IELTS Cambridge 11 - Test1 - Academic Writing - Task2

Governments should spend money on railways rather than roads.
To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
You should write at least 250 words.

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استاد حامد محمدحسینی

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Roads and rail services are of the essence to keep a country moving, enabling passengers and freights to be carried safely and efficiently. Thus, when the question arises whether a government should allocate more budget to railways or roads, people seem to have divided opinions. I strongly believe that a government should give priority to railway network.

First of all, railway is said to be the safest form of transport. Despite occasional derailments, breakdowns and crashes, railways have maintained their commanding lead as the safest mode of transport for passengers and freight alike. The figures show that the fatality risk for car occupants is 75 times higher than for rail passengers. When it comes to injury risk, the gap between the transport modes is even bigger; the risk of injury on a car journey is 100 times higher than on a train.

In addition, railways are more environmentally-friendly than the motor vehicles. This is because public transit is less energy and carbon-intensive than automobiles. Even a cursory examination of the amount of energy used to move one passenger per mile reinforces this belief.  Therefore, a modal shift away from private vehicles toward rail can potentially reduce emissions and improve air quality.

Finally, as the population of the world is increasing, the country’s high-density roads are facing severe capacity constraints, thereby propelling governments to lower their budget on roads and invest more money in a faster and dependable transportation system. This investment is bound to be a solution to eliminate the need for capacity enhancement, upgradation, and creation of new passenger and freight corridors.

In conclusion, I believe that the government should invest more in railways than the roads in order to develop eco-friendly, safe and efficient transport infrastructure, leading to the accelerated growth of the country itself.  (297 words)

شرکت‌کننده محترم،
تا ساعت 17 روز پنجشنبه 1396/9/16 فرصت دارید، برای این موضوع رایتینگ‌های خود را نوشته و به صورت کامنت، در زیر پست، ارسال نمایید. تمامی رایتینگ‌ها توسط ممتحنین بیان برتر ارزیابی شده و به آنها نمره داده خواهد شد.

 

رایتینگ‌های ارسالی برتر شما، با رنگ آبی هایلایت شده‌اند

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While governments used to spend a large part of their budget on the railway, the recent decades have seen a significant increase in using cars rather than train. Therefore, it seems that governments should concentrate more on developing roads.
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While governments used to spend a large part of their budget on the railway, the recent decades have seen a significant increase in using cars rather than train. Therefore, it seems that governments should concentrate more on developing roads.
The locomotive had been invented before the automobile, which was the revelation in shipping. In 1870 all the world's governments were trying to develop railroad internationally. The long, noisy trains which using coils were more popular than the animal for transportation, particularly in the long way trip. Despite expensive budget for building and maintenance it had become the most profitable way until government try to substitute it by cheeper and easiest way. Since the longevity of railroad is less than the road it leads to reduced the safety of rails. There have been many disasters, accidents by train which cause thousands of people passed away over the last century.
Roads are an effective means of transportation, over the last decades because it has advantages over rails so it creates a condition for spending more money on road by governments. First of all most of the people has their own car and they prefer to using car, additionally sending goods by roads are the most easiest and economical one.
In conclusion, governments are set to spend more money on roads rather than railways. I believe using train have become obsolete and cutting- edge technology in bulging of high ways would be more valuable.

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سلام رایتینگ من هنوز تصحیح نشده و نمره و نظری زیرش ندادین
میشه لطفا رایتینگ من رو هم تصحیح کنین

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عذرخواهی ما را بپذیرید. بین رایتینگ ها جا مانده بود. تصحیح شد

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ممنون از استاد محمد حسینی عزیز وتشکر ویژه از تیم با ارزش ایلتس بیان برتر.
موفق باشید

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By and large, in the current modern state of affairs we observe, in which a countless number of people are under the impression that a wide range of new method of transportation are great necessity for a developed nation, one wouldn’t be off the...

By and large, in the current modern state of affairs we observe, in which a countless number of people are under the impression that a wide range of new method of transportation are great necessity for a developed nation, one wouldn’t be off the point to presume that railroad transportation could play an indispensable role to that end. However, whether such kind of public transport should be as significant as merely road transport or not has been a rather controversial among many in this regard. I personally to a great extend concur with this idea.in what follows, behind rationale this thesis will be elaborated upon and exemplify so as to corroborate my Standpoint.

One exquisite reason occurring to me at first is that taking a probability point of view, one can see that railroad transportation enable people to accelerate their daily works. Due to this importance, one of the key factors would be will organize their tasks. This means that social skills not only does it make students versatile, but also help them to match needs of a fast-changing and competitively society. In order to illustrate, a rather recent yet noteworthy and intelligible social study, conducted by a number of prominent and highly respected faculty members, at the department of social science of Florida international university can be pointed out. The researchers found out more than 80% of people using different kinds of transportation can manage their time easily. Consequently, this provides further legitimacy and support for the idea that developing railroad transportation have an efficacious effect on societies’ efficiency.

To make a long story short, taking all aforementioned ideas a wide variety of opinions into consideration, one can safely assume that it is slightly irrational to put forward that one aspect is more valuable than the other even though given that they are different to some extent. Hence, I personally concur with the statement due to the fact that sport and railroad transportation is as important as classes and should receive equal financial support.

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با سلام میشه جواب تصحیح رایتینگها به فارسی داده بشه. ممنونم از مجموعه بیان برتر

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با سلام من متوجه نشدم واقعا مهلت تا کی هست داخل کانال دو تاریخ زده شده که تا 19 اذر مهلت ارسال رایتینگ هست.

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Some people believe city planners and governments should invest in railways rather than roads ,while ones had rather roads than railways. Differently, I would say, I totally disagree with putting money just into one of these.
one argument in...

Some people believe city planners and governments should invest in railways rather than roads ,while ones had rather roads than railways. Differently, I would say, I totally disagree with putting money just into one of these.
one argument in favour of investing in both railways and roads is that they are an important source of revenue for local governments. Therefore, if one of them omitted by the governments ,It contributes to irreparable damage to the economic. Also, there are some deprived areas , which people do not have unlimited access to the railways. So ,governments are responsible for providing commuters with the means of transport.
the other point to be taken into account is how other means may matter than these ones. From a social standpoint, If governments focus on just on one of these means of transport , they are unable to control traffic especially when people commute , public transportation can be overcrowded. Similarity, the percentage of population is on the rise in urban areas and people need to use different ways which are reliable and frequent. Also, transport officials must ensure that frequent and reliable transportation is available for each citizen. so it does not occur by one mode of transport.
In hence, I believe these factors need to be taken into consideration because people are restricted by the schedule nowadays. Besides, It takes ages to reach their destinations on time. Thus, i find it difficult to commute just by one of those means of transport at rush hours. Obviously, these forms of transport play a vital role in both modern and local societies with a growing number of travelers.

