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People living in the 21st century have a better quality of life than the previous centuries. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
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شرکت‌کننده محترم،
تا ساعت 17 روز شنبه 1396/12/19 فرصت دارید، برای این موضوع رایتینگ‌های خود را نوشته و به صورت کامنت، در زیر پست، ارسال نمایید. تمامی رایتینگ‌ها توسط ممتحنین بیان برتر ارزیابی شده و به آنها نمره داده خواهد شد.

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#من_كپي_نمكينم
It is true that the 21st century has undertaken great changes in human lives.; while are some people claim that societies have benefited from the high quality of lives, others, including in me believe that the changes have had...

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It is true that the 21st century has undertaken great changes in human lives.; while are some people claim that societies have benefited from the high quality of lives, others, including in me believe that the changes have had adverse effects on communities.

On the one hand, there are two main reasons why living in the century has brought the considerable positive experience. The first factor would be advancing in technology. This means that, nowadays, all technological equipment makes individuals give up the previous lifestyle they used to do. For example, in the last decays, people, special woman, should wash dishes by their hands, but now due to the invention of washing machine women can easily able to do household's chore. Secondly, this century is known as the word of information. If societies access to information, they will take advantage of the useful and practical knowledge, which have direct impacts on people's lives. In other words, hardly can we find individuals not wanting to enjoy these positive changes. The best example is that majority of people in all around the world could experience declining in the rate of obesity because of improving knowledge of people achieving by reading daily newspapers.

On the other hand, people are not happy to live in the 21st century. First of all, people have faced incurable diseases which are the effects of sedentary Lifestyle in this years, such as diabetes. In addition, the most societies suffer from loneliness this is because of not only do people engage in electronic games, but also they prefer to be in the virtual world. It is obvious that these undesired effects come from living in this century.

In conclusion, Although high quality of Lifestyle is offered in the 21st century, my own view is that the serious problems never allow people to be in good conditions.

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Nowadays people have better life than before. I strongly agree with this statement. One of the most important reason is the progress of science. For instance, the jerisdication of scince in medical, technology and so on has been affect in our...

Nowadays people have better life than before. I strongly agree with this statement. One of the most important reason is the progress of science. For instance, the jerisdication of scince in medical, technology and so on has been affect in our lives. Also, due to industrial revolution the great opportunities for jobs has been created. This important fact make nations to use their capability for a better life worldwide. Howsver, we can not ignore the rule of social media in details. Many people would like to buy, take taxi, and etc online at home. These great facilities make people to feel better and better as past. In conclusion, i repead my idea and stsongly agree
the mericle of century is science and industrial revoulution.

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Hani Rashidghalam:
It is sometimes argued that people living in the 21st century enjoy the better quality of lives in comparison with the past. I partially agree with this assertion.

On the one hand, people in the past were...

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Hani Rashidghalam:
It is sometimes argued that people living in the 21st century enjoy the better quality of lives in comparison with the past. I partially agree with this assertion.

On the one hand, people in the past were satisfied about some aspects of their lives. Mainly, in the past lives were almost stress-free and the level of intention, being common in this modern era, was not at the higher level. In other words, people lived with more tranquility conditions without any high competition between themselves. As a result of this situation, they did not suffer from physical diseases such as high blood pressure or heart attacks. In further, people had more face to face connection with their loved ones and their acquaintances. For instance, people devoted some parts of their daily time to talk with their neighbours. So ancient people might had good quality of lives.

On the other hand, nowadays the quality of people's lives has been growing exponentially. The main reason behind this issue is the convenience that the technology brings to our modern lives. For example, employees do their jobs by computers, and the heavy workloads demolished greatly. Moreover, the rate of fatal and the adverse effects of it have been decreased enormously. Currently, people enjoy the great advancements in the fields of medicine. As a result, people do not suffer much from incurable diseases and their pains.

In conclusion, the conditions and the quality of lives in the 21st century are great and people living in the past centuries also enjoyed some aspects that the modern life styles lack them.

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The 21st century, in many various aspects, has been the advent of technological, scientific, and cultural changes. Having had such developed backgrounds, this century has granted numerous facilities and amenities to people living...

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The 21st century, in many various aspects, has been the advent of technological, scientific, and cultural changes. Having had such developed backgrounds, this century has granted numerous facilities and amenities to people living in the current time. Yet, it must be pointed out that it is not all improvement, and one must not be ignorant of the fact that a great deal of deterioration and calamities have put people’s lives in decline. Thus, discussing the quality of life in the 21st century, a combination of both improvement and decline must be considered.
In terms of household chores and labor saving devices, the 21st century has undoubtedly improved the quality of life. In order to realize these changes, one does not need to look further than the kitchen. The very tools and appliances that are used in our routine everyday life would testify. The amount of time that refrigerator, microwave, toaster, oven, and countless other devices save, cannot be compared to any other thing. Furthermore, they are such convenient devices and reduce the amount of difficulties and burdens humans had previously undertaken.
The 21st century has also brought about negative changes. For instance, the alienation of humans and widespread depression that is ongoing nowadays, is a direct impact of the changes in 21st century. People no longer have time to spend with each other, and are up to their ears in social network and trifles that have no benefit whatsoever. As a result, one can witness people all over the world who have gone out of their mind and are in search of a soul with whom they can share their feelings.
In conclusion, the 21st century has had dual impact on people’s lives: it has made life much easier compared to the past, and on the other hand, has alienated people. Yet, in my opinion, the positive changes outnumber the negative ones, and we should see the bright side and turn a blind eye to the drawbacks.

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the introductory part is a tad long. the arguments are logical but not adequately supported. minor errors

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#من_كپي_نمكينم.In the 21st century, people living with high standard of lifestyle than before, I agree with this statement to some extent because, not all people in the world could benefit from the advances that human has conquered, only half of...

