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In spite of the advances made in agriculture, many people around the world still go hungry.  Why is this case? What can be done about this problem?

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Although the recent decades have witnessed a significant development in agricultural techniques, the perennial problem of hunger is still present in different parts of the globe. The root causes of this phenomenon as well as some viable solutions will be discussed in detail.

There are a number of contributing factors responsible for the prevalence of this issue. Firstly, the unequal distribution of wealth and resources throughout the world should be blamed. That is, regardless of cutting-edge technologies employed in modern horticulture, the existing supplies are never distributed equitably among all people of society for some obscure reason. For example, a person may fall heir to vast areas of fertile land as a family inheritance while the majority might never inherit any valuable property. Secondly, the world population is growing on an unprecedented scale which means keeping pace with the growing demand for food is more difficult than ever. In other words, even though there have been noticeable improvements in crop cultivation and harvesting, demand continues to outweigh supply.

However, certain measures can be taken to eradicate hunger worldwide. To begin with, new approaches are required to compensate for space constraints in urban areas. Simply put, government officials should adopt the necessary policy to encourage more farming even in cramped conditions of cities where people normally cannot grow crops. For instance, roof tops can be used for plant husbandry to double productions and satisfy the soaring demands. Moreover, governmental supervision is needed to ensure that equity and justice are implemented in society. This in turn will guarantee that everyone can benefit from the existing supplies.

In conclusion, although the blame could be equally apportioned between unfair distributions and overpopulation, there are some viable solutions to be taken into consideration. More specifically, encouraging agriculture in cities and making sure that society runs on principles of equity are two workable schemes which can be launched by officials to curb the spread of the problem.    

 

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با عرض سلام و تشكر فراوان بابت كار ارزشمند و بي نظيري كه انجام مي دهيد، مي خواستم خواهش كنم اگر امكانش هست لطفا استادي كه تصحيح مي كنند و إشكالات كلي هر نفر را مي نويسند چند تا از اشتباهات فاحش هر كس را هم ياداوري كنند مثل كالوكيشنهايي كه نابجا...

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In last century the breakthrough in technology revolutionized agricultural world. Modern countries enjoy the advances in agricultural; however, there are millions of people across the word that have struggle with lack of enough food.
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In last century the breakthrough in technology revolutionized agricultural world. Modern countries enjoy the advances in agricultural; however, there are millions of people across the word that have struggle with lack of enough food.
Limited natural or modern facilities throughout the world left many people hungry. Some countries such as Iran, which include tropical and sub-tropical weather condition, because of low level knowledge in terms of latest advances in agriculture as well as economic issue cannot boom in this case. Furthermore, situation across the world are not uniform. To put it precisely, some western countries equipted with cutting-edge devices such as baler, tractor and combine; whereas, they have not enough field to grow variety of seeds or fruit trees. Therefore, in both wealthy and underdeveloped countries, people likely to suffer from undernutrition.
However, there are some intellectual ways in order to tackle the shortage of food. First and foremost, modern countries can deal with poor countries. For example, by devoting state of the art agricultural devices, poor countries, which are not able to use their natural resources, can be benefited. In addition, in spite of the fact that improvement agricultural fulfill some basic human needs, each government should prioritize it than other matters, by allocating more budget in this area. For example, for improving irritation system, fertilizing more and more fields. Moreover, raising agricultural expertise can to great deal enhance methods of cultivation or harvesting.
To conclude, some causes of existing less food in this modern world for many people along with some solution are mentioned above.

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In last century the breakthrough in technology revolutionized agricultural world. Modern countries enjoy the advances in agricultural; however, there are millions of people across the word that have struggle with lack of enough food.
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In last century the breakthrough in technology revolutionized agricultural world. Modern countries enjoy the advances in agricultural; however, there are millions of people across the word that have struggle with lack of enough food.
Limited natural or modern facilities throughout the world left many people hungry. Some countries such as Iran, which include tropical and sub-tropical weather condition, because of low level knowledge in terms of latest advances in agriculture as well as economic issue cannot boom in this case. Furthermore, situation across the world are not uniform. To put it precisely, some western countries equipted with cutting-edge devices such as baler, tractor and combine; whereas, they have not enough field to grow variety of seeds or fruit trees. Therefore, in both wealthy and underdeveloped countries, people likely to suffer from undernutrition.
However, there are some intellectual ways in order to tackle the shortage of food. First and foremost, modern countries can deal with poor countries. For example, by devoting state of the art agricultural devices, poor countries, which are not able to use their natural resources, can be benefited. In addition, in spite of the fact that improvement agricultural fulfill some basic human needs, each government should prioritize it than other matters, by allocating more budget in this area. For example, for improving irritation system, fertilizing more and more fields. Moreover, raising agricultural expertise can to great deal enhance methods of cultivation or harvesting.
To conclude, some causes of existing less food in this modern world for many people along with some solution are mentioned above.

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There is no doubt that agriculture has developed during last decades.

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There is no doubt that agriculture had developed during last decades. However, a considerable proportion of people in the world suffer from starvation. This is a root cause of various problems in such underprivileged areas including malnutrition,...

There is no doubt that agriculture had developed during last decades. However, a considerable proportion of people in the world suffer from starvation. This is a root cause of various problems in such underprivileged areas including malnutrition, specific illnesses or even death. There are main causes, each of which requires an appropriate response from government and society as a whole.

To begin with, hunger in some parts of the world stems predominately from unequal wealth distribution; using modern technology requires expending a lot of money to buy equipment and facilities, while it is approximately impossible for some nationalities to allocate a huge budget to this issue, or in some cases it is not an essential priority of the government due to their political purposes. Clearly, the only way to address this is receiving help from international voluntary services and NGO's to reduce the number of individuals dealing with starvation and its consequences.

On the other hand, some spots in the world are not suitable for agriculture owing to their hostile climate. Their local people have not enough information about how to overcome this issue; therefore, these ones should be given adequate training and support so that learn recent agriculture methods that lead them to exploitation of their own limited natural resources, and tackling the challenge of applying this changeover.

In conclude, there is no simple solution to the problem. Nonetheless, if the measures I have suggested were introduced, we would all enjoy a better quality of life and experience a fairly situation which everyone can reach its earliest need of nutrition. As a result of overcoming the disaster of starvation in this advanced technological world, people are highly likely to be healthy and they would be less prone to the physiological and psychological problems that are known as direct and knock-on effects of lacking nutrients in body.