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your errors do not reduce communication . add precision to your sentences and do not put an end to your ideas before developing them.
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ممنونم از این همه تلاش و محبتتون،،،سلااامت باشید

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ممنون عالي بود

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واقعا عالیه، ممنون از اینکه انقدر عالی ، کامل و به بهترین شکل ممکن، اطلاعات رو تو هر زمینه ارائه و انتقال میدید. امیدوارم این نوع رفع اشکال ادامه داشته باشه چون من تازه شروع کردم به خوندن برا آیلتس و هنوز به قسمت رایتینگ نرسیدم.
پایدار باشید?????

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با تشکر از رایتینگ بسیار عالیتون
یک سوالی داشتم شما همیشه در برنامه های آموزشیتون گفتید که بهتره که در مقدمه نظر مستقیم داده نشه و همچنین از i استفاده نشه اگر قرار بر گفتن نظر هم باشه بطور مستقیم مجهول صحبت شه اما در اینجا اینطور نوشته نشده.
کدوم...

با تشکر از رایتینگ بسیار عالیتون
یک سوالی داشتم شما همیشه در برنامه های آموزشیتون گفتید که بهتره که در مقدمه نظر مستقیم داده نشه و همچنین از i استفاده نشه اگر قرار بر گفتن نظر هم باشه بطور مستقیم مجهول صحبت شه اما در اینجا اینطور نوشته نشده.
کدوم روش رو ما الگو قرار بدیم در نهایت؟

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با سلام
متاسفانه رایتینگ بنده در بین رایتینگ ها قرار دارد ولی هیچ نمره و یا دیدگاهی در ذیل ان ذکر نشده

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انجام شد

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این متن را فارسی می نویسم تا بتونم احساسات قلبی را راحت تر بیان کنم. از ایده جالب شما سپاسگزارم. این شیوه ارائه اطلاعات را به طور تخصصی و رایگان اولین بار است می بینم و از تلاشی که برای به انجام رساندن نیت و هدفی که دارید، قدردانی می کنم.
انرژی...

این متن را فارسی می نویسم تا بتونم احساسات قلبی را راحت تر بیان کنم. از ایده جالب شما سپاسگزارم. این شیوه ارائه اطلاعات را به طور تخصصی و رایگان اولین بار است می بینم و از تلاشی که برای به انجام رساندن نیت و هدفی که دارید، قدردانی می کنم.
انرژی مضاعفی را به ما داوطلبان آزمون آیلتس برای رسیدن به نمره 7 دادید.
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سپاس از لطفی که به مجموعه ما دارید

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Railways has had a great role in developing of modern societies after industrial revolution during past 200 years. Despite of opposition against state’s investment on such infrastructures from far right conservative politicians, I believe...

Railways has had a great role in developing of modern societies after industrial revolution during past 200 years. Despite of opposition against state’s investment on such infrastructures from far right conservative politicians, I believe establishment must play an essential role in this issue.
Nowadays due to consequences of recent depression on economic climate some hard liner politicians strongly believe in to limitation of state expense on public structures like railway to save more money .they say mfunnds must be allocated in other fields such as car manufacturers to support industry by making more cars to boost up markets and creating more jobs. By the same point of view some believe that constructing more highways has the similar effect on economy .
But , I try to support the idea that deals with benefits of developing railways . firstly, this provides the apportunity of safe and affordable mobilization between two points for all social class members . also state’s investment on railway supports the commercial opportunities in an effective and low cost transport of commodities all over the country . beside , due to costly and massive facilities needed for railway system construction state investment heavy demanded for this issue.
In conclusion , railway considered as as one of main factors of development in countries. This creates so many chances for personal and commercial transport as well. And as a result I believe to support and continue on railway investment.

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do not use long sentences that aimlessly add to your word count. subject and verb agreement errors can be
found.progression is good with a little tendency to go off topic
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Currently, some governments have decided to make more investments on railways. In my opinion, it is crucial to spent money to develop trains, so I agree almost entirely with given statement.

Obviously, can make both the indoor and outdoor...

Currently, some governments have decided to make more investments on railways. In my opinion, it is crucial to spent money to develop trains, so I agree almost entirely with given statement.

Obviously, can make both the indoor and outdoor journeys faster, and people can travel far distances while spend fewer time. Regard to growing needs to job, it will be possible to get an occupation metropolitans while living in suburb or other cities, if a high-speed train is provided to transfer workers to their office. More importantly, it decrease traffic congestion and also reduce stress level which come from that.

On the other hand, although , it is important to have roads in some parts of country, like rural area, roads are responsible for a huge load of problems. It is said that car accident is one of the mail reasons of death on many countries. Moreover, it has effects to increase the rate of disabled people. Air pollution, furthermore, is another result of driving in roads. Due to using fossil fuels, co2 emits to atmosphere, and it widen the hole of ozone layer. In addition, road construction make deforestation, therefore it destroys both leafy space and animals’ habitat. These activities can speed up the climate change, which results in disasters like drought, earthquake and erosion.

To conclude, while train and undergrounds can facilitate the human’s transportation, they are also alternatives for ways that are harmful for the environment. In my point of view, railways deserve more attention and can be beneficial way for investment since they have bonus for both current habitants and the next generations.

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connectives have been used mechanically ,and there are some problems with prepositions. main points are addressed .
be careful about third person s
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اوه! چه رایتینگ خوبی نوشتید خودتون!! من تا ابد هم خودم رو بکشم اینو نمیتونم بنویسم. ممنون به خاطر توضیحات کاملتون

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thanks a zillion for your comments.

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It is a crucial parameter whether sufficient fund should be allocated to construct railways or roads by city planners. People have different attitudes towards this item. This is while that I strongly believe that investing in the infrastructure...

It is a crucial parameter whether sufficient fund should be allocated to construct railways or roads by city planners. People have different attitudes towards this item. This is while that I strongly believe that investing in the infrastructure of railway could be far more beneficial rather that roads.
It seems that travelling by train, across the city or countryside, is far more quicker and faster compared with motor vehicles. Especially in today’s world that the new lifestyle has caused those who live in big cities would prefer to use subway so that save their time. Research finding confirm that the countries, the public transport of whom has been improved by the new subways and railways instead of extending roads, has become successful in terms of local satisfaction.
Another reason that has caused I strongly disagree with extending roads is deeply rooted in air pollution. It is quite evidence that increasing the number of roads and highways is directly associated with raising the amount of pollution. Despite this fact that further roads and highways can play a significant part is decreasing the amount of traffic jam, it will encourage local to use their own cars so as to get their destination faster. Consequently, air and noise pollution will turn into a catastrophe.
Once again I reaffirm my position that allocating further fund to build railways is of a great importance and it could lead to address some problems such as air pollution and make a safer daily travel.