#من_كپي_نمكينم.In the 21st century, people living with high standard of lifestyle than before, I agree with this statement to some extent because, not all people in the world could benefit from the advances that human has conquered, only half of the people living in developed world the life of the rest did not change as we expecting. In this essay, I will discuss the reasons why living in the past was arduous.
In earlier times, commuting and traveling was extremely adventurous experience especially if you consider long distance through oceans, there was not a proper, safe vehicle or road to overcome this journey; sometimes this experience winds up with a disaster.
Most people had been living in an abject poverty with demanding career. They have to work in factories in excruciating condition with as less remuneration as possible, it was like the human was a slave for employers, consequently, people could not possess any property, most of them have to live in a rental house which was a condemned one.
People also had been dealing with much difficulties like high mortality rate due to continuous wars, dangerous jobs, natural disasters, and a wide variety of incurable diseases. Thus, it was even difficult stay alive. However, nowadays, fortunately, human have found solutions to ameliorate people's life.
To sum up, As the time passes most of the people around the world gaining more wealth and comfort through the advances in all aspect of human life. Currently, in the 21st century, this comfort emerges more than ever, thus, we could claim developing in economy and technology have been bringing us better quality life.

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Most people concur that the standard of life has promoted over the last two decades and they now live more convenient than preceding centuries. This essay agrees that during this century people have had generally a better life and...

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Most people concur that the standard of life has promoted over the last two decades and they now live more convenient than preceding centuries. This essay agrees that during this century people have had generally a better life and some growing social factors such as lifespan, healthcare and income support this conviction.
There is no doubt that average lifespans has soared over the past two decades and reach an unprecedented level worldwide. In fact, from psychological point of view, life expectancy which is the foremost social indicator has a direct relation with life quality. The happier and healthier people live, the more lifespan they have. Moreover, thanks to the advent of cutting-edge recreational facilities people have been enticed to entertain and enjoy their life more than they used to do. A clear example is that during this century the number of fitness suites and swimming pools has been doubled in a metropolitan city like Tehran.
Furthermore, healthcare insurances are now more commonplace which contribute to not only providing decent healthcare services but also cutting down on living expenses. On the other hand, since the global economy is booming, average incomes has risen considerably around the world. When people earn more are pay less, they would be able to fix up their family with modern household appliances which lets them to have more leisure time. For instance, housewives used to spend too much time washing dishes, but nowadays modern dish washers take over this manual job.
In conclusion, during recent two decades average lifespans has extended worldwide because of developing in healthcare system, amusement centers and domestic devices. These advances which provide people with better situation for living would enhance social well-being.

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Human-being since the dawn of its creation had faced with the challenges which spurred it to seek proper life circumstances. As a way of this, technology developing alongside with mankind has been facilitating our lives with variety of inventions...

Human-being since the dawn of its creation had faced with the challenges which spurred it to seek proper life circumstances. As a way of this, technology developing alongside with mankind has been facilitating our lives with variety of inventions and discoveries.21st century, however, has witnessed magnificent amount of improvements in terms of tech inventions which eased the life of human beings. Given the above-mentioned introduction, I utterly agree with the fact that current century has turned into an era, which people are encountering fewer predicaments in comparison with the earlier centuries.
Firstly, as the Time has proceeded forward our understanding of natural phenomenon and technology, which contributes to diverse industries have improved. This has been a result of the efforts which our ancestors had dealt with and provided us with the knowledge related to various industries ranging from food industries and household amenities to healthcare and sanitary conditions, which in turn have improved life circumstances. Take medical enhancements in recent years for instance, had not been for the efforts of former century’s doctors and pharmaceutical researchers, we were bound to encounter the same healthcare issues which our ancestors were faced with.
In addition to the above-mentioned statements, which are most likely related to subsistent level of life, tech innovations have stepped forward and provided us with fast pace life. There is no denial in the huge positive impact that internet had on our lives. although internet was created in last century its application became extraordinarily enhanced and widespread in the current century. Internet banking for instance, is among one of the many astonishing utilities that have facilitated our lives and enabled us to protect and raise our investments via incredibly straightforward process.
In conclusion, I do not sense any opposition against the fact that living circumstances has enhanced and life conditions in earlier centuries are by no means comparable to the much tech-innovated healthcare-improved and globalized 21st century.

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#من#کپی#نمیکنم
From the 21th century onwards, the standard living of people have considerably boosted than ever before. I am in complete accord with this opinion that in the last few decades the potential quality of life has been massively...

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From the 21th century onwards, the standard living of people have considerably boosted than ever before. I am in complete accord with this opinion that in the last few decades the potential quality of life has been massively improved by some facts which we will discuss now.
On the one hand, people who lived in the past had not only less stress but more happy as well. Ancient people, for example, were likely to spent more time with their families; therefore, they felt more relaxed and satisfied. They, because of the fact that, were not set to waste their time through commuting in polluted mega-cities. People, thus, in the past had lived more confidence as well as more satisfactory.
With the advent of technology, people’s lives have undergone a revolution as well as they also reaped the benefits of it. Technology has made tasks easier that ranging from education to transport. In the last decades, for example, qualification seekers had encountered a large number of difficulties, along with them; they forced moving long distances in order to learning certain field of study, yet nowadays students have enjoyed distance learning; even so they can go overseas easily through air travel in only few hours.
In addition, healthcare and service have significantly developed in recent years. These sciences, therefore, have undergone considerable changes in the improvement of individual’s lives. Due to the fact that the cure-all of some hazardous and infliction illnesses have been discovered by science; as a result not only the quality of life but life expectancy also have soared. In developed countries, for instance, controlling illnesses have led to the growth of longevity.
In conclusion, the above-mentioned facts give one a glimpse of the potential results of changing life in the 21th century. As a result I would like to reiterate my opinion that living now is more confident an satisfactory

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errors in word types and sentence forms. ideas are to the point. avoid generalizing

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With the advent of different facilities in the area of technology and development in industry, transportation and living affairs, people could use these facilities and be more economical in spending time, cost and in applying a...

