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Some people say history is one of the most important school subjects. Other people think that in today’s world subjects like science and technology are more important than history.
Discuss these views and give your opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
You should write at least 250 words.

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There are opposing views about the value of learning different disciplines at school. While some advocate the idea that students need to be taught about historic happenings, others attach greater importance to other scientific subjects or the ones focused on technological advances. Admittedly, there are valid arguments on both sides of the controversy which will be elaborated in this essay followed by a reasonable conclusion.

On the one hand, the supporters of history put forward some compelling reasons to justify their point of view. Firstly, what they argue is that going over the past events will give learners a more fertile imagination. In other words, given that the majority of school lessons deal with serious and tedious facts, learning about historical accounts can stimulate learners’ imagination. For example, the intriguing stories behind wars and battles are a good illustration of this justification. Secondly, a sound knowledge of what a country has been through is absolutely necessary for every educated and literate person. To put it differently, regardless of one’s major or specialty, they are expected to have a good understanding of their country’s background.

On the other hand, the opponents assert that in modern era this time and energy should be allotted to scientific fields of study and technological developments.  The most rational argument in favor of this assertion is that technology has formed an integral part of everyone’s life. Therefore, being taught how to work with these tools and appliances is of immense value since we cannot survive without them. This is amply illustrated by computer which is of paramount importance and almost every learner uses this device for writing their assignments or doing research on the Internet. Moreover, unlike history which is nothing but abstract knowledge with virtually no real application, science has countless practical uses. More specifically, scientific information can be applied in various real life situations.

To conclude, there are convincing arguments on both sides. However, I am of the opinion that compared with history, scientific subjects can prove more beneficial for schoolers. This is mainly because they are indispensable to modern life and have useful applications in reality.

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آقای حامد محمد حسینی از خداوند می خوام صدها برابر اونچه که رو می خواید بهتون عطا کنه ممنون
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سلام و عرض ادب
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آقای حامد محمد حسینی از خداوند می خوام صدها برابر اونچه که رو می خواید بهتون عطا کنه ممنون
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Choosing subjects of taught have been at the center of a global debate for several years. Some people claim that the historical topics one of an important school subject, but some people oppose mentioned the idea. This essay deals with arguments...

Choosing subjects of taught have been at the center of a global debate for several years. Some people claim that the historical topics one of an important school subject, but some people oppose mentioned the idea. This essay deals with arguments for and against this controversial issue.
Those people who suggest that pupils should learn history are historians. Secondly, they believe that students can study history books which illustrate with full-color photographs, and they understand the past of the world. In addition, Humans refer to their history book and collect information about race, ancestors, wars, and Honors. For example, ancient monuments demonstrate how people lived in the past, and how they were able to construct large buildings. This means that students will able to know about their history, and they will strive to develop their country.
However, people who oppose historical topics think that teach students about sciences and technology such as mathematics, chemistry, physics are essential. They feel that if students study advanced sciences, they will be able to achieve a high-level life. Furthermore, developed countries need experts who are able to solve problems of countries, and modern societies are built by specialists. For instance, everybody who likes becoming an engineer should insist on studying sciences such as mathematics and physics. Thus, learning science and technology causes them to change their attitude and try to create trendy societies.
In conclusion, I personally eager to learn the sciences and technology. I think that while there may be obvious benefits to learning history book in school, overall, students can learn them at out of schools. Teachers who educate their student about basic sciences should enough information, and their impact can be most important, because they may not be able to learn basic science at out of school.

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History as an inseparable part of social frameworks has been addressed over centuries. However, the extension of science branches has been led to the formation of professionalism on some novel subjects depending on the technology development.
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History as an inseparable part of social frameworks has been addressed over centuries. However, the extension of science branches has been led to the formation of professionalism on some novel subjects depending on the technology development.
Although technology-based issues organize the great components of our life, but I believe history, as the main factor in the genesis of new social, and cultural norms should be more considered seriously.
The first reason for this opinion refers to existence of strong historical roots on the moderate of public evolution on the contrary to the emerging issues of modernity.
In another word, ancient national customs, religious ceremonies, and local celebrations obtained from historical backing up establish the main public opinion stations to deal with cultural movements raise from modernism in a wide range of topics such as family confederation, personal identity, and national pride.
In another hand, history, as an prominent story, which reflects the past decision- making results and the end of political events, can be used to guide the governments to make an universal sustainable peace. Study of the effects of wars, agreements, and negotiations introduce more confident routs to move the societies to excellence beside achieving to an international compromise.
The third benefit of studying history is the creation of more familiarity in the recent generation especially in some nations with rich historical observable elements in the old buildings and their honorific celebrity's works. It is a powerful potential to attract high levels of revenues from tourism industry development through reduce generation gap
As it was discussed, the extension of new technology- based targets should not lead to ignorance of history role in the framing historical based societies' behaviors. Solving the challenges with the focus on similar factual experiences help the governments to make decisions with low- level risks and create the world as the best place to live. Additionally, Emphasizing on the history and its related concepts like to truism industry can attract more opportunities to investment and creation of positive economic indicators in potential locations.

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Undoubtedly, whatever is taught in school directly enjoy the most noteworthy influence on students' personality factors. On the one hand, some people hold their opinion on that enhancing the knowledge of students regarding what had happened in...

Undoubtedly, whatever is taught in school directly enjoy the most noteworthy influence on students' personality factors. On the one hand, some people hold their opinion on that enhancing the knowledge of students regarding what had happened in the past is so highly vital and effective rather than some other subjects such as science and technology, on the other hand the others think otherwise. As far as I am concerned, of equal importance are the school books with the divergent contents, so that irrespective of their topics, ones ought to learn wholly.
To be more precise, with reference to some people idea, the more information about the past history ones have, the more authority they will bear to control their future lifestyle. In other words, applying well-rounded experiences of our ancestors in our lives in these days is one of the very most highly appreciated privileges of being aware of their precious life history including their prosperities, failures, key behavioral characteristics, interpersonal relationships and so on. By considering this, it would be given us an opportunity to pass these precious points of their life story to our future generation to lead a fuller life.
On the other side, some people think that with the galloping race of technology advancement, the role of science and modernity is worthwhile than anything else. With this in mind, while posing a threat on the effect of history information, technologies might on other occasions, give students more chances to become self-motivated and self- directed to erect their future salubrious. Meanwhile, as a matter of facts, in my view point and by considering both views, all of the issues namely, history, science, and technology to name but a few, should be taken into account in an equal manner, due to the fact that these subjects utterly are correlated with each other, that is such as complement, have even influence in their daily lifestyle.
In conclusion, despite the fact that some individuals believe that history as indigenous subject which must to be taught in school is the most top-effective role model, by doing so not only students, but also all of the other people can emulate the progenitor's experiences to avoid failing. Furthermore, in the contrast view, this role is shifted to the technology and science, in that we are living in the modernity age and everything is affected by its oscillation. Finally, my perspective was in different vision, in which I believe that all of issues are interwoven to each other with the same importance.

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history in school curriculum is a controversial point of view in contemporary world .although
some people would argue that some school subjects like science and technology play pivotal role in modern era, other people,including me ,are of the...

history in school curriculum is a controversial point of view in contemporary world .although
some people would argue that some school subjects like science and technology play pivotal role in modern era, other people,including me ,are of the opinion that history should be tought in school curriculum.
on the one hand, huge number of people mention that science and technology,for instance, are more important than history. due to multiple reasons. first and foremost, science and technology have revolutionised
in modern world. thanks to the breakthrough in science and development in technology our life became more easier than the past.the salient example spring to mind is internet.it,beyond the doub, has changed our live and we can now keep in contact with our equintances while we do shopping online. it could,however, save our time that is money nowadays. second,which is very important,is that studying history in schools would be squandering time, effort and also natural resources. it is believed that books for pupils spoil money and can result in deforestration and desrtification and have irriversible damage to both environment and individuals in long-term.
, on the other hand, vast majority of people like me, think that history is very important in school subject owning to the manifold reasons. the paramount reasonl would stipulate is that by studying historyin schoos children can learn more about their ancestors for example, how they interact with other nations or even how they become law-abiding. apart fromt that, they will be able to know about human's error happened in earlier time. fore example, having seen the Chernobyl catastrophy ,scientists find it very important to impose new legislation on nuclear energy.thus it could be very informative to ther.
by the way of conclusion, while some people cite that history in school curriculum is energy and time-consuming, i ,personally, believe that it is very helpful and educational.