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these days many people claim that, despite a plenty of progress have been taking place in technology and in every aspects, especially agriculture and providing food resources for people, still the world has to face with vital issue of hungry,...

these days many people claim that, despite a plenty of progress have been taking place in technology and in every aspects, especially agriculture and providing food resources for people, still the world has to face with vital issue of hungry, which endangered human being. this essential problem could be related to various reasons such as decrease in water resources, climate change, global warming, drought and governments policies. obviously international community is able to control this vital issue by many solutions. in this essay I will explain reasons and solutions in the following paragraphs.
there is a tangible evidence that proven, our green planet has fallen into critical situation. nobody denies that, the mother earth's water resources have been decreased enormously by drought phenomenon , global warming, climate change and thousands and thousands reasons which have related to mankind activities. these changes have a strong impact on our water resources therefore we consider that many countries have lost their farmlands due to drought phenomenon and lack of rain which leads to water shortage. actually water is the main source of life and one of the most essential ingredients in order to cooking foods,growing crops and feeding animals. moreover poor countries cannot develop their technology in order to consuming less water aim to growing crops, which is the main source of every human's nutrition and these are playing vital role in feeding animals like cow and sheep. But what is the best solution?. Fortunately, there are a plenty of international organizations and NGOs which have struggled against the terrible issue of hungry. actually developed countries could help them by setting up the latest agriculture technologies in order to consuming less water resources. besides NGOs are able to create international campaigns for helping them directly by supply their main food sources such as wheat,outs, corn, potato.
Another factor which has a huge impact on this issue, could be irresponsible policies of authorities and governments. it is clear that, as a result of their policies could be wide spread of poverty and hungry. to clarify, I explain with an example, according to statistics, the world population has been increasing dramatically. India is one of the countries which has got a huge portion of birth and population growth. there are so many poor people who have lived in India and suffered by hungry and food shortage. Indeed, food shortage could be just because of population. population growth can lead to decrease in food resources. food resources are limit therefore it cannot distribute well among all the world's people. in addition there are many countries which are under war and sanction condition therefore, they have to face with the problem of shortage
of food resources.
consequently, The governments should put hungry issue on their highest priority and looking for possible solutions. poor countries have to collaborate with international community and rich and developed countries in order to persuade them to invest on development in agriculture technology in their lands. it is significant that poor countries build strong relationship by cooperating well with rich countries in order to beat the hungry issue.
To sum up, today's world have faced with many disasters. clearly, hungry is one of the biggest one. Although agriculture technology has progressed, but hungry issue still exist. there are so many ways and tools are worth to apply by The governments and authorities. these kind of problems belongs to human existence so it is time to think and do something especial without wasting time.

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Advances in technology and science have created incredible progression in agriculture, however, many people are still hungry. Malnutrition and hungry can cause many problem in society such getting diverse diseases. To mitigate...

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Advances in technology and science have created incredible progression in agriculture, however, many people are still hungry. Malnutrition and hungry can cause many problem in society such getting diverse diseases. To mitigate this problem, firstly reasons of this challenges should be discussed .
Advanced in agriculture industry have become beneficial for its benefits; production of healthier production without chemical fertilizer which is called organic food as one of the notable benefits . moreover, drop irrigation can decline considerably consumption of water and energy needed to product. With development of agriculture more and better production can be produced, however, this can decrease starvation in the world . One of the main reasons to this problem can be the gap between the rich and the poor in society .Theses days while the rich are faced with overeating , the poor are faced with strict starvation. When the poor are not able to buy needed foods, no matter that industry can product healthier agricultural production with the most advanced technology . As another cause I can introduce war ; destructive effect of war among countries can increase starvation and famine in the world .
Although eliminating starvation cannot be possible in short-term, I believe we can try to mitigate this crisis . One of the measure is likely to optimal consumption of agricultural production without squander in consumption . As other effective solution , governments can consider Subsidies and food basket for the poor as they can buy their needed foods. Moreover, I think governments with adopting tax not only will be able to decrease the gap between the rich and the poor but also can fund needed cost to consider subside for the poor . Other effective solution, In my opinion, is strengthening diplomacy between countries as countries can have suitable relationship together as we can see our world without war between nations . I hope to see brighter future .

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Nowadays, poverty and hunger is an arguable issue. Agriculture always as the most important way for producing people's food needed is conserved. Although one of the most signification advances in civilization is the development of...

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Nowadays, poverty and hunger is an arguable issue. Agriculture always as the most important way for producing people's food needed is conserved. Although one of the most signification advances in civilization is the development of modern methods farming for food production, many of people all over the world suffer from hunger. In this essay is explained reasons of hunger and is offered some solution.
The signification of human factors in people hunger is undeniable. Unfortunately, there are many factors in this field cause that people are in destitution. Firstly, we can mention to Lack of technology in some countries. Although, great progress in modern agricultural practices around of world, some countries such as Iran doesn't have enough knowledge for modern agriculture and still uses traditional agriculture .therefore it cannot property produce the food needed. Secondly, it's worth mentioning that government's ability to sell manufactured products. For example many of people cannot sell their corps so they haven't adequate money for Supply of necessities’ life.
In addition to human factors, importance of natural factor also should be explain. Firstly, the important things in husbandry is fertilize of acres. Since many countries haven't proper clime condition, they cannot be success in farming field. Additionally, erosion of soil and weather condition like drought are Problematic in this field. Secondly, a large population of a country without adequate natural resources is another reason which cause people cannot to supply their needs. However, these reason cause that people weakened economically, there are many solutions that can reduce these problems.
There are several solution for hanger of people with proper management of agricultural problems. Firstly government can management of trade and create Possibility to sell products. For example government can salve problem of sales of corps with trading goods to goods. Secondly, farmers use artifact condition farming like Production of greenhouse products.
In conclusion, although, there are many problem in many countries that cause many of people be hungry, there are many solution like proper management of government and use of artifact condition for farming.

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It is true that there has been a significant improvements in farming methods over the past few decades. However, despite our progress, many populations still suffer from malnutrition. In this essay I tend to explore some of the root causes of...

It is true that there has been a significant improvements in farming methods over the past few decades. However, despite our progress, many populations still suffer from malnutrition. In this essay I tend to explore some of the root causes of this issue , and some viable solutions to tackle this problem.
In my view, There would be several factors which account for the lack of food resources. The first contribution factor would be the impact of environmentall drawbacks, such as , climate change and lack of water resources. Unpredictable weather conditions has always been an obstacle against agriculture and farming. The price of sudden climate shift in famine, drought, and disease has always been high. Another factor might be the rise of population which is growing at startling pace. Although having had remarkable progress in intensive farming, agricultural products may not keep pace with soaring population.
In order to address successfully the pressing problems of providing every one with adequate food, both governmentered and individual should take responsibility. The most fundamental action can be reducing the amount of carbon dioxide emissions , which contribute to global warming , and thereby the climate shift. Furthermore, individual's should figure out how to use food manufacturged crops more efficiently, and mitigate the waste of products as much as possible. I personally believe that it is for governmentered to motivate and educate people to rethink about food resources as top priority. To draw a conclusion, It seems to me that, in spite of the development of modern intensive farming , there are of course many problems that have to be solved in order to meet basic human needs.