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With the advent of different facilities in the area of technology and development in industry, transportation and living affairs, people could use these facilities and be more economical in spending time, cost and in applying a physical force to do their daily works. I strongly believe that people in the present century are in the more convenient conditions than people living in the past centuries.

One of the most important progress in the 21st century is the new technology used in all aspects of life. A global network called internet is an universal phenomenon which helps people to connect with each other in the shortest time while they are far away from each other.

Individuals do not often go to the bank and they can do their banking operations using internet very fast. They are also able to buy various items by internet. For example, they buy their goods and sellers deliver them by post to the customers. People can pay their bills, children’s tuition, debt and so on by internet. People in the previous centuries did not have such facilities. They had to spend more time and more physical power to do their routine affairs.

Furthermore, all organizations are equipped with connected systematic network which stores a huge amount of data and information. It makes people use less paper and energy in their bureaucratic system. Therefore, people have less stress and anxiety about their duties and responsibilities and everything is done through information technology.

In conclusion, now people have a life with high quality because of the dramatic increase of facilities and communications around the word and it is expected that the quality of life is going to develop more as the world goes forward and human are discovering unknown secrets to upgrade human being.

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#من _کپی _نمیکنم
With the advent of different facilities in the area of technology and development in industry, transportation and living affairs, people could use these facilities and be more economical in spending time, cost and in applying a...

#من _کپی _نمیکنم
With the advent of different facilities in the area of technology and development in industry, transportation and living affairs, people could use these facilities and be more economical in spending time, cost and in applying a physical force to do their daily works. I strongly believe that people in the present century are in the more convenient conditions than people living in the past centuries.

One of the most important progress in the 21st century is the new technology used in all aspects of life. A global network called internet is an universal phenomenon which helps people to connect with each other in the shortest time while they are far away from each other.

Individuals do not often go to the bank and they can do their banking operations using internet very fast. They are also able to buy various items by internet. For example, they buy their goods and sellers deliver them by post to the customers. People can pay their bills, children’s tuition, debt and so on by internet. People in the previous centuries did not have such facilities. They had to spend more time and more physical power to do their routine affairs.

Furthermore, all organizations are equipped with connected systematic network which stores a huge amount of data and information. It makes people use less paper and energy in their bureaucratic system. Therefore, people have less stress and anxiety about their duties and responsibilities and everything is done through information technology.

In conclusion, now people have a life with high quality because of the dramatic increase of facilities and communications around the word and it is expected that the quality of life is going to develop more as the world goes forward and human are discovering unknown secrets to upgrade human being.

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#من_کپی_نمیکنم
#People who are living in the twenty-first century have a better quality of life compared to the former centuries. I strongly agree with this matter which will be discussed in the following.
With the advent of technology,...

#من_کپی_نمیکنم
#People who are living in the twenty-first century have a better quality of life compared to the former centuries. I strongly agree with this matter which will be discussed in the following.
With the advent of technology, significant features of life which may contribute to success has been enhanced extraordinarily. In the past, people were obliged to follow a complicated procedure to achieve to achieve their goals. However, human being’s responsibilities have been diminished which is due to the fact that machines will be operated instead of individuals.
As far as computers will be employed, mankind’s duties have been plunged and education abroad and recruitment has been facilitated. Imagine if the computers were not being used, people would have to carry out myriads of tasks. As a typical example, an applicant who is going to apply for a job or a university oversees used to go to the post office to send their documents and curriculum vitae to the destination institute or they had to attend diverse offices to be recruited which was time-consuming and costly. In addition, access to the internet has overcome most of the barriers. Nowadays, sending emails has been substituted for previous methods which has narrowed the yawning gaps and boundaries between countries.
Sedentary life style will be compensated for going to the gym and being involved in outdoor activities, while taking advantages from major achievements without having to waste their time, energy and financial resources because of following demanding and long procedures to accomplish their goals. Not only people feel free to devote their time to recreational activities, but also are able to enjoy considerable intellectual and genius efforts
In conclusion, quality of life has been improved in an outstanding way. We owe this considerable progress to the advent of technology which has facilitated job seeking and being admitted to study in other countries. Furthermore, sedentary life style which is one of the demerits of breakthroughs of computers will be made up for athletic and pastime activities. Therefore, I am fond of this matter.
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People living in the 21st century have a better quality of life than the previous centuries. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Some people are inclined toward the opinion that individuals are experiencing the more...