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It is believed that history is a crucial part of educational subjects where as others argued that practical subjects such as science and technology are more vital than theoretical fields. Both sides of the argument present rational ideas, which...

It is believed that history is a crucial part of educational subjects where as others argued that practical subjects such as science and technology are more vital than theoretical fields. Both sides of the argument present rational ideas, which will be elaborated.

On the one hand, supporters of history as a crucial school subjects asserts that benefits accruing from them are by no means negligible. With the aid of history people can be familiar with their ancestors and also how they face challenges. This will consequently help pupils not to repeat same mistake time and again. The past world wars with the devastating consequences is one of examples.

On the other hand, others believed that practical subjects such as science and technology are of importance and put forward some reasons. The most compelling reason justifying their assertion is that there is growing trend toward technological advancements. Recent developments in technology can be observed in every day aspects of life. A good illustration of this is communication, one of the era which completely transformed. In past, it took numerous days so a message could be convoyed while smartphones enable us to send a multimedia message within a seconds.

To conclude, there are logical points on both sides; however, I am of the opinion that practical issues such as science and technology must be regarded as crucial items, and schools must consider tham as top priorities. This is mainly because past is gone and we cannot improvise it by any chance. We do need to focus on future. It is obvious that improvement in technology and science can lead to better future.

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Although, a group of people think history is a significant major at school, others believe nowadays new knowledge such as science and technology are better than history. There are valid opinions on both sides, which I will...

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Although, a group of people think history is a significant major at school, others believe nowadays new knowledge such as science and technology are better than history. There are valid opinions on both sides, which I will consider now.

First of all, some people feel history, about past lessons of the world, is one of the most important subjects at school. There are vivid reasons for this idea. They think history is so important because of its effects on the future of their countries. Every pupils can learn numerous things from the life of other people in the past, because history be repeated frequently. For instance, if the authorities knew about history they could predict better about future politics of their countries and glob. Therefore, history has a brilliant effects on the mind of youngests to decide better about their countries.

On the other hand, myriad of people think some subjects like new technology and modern science are more important than history because of their effects on the life today. They probably think if the students learn this kind of knowledge at school, they can have better life in the future, because youngsters can not only get a professional job but also, earn enough money if they would be skillful in these kind of subjects.

Overall, I feel that history should be more important for school students, because of the positive effect on their minds to decide better about the countries future. Moreover, it helps government and politicians organize qualified program for their countries and predict future incidents.

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Whether pupils at school should devote most of their time to study history or science and technology became a significant matter of people’s discussion. In what fallows both views of history or modern science will be discussed and in...

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Whether pupils at school should devote most of their time to study history or science and technology became a significant matter of people’s discussion. In what fallows both views of history or modern science will be discussed and in the end my own opinion will be given.
In order to make a good future we should be aware about previous events. In another words, they who do not know about history, they have to repeat it again for gaining those experiences or other experiments. In addition, previous achievements are base of modern science and technology, without fundamental knowledge we cannot move to next steps. Also, history is related to our ancestors; not only we should learn and respect it, but also we are obligated to protect it and translate it to next generations. Hence, there is no doubt that history is an inseparable part of school subjects.
Practical subjects of today’s modern world are science and technology. There are many other vital subject that students should learn in order to be prepare for their future. If we want to have powerful and sophisticated workforce, we should focus on these necessary subjects, especially computer. Furthermore, although learning history is useful, it is very boring for majority of students. It is suggested that they allocate their time to their favorite cases in which they likely to learn much more matters.
To conclude, learning history is important but there are more important matters related to this current world. In my opinion we should learn about technology and new science, because thanks to technology we can have a better connection to our today’s word.

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There are several majors which are being taught in schools. Some people believe that children should know about the history of their nation and even other countries because it can increase their knowledge. Some others claim today is the world of...

There are several majors which are being taught in schools. Some people believe that children should know about the history of their nation and even other countries because it can increase their knowledge. Some others claim today is the world of science and schools must emphasize much more about the technology in their subjects. here it will be discussed about the pros and cons of every opinion.
The high speed of growth and technology has shifted people toward putting subjects in schools which are related to science. It seems logical that emerging new growing business attracts many people to focus on science and technology. computer and internet-based businesses are good examples that many schools spend a huge time to learn them to students. Although nowadays the rate of progress has been raised increasingly and getting familiar with new technologies has been often known as the most important objectives which people aim for their children, schools should consider diverse issues to teach children. It can be asserted that one the most significant matters in which children can acquaint with different circumstances is history. The cycle of appearance and extinction of various civilizations can arise the level of knowledge of children which help them in facing the same problem in future. There is another great point about the relation between technology and history which can be mentioned as a golden rule, history is the way in which we learn how to face new technology-based tools.
In conclusion, history and science are both recommended and important topics that schools should teach children. To have a successful society in future schools should emphasize history issues as much as technology and science subjects.

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History is an inseparable part of school’s curriculum. Some people believe that it must be replaced with subjects including science and technology. However, some people believe that history plays a significant role in passing on traditions to new...

History is an inseparable part of school’s curriculum. Some people believe that it must be replaced with subjects including science and technology. However, some people believe that history plays a significant role in passing on traditions to new generations and must not be underscored. This essay will discuss both views and give compelling reason son why history must not be eliminated from schools.

As history is the territory of human’s past life, people find it cumbersome to make it related to today’s life. In addition, People often contend that if History was excluded from their lives, they wouldn’t miss anything worthy. Therefore, they believe that Students must be more acquainted with more tangible subject and be able to take advantages of newly introduced technologies rather than a complex past event. In other words student’s zero interaction with their history and culture does not necessarily help them to cope with challenges of life while their exposure to science-based subjects can surely help them benefit from a better future abilities after school time.
Conversely, some people believe history is not a mere past event but rather a set of events and acts which formed a country’s culture. Thus, a nation which is unaware of it’s past can not pave the way of future. They believe they best way to help pupils understand their traditions better is through school trainings. Having said that, a nation without any roots in terms of civilization and culture can not identify itself in this multi-cultural world.
In conclusion, while history is mostly a matter previous generations and their contribution to our civilization, it is as important as other subjects that must be included in educations programs of schools since it helps students understand their past and identify themselves in current life stream.

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Some people assume that history is the single most significant curriculum for students, however, others believe that modern sciences are more beneficial for human. Although technological issues could be critical for people, I suppose that history...

Some people assume that history is the single most significant curriculum for students, however, others believe that modern sciences are more beneficial for human. Although technological issues could be critical for people, I suppose that history is more vital for persons.
Nowadays, courses such as technology and engineering have become the most attractive subjects for people thanks to the reason which motivates them to learn. In a sense, today's human life depends on these modern sciences. In fact, everybody works with their's instruments from dawn to dusk. So if development of such knowledges leave behind, anyone will face with many problems. Indeed, people of modernized world become weaker than before due to the fact that their lives are closely tied to technological devices. Hence, this relevance would bring some healthy diseases which people might encounter with. Thus, it is important to use technology to invent some new drugs to drive such illnesses away from human life.
On aother hand, I think that history might be the most neccessary issue for human being due to some reasons. Firstly, by learning what have been happened until now, it becomes easy to get away from commiting former people's fault again. Indeed, history us repeating over the age of globe and some patterns are repeated. Secondly, you can race against time by stop doing again what they did before.
In conclusion, up-to-date knowledges are usually more vital for everyone's life, but, in my opinion, history issues could be more beneficial for the people in all corners in the world.

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There is little room for doubt that history has had substantial place in schools curriculums in all eras.In recent years while some people advocate that like as primitive viewpoint which was placing striking position for history in school...