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The past fifteen years have seen a dramatic increase in the availability of all crops in farming industry throughout the world. Although the world has succeeded in reducing poverty in accordance with the millennium development goal targets, food...

The past fifteen years have seen a dramatic increase in the availability of all crops in farming industry throughout the world. Although the world has succeeded in reducing poverty in accordance with the millennium development goal targets, food security and adequate nutrition have not been achieved which are observed particularly in developing nations. It is one of the primary needs of every members of society which should be satisfied and this criteria are not met unless governments formulate their economic policies. There are several causes and numerous measures which merit to close scruting and I will elaborate this issue on this essay in following paragraphs.

Several factors have contributed to the problem of widespread hunger. The most vitally important causes is natural disasters. In this way, the related authorities can devote the substantial amount of time and money as well in order to reinforce economic infrastructures to prevent of famine in their communities. If they allocate some countless budgets for extra food resources in force measure situations, this challenge will not be risen in some extents. Furthermore, the responsibility of exerting control of population lies with government in some cases in such a way that they lunch schemes so as to prevent overpopulation. One particularly salient example is restriction of government grants for families who born more than two babies.
The another contributing factor is weak performances of employers. The majority of employees are exploited by their bosses thus they cannot cover their life expenses and meet their basic needs with peanut-paid. As an instance, women and immigrants are significantly subjected to this inequality and most of them have suffered from chronic hungers according to recent statistics. To resolve this issue, governments have myriad of tasks which if they carry out, this social problem will be eradicated completely. They should impose law which prevent discriminations and explosion.
By the way of conclusion, despite of the fact that we have witnessed the great propensities in agricultural industry, some families suffer from setbacks of starvation in world which government can implement right policies in order to prevent overpopulation and discrimination in field of jobs and manage circumstances after natural disasters.

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Although farming has progressed in a couple of decades, myriad of people suffer from hunger and they can not prepare necessary food for themselves. I think there are two main reasons for this problem, and also two solutions we...

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Although farming has progressed in a couple of decades, myriad of people suffer from hunger and they can not prepare necessary food for themselves. I think there are two main reasons for this problem, and also two solutions we can adopt.

First of all, what we should be considered is that poverty is one of the most important reason of this problem. Because agriculture has become more advance than before so, if a person have enough money, he/she can buy sufficient food to eat. Therefore the main cause of this case is economic problem. Another main reason of this problem is that ample of people consume plenty of food materials and various of luxury meals in their special ceremonies like weeding and birthday, whereas, some other people are hungry. Thus it is noted as a cultural problem.

Turning to possible solution, vividly suitable job for every body should be provided by government. If the majority of people had reasonable income, they could prepare necessity needs like food, so the less people around the world go hungry. Secondly, via cultural problems many people could decide to change lifestyle as to this case such as lavish. What should be done is that they ought not to prepare the large amount of different meals in one ceremony, or at the end of that could save extra food hygienically and then send to charities or poor persons as soon as possible.

To sum up, it can be resulted that there are not only economic reasons, but also cultural problems via this case. Therefore the first problem should be solved by authorities and the second one could be solved by own people in every society.

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The past few years have seen a dramatic growth in farming field. however, there are yet some people in the world who are
suffering from hunger. In the following essay I intend to explore some causes of this issue along with some...

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The past few years have seen a dramatic growth in farming field. however, there are yet some people in the world who are
suffering from hunger. In the following essay I intend to explore some causes of this issue along with some viable solutions to it.
Chief among the causes of this problem is that not every country has the required potentials to fulfill its agricultural prospects, in other words, the soil may not have the basic infrastructure to endure the digging out the ground to plant seeds or other process of farming. thus, the production rate is on considerable decrease as these countries cannot rely on their agricultural productivity then it leads to growing number of hungry people. Another factor to cause this problem is that the world’s sources of food and energy are vanishing due to environmental changes like global warming.
In order to tackle this problem, it needs to be more united actions to be taken, trading products might solve the problem even temporary. Furthermore, some main and basic agraian products can be exported to countries that are in great demands for food. Needless to say, government of some dominant countries play significant roles in identifying and supporting these people through sending necessary food and products.
By way of conclusion, while lack of basic requirements such as enriched soil and inappropriate weather conditions contribute to increasing number of people, governments unitedness to export vital foods and necessities can address the issue efficiently.

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It is uncontestable fact that the world hunger is still extensive, despite of sufficient global food resources made by improvements in agriculture. I am inclined to believe that this worrying challenge stems from some contributors and could be...

It is uncontestable fact that the world hunger is still extensive, despite of sufficient global food resources made by improvements in agriculture. I am inclined to believe that this worrying challenge stems from some contributors and could be alleviated if appropriate steps were taken by authorities in the local and global levels.in what follows; all arguments will be expatiated prior reaching to an informal conclusion.On one first place, money plays a large part and may arise from un or underemployment or lack of education. It means people are too poor to buy readily available food. This apparently severer in less developed countries with limited economic status. Regarding solution, it is suggested to first world countries to give money aids to poor societies, at least for a short time. However, on my personal experience, it should be accompanied with educating them to find a way to get out of poverty like teaching local community how to irrigate and grow crops. It teaches them to be self-sufficient as opposed to being dependent. As a quota goes’’ give a man fish and you feed him for a day; teach a man to fish and you feed him for a life time.Wasting food is the second main cause of why people still suffer from starvation. Producing more food results in more food going to waste. The food thrown away is enough to feed starving people all around the world. Therefore reducing the amount of food we waste yearly would possibly another chief solution, such as in Britain, where government came up with the Pig idea.   They have been recycling food by feeding it to pig farms, so that, in this way, they produced more protein which can feed whom suffer from malnutrition.To sum up, based on what discussed above, lack of money in underdeveloped nations and wasting food, particularly in developed countries should be blamed for still existing starvation. Giving money aids which accompanied with educating local people as well as recycling food could reduce the hunger levels.

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There are lots of people starving in many areas around the world, in spite of agricultural advancements. This essay will examine the main causes of this problem and possible solutions.
The two main causes of having hungry people in societies, is...

There are lots of people starving in many areas around the world, in spite of agricultural advancements. This essay will examine the main causes of this problem and possible solutions.
The two main causes of having hungry people in societies, is economic issues and increasing population. Challenging with depression around the world, people face difficulties to provide nutrition for their families. In other words, consequences of economic problems such as unemployment, make earning money so hard. As recent research shows, the number of people not capable of providing foodstuffs and passing away as a result, is obviously soaring. Moreover, high population makes this issue worse in many countries. Poor people who have many children are always struggling with making food for them. For example, in India, lots of people live in streets because of poverty and they still give birth to many children.
Some possible solutions to this problem are try to get out of depression and promoting awareness among people. Government is ought to do some activities to get rid of economic problems. For instance, investing on tourism industry can make lots of benefits such as creating an array of jobs. Furthermore, the next step is informing the general population the ways of pregnancy preventions. This way, more people can satisfy their basic needs and population will be under controlled.
To conclude, government and people activities make providing food difficult for a lot of people. However, positive steps can result in having less starving people.