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از نظر ساختار رایتینگ، نوشته بسیار خوبی ارائه شده است اما اشکالات گرامری و لکزیکال متعددی دارید که برخی از آنها نیز به نظر major mistakes می آیند و نمره تان را به شدت کاهش میدهند. پیشنهاد میشود، به نوشتن خود روی موضوعات مختلف ادامه دهید و نوشته...

از نظر ساختار رایتینگ، نوشته بسیار خوبی ارائه شده است اما اشکالات گرامری و لکزیکال متعددی دارید که برخی از آنها نیز به نظر major mistakes می آیند و نمره تان را به شدت کاهش میدهند. پیشنهاد میشود، به نوشتن خود روی موضوعات مختلف ادامه دهید و نوشته هایتان را از نظر گرامری و لغتی برای تصحیح به دوستان سطح بالاتر یا مدرسان خود بدهید تا این اشکالات برطرف شوند. نمره شما در این تسک 5.5

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Merci

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خیلی ممنون

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امروز به روایتی پنجشنبه ست، پس چرا تصحیح نمیشه؟ از برنامه تصحیح رایتینگ منصرف شدید؟!

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In search for the ways to make transit system more efficient for both citizens and cities, authorities should concern to invest money on railways or roads. I completely agree that the former is worthwhile aiming for whereas, I believe that...

In search for the ways to make transit system more efficient for both citizens and cities, authorities should concern to invest money on railways or roads. I completely agree that the former is worthwhile aiming for whereas, I believe that spending huge amount of money on road construction is a waste of funds. In this essay I will clarify the compelling needs to regard these two opposite views in this way.
There are several reasons why massive investment on road construction should be ceased. Firstly, it is a flawed program if the quality of cars and vehicles is still poor. In other word, dwellers do not benefit from this scheme unless some complementary projects apply to replace their obsolete cars with new ones. Secondly, this is not in favor of the necessity of alleviating environmental problems which are highly in immediacy nowadays. People are driven to use the best option that is offered to them; when large sums were allocated to roads, commuters would prefer to drive their gas-guzzling cars on these great interstate highways and as a result the emission of exhaust fumes and greenhouse gases could be increased.
I believe that the funds should spend on railroads because this form of transportation have various advantages in regard to its ease and safety. What urban areas’ inhabitants constantly complain about metropolitan city life is almost always road rage behavior which is caused by tired workers and employees on the way of home and traffic congestion that could be outrageous in rush hours and might last for several undurable hours. Considering this issue, the best way to tackle the problem is providing super express wagons on tracks which can run smoothly even underground. Furthermore, through encouraging people to pick trains instead of private cars, we can wipe out one of the most prominent contributory factors of air pollution as smog.
In conclusion, my view is that governments should budget for railway lines due to the beneficial aspect of this mean of transport system which is twofold: on the one hand it allows people to move at ease, and on the other hand it protects the environment and our immediate surroundings as a feasible step.

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رایتینگ بسیار خوبی نوشتید اما در انتخاب جملات تاپیک بیشتر دقت کنید. به عنوان مثال
There are several reasons why massive investment on road construction should be ceased.
تاپیک خوبی مرتبط به موضوع نیست چون در سوال اشاره نشده که آیا بودجه راهها...

رایتینگ بسیار خوبی نوشتید اما در انتخاب جملات تاپیک بیشتر دقت کنید. به عنوان مثال
There are several reasons why massive investment on road construction should be ceased.
تاپیک خوبی مرتبط به موضوع نیست چون در سوال اشاره نشده که آیا بودجه راهها باید کلا قطع شود یا خیر.
همچنین در شروع نتیجه گیری نیز این مقایسه انجام نشده است. نمره شما در این تسک 6

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Some people believe that government should spend on more money to extend railways and in the other has controversial thoughts about this and declare that we need roads.
The advocators of extending railways points to convenience of travel with...

Some people believe that government should spend on more money to extend railways and in the other has controversial thoughts about this and declare that we need roads.
The advocators of extending railways points to convenience of travel with train and state that this journey always secure and safe and if it is possible that move with train then people do not use them cars and they prefer transmit with train. You can reclaim in train chair and see vision outside and enjoy until arrive to them destination. The train has time table that it helps you for scheduling your journey.
In the other hand I thing we need roads alongside railways because sometimes using our cars is more suitable and easiest than train. The government should invest to roads as a main infrastructure and it also must extend these even in the every branches. Developing of railways in the many of ways are impossible due to it depend on situation of ground. The ground must be smooth and flat to spreading railway.
In conclusion although traveling with train is often makes unforgotten memory, in many ways people prefer transmit with his cars and enjoy in them journey somehow they like it. Hence I think the governments should pay more money for expending roads than railways.

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روی لغات و گرامرهای خود بیشتر دقت کنید. در تمام جملات اشکالات گرامری و لغوی minor به چشم میخورد که ممکن است خودتان در صورت proof-read کردن نوشته تان میتوانید خیلی از آنها را برطرف کنید. به عنوان مثال استفاده از یک کلاز کامل بعد از due to درست...

روی لغات و گرامرهای خود بیشتر دقت کنید. در تمام جملات اشکالات گرامری و لغوی minor به چشم میخورد که ممکن است خودتان در صورت proof-read کردن نوشته تان میتوانید خیلی از آنها را برطرف کنید. به عنوان مثال استفاده از یک کلاز کامل بعد از due to درست نیست.
نمره شما در این تسک 5.5

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A host of passengers and commodities are transported through railways and roads. It, however, is sometimes argued that trains should be given priority over cars. Such prioritizing, from my prospective, would bring more benefits than drawbacks.
All...

A host of passengers and commodities are transported through railways and roads. It, however, is sometimes argued that trains should be given priority over cars. Such prioritizing, from my prospective, would bring more benefits than drawbacks.
Allocating a large amount of state budgets to rail transport would to a large extent lessen pollution facing human beings. Thanks to being equipped with electrical driven motors, trains surpassed cars regarding being eco-friendly. Cars, despite all advancements they have had, have heavily relied on fossil fuels, emitting tons of carbon dioxide to the atmosphere. Traffic jams causing journey to drag on unexpectedly exacerbate the situations as much fuel is consumed. Of course, one may claim that passengers mainly prefer to use cars, for cars offer more privacy than trains.
Trains, furthermore, would afford more safe journey to passengers. Road accidents have become prevalent due to various causes from human errors to treacherous conditions of roads, cars and weather. to combat such serious issues, governments have to allot staggering sums to expanding, roads, enhancing cars qualities and education drivers, which has repeatedly proved to yield nothing less than squandering money. On the other hand, trains, stations and railways could easily be renovated, which would promote train transport popularity with passengers. The more train journeys embark the more safeties passengers have. Of course, if one knows how fatal a rail accident, despite being rare, could be, they may never opt trains for their trips.
In conclusion, governments are advised to put priority over railways than roads as it would positively contribute to environmental problems and would improve travel safeties; otherwise, the existing problems are highly likely to claim more citizens’ lives in the future.

