedly this expired method keeps students busy enough to read the whole contents. Accordingly, there is the torrent of exams and quizzes which need an ability to know the theory and the details. For instance, the chemistry course- especially the Mendeleev table –needed at least a comprehensive semester to be understood.
On the other hand, as a matter of fact, there are not proper times spending on practical skills. For instance, using the laboratory in my domestic education system is only a half a day in a month, this period is at least ten times less than students have been spent on learning the facts. Moreover, the power of practical skills is consequently underestimating, due to extinct thought which came from almost eight decades before. For instance, I use to remember my entire outdoor course was restricted to a week in the spring.
In conclusion, I personally think too many times are spending on details and fact during education, and not enough for practical skill.

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When it comes how much attention should be devoted on practical skills a huge numbers of debates arise among heavy weighting of individuals. While often debated, it is my conviction that both abilities are of paramount important and should be...

When it comes how much attention should be devoted on practical skills a huge numbers of debates arise among heavy weighting of individuals. While often debated, it is my conviction that both abilities are of paramount important and should be noticed equally. Both sides of argument will be discussed before a reasoned conclusion declared.
An opposing point of view is that instilling theories are substantially significant in today’s world. Academics advocate that practical classes should be canceled in exchange for more basic subjects in both schools and universities. They assert that practical skills can be learned easily after ones start jobs. This is more effective since social members by shadowing experienced members of staff can achieve practical experiences; thereby authorities should focus on teaching basic science instead of spending time on learning non-theoretical abilities.
On the other hand, in order to survive in competitive and daunting world students are required to possess a collection of knowledge ranging from theories to practical ones. One of the side effects of lack of practical experiences is individuals cannot find suitable jobs in labor market. Having known about the facts in a subject does not obviate the need of how to apply them in real worlds. In addition, though, even more importantly employers tend to recruit of those who are versatile, since knowing theories without using it is worthless.
In conclusion, although many underscore the important of learning basic sciences and hold that practical skills are secondary importance, I feel both areas should be educated hand in hand.

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you should have talked about the amount of time spent on learning facts and skills, not the pros and cons.
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In our countries, teachers in schools and universities spend most of the time teaching the basic sciences and facts and do not spend enough time on practical skills. Some people believe that training students with this method is not well enough....

In our countries, teachers in schools and universities spend most of the time teaching the basic sciences and facts and do not spend enough time on practical skills. Some people believe that training students with this method is not well enough. I completely agree with this idea and think educational institutions should spend a considerable time on practical skills.

There are several reasons that schools or universities do not have a specific plan to teach practical skills. First of all, there is a lack of relationship between educational institutions and employers. In fact, while all the companies and organizations are interested to hire a high skilled worker, students are not prepared well in those skills. For example, most of students are knowledgeable in mathematics but they are not taught about accounting. All of us know that an employer is looking for an accountant, not a mathematician. In addition, all the schools and universities are suffering by an old education system that has not accepted yet to put some skill courses in the timetable. Furthermore, educational managers and planners are not aware enough about practical skills’ profits. They might think still basic sciences have more benefits for students.

On the other hand, it is vitally important to know what the main goal of education is. In my opinion, the most important goal is preparing people for their future role in society that could be summarized with these two categories. At first, having an appropriate occupation and then, getting married. To achieve both of these goals, people need relevant skills. I believe that the best time for learning these skills is while people are teenager when they mind is completely ready to obtain necessary knowledge and skills. With making some changes in courses and timetables, schools’ authorities are able to provide the most efficient and creative lessons for students. I am sure with this view we can expect to gain more benefit for students, teachers and our education system.

In conclusion, I think time spending on practical skills in schools and universities is not enough at all and we can imagine an improvement with making some changes in timetables and add some skill courses. With this change, we can expect to get more achievements in close future.

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a good response with logical points. most sentences are error free. to achieve 7 or above, you need a wider range of vocabulary and collocations
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Nowadays, the competitions among people who demand jobs are more than every time resulting only people having more experience as well as skills can obtain the jobs. From my point of view, although the theoretical education is vital, it can not be...