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People living in the 21st century have a better quality of life than the previous centuries. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Some people are inclined toward the opinion that individuals are experiencing the more convenient life in the 21st century than the past, while some others disagree with that viewpoint. As far as I am concerned, I side with the former because of the following reasons illustrate this perspective.
First and foremost, the people’s life is potentially affected by technology. Without a shadow of a doubt, if a technology is utilized effectively, the myriad of obstacles are more likely quickly solved. Moreover, diminishing various issues which seemed overwhelming, far-reachable and unsolvable in the past provides the more pleasant life for the today’s mankind. Put differently, people’s life that access to these technological facilities has changed significantly and uplift considerably. To shed more light in this case, imagine a case which a student has gone abroad, where is far from his family and friends and country, to pursue his education. In this circumstance, using the communication soft-wares via his smart phone can be an effective means to take full advantage of technology to feel less homesick and more in touch with whom he missed so much. Hence, he is able to improve his academic life in that foreign country thanks to this technological contemporary era.
The second most exquisite reason is that burst of information in 21st century plays a crucial role in modern lifestyles. Indeed, having more knowledge in every fields and situation, people enable to distinguish the more beneficial route and the wiser choice. Furthermore, making these sound decisions can provide people the opportunity to pave the road to making the more terrific life. Put differently, profitable data which is more available recently than the previous time brings more convenient atmosphere for living. For the purpose of illustration, consider a housewife who lived in the 20th century who was not able to get useful information from available trusted online sources about diet in terms of healthy foods and profitable manners of preparing dishes. It is boldly clear that had there been these available, trustworthy and knowledgeable data, she could have been exposed to the right manners of healthy nutrition and less getting sick and improve the quality of the life. Therefore, the new generations of housewives due to getting in touch with this information enjoy the much fascinating life.
In conclusion, the quality of these days life has considerably enhanced owing to the plethora of beneficial conveniences for not only the advent of technology, but also explosion of the useful knowledge which is easy to access so that people can be benefited from. By contemplating all these reasons, does anyone still believe that these days' living has not improved in the more pleasant ways in comparison with the past time?

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It is argued that inhabitants of the 21st century have a better standard of living than people who lived in the past. Personally, I partly agree with this idea.
In support of my idea, I should say that although technological advancements have...

It is argued that inhabitants of the 21st century have a better standard of living than people who lived in the past. Personally, I partly agree with this idea.
In support of my idea, I should say that although technological advancements have provided a convenient life for the general public, some valuable traditions have been forgotten by people. For instance, in earlier time, members of a family spent more time with each other as there was a special intimacy between them while in modern lifestyle individuals devote most of their time to work due to high cost of living. In addition, past generations had a simple way of life as factors such as simplicity and honesty were the most important for them, in contrast most people who live in the modern world are materialistic and they think wealth and having a luxurious lives bring a status symbol for them.
Regardless of items mentioned above, living in 21st century brings many benefits for individuals. The most obvious gain is technologies of communication. In the past, people's scope of relationship was so limited while nowadays they could communicate with their friends or relatives from all around of the world by the internet and social softwares. Moreover, there are a wide range of educational sources for students on the web, also they can take online courses of the most famous universities in other countries while conducting research in the past was time-consuming and researchers spent long times in libraries to find a suitable reference.
In conclusion, I believe that apart from abundant advantages of living in 21st century, it cause to some customs and past worthwhile opinions have disappeared by passing time.

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# من-کپی-نمی کنم. It is totally argued that living in the new era have much more merits rather than the past. However eye-catching progress has taken place, modern life has had a variety of consequences as well. Overall, I completely disagree...

# من-کپی-نمی کنم. It is totally argued that living in the new era have much more merits rather than the past. However eye-catching progress has taken place, modern life has had a variety of consequences as well. Overall, I completely disagree with this idea that people enjoy convenient conditions in the contemporary period.

When it comes to the 21st century, the first thing that all of a sudden comes to mind would be advanced modern cities. Since a large number of people are more likely to live in large cities, it is led to an external phenomenon named rush-hour. The streets are so crowded, there is hardly room to move on the pavements. In fact, it takes ages for a bus to get to you because the traffic on the roads has virtually come to a standstill. Even when a bus does at last arrive, it is so full, It cannot take any more passengers.

The second most subject that should be launched into a full investigation is pollution. To clarify, Polluting air not only will contaminate the atmosphere, but also will disrupt the life of city-dwellers. It is meant that air pollution as much as goes by that even the distinction between day and night is lost. The flow of traffic goes on unceasingly and the noise never stops. Although city-dwellers take full advantage of living in the 21st century, they are exposed to catastrophic issues. City-dwellers, for example, live under constant threat. The crime rate in most cities is very high. Moreover, cities breed crime and violence and are full of places you would afraid to visit at night.

In conclusion, I can understand why some people are thought that modern society can provide them with the privilege of living in various dimensions but, I am not an advocate of such an unnatural way of life.

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As we know, In the shadow of modern life, living has changed in comparison with last century. I completely agree that the level of life has increased and been better than previous century.

There are several reasons why I believe...

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As we know, In the shadow of modern life, living has changed in comparison with last century. I completely agree that the level of life has increased and been better than previous century.

There are several reasons why I believe that modern era has elevate the quality of life. Firstly, with the help of new technology we can live easier than ever before with more accommodation. For example, today's women work less than before at home because the household chores have been mechanized; many equipment are at their service, such as dish washer, vacuum cleaner robot and many other home robots assistant. Secondly, the pace of life has increased and everybody is in a rush. Therefore, new technology helps people to save their time by automatic equipment instead of manual working. Finally, I believe that in the 21st century people have more information about healthcare in the world and other lifestyle, because of better telecommunication services, such as internet.

On the other hand, today's world like as a race track and people work in long hours; then, they do not have enough time for living with loved ones in their house. Hence, despite the quality of family life improvement of technology has decreased and family communication is at risk of dissolution. For instance, in the light of internet and social network people communicate with loved ones in faraway.

In conclusion, I agree with this true that in today's developed world, quality of life style has changes to move forward.

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#من_کپی_نمیکنم
Sometimes for getting good decision in comparison we need to have more details about subjects. So first of all we must do a field study about living in past and search about those periods of times with focus on some kind of...