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رایتینگ بسیار خوبی نوشتید اما نیاز به بهبود Cohesion بین بعضی از جملات خود دارید. همچنین بعضی از transitionهای استفاده شده مانند of course غیررسمی بوده و از رجیستر رایتینگ تسک 2 خارج است. نمره شما در این تسک 6.5

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With the growth in travel, many people believe that should be allocated budget to railways more than roads. Individual perceive travel with the train is easier and definitely cheaper than a bus. In my opinion, trains are used most of the time...

With the growth in travel, many people believe that should be allocated budget to railways more than roads. Individual perceive travel with the train is easier and definitely cheaper than a bus. In my opinion, trains are used most of the time especially by qualification seekers who study another ciy and also they have at least risk to accident. So government mighyy investment more money to improve the railways.

With regard to expending of travels, people believe it is important. Officials considers suits way to convenient of an individual. A large number of who travels are students. They entail a cheapest and comfortable site for tripping. Actually they lack of income for reservation airplan ticket so, have to travel with at least cost. Trains are very suitable for large distance, because everyone can use the beds inorder to resting and sleeping. This kind of transportation have the best option for old persons, so that there is a toilet inside each wagon.
However, this opinion that spend that of trains are slower than others, is correct.Someone needs to travel quickly like manafments of companies who should reach very soon whenevr they are asked sometimes if they are forced to go to a nearly city they will use road vehicles to accelerate their journey. Althogh trains are suitable for feeling comfortable, sometimes need to get speed in travels.
To sum up, should be considered this fact, travel with trains have lowest crashes. So everyone prefers to choose this transportation for their trips and believe government must be considered more money to establish new railways or even improve them.

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در نوشته تان اشکالات گرامری و لغتی زیادی دارید که برخی از آنها به نظر major mistakes میآیند. مثلا در همان شروع مقدمه، وجه مجهول اشتباه استفاده شده است. گذشته از این اشکالات، در نوشتار خود نیز مشکل دارید. به عنوان مثال، جمله تاپیک پاراگراف دوم...

در نوشته تان اشکالات گرامری و لغتی زیادی دارید که برخی از آنها به نظر major mistakes میآیند. مثلا در همان شروع مقدمه، وجه مجهول اشتباه استفاده شده است. گذشته از این اشکالات، در نوشتار خود نیز مشکل دارید. به عنوان مثال، جمله تاپیک پاراگراف دوم جمله مرتبط و کاملی نیست. نمره شما در این تسک 5

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Many people believe that the government should investigate more budge on expanding rail way system butt the other rely that roads are important than rail ways and I totally believe agree with expanding rail way system for some reasons.
First of...

Many people believe that the government should investigate more budge on expanding rail way system butt the other rely that roads are important than rail ways and I totally believe agree with expanding rail way system for some reasons.
First of all, I know that many fast t rain are invented that not only move fast but also they use solar power as a resource of energy.so, it can help to commute between cities or in citizenship areas as fast as possible with reasonable price .moreover it is much safer than other transportation means and as statistics have showed the number of casualties from train accident is considerably less than other vehicles.
Secondly, especially in developing countries which are suffer from lack of fossil fuel it is a logical way to use train systems which can transfer a plenty of people daily and it use less amount of fuel that it result that release less gas and consequently decrees the environment damage as well as it is the best way to obstacle with traffic congestion in populated areas.
Finally, I mostly insist that it would be useful and logical if the government allocate more money on expanding rail ways because it is a good way for welfare of citizens also it dramatically decrees side effects of using fossil fuel inn metropolitans cities.

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قوانین رایتینگ را به خوبی رعایت کرده اید. فقط در استفاده از لغات و ساختارهای اشکالات minor دارید که باید ابتدا درست کرده و در مراحل بعد به فکر گسترش دامنه آنها چه از لحاظ رسمی بودن و چه از لحاظ کالوکیشنی باشید. همچنین finally برای شروع نتیجه گیری...

قوانین رایتینگ را به خوبی رعایت کرده اید. فقط در استفاده از لغات و ساختارهای اشکالات minor دارید که باید ابتدا درست کرده و در مراحل بعد به فکر گسترش دامنه آنها چه از لحاظ رسمی بودن و چه از لحاظ کالوکیشنی باشید. همچنین finally برای شروع نتیجه گیری خوب نیست. نمره شما در این تسک 5.5

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The matter of spending money on railways or roads has been ,from a long time ago,a controversial issue which many people are debating on that.some people do agree with this concept,however some do not. The first group believe that government...

The matter of spending money on railways or roads has been ,from a long time ago,a controversial issue which many people are debating on that.some people do agree with this concept,however some do not. The first group believe that government should pay more attention on improving railways against second group who believe roads are more convenient . Although ,some reasonable reasons lie in the latter ,i am of the same opinion as the former. There are some truth that railways have more benefits. First of all we can not ignore how safe they are. If rail way manager is good we will not have any accident and it is not comparable with roads. Secondly whenever people use railway transportation their expenses are more lower than when you use vehicles. This is more abvious in countries where the petrol price is higb. Finally in some countries whose trains are high speed the travel time cut down to about 50percent. In china ,for example,there are trains with about 500kilometeres per hour and yoy are able to travel between BEIGIN to SHANGHAI in 8 hours. On the other hand,roads are easy to access. It means that while trains have specific station in certain places,you can drive in road and stop everywhere you want. This convenience makes roads important all the time. All in all,although governments should improve railways and spend on new structures,they should pay attention to roads condition as well because in emergency we should use it

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While people used to commute on roads, the recent decades have seen a significant rise in the number of railways which has brought about lower traffic and air pollution for people. Spending more money on railways, however, seems to be more...

While people used to commute on roads, the recent decades have seen a significant rise in the number of railways which has brought about lower traffic and air pollution for people. Spending more money on railways, however, seems to be more essential than roadways.
On the one hand, extending roads has some benefits for commuters. When using private cars, we have much more flexible schedule. People could go to work or on an appointment, for instance, without attention to train move timetable. Besides, there seems to be a deep-rooted tendency of people to be comfort. They prefer to move in city with their own vehicle rather than standing in long queue for train most of which are extremely crowded.
On the other hand, railways have several advantages over conventional roadways. First of all, it is the most environmentally-friendly means of transport. Subway, train and other forms of railway systems reduce notorious air pollution as well as can move with alternative forms of energy, as a case in point is electricity power. With possessing clean air, therefore, the rate of different ailments which excess air pollution is responsible for them decrease significantly.
In addition, there is no traffic and accident on railways. Accidents, when less people stuck in crowded roads, are rarely happened. Statistics have shown that the array of death and injuries as a result of road accidents are far more than ones on railway transportation.
To sum up, the challenges presented by the booming roadways are numerous and dangerous, it is highly unlikely that they will be resolved in foreseeable future. I think allocating budget on railways is more beneficial for people’s health and the environment. The state should encourage individuals to use railway by providing better public facilities.