There is little room for doubt that history has had substantial place in schools curriculums in all eras.In recent years while some people advocate that like as primitive viewpoint which was placing striking position for history in school curriculums, some people adopt an opposing view and tend to believe that as a result of emerging cutting-edge scientific subjects and their significance we should eliminate history from schools lessons. My view is that people should not overlook the vital role of histories lessons.

At first it is important to note that why people always have been enthusiastic about reading historical stories? Obviously the reason is mainly rooted in the fact that they can infer various invaluable facts from these stories which not only can alter students attitudes but also it would be a positive role model for them, thus it is highly likely to potentially influences their perspective in a positive way. Meanwhile, it is bound to getting awareness some national historical facts contribute to raising people’s sense of national pride thereby it would play as a driving force to evoking society solidarity nationalism. By way of illustration, in japan education educational authorities have launched a full-scale investigation into how they can stimulate students patriotic behaviors and have discovered that it can be addressed with expanding their knowledge about historical stories as a prerequisite.

Admittedly , due to current phenomenon which this day and age has spread great tendency toward modern perspective over well-educated people, hence considering technological subjects as the most pivotal matters is an inevitable situation, thus, despite the fact that historical story can inspire pupils but in this state-of -the- art time ,disputably it can not reshape the mind and abilities of students individually. Instead, we can take advantage of these two simultaneously which bring about tremendous achievements, this way of deriving benefits from both would create valuable situation which contributes to flourishing all aspects.

In conclusion, in my opinion history is not an obsolete subject but an asset of a country. Meanwhile technology has considered as a blanket solution thus, it dose not require one field to yield to another.

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There are different views about which subjects are more suitable for school studing. Some people believe history is better, while others prefer science and technology.
Science and technology are so much important because they have influenced all...

There are different views about which subjects are more suitable for school studing. Some people believe history is better, while others prefer science and technology.
Science and technology are so much important because they have influenced all aspects of our lives. Invention of high tech devices is based on science and technology, and these inventions made our life easy and enjoyable,so that could be the reason of people who think scientifice subjects are more important.
On the other hand, we can learn many valuable lessons from history, so societies who want to avoid their previous mistakes have to be aware of their past, so studing history subjects in schools are useful.
In conclusion, although people think differently about educating history or science and technology in schools, learning both subjects is essential.

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It has been argued that learning about history can be an effective tool for improvement while some believe that science and technology will be more effective for this matter. I can not completely agree with one of this sayings, since we can...

It has been argued that learning about history can be an effective tool for improvement while some believe that science and technology will be more effective for this matter. I can not completely agree with one of this sayings, since we can benefit from both in order to develop.


Firstly, through considering history we will be able to learn about difficulties and obstacles our ancestors dealt in different sciences and how they came over them. We can use this information in order not to face those problems again. To put it differently, we can take advantage of history in order to enhance the quality of our lives, using technology and science.


Secondly, developing a procedure and obtaining productive results is almost
impossible without the information of previous researches. We need to take the research history into account in order to flourish.

Considering these points, a combination of history and science could be taught as a school subject, resulting in wise decision making and a wide outlook on technology.

To conclude, I am of the opinion that while putting much time on learning about history might seem unnecessary, it can play a vital role in improving our way of living and taking advantage of science and technology.

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This subject is one of the most important issue of education now days. There is a lot of sake for both history and technology is important .
but my opinion is history more important than technology and science in school but technology and science...

This subject is one of the most important issue of education now days. There is a lot of sake for both history and technology is important .
but my opinion is history more important than technology and science in school but technology and science most important in high school and university .when a student go to school first his social character must be formed and grow and so he will mature. Human for living in society must lerning society behavior befor that he lerning technology ans science because he might be professor in future but if he dont grow his mature his knowladge is worth nothing.
A person must learn how to react in diffrent situation and be aware of human valuse. A dult knows to use science to improve and advance human society. But who does not complete his characte might be use science for fight and destroy humans.
The conclusion history and humanities can help make a person more mature and most impirtant in school .

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Some people say history is one of the most important school subjects. Other people think that in today’s world subjects like science and technology are more important than history.
Discuss these views and give your opinion.
It is often argued...

Some people say history is one of the most important school subjects. Other people think that in today’s world subjects like science and technology are more important than history.
Discuss these views and give your opinion.
It is often argued that history plays a pivotal role in the school curriculum. While the others believe that science and Technology should have priority over other subjects. This essay aims to weight both perspectives, however, I completely disagree with the given assertion which called it beneficial on the basis of compelling reasons.
It is undoubted fact that history is a subject that rarely used in everyday life or future.if we actually we learnt from history, the same mistakes would not occur several times. therefore, this makes history irrelevant to learning from it. Nowadays we need more subjects such as science or Technology because they revolutionized the world .for instance, more cell phones or gadgets engineers or experts need than in the last decades. generally, history is a subject which has less common aspects with our real life, in other words, history is a waste of time
On the other hands, the history which teaches at school helps the students to understand their own culture, and how their country has evolved as well as it shows the patterns of nation's behaviour or events in the past and their outcomes which can help us to avoid the similar events in the future. for instance, travesity events which occurred during the world war II like Holocaust, It is important for people never forget such events and avoid happening them again in future.on the other word, learning about the past often give a glimpse of the future and showing the path of development from past and present into the future.
To conclude, history makes some individuals interested especially at school, however in recent years more students have focused on applicable subjects such as science or Technology.this essay approved that it is more efficient to reduce the time which spends on history at school.

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All subjects are taught at school have important role in student's ability and their daily routine. Nowadays a lot of people believe school should emphasize more on history. However, other people think focus on studying science and technology are...

All subjects are taught at school have important role in student's ability and their daily routine. Nowadays a lot of people believe school should emphasize more on history. However, other people think focus on studying science and technology are more important for students in modern world .I prefer most attention should be made on science and technology subjects rather than history. But I can't deny historical background gives opportunity to understand the mistake by ancestors. following paragraphs will outline some of basic reasons to support my opinion:
Firstly, main goal of education is prepare students to participate in society and make them responsibility and interactive each other in right way. Students should be familiar with technologies in order to be able to use current technology and improve their living condition and create new things and innovate and make discovery. If students don't have knowledge about modern technologies and they use traditional ways that will impose a lot of cost for country.
Secondly, improvement in the field of technology will make the country progress and help to reduce ratio of unemployment. Promotion of Iran's position in the word requires a unique technology. If students have passion in learning science and get enough knowledge and do their best, they would acquire new technologies. Science and technology improve man's skills and cause to make decision more logical and think fast and solve their problem better by analysis all solution and achieve success in life
To put an end to, it's clear that science and technology are the most important subjects in whole subjects in school.

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This issue of whether history should be focused more in schools or other school curriculum such as science and technology should be given more attention due to the modern life is certainly a vexed one. Despite the arguments of some people, it is...

This issue of whether history should be focused more in schools or other school curriculum such as science and technology should be given more attention due to the modern life is certainly a vexed one. Despite the arguments of some people, it is my personal belief that history is important as well as technological and scientific subjects.
On the one hand, studying history allows students to realize about some significant events of past, which help them understand why and how the world is the way it is today. Moreover, they are taught that keep on this way or not. For instance, looking back on women right movement and knowing how and why a few people put so much effort into creating it helps individuals learn about defending their rights. More broadly, students can understand different culture through history, which help them increase cross-culture awareness. For example, if they want to live in another nation, they are able to connect with local people much easily.
On the other hand, the effects of having enough technological and scientific knowledge on society is deniable. On the other word, understanding these subjects is compulsory owing to having a modern society. For example, teaching scientific and technological subjects in Japan makes this country one of the most technological nation in the world. Their children are taught to use and make electronic gadgets from the secondary school. In addition, boosting the scientific and technological knowledge of students gives them opportunities to develop their digital citizenship skills, which prepare them for their future careers.
In conclusion, I once again reaffirm my position that both history and technology and science are crucial in the modern education.