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Despite the progress in agriculture's industries like modern machine or changes in agriculture's seeds due to increase in product, there are still fundamental issues in people's nourishment almost all over the world. This essay first discusses...

Despite the progress in agriculture's industries like modern machine or changes in agriculture's seeds due to increase in product, there are still fundamental issues in people's nourishment almost all over the world. This essay first discusses the reasons that cause this problem and then explain the possible solutions to reduce the effect of this unpleasant phenomena.
Although the amount of agriculture's product has increased in past decades, the number of hunger people has risen too. The main reason is that the proportion of a families wasted food is too high. Another reason is that these huge food productions do not distribute equally all around the world. For example, some countries which involve wars or suffer from drought, can supply foods for their peoples properly.
Global issues demand global attentions. World organizations like the Unites Nations and its important unit the UNISET should interfere and encourage countries to collect financial aids to solve this problem. Also governments should prepare programs to teach people how to use foods productions efficiently and support this policy by conducting laws.
In conclusion there should be real reconsideration in agriculture's products distribution through the UN's supervising. Also the developed countries should be asked to increase their humanitarians aid to reduce the number of people who cannot access to proper food especially in Africa and some part of Asia.

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While agriculture beside everything is developed some groups of people are still hungry due to two main reasons governments and global changes which will be discussed in details.
The first and important reason is governments which are the main...

While agriculture beside everything is developed some groups of people are still hungry due to two main reasons governments and global changes which will be discussed in details.
The first and important reason is governments which are the main cause for the existence of Hunger among some groups of people all over the world. Governments and it's cabinets cause the economy problems and the war among the countries; For instance, in my country, Iran, due to pricy and low salaries which are the results of sanctions from other countries, most of the people cannot afford their basic needs, specially food that is so necessary; Another illustration for this is Syria or other countries which are involved with war, people in these areas cannot find food especially the agricultural products. Governments decides and works are intensified by global changes.

The most important reason is global change, that is case a group of people in some areas feel the lack of agricultural products according to my experience because I live in a hot and dry province which is called Khuzestan the weather is going to be hot everywhere and in some areas like that, it could be worse so that people cannot do any cultivate for themselves and their countries; consequently, some of the products are going to be extinct and maybe people in these areas in near future going to be hungry.

In conclusion, some people are or will be felt the lack of agricultural products by the government's decisions and global changes.

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Considerable number of indigent people suffering from malnutrition around the world is grossly contradicted to the ever growing progress in agriculture and every other domains whose developments are sensible. Why this issue exist and how it can...

Considerable number of indigent people suffering from malnutrition around the world is grossly contradicted to the ever growing progress in agriculture and every other domains whose developments are sensible. Why this issue exist and how it can be addressed are a bone of contention nowadays.
Undoubtedly, there are various contributing factors trigger creation of starved and famished population around the world. As far as the authentic financial and economic management are concerned, without attentive economic plans ,underdeveloped countries which lack state-of-the-art agricultural instruments, lag behind of their economic blossoms as their counterparts achieved. Surprisingly, most of this hungry-stricken groups belong to countries enjoying myriad treasures of natural resources of oil, precious stones and other worthwhile resources which need to be exploited in standard way to help them to combat their indigence and hunger. Ignorance as well as insufficient instructive knowledge of being aware of how to deal with their available man made technology or the labour are considered main factors regarding this problematic issue. Their sheer deprivation of cutting edged technology to ascend the farm land efficiency in order to drain their farms and duplicate their crops and Products in addition to environmental crises confronting them such as drought and natural disasters like flood and hurricane are other key issues which give rise to their concerns and problems. Although all of these parameters are not solely rooted within their critical matters, most of them make them fail to yield their effectiveness .

When it comes to the solution, complexity of fundamental features must be taken into account and how they are going to be addressed is absolutely vital. There are certainly some short term solutions which are highly likely superficial and temporary. Although they may help their economy to thrive for years, never do they obviate setbacks for long terms. In fact proverbially, instead of giving them fish They are expected to learn how masterly catch fish. Enlightening people's awareness how to be equipped with related knowledge and skills to combat their issues are inextricably linked their confidence to thrive. That authorities should shoulder the responsibility to facilitate and strengthen infrastructure for the country throughout demanded educational and training programs either in educational centres or social media, cannot be ignored. Besides, individuals at their grass roots levels are required to overcome the ritual ignorance and falsehood of their traditional beliefs which they are ritually underdeveloped. On contrary , it is imperative to rely on their confidence and make more struggle to exploit their potential and boost their available agricultural devices instead of obsolete systems so as to focus and follow other developed countries obvious means of progress as their role models especially those who after enormous pressure of war and debts try to flourish their economy even by their least natural resources.
To conclude, the crux of the matter is that , not only the problem of hunger population of the world but also many other complexities threatening our planet from environmental degradation to economic crises can be addressed if countries truly concentrate on optimism and desirable compromise in a unity based on Global consensus.

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Agriculture is a way and a
method that we use to satisfy our needs related to food. Nowadays, agriculture is so advanced but unfortunately it has not distributed evenly all around the world,as such there are still some countries...

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Agriculture is a way and a
method that we use to satisfy our needs related to food. Nowadays, agriculture is so advanced but unfortunately it has not distributed evenly all around the world,as such there are still some countries with fundamental agriculture.
It is obvious that agriculture should be done differently according to the situation of the rigoin. So it is extremely important for choosing a right method of doing agriculture. As we all know despite the presence of sophisticated agricultural methods,people in some places suffer from lack of food. It is mostly due to critical way of controlling water. For example in places where there is not enough water it is not suitable to use water to grow crops which needs lot of water because they might have not enough water to grow other crops as well as drinkable water for people. So it is better they manage to import those products and save underground water reserves for the next generation. Another problem which cause people suffer from lack of food that there is. Another problem that disturbs agriculture in some places is lack of knowledge to choose an appropriate geographical position for farming. Farming must be prevented in places where there is a high chance for water to get contaminated or get lost due to evaporation.
The most efficient way in which we can make a remarkable change in agriculture is to reprogram and replace all the old and insufficient agricultural methods with the most advanced methods and consider more the future goals. People in charge of these changes must research to find the best way to obviate this problem by increasing their knowledge and considering all the factors and not only their benefits.
Scientists continuously find new ways of recycling and the the natural cycling has already existed so they concluded that there is enough resources for agriculturing but we must change our ways to use them. Hopefully we all can see a day with no hungry individual.

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In the millennium, it has been expected to eradicate the root causes of hunger. But despite the breakthrough in the agriculture, the overwhelming majority of the population still goes to bed hungry every night. The cogent reasons behind this...