Nowadays, the competitions among people who demand jobs are more than every time resulting only people having more experience as well as skills can obtain the jobs. From my point of view, although the theoretical education is vital, it can not be adequate any more for achieving the best results and getting the jobs.
In all level of education especially universities, teachers focus on teaching the facts more than developing the student’s skills. In this situation, students can not be flourishing to get an appropriate job due to lack of enough techniques. In other words, students can not meet the job requirements because they do not have sufficient practical training leading that a lot of students are graduated annually whereas a few of them can find the job.
In addition, when students are trained only for the facts without any experimental practice, they are likely to either forget them easily or suffer from lack of enough deduction of concepts. Because they are included in biggest problems with which education system struggle, some of well-known universities intend to solve them. For instance, Waterloo University, located in Waterloo/Canada, claims that above 98% of students studying engineering triumph to get jobs immediately after graduation. They also mention the main reason for it which is the fact that it is mandatory that every student works at least 10 hours per week in specific companies as trainee. It not only develops student’s skills but also help them to understand the theoretical facts easier.
In conclusion, from my perspective, education system should change the methods by reduction of teaching of concepts and increase of empirical training resulting in obtaining the best accomplishment.

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you should have talked about the amount of time spent on learning facts and skills, not the pros and cons. a variety of sentence forms and vocabulary
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Within last couple of decades' educational schemes have been to some extent taking strides in the path which allures the theoretical aspects of them. The abovementioned is the notion which has been proposed and deemed as emphasis on theories...

Within last couple of decades' educational schemes have been to some extent taking strides in the path which allures the theoretical aspects of them. The abovementioned is the notion which has been proposed and deemed as emphasis on theories rather than that of practical skills and expertise. I will try to state my mindset about this rather controversial issue in the following statements.
Firstly, let us reveal the scrutiny's about school's curriculum and their timetable. with the precise examination of the diverse curriculums it is conceivable that Iranian educational centers have not engaged in planning schemes which can lead to enhancement in practical skills of pupils. Moreover, the wrong culture that nurtures the idea of emphasizing in theoretical aspects of educational scheme has become highly ubiquitous among pupil's families which has caused and resulted in deterioration in the process of pupil's progression.
Secondly, given the excessive emphatic on theories, society's future managers and corporate leaders will lack the practical expertise to exploit in multiple and diverse managerial issues. Which, in turn, might have devastating impact on upcoming generations. Take a newly established engineering firm which is being managed by some elite engineers which are graduates of top rated and highly accredited universities, without the sufficient practical expertise, although highly proficient in engineering most sophisticated theoretical issues, I am afraid this firm is bound to end up with failure due to inadequate practical skills and unfamiliarity with managerial aspects.
To conclude, I utterly agree with the belief that asserts educational curriculum in all levels have put unreasonably higher emphasis on theoretical aspects of education, leading to a dim future in terms of implementation of various upcoming projects.

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key points are covered with logical arguments. some sentences are difficult to follow and lack focus. a sufficient range of vocabulary
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Some people assert that the school curriculum has nothing to do with work skills and spending too much time on pure abstract concepts will be a waste of time. I completely agree with this idea that education especially university should be linked...

Some people assert that the school curriculum has nothing to do with work skills and spending too much time on pure abstract concepts will be a waste of time. I completely agree with this idea that education especially university should be linked with real life.

Firstly, it is supposed that pedagogical approaches need to be based on practical strategies. in other words, lessons being taught in schools and universities not only should focus on the feasible syllabus but also concentrate on students' communicative and cognitive cornerstone. Along with this, pedagogical experts suggest that due to fueling unemployment rate, education is tightly woven into economics and job market. Even though a large percentage of students in Iran, for example, enjoy academic achievements, most of them are in practice unemployed as well as this number is rapidly soaring day in and day out. the life of students has undergone massive changes as a result of this issue.

Secondly, due to the lack of employment for young adults; their life may be exposed to jeopardy. When students are not able to succeed in real life they feel a failure and social isolation. Universities and schools, in fact, are required to be designed in such a way that stimulates motivation and self-confidence. Moreover, the more pedagogical content knowledge is tied to the job market and work skills, the fewer students fall down vacuous and empty life. Therefore, they are learned to utilize mere concepts so as to use academic information along with their interest and creativity.

In conclusion, I can understand why some society members affirm that pedagogical uneffective system can destroy the golden opportunities of students in order to real life. According to this idea, I also allege that education plays a crucial role in improving the youth's employment situation and meet the demand of them.

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the question asks about the amount of time spent on learning facts compared with practical skills, not which one is better! a good range of vocabulary
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It has been argued that theoretical lessons are taught more than empirical ones, whether in schools or universities. I completely agree that the amount of time that students consume on learning practical studies is less than that for facts, and...