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Sometimes for getting good decision in comparison we need to have more details about subjects. So first of all we must do a field study about living in past and search about those periods of times with focus on some kind of facilities which people used them for living easily. After gathering our information we can make good decision.
However in my opinion living in twenty first century is very easiest,because human is living with new dimensions of world which in past people could not think about them. As well as nowadays people found new ways for doing difficult works and with spend a little bit energy we can do some kind of things which they needed to a lot of energy in the past. Likewise people in twenty one century use their brain for doing everything and in this way we use thousands of new technologies. We can find every information as soon as possible in Internet and this access makes a satisfaction in human but in the past this situation was revers and people in the past had to spend most of his or her time to find an answer about a question. I think it was so injustice for them.
On the other hand if they had not hardworking personality we could not reach to this situation. So we must be very appreciate of them about their attempts. In addition I want to say, this modern world is made by their practice to find authentic answers for their questions.
For example these technologies that we use them every day are invented by improving basic inventions that our ancestors found them. In the past people liked to find a way for flying in sky and two brothers called Rite brothers were pioneer to make a initially model to flight. Nowadays big plans are designed by getting inspiration from their invention.
In conclusion, I think, we are living in a twenty first century with a lot of technologies around us that are heritages of our ancestors. So we must be careful about our achievements because these treasures in twenty one century need to protect for delivering to our children in future. Finally I think, we are living in modern period of time with a lot of facilities and new technology, however, we are involved by some new problems and for solving these problems we must spend our live for finding the answers that these answers will be keys for opening new doors to our children in their world whit a lot of new question that, they will have to spend their time for find answer for them and this cycle will be repeat and repeat.

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It is argued that living in contemporary era is more convenient than in earlier times. While it is indisputable that great strides in different aspects of technology have made our lives much easier, it is not the case that the current generation...

It is argued that living in contemporary era is more convenient than in earlier times. While it is indisputable that great strides in different aspects of technology have made our lives much easier, it is not the case that the current generation is living in better conditions. In fact, I partly agree with the statement.
On the one hand, when we look back on the past generations they were deprived of usual facilities and they did not have any imagination about the cutting edge equipments which we take them for granted. To be more precise, they could utilize neither high-speed trains, airplanes nor IT technologies. Furthermore, they suffered from poor sanitation. It is difficult to believe that a simple illness could claim the lives of many people. However, while it is supposed that such a slow-pace and primitive lifestyle would be so boring and uncomfortable, I personally contend that these people enjoyed things which today we long for . To illustrate, they were so fortunate to live in a world with no air and sound pollution. Also they did not have to keep up with the fast-pace modern lifestyle and had the opportunity to live in a calm and non stressful environment.
On the other hand, it is undeniable that modern life has offered us high standards of living. Thanks to up-to -the-minute technology lots of our dreams have become reality and as a result our life is much more adventurous as well as time-saving. On the contrary, although owing to medical breakthroughs most of disease are curable, it should not be overlooked that a great deal of these disorders result from modern lifestyle. For instance, according to the features, cancer had an increasing trend because of harmful radiations of cell phones as well as air and water contamination.In addition, sedentary lifestyle has brought heart attack, obesity and depression which decrease the quality of life.
All in all, I admit that modern Technology facilitates the way we live. Nevertheless, our ancestors lived in better mental and physical conditions.

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#من-کپی-نمیکنم

Having access to the best standard of living had always been a challenging case, and people in different periods have thought about the best way by which they could improve the quality of life. It is difficult to compare the...

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Having access to the best standard of living had always been a challenging case, and people in different periods have thought about the best way by which they could improve the quality of life. It is difficult to compare the amount of life quality between centuries because of a range of experiences that individuals have had in different years.
According to the prevailing attitude, it is totally true that human being has put a huge effort to make a life with high standard, and this goal has been gradually achieved during present century. Most people in different parts of the world have an easy and instant access to the average quality of life precisely due to the advanced technology. As a result of progression in various sciences, traditional instruments have been replaced by modern things. For example the communication means have been improved, and people are able to socialize with each other far more convenient compared with the past. Similarly, they could save their time and energy because of the internet that plays a significant role in today’s lifestyle. To illustrate, individuals do shopping from the comfort of their own home or they benefit from the widespread use of the flow of information. In short, all these alterations have enhanced the quality of living during the 21st century.
However, modern lifestyle has increased a variety of diseases and social disorders alongside aforementioned advantages. From my point of view, people living in previous era had encountered less health problems, such as blood pressure and heart disease as a result of pleasant weather without any air pollution and traffic congestion. I assume that new lifestyle brings some drawbacks alongside its merits.it appears to me that , not only did modern lifestyle make contribution to new disasters, but it also gives rise to the social and economic corruptions. Therefore, in spite of poor technology, people did enjoy their life and healthy during previous centuries.
Overall, 21st century has been a period of time that human being has faced a huge alterations, and all of them have had a significant influence on people’ s lives. Although the standard of life has improved by these changes, it is vital to take precautionary and preventative steps so as to decrease its negative points.

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There is a belief that quality of life in the 21 century is better than the previous centuries, and as long as I'm concerned it is true.
Although some might disagree with this approach due to a lot of stress preasure and even...

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There is a belief that quality of life in the 21 century is better than the previous centuries, and as long as I'm concerned it is true.
Although some might disagree with this approach due to a lot of stress preasure and even wars we are dealing with whole around the world, in my opinion we are living in a much easier and healthier life. As science has been developing, the level of knowledge of man has raised, too. So it has become simpler for him to face the difficulties and solve them.
For instant, the deseases which used to kill people are disapeared compelitly today, and no one has to fight with bacherias anymore. However instead of some old deseases we are dealing with unknown viruses, I suppose that as long as we believe in science and not superestiouse, as was the only answer the man had, we can find cure for those hard illnesses that take people's lives today.
For another example, nowadays we are armed with so many fasilitys and equipments that are computerized to make our life more pleasure and comfortable. Computers have got through our lives in every aspects, from transportation and education to communication and travelling, not to say anything about doing house chourses and entertainments.
To sum up ,despite we do know that human kind is in fight with a lot of things today like lack of food or water and is interacting in wars whole around the world, I have faith that as long as we can recognize the problem, today, we are able to find a solution and make the world a better place to live.