In the millennium, it has been expected to eradicate the root causes of hunger. But despite the breakthrough in the agriculture, the overwhelming majority of the population still goes to bed hungry every night. The cogent reasons behind this issue and radical solutions to deal with it will be perceived in the following.
Hunger is due to climate changes and poverty, not scarcity of food. Rising the average of temperature, wrought by global warming in virtually every near and cranny of the planet, is ruling out the likelihood of cultivation. Of the deserts, which is growing larger because of this surge, one of the hottest is the Sahara in Africa. By extending the area of it, most of its occupants, failing to farm on their lands and to afford the cost of living even their nutrition, are streaming other continents. But meanwhile, lacking the required skills and knowledge, they disable to land a job. Especially, despite the improvement of the agriculture industry in the developed countries, they are deprived of this bliss. This is why there are individuals who suffer from malnutrition.
However, the eradication of hunger will be possible if the essential measures are taken in global size. It is not issued that be solved by domestic policies, but needs the involvement of rich countries. Drawing eco-friendly plans could offset the impacts of greenhouse gases, thereby enhancing the chance of agriculture improvement. Likewise, They, although can transport thousands of miles a substantial amount of the basic needs, can donate cash instead. And the equality redistribution of wealth in a novel way by monitoring impartial executive figures might be fruitful. Not only could this provide the sustainable economy for the deprived, but also might be a step forward in trying to end the hunger and poverty.
By way of conclusion, ending hunger is entirely feasible if both poverty and climate changes are curbed. At the national level, adopting environmentally friendly plans in line with redistributing the income and assets can help to achieve a fairer world.

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These days we can observe the significant progress in agriculture. However, it does not bring the rate of people are hungry decrease in the world. Although there could be several reason why is this case, I believe that there are proper solution...

These days we can observe the significant progress in agriculture. However, it does not bring the rate of people are hungry decrease in the world. Although there could be several reason why is this case, I believe that there are proper solution to solve this.
It is undeniable that these advances merely observe in modern and wealthy countries. it cause these countries only follow hefty profit that they want to obtain many more money by means of advances agriculture and they avoid from introduce their knowledge with lower price to developing countries on the ground that want just more profit. Moreover, in spite of them able to produce many crops and sell with moderate price so as to solve this problem, they will not do it. Besides, we fail to ignore the role of government which does not provide financial help and encouragement of the agriculturalists.
Despite of this cause, some measure should be taken to solve this problem. First, the modern countries should sell their state-of-the-ate tools of agriculture to the developing countries and provide the context of flourish and advancement. In addition, leading cause of the hungry are governments. they must guarantee a minimum price for farmers and products and offering financial support and loan in order to promote agriculture so as to after a while they do not need to the modern countries and will be independent.
To sum up, this difficulty maybe is duo to ignorance of modern countries to the poor countries and they better change their think and the governments of countries with disadvantaged people should try to develop agriculture to soon eliminate this problem .

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It is true that many people around the world do not have enough food to eat despite agricultural breakthroughs. There are several root reasons for this phenomenon, and some measures can be taken to address it.
There are a number of reasons why...

It is true that many people around the world do not have enough food to eat despite agricultural breakthroughs. There are several root reasons for this phenomenon, and some measures can be taken to address it.
There are a number of reasons why hunger people can still be seen. Firstly, although the knowledge of agriculture has substantially been expanded, which can lead to higher productivity, the developments in methods and equipment of conservation of such perishable products is trivial. Therefore, the large quantity of vegetables and fruits deteriorate during shipping and storage, resulting in lack of agricultural products to use. Secondly, the prices of these goods are still unaffordable for many families, particularly those who are underprivileged. For example, one kilogram of sour cherry costs about forty thousand Tomans in Iran, affordable just for prosperous families.
Governments can adopt some effective strategies to tackle this issue. To begin with, they can allocate more budgets to Research and Development department of agricultural companies in order to develop state-of-the-art technologies which would make it possible to preserve these products for longer time. In addition, impoverished and disadvantaged families can receive the state support to meet their needs. Consider, for instance, the UK government which provides such citizens with financial support as well as free of charge groceries in order to e sure that all people can meet their basic needs.
In conclusion, some reasons can be considered for this issue. However, the authorities can take some steps to deal with it.

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It's obvisoudly human have made progress in various fields such as agriculture industry,regardless of developing methods,some people suffer shortages of food.
This essay discuses the major resons for shortages food and suggest some soloutions...

It's obvisoudly human have made progress in various fields such as agriculture industry,regardless of developing methods,some people suffer shortages of food.
This essay discuses the major resons for shortages food and suggest some soloutions to managed the problem.
First,soil erasion and long periods of drought are most common cause that lands are not fertile ,besides green house gases are principle elements to change climate and nitrous oxide effect in land.
Control in human activity is efficient to decrease these cases.
Second,growing population is significant factor .society needs control population.
Furthermore,wasted the huge amount of food on daily lives is a substantial cause.changing culture, focouse the recycle and life style are important to solve most problems.avoid wastag and cook as per the need
To summarize, weather conditions and growing population and squander are mainly results of shortage food,its our duty to prevent them

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Today it is utterly accepted that in spite of all the progresses made in farming industry, abroad range of inhabitants of our planet are hungry. This article is going to deal with issue. To this end, at first the reasons of this problem and the...

Today it is utterly accepted that in spite of all the progresses made in farming industry, abroad range of inhabitants of our planet are hungry. This article is going to deal with issue. To this end, at first the reasons of this problem and the some solution to solve this matter will be stated.


There are a diverse range of reasons involved in this condition. Firstly, unfair distribution of welfare and money among the nations, make some countries extremely poor and the other completely rich. Consequently, when citizens of poor countries are living in absolute poverty and looking for one meal every week, the residents of other countries wasting a remarkable proportion of the food in their daily life . Secondly, absolutely complicated situation in some parts of the world like political controversies and sanctions make it impossible to feed the hungriness. Thirdly, the level of corruption among the political leaders in some counties is so considerable that they follow some monetary politics to satisfy their private purposes rather than their national benefits . Finally, some natural phenomena like global warming and climate change drastically reduced the amount of agricultural products like crops and fruits and as a result , a huge population faces shortage of food particularly in warmer and drier climates like middle east and north of Africa. But what can be done to manage this condition?





To solve these problems an array of actions can be made. Firstly ,as we are living in richer countries, we have to reform our eating habits and try to send a part of eating materials at our disposal in the case of charities and voluntary works for the people in poorer countries. We have make some efforts, but not enough .Secondly, our politicians have to solve international tensions to pave the way for more efficient and constructive approaches to provide sufficient foods for poorer nations .Thirdly, the corrupted governments must follow clear instruction to reduce the level of corruption among the body of the country managers .Fourthly, the more we apply innovative methods in farming industry, the more we can deal with these problems. In this regard, new technologies and ideas like Nano technology, proper irrigation methods or utilizing pest-resistant crops or reformed kinds of crops to withstand extremely harsh conditions like very cold winter or very dry and hot summers and be taken into account as available solution in order to solve these problems.