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Spending money on beneficial parts in countries by governments is one of the important issues.I tend to agree that building railways can have positive affect societies more than constructing road.
A good reason to spend money on railways is that...

Spending money on beneficial parts in countries by governments is one of the important issues.I tend to agree that building railways can have positive affect societies more than constructing road.
A good reason to spend money on railways is that it prepares good situations and opportunities for more people to transport easily.As a matter of fact trains are more convenient and safer than other vehicles could transmit a huge number of people in one time also the price of the tickets is affordable for everyone.Another beneficial factor would be that people can do everything in trains such as study, read books and do their different tasks instead of driving.Therefore it is efficient for governments and people that investment in railways instead of roads.
Another point to consider is that having more railways and trains in our countries means that the rate of using private cars will decrease significantly.We are not witnessing air and noise pollution and long hours traffic congestion on roads.Governments have a chance eco friendly and fast.
For example around three quarters of all developing countries in the world prefer to invest on such a public transport for solving the problems of over polluted and population.
In conclusion spending more money on railways instead on road is a must for any countries that make healthy societies and it will greatly benefit both individuals and societies.

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واقعا از شما سپاسگزارم مخصوصا اینکه ایرادها رو یاد آوری می کنید

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It is true that railways are beginning to rival roads as a public transportation, nonetheles, I believe that none of them do not have superiority from other one.<br>
On the one hand, lf governments spend money or railroads, trafic will decreas,...

It is true that railways are beginning to rival roads as a public transportation, nonetheles, I believe that none of them do not have superiority from other one.<br>
On the one hand, lf governments spend money or railroads, trafic will decreas, so, people will have not only more timebut also more money for fulfilling their other activities that they have to do. Air pollution and noise will decrease by use of this method, so, The health of community will increase.<br>
On the other hand, experience have proven <br>
that transportation is as important as railway transportation. because roads are more accessible and more widespread, but, It takes two or three minutes to access the railway station. an other reason is that with production and expansion of smart cars, roads will get their previous significance. smart cars can create massive transformation in transportation industry. <br>
&nbsp;In conclusion, I believe that none of them do not have superiority&nbsp; from other one and both of them can be useful in their place.<br>
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دوستان عزیز چیزی که واضح هست همه رایتینگ های ما تصحیح خواهد شد ، پس منصفانه نیست این حرکت تیم بیان برتر که بصورت کاملا رایگان داره انجام میشه رو با گلایه پاسخ بدیم ، بهتره با قدردانی به اونها انرژی مثبت بدیم

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من یک گلایه ایی از تیم خوب بیان برتر دارم اونم اینکه این عادلانه نیست که افرادی که یکی دو روز پیش رایتینگشون را ارسال کردند آخرسر و بعد از افرادی که تازه همین چند دقیقه پیش رایتینگشون ارسال شده تصحیح بشه کاش از این نظر ترتیب اصلاح رعایت بشه تا کسانی که زودتر رایتینگشون ارسال شده یکی دو روز منتظر تصحیح شما عزیزان نباشند

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دوست عزیز همه رایتینگ ها در حال تصحیح است. نگران نباشین

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سلام چطور باید ارسال کنم؟ایاهزینه باید پرداخت بشه؟

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مثل بقیه دوستان، اینجا کامنت بگذارید رایتینگ تون رو. ممتحن تصحیح میکنه و بهتون نمره میده

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There is no doubt that transportation routes should be improved or progressed by government. Although spending money on both routes has always required, it seems railway systems are more crucial to pay attention.
It has...

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There is no doubt that transportation routes should be improved or progressed by government. Although spending money on both routes has always required, it seems railway systems are more crucial to pay attention.
It has proved that travelling or good transportation by railway system increase productivity because this type of transportation system is more rapid than roads due to lack of traffic congestion. It is why railway system has always become as a priority to those who would like to get destination soon or send anything to another place sooner than by road. Likewise it would be possible to transit an array amount of goods compared with trucks.
Alongside that, Railway system had always been safer as a public transportation than other kinds since advent of that because of statistics of death throughout further years. It is suggested to persuade people for using train to travel rather than road system. For instance, if people spend a good and convenient and comfortable time in train, they would be encouraged to choose that for future trips.
In conclusion, I believed that devoting budget on railways for their improving or developing is more efficiently. However, there are many villages which need to construct safe and suitable roads or even many roads need to fix.

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رایتینگ شما ساختار خوبی دارد. اما کمی از لغات و کالوکیشن های رجیستر آکادمیک دور است. همچنین تعداد لغات برای رایتینگ باید به 250 کلمه برسد که در مورد رایتینگ شما 210 کلمه است که از آن نمره کسر خواهد شد. برخی از جملات نیز مانند جمله It is...

رایتینگ شما ساختار خوبی دارد. اما کمی از لغات و کالوکیشن های رجیستر آکادمیک دور است. همچنین تعداد لغات برای رایتینگ باید به 250 کلمه برسد که در مورد رایتینگ شما 210 کلمه است که از آن نمره کسر خواهد شد. برخی از جملات نیز مانند جمله It is suggested to persuade people for using train to travel rather than road system با جملات قبل و بعد خود Coherence و Cohesion مناسب ندارند. نمره شما در این تسک 5.5

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سلام، چرا نمره ها به ترتیب ارسال نمره داده نمیشه؟

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تا پنجشنبه تمامی رایتینگ های ارسالی تصحیح خواهد شد

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سلام وخسته نباشید.نمرات رایتینگامون
و نقطه نظرات در همین صفحه ارایه می شود؟

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بله زیر هر رایتینگ، نمره و توضیح مختصر ارائه خواهد شد

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These days,communication between societies caused to expansion of roads and railroads.Therefore,authorities tend to allocate more budget to growing the roads and railways.I personally believe that the railways have a lot of benefits to spend...