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Standard of living has undergone significant changes over the past decades. Thus, when the question arises as to whether life’s quality has improved in 21 century, people have divided perspectives. I strongly believe that...

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Standard of living has undergone significant changes over the past decades. Thus, when the question arises as to whether life’s quality has improved in 21 century, people have divided perspectives. I strongly believe that contemporary people enjoy higher standard of living than ever before.
It is true that public health has been boosted in recent decades. In the past people suffered from lack of hygiene, however, highly effectiveness ways have been provided to enhance public health. Appropriate sewage, adequate drinking water could be two obvious examples that have outstanding contribution to improve quality of life for people from all walks of life. In addition, those mentioned features have increased not only standard of living but also public welfare.
Technology, moreover, has revolutionized countless aspects of people’s life including life’s quality. Medical advancement is one of the outstanding breakthroughs which has brought about more life expectancy compared to the past. While In the earlier time people lost their loved ones due to minor aliment, today’s people are given more opportunity to live longer thanks for cutting-edge technology even with major health problems. In fact, technology has been incorporated into mankind life, developing the standard of living.
Provided facilities are, furthermore, an integral part of a high quality life. Despite air pollution and traffic congestion, people have enormously benefited from equipment and facilities which are accessible in their daily life. Recreational resorts, skyscrapers, public transport, and private cars are case in point to illustrate high-level of standard in today’s life; as a result all these facilities relieve the potential pain that people had to endure owing to shortage of amenities in the past.
In conclusion, human achieves a great success in providing high quality life and I am in the line with the statement that people enjoy life more than their ancestors and life become far more easier than ever before due to numerous facilities and achievements that are available in human life.

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Without any doubt, the world we now live on has witnessed significant developments in different areas such as medical care, technology and so on. Therefore, it seems that people now enjoy better and easier lives compared to the...

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Without any doubt, the world we now live on has witnessed significant developments in different areas such as medical care, technology and so on. Therefore, it seems that people now enjoy better and easier lives compared to the past. I strongly believe that from different perspectives it can be obviously perceived that the quality of life has considerably improved in the 21st century.
First of all, promotion in public health can be considered as the most fundamental development of the current century. Thanks to advancements in health sector now far less people throughout the world die due to serious ailments. Various disease that used to known as deadly now can be easily cured by the new methods of treatment and medicines. For instance, different methods of treatments now have been discovered by the scientists to cure cancer that in previous centuries was a major cause of fatality in societies.
Further and even more importantly, though, life for human has become much easier and safer as a result of the huge amount of technological advancements in various areas. Today, there are a great deal of gadgets that help people in doing their daily tasks. A salient example of this in the field of communication is the invention of the internet that has revolutionized our way of communication and interaction. Indeed, it has bridged distances and people around the world have not to travel long distances for visiting purposes.
When it comes to social welfare, it becomes considerable to note that society members now are more aware of their rights, mainly due to the widespread availability of the mass media among almost all people. The public awareness in different matters has increased in result of improvements in standards of education. Consequently, we could now hardly perceive common things in the past like slaveholding which are clearly against basic human rights.
By way of conclusion, I once again reaffirm my position that the world in 21st century has become a better place to live, to an immense amount thanks to advancements and promotions in technology, medicine and education.

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People living in the 21st century have a better quality of life than the previous centuries. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

my opinion is completely in harmony with the idea that we have a better quality of life compared...

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People living in the 21st century have a better quality of life than the previous centuries. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

my opinion is completely in harmony with the idea that we have a better quality of life compared to that of people who lived in the past. in fact, what i think is as time passes on, quality of life grows progressively. one might argue that his/her ancestors had a much easier dwelling since they didnt have to deal with the complexities and mental or even to some extent, social quandaries of modern human. not only that, but in addition to suggested reasons, which focus on the negative aspects of modern life, you can easily come up with some benefits of living in medieval age, e.g. the air is fresher, cause polution emitting facilities are yet to be established, your mind is a lot more at ease, cause you dont have much to worry about, and more importantly, you wouldnt "know" as much as we do today. however, nothing is perfect. i believe if the pros and cons of a certain era are listed with quality of life prespective, 21st century will have the upper hand for sure.
the main and most outstanding difference of current lifestyle compared with previous versions would be the science. the advent of technology and the advancements in different fields of science has surely had the most infulence on our lives. we know a lot more about almost everything. if we assume social welfare and expected life as most infuelncing factors for determining quality of life, it can be shown that developements in economics and medicine will lead to a better QoL. there is no doubt we live in the age that human science and knowledge is at its apex.
my second argument highlights the fact that naturally, with the passage of time, the living has become more stable and less and less distrubances ocur in our daily life. it's an undisputable fact that more stable governments, more knowledgable citizens, better suting laws, closer relations among civilizations and etc. are among achievements of the current century. generally speaking, modern human has more reliable safety, income, health or even food.
since dawn of man, hindrances, threats and challenges have always been there. he would struggle to find a decent cave to settle in, and his decendants are struggling to find a decent planet to do so. all in all, if we weigh things according to QoL, i would say its pretty obvious that today, QoL is at its zenith.

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It is argued that people are generally gained maximum benefit from the present century due to a range of facilities which are served people rather than previous decades. Admittedly, I am in complete accord with the given statement and the...