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There are a few people who belive history is as important as other science and I like to think I'm one of them.I start with a simple example.Imagine a company who wants to build a virtual reality device.Even the first idea is basicly search about...

There are a few people who belive history is as important as other science and I like to think I'm one of them.I start with a simple example.Imagine a company who wants to build a virtual reality device.Even the first idea is basicly search about other devices andVR's history. Maybe it doesn't go back as far as we hoped but still that company knows it all from the begining.I want you to extend this thought in other field too and see the importance of history everywhere.
.Natian's histories aren't different as well,.
There is a saying that says we fight different battles only based on few strategies over and over again,only by different appiriences.
In conclusion if the information were right it would form a better world and thats every school's propeganda.

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some people believe that history is of high priority in school curriculum, while some others emphasize more on today's world leading subjects as science and technology. These two main ideas will be discussed in this essay and my own idea will be...

some people believe that history is of high priority in school curriculum, while some others emphasize more on today's world leading subjects as science and technology. These two main ideas will be discussed in this essay and my own idea will be depicted.
the first group of people whose idea is in support of history as one of the most important fields could be justified by the fact that by understanding what happened in the way of a nation's achieving sadness, happiness, victories and failures, we are more wisdom in making decisions in the future. it broadens people's horizon to the future by knowing what has happened and what should be done.
in support of the second group who are advocators of science and technology, it is obviously known that we live in a modern world. learning subjects of scientific interest is needed not only for the further development of the world, but also to be able to use all these high-technology devices for a better life.
in my viewpoint, history and technological subjects are both of great importance. they are interwoven like warp and woof of a fabric in points of a society being successful. in other words, history is the light in the way of achieving technological breakthroughs since it is a governing factor in making the initiative right decisions.

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People are calling into question the usefulness of history as a one of the most important school subject. While advocate the idea that the may prove beneficial for subjects like science and technology are more vital than history. Both sides of...

People are calling into question the usefulness of history as a one of the most important school subject. While advocate the idea that the may prove beneficial for subjects like science and technology are more vital than history. Both sides of the argument present rational ideas, which will be elaborated.

On the one hand, supporters of learning history as a most important subject assert that the benefits accruing from tthem are by no means negligible. To begin with, with history as a school subject, students can be made aware, not only of the harships that our ancestors went through but also of the evaluation of mankind. This is to say, history plays an important role in one’s life, as one can learn a lot from the past experience, consequently helping students in not repeating the same mistakes. For instance, the past world wars were the most devastating life incidents; children need to be educated about these crucial situations, so that they will be well aware of consequences and hopefully avoid any such situations in the future.

On the other hand, others put forward the argument that science and technology should be considered as a must in the school. The most compelling reason justifying their assertion is that we still would have been living like stone age people, had there not been science.Also with technology, we will witness heart warming experience in our coming future. communication is one of the best example of advancements in technology. Furthermore, onerequired numerous days to conver a message to someone, whereas people are now just a phone call away.

To conclude, there are logical points on both sides. However, I am of the opinion that past is gone and we cannot improvise it by any chance and thus, since an early age we need to focus on our future. It is certainly clear from the above illustration that science and technology ought to be the mist important school subject rather than hustory.

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Some believe that learning history is not as mementous as technology and science nowadays. others, however, disagree. I believe despite the fact that technology and science are imperative while finding better employment prospects, the bold merits...

Some believe that learning history is not as mementous as technology and science nowadays. others, however, disagree. I believe despite the fact that technology and science are imperative while finding better employment prospects, the bold merits of history should not be overlooked.

on the one hand, what is considered to be the main justification for those thinking that teaching history to school children is wasting time and effort is that history belongs to the past and its outdated information cannot be productive in the information age, as an overwhelming majority of subjects have been revolutionized and undergone a revival. For instance, nowadays people design their accommodations via cutting-edge softwares so learning how people were building their houses in those days cannot be fruitful.

on the other hand, many individuals argue that the most appropriate way to survive our culture is educating students about the history of our country. They believe, not only does it result in cultivating our culture due to acquiring more about the custom, culture and the etiquette of our ancestors, but also it can lead to critical thinking and accumulating the ability of analyzing and synthesizing information resources. In this way people will act better about choosing political parties while voting, for example.

In conclusion although many thinks that history is not functional in the Contemporary World, from my point of view not only can we preserve our culture for posterity via historical courses at school, bus also they make us more mature about mainstream issues.

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People have different perspectives about whether the importance of history in school curricula is more than science and technology or not. While some argue that numerical fields of study and science are more...

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People have different perspectives about whether the importance of history in school curricula is more than science and technology or not. While some argue that numerical fields of study and science are more practical in contemporary time.in my opinion, there are some different subjects in school curricula including mathematics, physics, geography, natural sciences and history which students should be learned. Some of them needed to be paid more attention on them such as science and technology.

On the one hand, history is to enrich children's understanding of themselves and is believed to be one of the most significant subjects in schools which enlightening future generations. In fact, history refers to human and stories of ancient people's live. So it could helps them learn about their origins and background which have shaped the development of their country. Moreover knowing about how we evolved during last years could be useful to predict some probable changes in far future.

On the other hand, from the natural scientific views, it has to be mentioned that science is foundation and context of all human affairs. In fact the importance duties of science and technology should not be underestimated. Knowing about technical methods and scientific training allow students who are going to be graduated, take part in public debate and decision making about science matter.also studying science can help people to get a better job position. So putting science and technology subjects in students program is essentially urgent.aside from all above, we are living in a fast-paced technological world, and a person with literacy in science might encounter with plight in living. So it seems mandatory for schools to focus on materials that induct children with today science trends and most up to date technologies.

In conclusion, although some people opine that teaching history subjects in schools are highly significant, I personally believe that science and technology could be more beneficial, practical and efficient for students, and schools should pay more attention to this subject.

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Some people believe that school curriculum should contain only subjects that we need in our daily lives like science and technology and getting to know history is a waste of time . On the other hand there are some people that think other subjects...

Some people believe that school curriculum should contain only subjects that we need in our daily lives like science and technology and getting to know history is a waste of time . On the other hand there are some people that think other subjects like history is a need too.In this essay I'll consider both
and discuss the pros and cons of eachs .
Today the technology is growing so rapidly that we are obliged to keep on the track ,otherwise we won't be able to catch on it and we will be left out .In this cas subjects
like technology and science plays a vital part of school curriculum.on the other hand getting to know our history and past might help us in applying these technologies in a ebbetter and safer ways .For instanc
If we are aware of how atomic bomb demolished people's lives and housing during second world war , we can now better utilise the science and technology behind it .

To conclude each part of school curriculum involving science, technology and history are important in educating young people,but it completely depends on how they are applied to make a better world to live in .

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The past few decades have seen incredibly increase in aspects of sience and liberal arts for schooling.The re remains some arguments in country,whether some of them like history is essential or not .I personaly believe that history subject...

The past few decades have seen incredibly increase in aspects of sience and liberal arts for schooling.The re remains some arguments in country,whether some of them like history is essential or not .I personaly believe that history subject particulary is benefical ,so,there is some principle reasons for my view and other points of views in the follow.

First of all it is indisputable fact that we are living in a marvelous age of knowledge and progress of sciences are going up like sun rising.However growing number of people belive that history topics are not wealthy than ever before,they suppose that khowing about past time is streotype,likewise,they say in recent age mankind understanding is fundamental and insruction of history is not effectable to studendts.despite the view they express there is no bilievable illustration for this.I assume they anly mantaine the the new way of life to show they have bright mind more than other.so often society do not care about this view.

Further and even more completed view that almost are used in good deal of schools is combination of old method"that is based on history and litracy"and new sciences.It is ,however,undeniable fact that all of thr folk have to know about the past and historical events.Nevertheless our understanding about history is fundamental ,also it is high time to expand our awarness about past by schools help.

By way of conclusion,I again reaffirm my positive situation about learning history in the schools,We ought to be care about our country historical places and history instructing at schools.