These days,communication between societies caused to expansion of roads and railroads.Therefore,authorities tend to allocate more budget to growing the roads and railways.I personally believe that the railways have a lot of benefits to spend money.
It is clear that the advantages of the railroads are higher than the roads,for the reasons that are mentioned below.First,the most important dilemma that societies are confronted with it is traffic,nowadays.The number of cars and motorcycles is increasing day by day and the roads become crowded than before.with the expansion of railways and increasing of trains,it transport the high number of passengers,decreasing private car number and reducing the traffic jam.
Secondly,another issue is air pollution that indicates governments should pay attention to railways.Transportation is mainly responsible for global warming because of the high amount of toxic gasses emitted from cars.As a result,improvement of railroads and generation new trains or subways will significantly decline the volume of carbon dioxide emisson to the atmosphere.
Last but not least,rails can transfer hundreds of people and several hundred tonnes of goods while road carry only a few.Some trains are most faster than private car and public buses.Thus
development of railways help to save people's time.Also,with reduction interurban travel by cars and buses the car accident will extremely decrease.
To sum up,there are several positive points of developing railroads as governments should invest to build a safer, faster and more reliable transportation system and the railway, for this .reasons

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در نوع نگارش فوق العاده هستید و روش develop کردن دلایل را خوب استفاده میکنید. اگر نمره بیشتری میخواهید، روی Lexical Resource مرتبط به موضوع (کالوکیشن‌های وسیع‌تر) و تنوع گرامری بیشتر کار کنید. نمره شما در این تسک 6

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In many countries, people have different views on the necessity of whether to spend money for building modern railways between cities or for development of local transportations. While construction of fast train for traveling outside cities is...

In many countries, people have different views on the necessity of whether to spend money for building modern railways between cities or for development of local transportations. While construction of fast train for traveling outside cities is important, I believe spending money for transportations inside cities has more benefits.

On the one hand, the importance of constructing fast trains' railway is considerable for some reasons. This type of transportation is less expensive compared to another form which is airplane traveling. Also, train carriage can transport way more people between cities, and this is helpful for people who work in the near city of where they live. It means that this improvement in trains transportation could extend the variety of job opportunity for people who are looking for jobs in other cities. A prime example is the fast trains between Karaj and Tehran in Iran, which increase the working population throughout these towns.

On the other hand, I believe expanding and raising funds on public transportations inside cities have more positive impacts. There is no doubt that the numbers of people who travel inside cities are higher than who travel outside, so local public transportation could benefit more population. Moreover, it can be helpful for environmental problems in the way of innovating modern transportation to reduce harmful emissions from the traditional form of transportation. For example, Dubai city recently introduces the Green Bus, which consumes zero fossil fuel as well as having more seats than ordinary buses.

In conclusion, I can understand that developing railways for fast trains is a logical method, but it seems to me that spending more money for modernization of ordinary local transportation makes more sense.

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چارچوب رایتینگ بسیار خوب است. بهتر است در انتهای پاراگراف یک جمع بندی از کلیت پاراگراف خود داشته باشید. برای گرفتن نمره بیشتر نیاز با کالوکیشن های بیشتر دارید. نمره شما در این تسک 6.5

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Whether or not government should invest more on railway rather than roads has turned into a controversial issue these days. Some subscribe to the view that rail roads bring numerable benefits to each country, whereas others believe in the...

Whether or not government should invest more on railway rather than roads has turned into a controversial issue these days. Some subscribe to the view that rail roads bring numerable benefits to each country, whereas others believe in the opposite. This outlook will be analysed in forth coming paragraph to draw a conclusion.

Investment in rail roads comes with some drawbacks. First of all, having commitment through rail roads are feasible mainly in some particular areas. For instance, some regions might be swamps or rocky mountains. Most of citizens, meanwhile, due to having convenient trip prefer to use buses or their private cars; Particularly when they want to want to go out cities for holiday. As a result, spending great deal of money in building rail roads is unreasonable.

On the other side, others shout against this by emphasizing the merits of spending money on rail roads. First and for most, due to expanding use of trains and degrading employing other vehicles, contaminating of cities weather will decrease remarkably. Secondly, by building subway station in city areas, traffic congestion could be cut down. For example, there is a perfect train network in capital of Iran and people rarely drive their own vehicles.
On the whole, both perspective for and against spending money on rail roads were outlined. I personally side with latter group who advocates the significant role of rail roads across the nation. It is important to expect that decision makers and society members collaborate to address this matter soon enough..

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با تغییراتی که در معیارهای نمره دهی ایجاد شده است، استفاده از چارچوب های آماده و جملات Waffle در رایتینگ ها نمره خوبی نخواهند گرفت. بنابراین به جای حفظ کردن چارچوب های رایتینگ، بهتر است مدل develop کردن creative writing را یاد بگیرید. هچمنین در...

با تغییراتی که در معیارهای نمره دهی ایجاد شده است، استفاده از چارچوب های آماده و جملات Waffle در رایتینگ ها نمره خوبی نخواهند گرفت. بنابراین به جای حفظ کردن چارچوب های رایتینگ، بهتر است مدل develop کردن creative writing را یاد بگیرید. هچمنین در استفاده از لغات خود دقت بیشتری داشته باشد.
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Transportation industry including railways and roads play a vital role for commuting people around the globe. some people believe that investment on railways has priority to roads. In my opinion, it can be a logical decision to spend the budjet...

Transportation industry including railways and roads play a vital role for commuting people around the globe. some people believe that investment on railways has priority to roads. In my opinion, it can be a logical decision to spend the budjet on railways because of two reasons.
Firstly,taking a trip with trains is more convenient due to having more amenities such as folding
beds,restaurant,bathroom facilities rather than buses. So the passengers can be more comfortable specially on long-term juorneis. Personaly I have difficulty with sleeping on chairs and I can not sleep a wink when I take a trip on roads, so I prefer to travel with a well -equipped train.
Another point is that, acoording to accident statistics,railways consider as the safest sort of transportation and myriad of passengers would rather have the best condition for their movements. For instance, as I am living far from my home town, I have to travel a lot and have been to all kinds of transportation. I have witnessed to loads of accidents on roads with numerous victoms. Air crashes also have lots of catastrophic disasters each year and some people have phobia to be in air for along time.
To sum up,as safity and comfort of trains are not in their best conditions and take their toll each year ,in order to have the most excellent railway system, the government should get through to interprise on trains and subways more than it used to do.

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The states should allocate more money on railways instead of roads. I completely disagree with this kind of view.
There are several reasons that I think governments should not spend money only on railways. Firstly, it is very expensive and needs...

The states should allocate more money on railways instead of roads. I completely disagree with this kind of view.
There are several reasons that I think governments should not spend money only on railways. Firstly, it is very expensive and needs a lot of materials such as rails and trains. Secondly, we cannot build railways in every place that we want due to the huge costs, as a result the number of railways is very less and that people should devote or put much time to reach these locations and it is really time-consuming. Finally, if government devote all the budgets on railways, automobile companies will be fallen in bad situation because people do not buy their products and use trains, and that they have no way for selling them. As a result, the number of unemployment will be increased dramatically.
In my opinion, the money should go in both railways and roads. In the city because of some reason we cannot build trains. For example, in Mashhad, infrastructures are very unsuitable and government cannot build a lot of railways and on the other hand lack of roads big problem for people who leave there. And also it is necessary to build roads for village that are far from the city because communication between city and villages are necessary. People go to village for recreation by private cars and people from village for selling and buying daily needs.
In conclusion, it seems to me that governments should spend money in both sections.