In conclusion, although some barriers like political problems and extreme weather condition like unseasonably warm caused some problems to provide enough food for the many people worldwide, I strongly believe these problems an be overcomed by means of correct management

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Today it is utterly accepted that in spite of all the progresses made in farming industry, abroad range of inhabitants of our planet are hungry. This article is going to deal with issue. To this end, at first the reasons of this problem and the...

Today it is utterly accepted that in spite of all the progresses made in farming industry, abroad range of inhabitants of our planet are hungry. This article is going to deal with issue. To this end, at first the reasons of this problem and the some solution to solve this matter will be stated.


There are a diverse range of reasons involved in this condition. Firstly, unfair distribution of welfare and money among the nations, make some countries extremely poor and the other completely rich. Consequently, when citizens of poor countries are living in absolute poverty and looking for one meal every week, the residents of other countries wasting a remarkable proportion of the food in their daily life . Secondly, absolutely complicated situation in some parts of the world like political controversies and sanctions make it impossible to feed the hungriness. Thirdly, the level of corruption among the political leaders in some counties is so considerable that they follow some monetary politics to satisfy their private purposes rather than their national benefits . Finally, some natural phenomena like global warming and climate change drastically reduced the amount of agricultural products like crops and fruits and as a result , a huge population faces shortage of food particularly in warmer and drier climates like middle east and north of Africa. But what can be done to manage this condition?





To solve these problems an array of actions can be made. Firstly ,as we are living in richer countries, we have to reform our eating habits and try to send a part of eating materials at our disposal in the case of charities and voluntary works for the people in poorer countries. We have make some efforts, but not enough .Secondly, our politicians have to solve international tensions to pave the way for more efficient and constructive approaches to provide sufficient foods for poorer nations .Thirdly, the corrupted governments must follow clear instruction to reduce the level of corruption among the body of the country managers .Fourthly, the more we apply innovative methods in farming industry, the more we can deal with these problems. In this regard, new technologies and ideas like Nano technology, proper irrigation methods or utilizing pest-resistant crops or reformed kinds of crops to withstand extremely harsh conditions like very cold winter or very dry and hot summers and be taken into account as available solution in order to solve these problems.


In conclusion, although some barriers like political problems and extreme weather condition like unseasonably warm caused some problems to provide enough food for the many people worldwide, I strongly believe these problems an be overcomed by means of correct management

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The emergence of modern technological devices and methods has led to significant changes in various industries such as agriculture. Although a considerable growth in the agriculture, a sheer number of people still deal with severe...

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The emergence of modern technological devices and methods has led to significant changes in various industries such as agriculture. Although a considerable growth in the agriculture, a sheer number of people still deal with severe problems for their basic demands of food. This seems to stem from main causes, each of which requires an appropriate response from government and society as a whole.
Firstly, applying newly modern methods greatly contribute to improvement in agriculture, but less wealth countries mainly do not equip with those technology. Afghanistan, for instance, have numerous wild lands being suitable for agriculture, but they do not have adequate knowledge in this field. For the sake of those countries, developed societies should take some measurements to transfer of technological methods and knowledge to developing country and could arrange some educational courses for farmers .
Secondly, one of the major reasons partly could be the lack of suitable climate for agriculture around the world. Fruitful lands often find in prosperous countries. Even if poor countries have appropriate lands for planting, they are commonly under the power of powerful countries. This problem would not be solved, unless the governments would reach a unanimous verdict about fairly distribution products.
Finally, in wealth countries people have turned to luxury foods and fruits. The cascade of cultivated soil have allocated to those kinds of products instead of basic demands. This could trigger in lack of basic foods for many people in less affluent countries. Governments, therefore, are abound to be expected to aware of how many lands uses for luxury products and they prioritize to meet basic needs of people throughout the world.
In conclusion, lack of cultivated land in every county, not applying effective practices and preference luxury foods replace of basic needs all are major causes of being hungry despite a great deal of improvement in agriculture. All mentioned will not be insurmountable obstacle, if governments effectively these issues.

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it is often heralded that although agriculture realm ameliorated by technological progressions, still people suffer from hunger
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it is often heralded that although agriculture realm ameliorated by technological progressions, still people suffer from hunger
and food shortage throughout the world. in my opinion, I would discuss several precursors to this issue, before some viable measures are drawn.

Numerous reasons cause this phenomenon. First the most exquisite one is that food and crops often coalesce in the hands of government figures and hardly drips down to ordinary people. The matter of technology is red herring here due to stocking and preserving nutritions in government storehouses. Secondly, overpopulation is nowadays escalating and wreak the havoc in this issue. This is the reason that present yielding does not meet an enormous amount of demands, thus many regions facing famine. For instance, China with 1.5 billion people claims that it can not satisfy the need.

In order to reverse such a counterproductive event, I would like to propose a number of drastic remedies. The officials with the help of the private sector can inject foods into everyday market perpetuity. This practice, on the one hand, might increase material availability and on the other hand, it could lead to a decrease in food price. Moreover, educational classes can be implemented to inform families and couples about the population and its dangerous effect. It is an instructive action that perhaps diminish the rapid growth of the community, and thus production meets demand.

In conclusion, while agriculture reaps the benefit from technology, there is indispensable concern about people starvation. What has been outlined above address some of its causes and solutions to mitigate this problem.

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Increasing rate of growth in tools and technology has had a great effect on every aspect of our life and agriculture industry is not an exception. It includes manufacturing of plentiful new machines which has arisen level of agricultural...

Increasing rate of growth in tools and technology has had a great effect on every aspect of our life and agriculture industry is not an exception. It includes manufacturing of plentiful new machines which has arisen level of agricultural productions highly, however, this huge amount of output is not being distributed among people around the world fairly.
Exploring this issue needs a multi-dimensional view of the world trades circumstances. First of all based on the unbalanced progress of different countries in different continents and extra enhancement of gap between developed countries and developing ones, management of circulations of agronomical productions has been put in limited strong economical countries. It causes a big financial pressure on poor government like African ones to gain their agricultural needs. Although they benefit from numerous resources potentially, because of lack of a good management and unfair system of food distribution which is under the control of exclusive countries, most African people deal with hunger.
Secondly, a weak sense of empathy between humans has decreased level of helping starving people in poor regions. This can be analyzed in regard to the universal culture of overconsuming goods and foods. It can be shown that the level of food consumption has been increased in developed countries, though many hungry children lost their lives in Africa yearly because of food scarce.
In conclusion, this tragic situation can be improved through a comprehensive effort and campaign of different people from all countries. Amendment of the system of food distribution over the whole world beside increasing sense of humanitarianism can help mitigate the number of hunger people.