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The past few decades have seen incredibly increase in aspects of sience and liberal arts for schooling.The re remains some arguments in country,whether some of them like history is essential or not .I personaly believe that history subject...

The past few decades have seen incredibly increase in aspects of sience and liberal arts for schooling.The re remains some arguments in country,whether some of them like history is essential or not .I personaly believe that history subject particulary is benefical ,so,there is some principle reasons for my view and other points of views in the follow.

First of all it is indisputable fact that we are living in a marvelous age of knowledge and progress of sciences are going up like sun rising.However growing number of people belive that history topics are not wealthy tan ever before,they suppose that khowing about past time is streotype likewise they say in recent age mankind understanding is fundamental and insruction of history is not effectable to studendts.despite the view they express there is no bilievable illustration for this.I assume they anly mantaine the the new way of life to show they have bright mind more than other.so often society do not care about this view.

Further and even more completed view that almost are used in good deal of schools is combination of old method"that is based on history and litracy"and new sciences.It is ,however undeniable fact that all of thr folk have to know about the past and historical events.Nevertheless our understanding about history is fundamental ,also it is high time to expend our warness about past by schools help.

By way of conclusion,I again reaffirm my positive situation about learning history in the schools,We ought to be care about our country historical places and history instructing at schools.

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There is a contradiction between a group of people who claim that history is the most important school subject, and the other claiming in the new era we are living in science and technology beat history in importance. Several reasons are...

There is a contradiction between a group of people who claim that history is the most important school subject, and the other claiming in the new era we are living in science and technology beat history in importance. Several reasons are expressed to address the importance by both parties, yet I believe although almost all of the justifications are rational, one point is often ignored and that is considering a human as a multidimensional and complex creature.
Identity and experience are the two aspects of human nature which history lovers lean on when trying to defend their position. History is the topic that shapes both our human and national identity. The sense of identity is crucial for us because humans always want to know where they have come from. Moreover, much can be learned from history and through studying it humans can gain experience along with wisdom about many matters without paying the consequences of wrong choices.
Increasing humans’ welfare and abilities are, on the other hand, are claimed to be bases in which the importance of science and technology can be proven. Tap water, electricity, modern means of transportation, health care, sanitation and information technology are just some examples of gifts that have been brought to humans through science and technology. From changing the television channel up to setting foot on the moon, from sending a text message to your beloved one up to seeing a broken bone using X-ray, These abilities are not the ones that we are born with yet we have them in our grasp by studying science and technology.
I say both are equally important, since all the reasons claimed by both parties cannot be quarreled with. I must also mention that that history and science and technology help each other in many aspects. Using advanced technologies has become a routine in historical expeditions. While historical studies revealed that nitrogen can reinforce steel because in Egypt they used to bathe a very hot sword with blood which is rich in nitrogen. So considering all these facts I must insist that both are of the same importance.

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In the realm of education, all the world around, with regard to educational purposes, there are a wide range of curriculums for pupils. Some people hold the conviction that history can be considered one of the most telling subjects in schools. A...

In the realm of education, all the world around, with regard to educational purposes, there are a wide range of curriculums for pupils. Some people hold the conviction that history can be considered one of the most telling subjects in schools. A different viewpoint, nevertheless, is that other subjects such as science and technology are more pivotal than history in today’s world. The intentions behind these beliefs are put down in the role of culture and the amount of development in country, respectively. In this essay, I will shed light on both touched upon views and also voice my opinion.

By and large, it seems that a group of people believe that history should be deemed as an important subject in educational milieus. In fact, they reckon each society has unique culture, thoughts and tenets which are appeared in history of it. Only when student study history, do they have the chance to have full cognizance of their culture and beliefs. This sound understanding may helps them to pursue right way in their lives and also reach prosperity.

Despite the role of culture in success, others’ preference goes to highlight science and technology as the most vital subjects in schools. Living in today’s society requires modern accommodation and technical knowledge. To learn scientific knowledge people need to broaden their knowledge and also acclimatize themselves to novel technologies. The best place is, evidently, schools which guides learners how to learn different scopes of science, how tap into technologies, and how adopt themselves with them. Generally, while history is common subject in all schools in Iran, private primary schools, add robotic as an extra subject to their program and they teach students to design and implement simple robots. These students can learn the way of their lives better than others as they learn essential requirements for living in society.

In short, history is motivation to be successful but is not enough and lessons such as science and technology can response to all needing of people.

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Some people hold this belief that regarding the advent of new technology school pupils should study science-oriented subjects such as math, physics instead of studying history. There are some compelling reasons for both proponents...

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Some people hold this belief that regarding the advent of new technology school pupils should study science-oriented subjects such as math, physics instead of studying history. There are some compelling reasons for both proponents and advocates of history that will be discussed.


It is true that scientific subjects presented in schools offer more employment opportunities down the road. Skilled workers have been an integral part of the cut-throat competitive job market that means employers today look for candidates who are specialized in a particular field. This shows that in order to find a decent job in the future students are required to study science subjects which paves the way for them to keep studying in a technology related major in university. Having cutting-edge knowledge, fresh students have more opportunities to be employed in industrial sectors, guaranteeing climbing the career ladder. Thus, science subjects in terms of future employment are more important than history.


On the other hand, there are some advantages in studying history which we cannot be blind to. History in some ways preserves our national identity where it keeps us rooted in the past. In other words, this gives us the chance to know our past, generating a sense of belonging. This feeling is more likely to create national identity and pride. Apart from that, another positive point of studying history is teaching us about different social events. What makes these lessons from history essential is that they potentially play a vital role in avoiding same situations in the future. Studying world wars in history is considered as a perfect example when it comes to avoiding another war.


In conclusion, although future workplaces are more demanding than the past, from my perspective, history should be always included in school curriculum as its great contribution to understanding the past and learning lessons for the future of human’s society.

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There are some people who insist on this opinion that history is one of the most useful school lessons while others prefer to rank. school subjects in this order that science and technology are more important than history. This...

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There are some people who insist on this opinion that history is one of the most useful school lessons while others prefer to rank. school subjects in this order that science and technology are more important than history. This essay agrees that history is one of the most important school subjects. This essay will discuss both point of view.

Some people believe that history is necessary to be tauught. I also mention it as one of the overriding subjects since several reasons. It's a fact that history repeats itself and it's reliance on our abilities to figure out how to use these lessons for making better future. For instance one considerable lesson that the young can learn from history is believe in achieving their goals. It's such a intrinsic motivation that helps them therefore they continue their way no matter how many times they fail.
Some other people have this idea that not only science and technology are essential subjects but also they are even more valuable than history. I disagree due to two reasons. Method of using technology' is become more accessabl these days because of internet and so many improvement in communication world
So it's easy to learn about it .by the way these days people's life always involve so many technological devices which make people to learn about them cause new technology and science are very eye catching, the youth indulge in learning about them more than subjects like history so education system must be concern about methods that history courses reapesent .actually it must be in order to grab student's attention.

In brief there are so many different ideas about the main subject that has to be learnt by students. This essay can say that history is one of the consequential subjects in school.

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It is belived that theorical subjectlike history is more benefit to students, while some experts in educational system belive in other subject like science and technologoy. This essay recommend a combination of both sunjects and indeed prioritize...

It is belived that theorical subjectlike history is more benefit to students, while some experts in educational system belive in other subject like science and technologoy. This essay recommend a combination of both sunjects and indeed prioritize to history. This essay will discuss both point of view.
History is belived to be one of the important subjects of school period. Students can undesrstand about their country and their globe's past incidents. History can also play a significant role to form a students peronality. Through the history subject, students can learn about the mistakes that their previous leaders hasdon,loyalty that a soldier did for his country and treasond that have been occured by some rulers.
On the other hand , due to worlds high pace in technology , putting science and technology subjects in students program is a essential need. Today in this electronic race between companies , learning how to encounter to this phenomenon is so important. Also students should be taght new science cause it is practical in their futures life.
There are fifferent points of view in which subject is more important to students. History build students personality by teaching them the importance of past indicents , while technology and science is a essential need in this digital life

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History and science and technology, both are important subjects today. It depends on your aim of researching that which one are more significant.
Without history the serious topic of identity makes some psychological problems. In my opinion,...