It has been argued that theoretical lessons are taught more than empirical ones, whether in schools or universities. I completely agree that the amount of time that students consume on learning practical studies is less than that for facts, and it is not ample.
Whether you are a school student or university, you must learn too many theoretical lessons, which is a kind of wasting of time. Firstly, most of students memorize facts, so that they may forget all of them as soon as they take their exams. Secondly, all the theories and hypotheses can be found in books, as a result it is not necessary to remember them all the time. Mathematical theories, for instance, are available in math books, and whoever need them can find them easily, so endeavoring to memorizing them is irrational and kind of boring. last but not least, theoretical teachings are not suitable for students’ future career. When people go for an interview, they are never being asked to prove a hypothesis.
Personally, I reckon that much more empirical studies must be put in students’ curriculum in all stages of education. It is essential that students learn the use of science for their future occupation, especially when they are majoring in engineering fields such as Electrical engineering. If pupils know how work with software that are relevant to their major, it will be more probable that they have better job opportunities in future. Furthermore, in science that are depend on laboratory tests, experiment may lead to enhancing science by new discoveries. Finally, statistics show that the results that are achieved by experiencing is more likely to stick in people’s mind. I can remember many of experiments that we had in high school step by step clearly.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that students waste the best times of their studying on learning theories which are not as important as empirical studies.

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main aspects of the prompt have been considered but ideas lack development. limited range of words
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This issue that education system emphasizes on teaching theoretical facts more than practical skills has become controversial. This essay completely agrees that in all levels of education, the main focus is focus is on teaching knowledge than...

This issue that education system emphasizes on teaching theoretical facts more than practical skills has become controversial. This essay completely agrees that in all levels of education, the main focus is focus is on teaching knowledge than acquiring skills.
It is evident that pupils attend classes more than workshops and laboratories. In addition, curriculum requires students to spend enormous amount of time on not only learning theoretical courses but also giving lectures. Therefore, students learn their lessons by rote and do not acquire practical skills. Consider, for example, computer engineering students, although they spend a great deal of time on learning computer programming languages from their classes as well as course textbooks, they do not develop their computer programming skills by writing program codes practically.
Low competency of job seekers is another evidence showing over-emphasis on teaching facts compares to practical skills. Unfortunately, majority populations of graduates do not have developed their skills in tandem with their knowledge in order to secure a job. They are usually unemployable due to lack of practical experiences. For instance, as a manager of marketing company, I have found just one qualified person among twenty potential employees to know how to implement the cutting-edged methods of marketing in practice.
On the whole, I believe that at all levels of education teaching theoretically are emphasized more than developing skills. It is wise to expect that education authorities and society members collaborate to address this issue.

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be careful about minor errors. main features are discussed. try to use a wider range of vocabulary
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Nowadays, people have different views about academic environments such as universities and schools. Some of them believe that learning environments focuse on teaching facts more than practical skills. I completely agree with this assertion.
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Nowadays, people have different views about academic environments such as universities and schools. Some of them believe that learning environments focuse on teaching facts more than practical skills. I completely agree with this assertion.
In support of my point of view, lack of learning functional skills is associated with future job position. we can obviously see consequenses of this trend in our society every day. University graduates who are looking for their dream and prestigious job find a workplace very different from university. they also are required to have both vocational qualifications and practical skills. In addition, students who attend academic places can not improve their abilities thanks to a few existing job-oriented courses in educational curriculum. For instance, a biomedical engineers who are expected to be able to maintain and fix bioinstruments are unfortunately unfamiliar with them due to lack of focusing on real practical skill at university.
On the other hand, during schooling, as we can see, the number of scientific trips and experimental courses which expose children to real examples of things is significantly low. As a result, they would not be able to improve their personal skills which train them helpful implications. Moreover, Although some schools are interested in developing practical courses, they are not receive any financial supports in order to maintain suitable facilities. So it has become a general request to invest in improving laboratories, workshops and school buildings.
To sum up, there can be no doubt that schools and universities spend too much time trying to focus on facts, rather than teach practical skills and paying more attention to this process could help students to prepare themselves for their own future.

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Main aspects are covered. Ideas are organized, but paragraphing and punctuation need attention. Some parts need more clarification like “helpful implications".
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Utilizing the academic knowledge in one’s career has been one of thought provoking concerns in many countries. Having said that school or university is a place to learn the science facts. However, others believe in pragmatic learning. I...