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it is sometimes argue that states should be allocated amount of money on expansion of railways instead of roads. This essay agrees with the aforementioned perspective.
I hold the view that there are many evidences in favor of the idea that...

it is sometimes argue that states should be allocated amount of money on expansion of railways instead of roads. This essay agrees with the aforementioned perspective.
I hold the view that there are many evidences in favor of the idea that government should more focus on railways. To begin with, air quality rapidly deterioration in our cities. I mean, using private cars should be restricted because of it causes serious pollution which it will be possible if states boost the quality of public transportations. In addition, survey revealed that a noise pollution is another factor that impact on the people᾿s life and it increase the level of anxiety among people. That is to say that, poor living condition breed violence and resentment. Thus, public transportations should be extended and appropriating hefty costs on railways.
Besides, using trains especially when you are running short of time, it not only is safer but also is faster. In other words, people spend the equivalent of 2 or 3 hours in gridlock every days and it causes multitude problems such as stress that have a negative impact on their job. So, using trains could save more time and energy for other activities such as entertainment or upbringing proper children. Secondly, it could help to reduce a huge number of car collision . It obvious that a majority of car accidents is as a result of human errors. Therefore, accessing to public transportation could increase the efficiency of life.
In conclusion, on the basis of the points mentioned above, I completely agree with spending cost on train.

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روی Minor mistakes گرامری خود بیشتر کار کنید. به عنوان مثال should be allocated وجه مجهول است اما اینجا کارکرد معلوم باید داشته باشد. یا تاپیک پاراگراف اول فعل ندارد. اینها نمره بسیاری از شما کسر خواهد کرد. همچنین در نوشتن جملات تاپیک بیشتر دقت...

روی Minor mistakes گرامری خود بیشتر کار کنید. به عنوان مثال should be allocated وجه مجهول است اما اینجا کارکرد معلوم باید داشته باشد. یا تاپیک پاراگراف اول فعل ندارد. اینها نمره بسیاری از شما کسر خواهد کرد. همچنین در نوشتن جملات تاپیک بیشتر دقت کنید. مثلا در پاراگراف سوم اینقدر نیازی به جزئیات در جمله اول نیست. نمره در این تسک 5.5

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Recent decades have seen significant increase in number of communication all over the world ,weather spending money on railways is better or on roads is a moot point .It seems both of them is compulsory and necessary.

On one hand ,...

Recent decades have seen significant increase in number of communication all over the world ,weather spending money on railways is better or on roads is a moot point .It seems both of them is compulsory and necessary.

On one hand , railway is a environmental friendly vehicle and the number of people which are moved by this is enormous compared with cars .It is crystal_ clear that for constructionction railway limit space is need therefore it makes less damage to environment while for build roads ,huge land is required so more trees will be cut.In addition ,train and subway make a little pollution compered to other transportation devices . Moreover,passengers in train are more comfortable as well as are more safe ;for example , family can read book our have lunch also sleep in train but in cars they cannot .It is undeniable that the Substantial number of cars have bad accident while few number of train make in trouble in a centery.
On the other hand ,it is cars can which are moved easily every where . train has moved on railway which have built for t his purpose .Also,using privet cars could give freedom to drivers to manage their time and their destination .
In conclusion , demanding for roads and railways are increasing dramatically , dilution makers should take railway and road equally ,and spend money on both them .

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روی انتخاب لغات بسیار دقت کنید. همین استفاده نابجا ممکن است باعث off topic شدن پاراگراف ها شوند. به عنوان مثال communication در مقدمه، کلیت رایتینگ را به هم می ریزد. نمره شما در این تسک 5

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It goes without saying that roads and rails alike have been the turning point in the transport system from the preceding decades .Due to their importance , a bunch of controversial contentions have arisen whether state should allocate the budget...

It goes without saying that roads and rails alike have been the turning point in the transport system from the preceding decades .Due to their importance , a bunch of controversial contentions have arisen whether state should allocate the budget to railways as compared with roads .roads ,however, used to be partly the only mode of the transport in the past , today roads have as essential as it ,even in some circumstance under which railways can play far more effective role. Both of them seem to be the complement of each other .It is a complicated negotiation needed to be considered in the following.
There are a conspicuous number of explanations why a huge group of people show a tendency to extension of the railway net. People using trains or trolley buses ,when encountered to a less volume of traffic ,would feel the extremely convenience because there is neither noise nor air pollution getting on their nerves. So development of railway appeals to them. In Iran individuals ,for instance ,regardless of trains' low speed, taking full advantages from speculator views along the road, are able to arrive Mashhad from Tehran ,especially without existence of stacking in the traffic.
It can be a blessing with the exception of the travel time. Despite mentioned merit, unfortunately train speed can spoil the enjoyment of a travel , if particularly ones are in hurry. In this moment ,not only is not trains ramble hypnotic , but also it is annoying .Not to mention the fact that trackless trams, while playing an eco-friendly role in the environmental sustainability, alleviate the current problem. By comparison, taking the initiatives to protect from the environment drive people to use environmentally-friendly vehicles ,thereby enhancing the chance of railways .
On the other hand, I would side those who perceive roads share equal importance just as railways. Private car owners are increasing in numbers owing to the enhancement of living standards, and they are unlikely to resort to trains since using their own cars is much more convenient. In fact ,private cars enable them to take pleasure from the experience of new tracks and different speed , therefore, better railway systems only encourage a part of citizens ,who are not of any yearning for the adventure, to use this type of public transport. Moreover, car owner could dominate the time without the assistance of another fuel resource. Environmentally, scientists and technologists could push back the frontier of knowledge and discover cars working by electricity.
To make a long story to short ,by putting all of aforementioned together, can be drawn the conclusion that allocating a large part of the development budget to both of means simultaneously could provide appropriate transport infrastructure for all folks.
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روی معیارهای LR و GRA نمره خوبی میگیرید اما در بحث TR و CC اشکالاتی اساسی وجود دارد. به عنوان مثال در پاراگراف بدنه دوم، ابتدا نتیجه گیری و جمع بندی کردید و بعد مثال زدید که این روش develop کردن مناسبی نیست. کمی بیشتر باید روی نحوه develop کردن...