History and science and technology, both are important subjects today. It depends on your aim of researching that which one are more significant.
Without history the serious topic of identity makes some psychological problems. In my opinion, Historical studies have some main and major reseans. It helps us to khow about very important experiences which people who lived many years ago have. Some of them is useable now.
As well the importance of science and technology is obviose. They can effect on all aspects of our living. Thus study of both releam are essential and important

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Although history is one of the most essential subjects in school, somebody believes they should not pay more attention to that and science is more profitable than history.there are 2 kinds of people that think different but it is important that...

Although history is one of the most essential subjects in school, somebody believes they should not pay more attention to that and science is more profitable than history.there are 2 kinds of people that think different but it is important that both of them teach at school and students have to know about them.
At first, somebodies think students should not know anything about history because it is waste of time and they should concentrate on science and technology. Learning history is useless as if they know about past there is not any effect on science. As progress of technology is fast so people should focus more than past on it. They do not know if there was no awarness of the past, they could not develope easily and they should have always started from the first .
Some people believed it is better to study history next to the science. If they know about history of the world, they take a lot of experience and it learns what to do and what not to do for example how can control the wars. With learning this course they can mix science and history and they make better world for everyone.
In conclusion, while there are difference between these course. If people learn together they can advance faster than without one of them. l

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While some people feel that schools ought to emphasize on history-related subjects, others claim that modern technology and science are more important. This essay will discuss both views before reaching a personal opinion.

The...

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While some people feel that schools ought to emphasize on history-related subjects, others claim that modern technology and science are more important. This essay will discuss both views before reaching a personal opinion.

The history lessons are more beneficial for children in school due to several reasons. Firstly, children introduce to their long-established history; thus the fully appreciate the predicament that their forefathers had experienced. This practice in long-term result in feeling patriotism and proudness which can contribute to overall jovial of society. Secondly, focusing on historic lessons in schools curriculum, raise the children awareness about their ancient buildings and traditional cuisine. Therefore, in their adulthood, they would be more likely to make an effort to preserve historic sites that are in sinking into oblivion. Consequently, history subjects have to be encouraged in schools more than any other topic.

However, I am convinced that much more attention should be paid to modern subjects than our past. Motivating children toward science and invention not only flourish their creativity but also give rise to the economic breakthrough. This is to say, children who are acquiring information about children are more likely to invent new tools that can be sell out with the help of governments. Aside from that, we are living in a fast-paced technological world, and a person with literacy in science might encounter with plight in living. So it seems mandatory for schools to focus on materials that familiarise children with today science trends and most up-to-date technologies.

In conclusion, although some opine that teaching history subjects in schools are more important, I personally believe that science and technology could be more beneficial for students, and schools should pay more attention to this subject.

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Some are on this belief that history is considered as one of the most important matters, while others argue that currently, subjects such as science and technology are much more important than history. Teaching of new science can provide more...

Some are on this belief that history is considered as one of the most important matters, while others argue that currently, subjects such as science and technology are much more important than history. Teaching of new science can provide more benefit for students.
Identity of the history is requirement for students. Studying history enable us to avoid repeating the mistake of the past that this help to student so as to have had better decision in their life. Moreover, history helps us learn about origin and tradition which are necessary for any society and we should try to maintain them that without studying of history we not able to it done.
On the other hand, science and technology play important role in our life and are vital issues in today’s world. Because the technology is developing fast and penetrating in all of human’s life and we should harmonize with it. Therefore it is important in school issues. In addition, it is undeniable that these subjects are many more fruitless for the future of the students on the ground that these not only bring about the student can better make decision for future job but also develop their horizon. Beside, developing of creation and intellectual of students can be done by familiar with science and technology.
On balance, studying of history is essential and we fail to ignore it but I believe that science and technology are much more important than history.

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There are different subjects thought at schools around the world among which studying the destiny of past generations is a regular one. Some critiques believe that in this modern, high tech world people don’t need historical...

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There are different subjects thought at schools around the world among which studying the destiny of past generations is a regular one. Some critiques believe that in this modern, high tech world people don’t need historical knowledge anymore. They claim that new lifestyle is full of technological advances which can replace our need to study history. In other words, they argue that studying what has happened to people in distant past can’t offer us any solution for our modern life issues, on the other hand, some others think quite differently. In my opinion, this subject can be discussed from natural and human science aspects, so I’m going to argue the topic in these two realms.
From the natural scientific view, it has to be mentioned that many modern sciences get their basic data from the history, for instance economists analyze the time series and the information of demand and supply of different products for their estimations. In addition, mechanical engineers apply numerous old methods for their new inventions. furthermore, the modern medical science employs quite a few traditional treatments used thousand years ago, and still there are many patients prefer traditional medicine rather than new chemical drugs.
As far as concerns the human side of the issue, the history refers to human and social sciences. Stories of ancient people’s lives teach us how to live and make decision in future. moreover, if nations had learned history lessons, they would have had a peaceful and relaxed life. besides, human and social science researchers devote a part of all their studies to review the historical trends of the subject.
To conclude, I believe that human science especially history is not less important than natural sciences. In other words, many scientific and technological developments wouldn’t have happened if people hadn’t learned lessons from the history.

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There are a variety of different perspectives on the importance of school subjects. While history is of major significance, I personally believe that there are more effective subjects in school curricula such as science and technology on which...

There are a variety of different perspectives on the importance of school subjects. While history is of major significance, I personally believe that there are more effective subjects in school curricula such as science and technology on which students should focus.
On the one hand, history is to enrich children's understanding of themselves and is believed to be one of the most important subjects in schools which enlightening future generation. It helps them learn about their origins and backgrounds which have shaped the development of their country. New generations are likely to understand how past human actions impact on the present and the future, if becoming familiar with the past generations. Studying history, therefore, is incredibly necessary to avoid repeating mistakes of the past. In this way, children would be able to think logically and make informed judgments about current and future events.
On the other hand, it goes without saying that as time passes the world is going towards modernization and technology plays an important role in people's life. School as the most basic community in which children participate is responsible to present subjects which are more concern with the needs of the current society. Young people, thus, need advanced skills in core subjects like science as well as the ability to use various technologies to keep abreast of the latest advancements. In my view, not only does this type of curriculum make students versatile, but it also helps them match with the fast-changing society.
In conclusion, I can understand why some people might advocate the importance of history in school curriculum, but it seems to me that we should place a premium on more beneficial subjects like science and technology with regard to today's modern world.

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People have different views about whether the importance of history in school curriculum is more than science and technology or not.while there might be some evidences to proove that science and technology are essential ,I beleive that learning...

People have different views about whether the importance of history in school curriculum is more than science and technology or not.while there might be some evidences to proove that science and technology are essential ,I beleive that learning history at school could be more productive.
On the one hand , science and technology materials can be a great source of motivation. When technological aspects come to school pupils life,then the sense of competitiveness grows up through them to create new inventions like robots ,computer game and etc.furthermore learning science and modern technology will definitely prepared them well for their future careers.this kind of preparation will help them run everything smoothly in their profession at future. For example in non-state school in my country , the people who had the authority of decision-making , focus on scientific subject to have more scientist and professors.
On the other hand, I believe it is perhaps more important for children to learn history rather than those subject which mentioned above.learning history which is kind of journey that describes all past events, wars ,and famous feature and great people ,will stimulate the creativity and intellects of pupils . Reading novels or historical books may empower the left logical side of the brain to be more creative.consequently the school student could be more creative and innovative.in ,addition, learning history ,specially local one create the sense of Patriotism which is essential for young people to love their own country well.
In conclusion , I understand why people might encourage student to focus on science and technology, but it seems to me that being busy with great amount of history materials is much desirable especially for their future.

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These days, it seems that school subjects are more significant than seven before. Although, some people believe that subjects like history is necessary for student. Others including me believe that subjects like science and technology should...