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Although agriculture has achieved great degrees of progress in recent years, hunger still lingers persistently in our world. There are a wide range of reasons why this phenomenon appears, including overpopulation in poor areas of...

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Although agriculture has achieved great degrees of progress in recent years, hunger still lingers persistently in our world. There are a wide range of reasons why this phenomenon appears, including overpopulation in poor areas of the Earth, misusing natural resources, and mismanagement in different governmental levels. Some would argue that hunger is an inevitable part of some people’s destiny and there is not much we can do about it. However, I believe this disaster is to be blamed, to a great extent, on governments and can be eradicated if suitable measures are taken.
Governments could encourage optimum use of resources by investing in agricultural field studies which assess the best areas and methods for growing produce. This way, the amount of crops produced can be elevated and consequently less hunger will be faced. However, this strategy alone would do little to stop starvation.
An alternative strategy would be to pass laws on the maximum number of children each family is legally allowed to have and defining fines if the law is disobeyed. Although this may help stop overpopulation and increase the quality of life for the hungry, passing these kinds of laws may be perceived of as a breach of human rights. Needless to say that it is a family’s right to decide on its size.
The most efficient solution is to fundamentally change the management approaches taken in different governmental levels. In many cases, people suffering from lack of food live in extremely rich lands, such as the poor living in the African countries. The reason why they experience such tough situations is the fact that the authorities are not often caring enough and are occupied with other less basic issues of the country. If more thoughtful and sagacious people were given the most determining and significant positions, people would be able to enjoy the bounties their God has bestowed upon them.
The strategies proposed here could effectively assist the world and the authorities fight starvation-related problems. Even though some of them may have great financial consequences or may need a paradigm shift in the governing system, they are well worth the costs.

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Although agriculture has achieves great degrees of progress in recent years, hunger still lingers persistently in our world. There are a wide range of reasons why this phenomenon appears, including overpopulation in poor areas of...

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Although agriculture has achieves great degrees of progress in recent years, hunger still lingers persistently in our world. There are a wide range of reasons why this phenomenon appears, including overpopulation in poor areas of the Earth, misusing natural resources, and mismanagement in different governmental levels. Some would argue that hunger is an inevitable part of some people’s destiny and there is not much we can do about it. However, I believe this disaster is to be blamed, to a great extent, on governments and can be eradicated if suitable measures are taken.
Governments could encourage optimum use of resources by investing in agricultural field studies which assess the best areas and methods for growing produce. This way, the amount of crops produced can be elevated and consequently less hunger will be faced. However, this strategy alone would do little to stop starvation.
An alternative strategy would be to pass laws on the maximum number of children each family is legally allowed to have and defining fines if the law is disobeyed. Although this may help stop overpopulation and increase the quality of life for the hungry, passing these kinds of laws may be perceived of as a breach of human rights. Needless to say that it is a family’s right to decide on its size.
The most efficient solution is to fundamentally change the management approaches taken in different governmental levels. In many cases, people suffering from lack of food live in extremely rich lands, such as the poor living in the African countries. The reason why they experience such tough situations is the fact that the authorities are not often caring enough and are occupied with other less basic issues of the country. If more thoughtful and sagacious people were given the most determining and significant positions, people would be able to enjoy the bounties their God has bestowed upon them.
The strategies proposed here could effectively assist the world and the authorities fight starvation-related problems. Even though some of them may have great financial consequences or may need a paradigm shift in the governing system, they are well worth the costs.

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Agricultural products have been always regarded as one of the most significant source of nutrition in mankind’s diet. However, over the past few decades, despite of all progress in this field, there are still a certain number of people who are...

Agricultural products have been always regarded as one of the most significant source of nutrition in mankind’s diet. However, over the past few decades, despite of all progress in this field, there are still a certain number of people who are prone to malnutrition. Although there could be several reasons why this is the case, I sanguinely believe that there are numerous alternative ways to ameliorate this acute problem.
Conspicuously, one of the most significant contributing factors is inequality in wealth distribution in the globe. Exploitation of natural resources of the myriad of deprived countries by a few super powerful nations causes many people cannot even have access to a simple food and clean water. A valid illustration of this topic are many counties in horn of Africa, where in spite of having wide range of natural resources, people are suffering from hunger. Another cogent reason is that the advancement in agriculture industry is limited to the few nations and many other countries still are using their own traditional method of cultivation, irrigation and pesticide. As a result, it would be an error of judgement if we consider the whole world has made a progress in agriculture industry. Hence, the current development are not still commensurate with the real food demand in the world.
Despite these causes, proper remedial action could be taken to mitigate the situation, one of which is for international regulatory bodies to introduce new legislations supporting disadvantaged people. For example, United Nation can impose high tariff in favour of underprivileged nations and rigorously monitor no one exploit their resources. In this case, government in deprived nations would be able to cater essential food for their people and preserve the country from famine. In addition, under developed countries also must implement new methods in their agriculture to produce high nutrition products through the efficient methods.
To recapitulate, the most persuasive arguments are the one that lean toward the undeniable role of international organization in preventing exploitation, and of course it is for the governments of developing countries to acquire new knowledge toward more productive and competent ways of farming.
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It is often argued that although agriculture domain is getting better and better, a large percentage of worldwide people are still suffering from starvation. There are a variety of possible reasons for this, but steps can...

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It is often argued that although agriculture domain is getting better and better, a large percentage of worldwide people are still suffering from starvation. There are a variety of possible reasons for this, but steps can definitely be taken to tackle the problem.

In my opinion, three main factors are to blame why thousands of people in the worldwide have potentially fallen into drought and famine. Firstly, the more population of the world grow rapidly, the less vital resources are available. So the decline in food and other requirements can be rooted in the explosion of the population. Secondly, if we are unaware of natural resources and their scarcity, it is highly likely to be destroyed everything such as forests, natural habitats, rivers, oceans and even our existence. In fact, the extravagant use of the country's natural resources may open up the road for destruction and disaster. Finally, there is no doubt that mismanagement caused by ineffective authorities would predominantly play a key role in increasing starving people and pulling them toward calamity.

Drought issue can certainly be solved. I believe that the problem must start with the arrangement of the population. That is, not only should not population growth be neglected but ones are expected to overestimate the significance of limited resources. Also, misuse of crucial resources should be strictly banned by politicians and institution are set up to place a great emphasis on protecting the environments. At the same time, it is the responsibility of the official authorities to manage the environment accurately by keeping the firm rules to prevent people from starvation and providing the perfect condition for people's welfare.

In conclusion, if the alignment of the population, adjusted use of raw materials, and rational management are overlooked, many people in the worldwide go extremely hungry.

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Despite presence of many promoted industries, specially, in context of agriculture, many health organizations and charities are still concern about hunger of people worldwide. However, it seems so hard to dominate this issue, underlay factors are...