It is argued that people are generally gained maximum benefit from the present century due to a range of facilities which are served people rather than previous decades. Admittedly, I am in complete accord with the given statement and the following reasons can justify this view
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The most cogent argument in line with the stated claim is that technological improvement in health care can be greatly observed in this century. An exact diagnosis of severe diseases can be made by using advanced and innovative devices compare to the past that many ailments seemed to be chronic and incurable due to medical deficiencies. Accordingly , the average life expectancy has been increased in recent years. That is to say , the affinity between death rate and the quality of life is remarkable as by improving the quality of life, the percentage of death would significantly decreased and therefore people have more chances to live longer.
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Similarly, the internet plays a pivotal role in the 21st century as it has become one of the most blessings that modern world has given to mankind. In fact , people 's lives almost come to a total standstill without the internet since everything in our world today depends on it. Take searching method, for example, in the past conducting research entailed long hours searching library shelves, now , however, the same information can be accessed at the click of a button. Furthermore, these up to the minute social modes of communication have led people to contact with loved ones in faraway places and global trade which were inconceivable a few decades ago
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In conclusion, I would like to reiterate my opinion that latest innovation would facilitate the way people lived in the previous century. To recap, humans derive a great pleasure from various technological advances of the 21st century ranging from medical progression to different ways of communication.

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A number of people believe that currently life has higher quality than last centuries. This belief is rejected by others. While there are certainly valid arguments to the contrary, I strongly believe that today, life has the...

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A number of people believe that currently life has higher quality than last centuries. This belief is rejected by others. While there are certainly valid arguments to the contrary, I strongly believe that today, life has the highest quality and it is increasing more and more.

On one hand, individuals had much larger family and less concerns in 20th century and before than now. Family members lived together. Children spent a lot of time of the day in the house. These families often chose spacious houses. Their offspring usually worked with parents in varied jobs. Children, especially boys, did not leave the home even after marriage. All of the family members had a source income in old lifestyle. Hence, they had not worries about their future.

On the other hand, computers and the Internet has brought significant changes to our lives in recent years. First of all, the Internet has revolutionized the way we communicate. Everyone, for instance, easily can make a video call with their loved ones in faraway places. Further and even more importantly, though, a great deal of information can be accessed by society members thanks to the net. When a person needs to know about anything, they are helped by strong search engines in the cyber environments.

By way of conclusion, I once again reaffirm my position that life of the people living in this century has been easier than ever before in many aspects. Flow of the information and easy communication are two phenomena from which society members have benefited greatly. These changes could not be comparable with previous centuries.

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It is hard to explicitly state that per head of population derives a better lifestyle in a current century rather than they used to be in the 20th. I partly agreed that the benefits of living in the 21st overweight the drawbacks...

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It is hard to explicitly state that per head of population derives a better lifestyle in a current century rather than they used to be in the 20th. I partly agreed that the benefits of living in the 21st overweight the drawbacks of living in its previous.
About the benefits of living in the 21st and enjoy of its quality, there are some benefits that could be mentioned. Firstly, with the advent of cutting-edge technology, distance is attached with less important to communicate. The Skype, for instance, paved the way for people to have online video chat and get rid of the scenes of frustration for who have relative in overseas and confront with the obstacle to visit them personally. Secondly, the state-of-the-art transportation is set to much popular, to illustrate this, common people are now able to travel on the airplane and express train more than only a fraction of the community used to occupied those. As a matter of fact travel with fine quality to large distance were only restricted to the rich nation but, for now, the reports speak of over 2 billion travel yearly in the entire universe.
Contrastingly, there are some drawbacks appear in the 21st which have not existed in its past century. The uprisings in some countries contribute to unwanted migration about 4 billion people and they flocked to the first-world nation with plenty of death and injuries left behind in their ways. The report speaks of the buddy due to war and jeopardizes journey to run away from domestic insurgency increased dramatically about two-time from the 20st for the same assertion. In addition, the global warming is set to be an unsolved dangerous issue which threatens the entire universe and thanks to some unscrupulous governments it is too optimistic to find a way to get rid of it.
To sum up, comparing the elements of living in the 21st to the 20th century the people are living in current time cannot complain about it, not as the people who live in the last century.

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It is hard to explicitly state that per head of population derives a better lifestyle in a current century rather than they used to be in the 20th. I partly agreed that the benefits of living in the 21st overweight the drawbacks of living in its...

It is hard to explicitly state that per head of population derives a better lifestyle in a current century rather than they used to be in the 20th. I partly agreed that the benefits of living in the 21st overweight the drawbacks of living in its previous.
About the benefits of living in the 21st and enjoy of its quality, there are some benefits that could be mentioned. Firstly, with the advent of cutting-edge technology, distance is attached with less important to communicate. The Skype, for instance, paved the way for people to have online video chat and get rid of the scenes of frustration for who have relative in overseas and confront with the obstacle to visit them personally. Secondly, the state-of-the-art transportation is set to much popular, to illustrate this, common people are now able to travel on the airplane and express train more than only a fraction of the community used to occupied those. As a matter of fact travel with fine quality to large distance were only restricted to the rich nation but, for now, the reports speak of over 2 billion travel yearly in the entire universe.
Contrastingly, there are some drawbacks appear in the 21st which have not existed in its past century. The uprisings in some countries contribute to unwanted migration about 4 billion people and they flocked to the first-world nation with plenty of death and injuries left behind in their ways. The report speaks of the buddy due to war and jeopardizes journey to run away from domestic insurgency increased dramatically about two-time from the 20st for the same assertion. In addition, the global warming is set to be an unsolved dangerous issue which threatens the entire universe and thanks to some unscrupulous governments it is too optimistic to find a way to get rid of it.
To sum up, comparing the elements of living in the 21st to the 20th century the people are living in current time cannot complain about it, not as the people who live in the last century.