These days, it seems that school subjects are more significant than seven before. Although, some people believe that subjects like history is necessary for student. Others including me believe that subjects like science and technology should consider. In this essay, I will examine the issue and provide reasons for my view point.

Some people are of the opinion that history is important. First of all, it is vitally important that Students acquire a knowledge of their ancestors. Therefore, this kind of subjects has a positive role to play in their life because of learning of the past experience and lack of repeating same mistake. Secondly, all the subjects will be benefit for student that each student will have motivations and various specialization when they grow.

Some people argue that subjects like science and technology have high influence in their future. First of all, It is an incredible that learning thesis subjects to provide better job opportunities that due to high salary and easylife and enjoy high social status. Secondly, Technology is totally integrated in our life and it has points of view towards the future. Therefore, it can be very significant to help students knowledge how work type of device s work that are related to their job.
In my opinion, both of them have pros and cons. I believe that students should learn science and technology instead of history .

In conclusion, I once again reaffirm my position that studying of science and technology have a positive impact on our life because of its influence in career and knowledge.

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A group of people think, history is one of the most important school issues, the other group of people believe in this improvement world,science and technology are more important than history, but personally,think history is a need and background...

A group of people think, history is one of the most important school issues, the other group of people believe in this improvement world,science and technology are more important than history, but personally,think history is a need and background for science and technology which will be discussed in details here.

The first issue is a strong need of government and people to history, governments have to read and be aware of history of their country against others and for being powerful and respectful among their people,moreover,in this way they can avoid from repeat of bad  and negative events which happen for their ancestors, in same situation at present. Also if people get aware of history of their country they will earn  money,for example, by completing their ancestors works; Such as completion of their equipments in technological ways.


In the other hand, improvement and expansion in technology and science such as, space, medical and all which relate to computers and so on, are attached to the history. If human did not care about reading history, technology would not be in this  concept.For instance, if they did not have enough knowledge about Avicenna works, some parts of medical could not be complete. Another example for this is, Artificial Intelligence which nowadays help doctors to do surgery far from the patient. We could say, it is the completion of computers.

In conclusion,although nowadays technology and science are at a high and good level,still we need history for making the human more convenient and knowledgeable.

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There are widely differing views as to whether history should be considered as one of the first priorities among school subjects or not. While some argue that numerical fields of study and science are more practical in contemporary time, my...

There are widely differing views as to whether history should be considered as one of the first priorities among school subjects or not. While some argue that numerical fields of study and science are more practical in contemporary time, my personal belief is that studying history should be set as an inseparable part of school syllabus due to following reasons.
First of all, knowing about your country’s historical and cultural background would result in a successful and homogeneous society in which people are more united. In other word, in our ever-changing world of technology with the influx of western culture which are entering today’s societies, it is highly likely that the country’s original roots and believes are easily wiped out or altered. Thus it is pivotal that students get exposed to their pure culture and enriched history through a school subject from early childhood. Needless to say, such a country wouldn’t be vulnerable and defeated by invasion of any foreign cultures.
In addition to this, studying history at school provides students with new insights and makes them ready to lead their life more effectively. looking back on our country background, we will be overwhelmed with so many heroes and fascinating stories about how our ancestors survived through tough situations, therefore it gives us new perspectives and incentives to look for ways for making the world a better place to live.
By way of conclusion, I once again hold to my opinion that history should be considered as a crucial part of school curriculum for its contributions to make a united and better country to live in.

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In recent years, owing to the increase in the number of industrialized cities and consequently, the number of job opportunities that are available in diverse majors and fields for engineers and technicians and also due to the fact that many...

In recent years, owing to the increase in the number of industrialized cities and consequently, the number of job opportunities that are available in diverse majors and fields for engineers and technicians and also due to the fact that many countries and governments invest vast amount of their finances in order to improve their scientific knowledge and technological infrastructure, many persons at least in developing countries tend to learn more about technology and its derivations. These persons almost always have a strong desire to find a job with high income or special privileges such as receiving luxury amenities. Even though most of them achieve their desire and find a good job, they often will not become extremely famous or prosperous since they just can work as some ordinary employees in which they have to obey some restrictive rules and resolute principles; thus, they have no opportunity to show their abilities and skills in controlling a business by themselves. According to the above-mentioned reasons and by considering my vantage point, I strongly agree with the idea of those persons who think that history has a more significant role in our lives owing to some reasons. These grounds comprise encountering problems and deficiencies of human's life in the past by studying history, which motivates us to try to create or invent something new and novel and also increasing our experience about managing different situations in our life, which helps us to decide better and more rational for the future.
First and foremost, what has made the studying of the history so remarkable and substantial is its advantage in discovering the problems of our lives in the past and using the results for fabricating a new thing or procedure that addresses those obstacles. It is clear and obvious that we cannot invent a new equipment unless we know enough about the problems and difficulties that we face with every day. There are many examples and instances, which can be used for embodying the mentioned fact. To epitomize, the invention of the internet, cell phones, calculators, and satellites, to name a few, are worthwhile examples that can be regarded. For instance, about the internet, which is the most striking creation of the human, it can be written that in the past centuries, before the invention of the internet, humankind had had to transmit his messages only by using face-to-face communication methods or by applying other ways such as igniting a fire or using birds and other animals. In fact, if a person wanted to inform others, he or she must expend a long period of time to communicate his or her message. In this case, if a public disaster such as flood, storm, or etc. occurred, they would not be able to inform each other as fast as it was necessary; hence, many persons had confronted with the danger of death because of lacking in the communication systems. However, nowadays, by using the internet and its features such as email and social media, it is completely convenient to send a message to far-fetched places around the globe in a time-period less than a minute, which is unprecedented in the human's life. Therefore, the huge influence of a historic lack on perhaps the most notable inventions of human is too easy to be understood.
Furthermore, another extraordinary benefit of studying the history is the fact that we can undergo various life's situations before getting into them that gives us this chance to evaluate our abilities and aptitudes in proposing diverse methods and doctrines about how to survive in hard and abhorrent circumstances. In addition, it helps us to prevent ourselves from being susceptible to these problems and devastation. There is no person who can oppose or cast doubts on the importance of learning from the past. Many governors determine their policies based on the history written in books, many scientists discover the scientific facts by considering the prehistoric information, and finally, we build our cultures and traditions on the basis of history. I can remember the time in which I had to research about the effects of historical events on our success for one of my university courses. The most stunning thing that I have found was the following sentence, which has been written by an extremely competent and indisputable expert psychologist. He said, "Each person can thrive and arrive his or her aim by reading history books and exerting their advice in his or her daily life." Therefore, by regarding the knowledge and competence of our previous generations, we will not face any restriction or obstruction in the way of achieving our goals and targets.
Eventually, it can be inferred from the aforementioned reasons and examples that studying history and raising our knowledge about the ancient methods of life is more useful and beneficial than learning about other subjects such as science and technology. Moreover, it must not be neglected that the way of using technological tools and instruments is vulnerable to be directly influenced by our wisdom concerning the history. In fact, we will use them in a sensible way just if we know the original reasons for their invention.

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Today, controversy continues over whether history ,as the most important subject, must be on the curriculum or other subjects such as science and technology, as the most significant applied subjects.
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Today, controversy continues over whether history ,as the most important subject, must be on the curriculum or other subjects such as science and technology, as the most significant applied subjects.
Many people evidently agree with this point of view that history helps us to learn about our origins, background, descendants and traditions and this individual understanding plays a key role in society's development as a whole. According to an ancient theory history repeats continuously through different eras therefore, students with learning about their country's defeats or colonization over the centuries know their society's abilities and weakness and avoid experiencing the negative past events again.
Nevertheless, people who are against learning history claim in today's modern world which technology develops progressively through it learning about past events is a concept of wasting time. Furthermore, from their perception students require to learn new science and technologies to improve their present and achieve to more success in their future life. Indeed, past events consist expired methods which are not useful for today's world. Then, school curriculum must focus on new science such as nanotechnology or robotics knowledge and students learn more practical experiments in laboratories rather than poring over historical tomes in libraries.
From my perspective these both issues work interdependently and we should improve the students' historical knowledge as well as their technological learning. If students know how past human actions affect on present situation of their country they might be able to make logical decision for future and also they apparently require to learn new science in today's modern world.