روی معیارهای LR و GRA نمره خوبی میگیرید اما در بحث TR و CC اشکالاتی اساسی وجود دارد. به عنوان مثال در پاراگراف بدنه دوم، ابتدا نتیجه گیری و جمع بندی کردید و بعد مثال زدید که این روش develop کردن مناسبی نیست. کمی بیشتر باید روی نحوه develop کردن پاراگراف ها دقت کنید. نمره شما در این تسک 6

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At the present age ,there are an array of mean of transport among each country .some groups of people claimed that the government must devote more budget to railway .whereas,it is asserted by other groups of people are the most efficient means of...

At the present age ,there are an array of mean of transport among each country .some groups of people claimed that the government must devote more budget to railway .whereas,it is asserted by other groups of people are the most efficient means of transport among many group of people .to personally i am in favour of railway s.
it is obvious that ,roads transportation have a lot of benefits .firstly ,it is very cheap in comparison with other forms of transportion .for instance ,in spite of aeroplane can transfer a few group of people and minority of people have enough budget to access it but majority group of people can transfer by train .secondly ,it has proven that railways trasportion is much more safe than in comparison with other form of transport .to start with .each year many people killed by accident during their journey but on the recent years i have not heard last time about a big disaster in railways transportation .Thus ,it is highly visible that majority groups of people would like to use train
On the other hand ,railways transportion provides pivotal role in the world and many countries around the world are becoming increasinly dependent upon to each other .For example,many countries export and import their goods through railway transportion and it assist many countries to experience prosperous economy.Moreover,due to the fact that the cost of train is very low it reduce the outcome price each product .In addition to ,railway have major role in expanding tourism industry .For example ,holiday maker through railway can travel to the new environment that have not seen before and bring job and benefit for local people and see pristine environment
In summary .although roads transport have a lot of merit for people and in overall the advantages railway is outweight of building roadway .I convinced that it is better that government allocate more financial resources for building railway because it brings comfortable and safe and prosperous economic for people

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در چیدمان جملات یک پاراگراف باید دقت بیشتری کنید. به نظر میرسد، هرایده ای که به ذهن تان میرسد مینویسید. نظم در نوشتار جملات و توسعه پاراگراف، باعث بالا بردن نمره CC شما خواهد شد. پاراگراف با یک Topic شروع میشود، با توضیح و مثال ساپورت میشود و در...

در چیدمان جملات یک پاراگراف باید دقت بیشتری کنید. به نظر میرسد، هرایده ای که به ذهن تان میرسد مینویسید. نظم در نوشتار جملات و توسعه پاراگراف، باعث بالا بردن نمره CC شما خواهد شد. پاراگراف با یک Topic شروع میشود، با توضیح و مثال ساپورت میشود و در انتها نیز جمع بندی می شود. به عنوان مثال، to start with در وسط پاراگراف بی معنی است. نمره شما در این تسک 5.5

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سلام نه برای هر رایتینگ ریپلای میشود

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Governments should spend money on railways rather than roads. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this?

Governments often have large sums of money at disposal to invest in different sectors of their countries. In many countries, this...

Governments should spend money on railways rather than roads. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this?

Governments often have large sums of money at disposal to invest in different sectors of their countries. In many countries, this budget should spend on transportation systems. Some countries spend their budgets on railways rather than roads. I believe that it is good idea to spend money on railway systems rather than road systems.

To begin with, governments should invest their money on developing railway rather than roads because railways are more reliable, efficient and safe. For example, using trains are safer than using cars or buses. These days , roads have the highest car accidents than railways. We hear or read about some people who kill due to car crash.


The second sector why governments have to invest money on railway is reliability. With reliability, people can plan ahead their schedule. By using train, they can arrive at their appointments timely. Take Japan as an example, they have less traffic on roads because of numerous railways.

Last but not least, governments should put building railways before building roads because they are more efficient compared to roads in the long terms. Train can transport more load with less fuel. As a results, it helps to decrease global warming and facilitate to travel around.


In conclusion, I would agree that governments should invest on railways rather than roads. This is because people are becoming more interested in living in urban areas nowadays, government should build more railways. Thus, people can travel with less cost and easily.



Governments often have large sums of money at THEIR disposal to invest in different sectors of their countries. In many countries, this budget SHOULD BE SPENT (NOT: should spend) on transportation systems. Some countries spend their budgets on ROADS RATHER THAN ROADS. HOWEVER, I believe that it is A good idea to spend money on railway systems rather than road systems.

To begin with, governments should invest their money IN (NOT: on) developing railway rather than roads because railways are more reliable, efficient and safe. For example, using trains IS (NOT: are) safer than using cars or buses. These days , roads have the highest car accidents (DELETE THIS: than railways). We hear or read about some people who ARE KILLED (NOT: kill) IN CAR CRASHES (NOT: due to car crash).

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ANOTHER REASON WHY (NOT: The second sector why) governments have to invest money on railway is reliability. With reliability, people can plan ahead their schedule. By using trainS, they can arrive at their DESTINATIONS / appointments IN A timely MANNER. Take Japan as an example. They have less traffic on roads because of numerous railways.

Last but not least, governments should put building railways before building roads because they are more efficient compared to roads in the long RUN (NOT: terms). TrainS can transport more loadS with less fuel, WHICH helps to decrease global warming and facilitate TRAVELLING (NOT: to travel) around.

In conclusion, I would ARGUE (NOT: agree) that governments should invest IN (NOT: on) railways rather than roads. This is because people are becoming more interested in living in urban areas nowadays, SO governmentS should build more railways. Thus, people can travel with less cost and easily.

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States used to spend large amounts of money so as to boost roads in the earlier times, whereas the recent decades have seen an increase in the amount of spending on railways, especially in mega cities. In spite of the fact that individuals can...

States used to spend large amounts of money so as to boost roads in the earlier times, whereas the recent decades have seen an increase in the amount of spending on railways, especially in mega cities. In spite of the fact that individuals can benefit from the improvement in roads, I believe governments should give rail transport their attention.

Nowadays, the most common form of transportation is highly likely to be private cars because people usually prefer to use their own ones in order to commute to work or university. If states allocate the part of their capital on improving roads, not only will the number of accidents decline considerably but also heavy traffic congestion leading to air and noise pollution will decrease in large cities.

Nevertheless, spending money on railways by governments can be useful and efficient, for rail transport have a myriad of merits. The expenses of rail transport are usually set to be reasonable and affordable for all citizens. The price of train tickets, for example, can be incredibly fair compared to the cost of petrol utilized in private cars. Therefore, individuals should use trains in their routine life owing to their high safety standards.

In addition, governments can bring about better conditions in society when giving attention to railways. Inasmuch as rail transport contribute to lower challenges related to pollution, it is bound to enjoy a higher priority in comparison with road transport. In fact, states can revolutionize living standards and public transportation alike.

To sum up, whilst countries have spent plenty of money on roads, they should focus on the boost to railways.

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paragraphing is very good. there are some claims without sufficient corroboration for the most part in the second body
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