Utilizing the academic knowledge in one’s career has been one of thought provoking concerns in many countries. Having said that school or university is a place to learn the science facts. However, others believe in pragmatic learning. I authoritatively agree with practical education. This essay will exhaust the related reasons.
Majority of the students are not able to use their acquired knowledge in personal life. In spite of the fact that students are comprehensively loaded with various information related to science and technology disciplines, only an insignificant portion of this information can be practically utilized. For instance, a typical Electronic engineer is able to neither fix an electronic device nor replace a faulty lamp in his house. In other words, this person could have applied his academic knowledge in his personal life, if he had passed complementary practical courses in either school or university. Commonplace daily problems, for which the academic knowledge cannot be used, is an appropriate demonstration of inadequate focus on practical training.
It is somehow difficult for graduates to find a proper job. Although the output of universities is considerable, a few of them have succeeded to find a suitable job. However, those who have attended practical trainings during school or afterwards, can easily join the market. For example, a recent research in Harvard University shows that in compare to an engineer, a technician is able to not only find a job easier but also earn a better money, while the technician has passed less conceptual and basic courses. Difficulty in finding a job and debility in starting a career are the consequences of pure conceptual training during school time.
To conclude, I definitely believe that both inattention to practical dexterity and extravagant focus on speculative knowledge, have resulted in a generation for whom it is neither easy to find a job nor to handle personal issues.

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In the first paragraph you declared your agreement with practical education, while the topic asks whether learning facts occupies more time or practical skills. An excellent range of vocabulary with some less common words
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The competence in doing assignments in the future profession could be separate from having the relevant factual knowledge about that particular job. Accordingly, some individuals present an argument that excessive time has been devoted in the...

The competence in doing assignments in the future profession could be separate from having the relevant factual knowledge about that particular job. Accordingly, some individuals present an argument that excessive time has been devoted in the educational curriculum to theoretical courses in all levels of education, while the acquisition of practical skills has been neglected. I personally agree with this statement and the following paragraphs will debate that.

The education programs, especially in countries encountering financial crisis, more focus on academic courses instead of vocational ones, since these countries and their governments usually do not have enough budget to allocate to purchase the required facilities and equipment for practical lessons, such as workshops or laboratory studies. Therefore, their priority is to organize elementary classes without any extra facilities. As a result, students under such circumstances, in the best status, just learn plenty of scientific facts and relations.

Besides, when pupils are not trained for real situation of work, they would not have powerful performance in their future occupations; because creating the pragmatic approaches to problems in someone’s attitude not only needs training, but also needs to be practiced over many years to become permanent ability. Thus these types of programs ought to be provided in the curriculum from the commencement of education. On the other hand, studying vast numbers of theoretical courses which occupy our studies could be temporary knowledge consigned to oblivion.

In conclusion, as a group of people had claimed, I would like to say that there is an apparent lack of sufficient practical courses in the educational training in comparison with theoretical ones.

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Key points are addressed. Some parts need more development. ideas are generally arranged with some problems in punctuation and grammar
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It is obvious that fostering practical skills should be considered as a crucial part of curriculum in all levels of education. Despite invaluable attempts of some countries in propagating of new education system in which practical skills can gain...

It is obvious that fostering practical skills should be considered as a crucial part of curriculum in all levels of education. Despite invaluable attempts of some countries in propagating of new education system in which practical skills can gain remarkable attention, I would contend that a huge amount of time have spent on learning facts in schools and universities these days. There are three principal reasons for this phenomenon which are intended to be discussed in this essay.
First of all, it seems the most compelling reason is traditional assessment system of schools and universities. Achieving satisfying results in this traditional system, students are inevitably inclined to put much more attention on learning facts. This is probably because of the nature of this obsolete system which is rooted at assessing theoretical subjects.
Furthermore, a vast majority of students and even teachers claim that learning facts is an issue on which should be concentrated during study. In other words, practical skills, if students keep their minds on facts and theoretical courses, will be achieved on mid-career trainings; this belief, as a result, can make students reluctant to allocate sufficient amount of time on practical skills in their schools or universities.
Finally, it is an indisputable fact that learning practical abilities requires a wide range of facilities. Without computers, software, and laboratories, for example, it appears almost impossible to make progress in learning practical courses. Unfortunately, most schools and universities particularly in less-affluent countries suffer from lack or shortage of such facilities which lead people to concentrate on facts.
In conclusion, I once again reaffirm my position that owing to out-of-date assessment system, inaccurate belief regarding the importance of learning facts as well as shortage of useful facilities, too much time and energy has allocated to facts rather than practical skills.

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Ideas are logical and to the point. there are minor errors not letting this essay achieve band 7 or above. Some sentences clearly show your potential for a higher band score.
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