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which subject is the best and useful for teaching to students in school? Anyway, that is a question which many of people want to know it. Many people believe that history subject is the most important in school that should be taught. However,...

which subject is the best and useful for teaching to students in school? Anyway, that is a question which many of people want to know it. Many people believe that history subject is the most important in school that should be taught. However, some people say it’s better to be taught the world subject such as technology and science instead of history. Nonetheless, there are two views which maybe both of them are be correct. We are going to review both of these views in the following paragraphs


at first, we’ll describe the first view which says history subject is more important than science and modern technologies subject. Without a doubt, these people believe that studying of history has some advantages. This view and its advantages are categorized into two sections. undoubtedly, history help us to know the previous cultures, social life and other things which are related to historical eras. with studying history, we can familiar with old habits, jobs cultures and other things which we can’t find these elsewhere. for example, when you study Persian’s history, you can understand how Iranian people could have been the first society that implemented people’s rights.
Additionally, historical subjects in school introduce some old techniques which have been extracted from the previous people’s experiences in past. in the other words, when you study history subjects, you can understand the old experiences and use them in your life. Indeed, these experienced works, help us better rather than we experience them ourselves. for instance, in 1900s, people invented the car producing. So today’s people, have not need to know how car producing and just they try to improve its. And it’s so useful for time saving.

In contrast, we’ve categorized advantages of studying modern technologies and science into two section as same as history. everybody knows the importance of modern technologies on developing the life. you need modern technology science, thereby you need to have learned it in school. modern technology sciences can extend your mind and vision on the world and illustrates new things to yours. Incidentally, nobody can deny the increasing of quality life parallel to modern technology. for example, certainly mobile phone technology has improved our life and we can call together wherever we are.
before, we described the importance of old experience on our life. nowadays, world need to new things in all of industrial. Accordingly, as based our knowledge which we have extracted from previous experience, we can make new things.


In conclusion, we reviewed on two views. The people has stress on teach history in school and another who believe schools should teach modern science such as technology. Also, we described both of their advantages with an example and further information. Anyway, reader can understand which of these views are more appropriate than another. Indeed, select the best depends on attention to circumstances world. Nevertheless, for future study we suggest check out the society where you want to decision to which of these views are better than another?

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People opinion differ about studying history at school. While some believe that other subjects such as science and technology play an integral role in the modern world, I would argue that history has its importance.
On the one hand, it is...

People opinion differ about studying history at school. While some believe that other subjects such as science and technology play an integral role in the modern world, I would argue that history has its importance.
On the one hand, it is undeniable that science and technology have had significant impacts on our lives. Nowadays people live more convenience thanks to the facilities which have been provided by them. For example, communicative tools like mobile phones and the internet have made it easy for everyone to be in touch with their friends and families easily. Moreover, science has enabled human beings to fight against different types of fatal diseases which have killed a great number of people. However, science and the cutting edge technologies have extremely increased the standard of living and, they have become an inseparable part of everyone’s daily life which even imagination of living without them is actually difficult.
On the other hand, history is full of real stories that every individual can learn by studying both local and international ones. Have you ever asked yourselves why some countries are more thriving than the others? You can see the answer in historical books by reading the path they have passed to reach the current point. Furthermore, people can find out what mistakes previous generations have done to avoid them in the future. For instance, the Islamic revolution in Iran was a big mistake which our parents did because they trusted religious leaders and their glamorous slogans. By knowing our ancestors’ faults we are less likely to repeat them again.
In conclusion, although there is no doubt that studying science and technology is essential at school, I personally think that the significance of learning history should not be ignored.

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There are lots of subjects for teaching and learning in throughout the world. Some people assume history can be one of the most important subject. Beside, other say technology and science are more important than history. I will say and explain my...

There are lots of subjects for teaching and learning in throughout the world. Some people assume history can be one of the most important subject. Beside, other say technology and science are more important than history. I will say and explain my view with some statement and valid example.
On the one hand, people interest on that how people lived in the past? Which facilities they used from that? How they spend their time in many years ago? Some people select this major as archeologist and study this in university and this will be their job in future. Moreover, they search about everything related past. Hence they believe this so essential for others and future’s life. We are learning experiences from people who lives many years ago. For example, I know a university witch is just for history. Students in this university have been traveling a lot and investigate in some desert and old buildings. They collect information about past. Also some of them write several articles and publish them in newspapers and magazines.
On the other hand, It is my firm conviction that, nowadays study and have information about technology and science are significantly grow and increase. Furthermore everything are struggling with technology. Surely people and specially teenagers and youth can not inattentive to technology and science. Likewise for gain and obtain good salary and save enough money, technology and science are mandatory. For instance, my brother has been working in massive shop for five years. This shop sell so many hardware devices that suitable for computer. He has lots of information and knowledge about those devices. He is helpful and utilitarian for that shop and earn high wealth each month.
In conclusion, although history is vital and efficient, technology and science are more important than history. And it is one of the social imperative of the present age. Because people tend to them in each activities. On the basis of this in future human must do their works by technology and science. For this reasons learn about these two subjects (technology and science) more and more until you become successful and achieve your aims and purposes.

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The relevance of incidents which were taken place by our descendants to todays' society is skepticism. Although some believe that history can be a basic part of the curriculum at schools, others believe that it can be replaced by important domain...

The relevance of incidents which were taken place by our descendants to todays' society is skepticism. Although some believe that history can be a basic part of the curriculum at schools, others believe that it can be replaced by important domain such as scientific and technological subject which play a crucial role in the twenty-first century. I personally believe that history is an integral part of our ancestor's life that cannot be ignored.
Some argue that history is a powerful tool for gaining depth insight into ancestor's life and it is imperative to studying and knowing about it. In other words, in theory, history is just events that take place one after another which are meaningful only by coherent explanations. Furthermore, having a dispassionate view toward history is obtained in circumstance in which a comprehensive understanding is achieved by knowing the cause of events. Therefore, it deserves to apportion time to more conducting investigation.
However, another group supposes history is related to the past and it cannot assist in our era in which technology ranks first. Also, they claim that it should be better for humans keeping pace with the sweeping changes and taking consideration into some events which turn lives upside down. Besides, it can be argued that advice and hints taking from the earliest generation are inadequate and cannot be practical in our age hence it is wise that it has been superseded by a fascinating subject.
In conclusion, while our era is the age of advanced technology as technological improvement comes first, the important role of lesson obtaining from our ancestors could not be obscured.

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School could be taken into account as the most substantial place to pedagogy, teaching children how to be useful for humanity. While there are persuasive arguments in favor of learning history might be more crucial, I would argue...

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School could be taken into account as the most substantial place to pedagogy, teaching children how to be useful for humanity. While there are persuasive arguments in favor of learning history might be more crucial, I would argue that it is better to be taught to students about new breakthroughs and focus on job-oriented subjects.
On the one hand, the proponent of the idea stated above believe that there are advantages to debating history issues in school, from their point of views, having adequate knowledge about what happen in the past might be more motivating to avoid of identical incessant mistakes in future, leading to higher levels of outputs and services. Furthermore it is not going all pupils in class become computer engineers and specialist planting or gardening, which is why forcing student to study subjects that they do not interested in, would bring catastrophic result.
On the other hand, I believe that schools are meant to nurture young student’s creativity. To begin whit it is imperative children to be prepare to make job future and school curriculums could get individuals led to them, creating a host of job opportunities and landing a decent career. If students spend more time on learning new technology, they will be more efficient for society by vital invention which could change the whole world for example to explore inexpensive drugs and decrease pollution which in accordance to media they might be the basic reason of future’s death. finally the primary objective of education is making competent young generation to build a better world through science.
In conclusion I think that students must study many things. Including science and history. but for constructing brighter future technology would be more effective.

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