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Quality of life has been increased since past century. There are many research have been done in health science and technology, for example aero transport makes faster and easier way to travel with out hesitation. Hence, I believe there is a...

Quality of life has been increased since past century. There are many research have been done in health science and technology, for example aero transport makes faster and easier way to travel with out hesitation. Hence, I believe there is a giant promotion in quality of life for people.

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With comparing the key factors of living between the current century and its last one, it is hard to explicitly state that per head of population are undergoing a fine lifestyle. IN my opinion, I partly agree with this assertion...

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With comparing the key factors of living between the current century and its last one, it is hard to explicitly state that per head of population are undergoing a fine lifestyle. IN my opinion, I partly agree with this assertion that people in 21st century derived an excel standard of life rather than its previous hundred decades.
On the one hand, with the advent of suicide bomber terrorism in the 21th century and the fact that they can emerge everywhere, this concern has its own potential to change people’s thought and behavior. The study speaks of the upsurging in the sense of racism in Manchester city after ISIS attacked in the concert which contributed about 100 deaths. In addition, the rapid deterioration of the environment is believed to impose a severe threat to people’s survival in the years ahead and air quality as well which stated from 2000. To illustrate this only a fraction of individuals in India have access to clean water and the same situation is in Pakistan which always brings conflict in the Middle East.
On the other hand, state-of-the-art technology brings about cascade opportunities for people medical treatment and preserve contemporary society from the variety of jeopardizing contingencies disease. According to newest pharmacy industrial establishments, the success of cure-all Cholera in all around the universe leads to many of poor country inhabitance started a joy-full life in their homeland opposite the past that they used to migrate. Equally, the widespread Internet is about to make online communication with all walks of life much more popular. Thanks to this, the distances are attached with less importance in friendship and as a matter of fact, all these good happen in 21st.
To sum up, comparing human’s lifestyle quality in this century and before it. I think that not only live in 21th brings about wellness and fair for people, but also confront them with many unpleasant unwanted items

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As the 21st century continues to unfold, people live most qualities compare to the past. I personally believe that this opinion is true because of the advent of technologies. The reasons for my positions are as follows:
As far as you see, after...

As the 21st century continues to unfold, people live most qualities compare to the past. I personally believe that this opinion is true because of the advent of technologies. The reasons for my positions are as follows:
As far as you see, after the emergence of the internet, technology improved and an array of devices has beneficial been created which caused everything has been easy. The transportation industry is one of the things that has recently undergone changes that have made it possible to reduce the presence of people to purchase. Persons can buy anything ranging from foodstuffs to clothes like shoe and scarf without bearing any traffic which can help to people for saving their time for more spending time with together. In addition, individuals can use even with a smartphone for checking their emails over the internet and also surf the useful websites.

On the other hand, to keep abreast of the 21st century, the large number of people are seeking to receive tertiary education which has been motivated for doctors and scientists to improved their skills and knowledge to make a better world than the earlier centuries. For instance, today's doctors can cure many patients in several diseases that were unknown in the past. Such as cancer, colitis and also recently discovered new methods for treating the AIDs. In fact, technologies in medical science likely fairly impact on progressing in medicines.

In conclusion, by adding the internet to our lives many things like transporting, shopping are easily done which makes the quality of life in the world more than in the past.

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Some people believe that life quality of human kind has improved over current century in comparison with the bygone era. In my opinion, this argument may be true considering development in different aspects of life quality which will be...

Some people believe that life quality of human kind has improved over current century in comparison with the bygone era. In my opinion, this argument may be true considering development in different aspects of life quality which will be elaborated as follows.
Since wealth and prosperity have improved in an accelerated pace in recent decades, it has resulted in several aspects of higher life quality. In health and hygiene sector for instance, invasive and epidemic disease have eradicated so they take less tolls and impose lower cost to societies. Moreover, nursing and health care have been revolutionized particularly for the elderlies and the children, in addition to notable increase in public awareness in this field. These all had positive effect on peoples’ life quality. Besides, not only are efficiency and quality of social services incomparable in retrospect, but also accommodation facilities in both urban and rural areas are much better now. People live in safer houses and are less vulnerable in natural disasters such as earthquakes or tornados, thanks to more advanced engineering techniques and higher technology. The access to clean and treated water also is not comparable with past centuries. People drink and cook with clean water and are more sensitive about personal cares and hygiene. We have also more food now and starvation is not an essential concern in many countries.
There is no doubt that cultural factors like arts, music and books are directly influential in life quality. Despite past centuries that these factors were special for the higher levels of society, all social levels are exposed to several cultural factors now. Artifacts which are installed or exhibited in public areas like parks, squares or even subway stations are suitable citation that more people have been allowed to derive pleasure and increase life quality in an equitable condition.
In conclusion, I agree that life quality has improved significantly in 21th century thanks to developments of human civilization in several aspects.

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I agree life is better than before because people in the past had simple life and now we have modern life and I like it ! We can communicate with other people in the world and we can know about their culture from internet and we...

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I agree life is better than before because people in the past had simple life and now we have modern life and I like it ! We can communicate with other people in the world and we can know about their culture from internet and we can learn a lot of things by technology and this keep us power ... these days we can recognize between bad manners and good manners of course some people don’t attetnsion to this things but they know !!!!

We have to learn a lot things that we can live in the world ... and I think these days people have creative mind more than before and I think it’s good point ...I think children are more clever than before and they can recognize bad things of good things and they can solve problem very soon because their parents have a lot of information about their behavior to their children

I hope our life get better and better than before and we’ll see all of things change in the good way

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