Despite presence of many promoted industries, specially, in context of agriculture, many health organizations and charities are still concern about hunger of people worldwide. However, it seems so hard to dominate this issue, underlay factors are so simple.
While the number of people who can't find anything to eat in developed countries is too lower than undeveloped ones, yet many people are hungry there. This index conveys this massage that advancement of communities is not the only determining factor. For example, the United States is one of the most developed place in the world, though, some people there feel forced to have something to eat. In such states, inappropriate distribution of financial resources coincides most often with poverty of some people. Poverty causes hunger, as well. In this occasion, government could solve the problem by administer justice.
In other countries despite existence of good financial potential and extending of food resource, inefficient management and weak economy lead to spread poverty. In such cases election of deserving headers as administers of ministries might provide economic prosperity. International politics of states also play a major role in determining financial status of their people. And as everyone know financial status influences on the number of hunger families, directly.
There are many hungry people around the world and even wealth and developed countries are not of an exception. Although poverty is the direct reason of hunger, there are several underlay factors. Both, Lack of fairy distribution of resources and inappropriate administration could be considered as two major underlay factors.

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While the significant progresses taken place in agriculture in recent years, insofar as it is considered as an industry, a large part of the population of the earth, especially third world countries, is involved with malnutrition and hunger. Due...

While the significant progresses taken place in agriculture in recent years, insofar as it is considered as an industry, a large part of the population of the earth, especially third world countries, is involved with malnutrition and hunger. Due to some problems, such as traditional and semi-traditional agriculture in less developed countries, inappropriate distribution systems for agricultural products and the lack of conversion industries, as well as climate change and the phenomenon of global warming, still and in 21th century, malnutrition and famine threaten people. It must be said that finding a practical and logical solution to these issues can greatly help people's food security.
There are some underlying reasons why so many people in the world are still hungry with this amount of agricultural progress. One clear explanation is that in many poor countries, farmers are still cultivating in the traditional and semi-industrial method. This causes the water to be used a lot and has little productivity compared to the cultivation area. Besides, the inadequate distribution system of agricultural productions is another difficulty. A great deal of products gets corrupted from harvesting until reaching to the consumer, as well as during transportation. The lack of conversion industries of crops and also inappropriate maintenances conditions exacerbate these tensions. In addition, climate changes are among other threats to food supplies. The excessive emission of greenhouse gases had led to an increase of 2 degrees of average global temperature over the past two decades due to industrial activity. And the consequences of these global warming are reducing rainfall, desertification and reducing fertile and cultivable land. It is also anticipated that by melting polar ice and rising free waters level as a result of this rise in temperature, many farmed land in the coastal areas will fall underwater in the next 25 years.
There is some major solution for these issues. Farmers should be equipped with the knowledge and tools of modern agriculture and irrigation, as well as modern farming methods such as greenhouse planting and hydroponic -the method of growing plants without soil-. Additionally, road and rail transport infrastructures should be developed to deliver the crops to the market as quickly as possible. Refrigerant and food processing industries should be extending to increase the ability of food maintenance for a longer period. Ultimately, all countries, especially industrialized countries, must adhere to their commitment to prevent climate changes and global warming by reducing pollutant emissions. And take the necessary measures to prevent the spread of deserts and melting of polar ice. and help the less developed countries in this field.
To conclude, today's agriculture is much more advanced than before, nevertheless, there are still some problems, such as outdated farming in the underdeveloped countries, inefficient food distribution structures, and the warming of the weather and desertification, cause many people in the world be at the risk of malnutrition and hunger. It is hoped that these difficulties will be resolved by equipping farmers with modern methods, improving product delivery methods and preventing climate change.

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Nowadays, making progress in farming owing to the advanced technology is incontestable. Although some advance technics are used to yielding a higher harvest, some believe that this development is not sufficient and many people still are facing...

Nowadays, making progress in farming owing to the advanced technology is incontestable. Although some advance technics are used to yielding a higher harvest, some believe that this development is not sufficient and many people still are facing with food shortage that is because of the overwhelming growth in the world population. In respect of it, there are some solutions discussed in this essay.
In spite of the using new approach in farming such as factory farming, this industry cannot afford the necessities of all peoples throughout the globe because the population growth has surged dramatically. In other words, the amount of the need is much more than that of supply which results in the scarcity of food. Also, this contributes to the increasing price of the basic ingredients and consequently, the affordability of them is much more difficult. For example, in some countries various reasons such as weather conditions, poor soil and unprecedented event like natural disaster cause some of the main crops could not be yield, therefore, they are imported from neighbor countries.
To avoid starvation, it should be better for governments to provide the circumstances in which most of the main crops such as wheat or rice are planted without difficulty. For instance, in some areas where are faced with water shortage, the sufficient water should be accessible to crop production. Furthermore, more effort to finding the new methods about getting more harvest by fertilizer in a way which has not disastrous impact on the environment should be done.
In conclusion, the reason behind the being starved among some nations is a significant increase in the world's population which can be dealt with the sustainable supply of food

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With the existence of decrease in sources all around the world every day, universe gradually moves toward nutritive poverty. In many countries, food for all people is not found for days in the month. In spite of more development in...

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With the existence of decrease in sources all around the world every day, universe gradually moves toward nutritive poverty. In many countries, food for all people is not found for days in the month. In spite of more development in the field of agriculture technology, such conditions are unfortunate. Perhaps sources can be divided into two main aspects: at first, the human factor in the part of source management and second, environmental factor. In the following, both viewpoints and their solutions are examined.
In the more of societies’ problems exist human footprint. At the beginning of the discussion, the key role of inefficient people as manager and their decisions should be taken into consideration. For instance, because of immethodical harvesting of crops and incorrect management in Iran, the wide part of fertile grounds in southern cities, like Shiraz and Ahwaz, has changed to wastelands.
In addition to the human role, the significance of the unfavorable environmental effects in food shortage is undeniable. One of these factors is the weather. Due to fall of the annual rainfall, the current century is named as drought century about a number of countries of the world. According to a study that recently is done by Iranian Environment Organization (IEO), this country has newly entered to third of decades of its drought, therefore, agriculture in there strictly confront the problem. However, societies can with correct management in broader dimensions beside more advances created in agriculture reduce difficulties a little.
Now that reasons are mentioned, we are going to state the number of solutions. At the first, governments must take steps in direction of modification of management structures. It means that the real experts are utilized in fields of agriculture engineering and water engineering. This act not only causes systematic harvesting of crops but also results in suitable usage of related tools. For example, since some fruits, like melon, need more water for growing, Turkey has proceeded to import them from other countries in recent years.
Also, management of water sources is the most important operation for the continuation of agriculture life in regions with the poor rainfall. Although this challenging issue can somewhat solve using of drip irrigation system, some country including Iran intends to apply the technology of fertility of clouds. Anyway, applying such the technology can also cause problems like the flood which happened in Afghanistan in 2014.
To sum up, apart from what was mentioned above, in spite of many advances in the field of agriculture, incorrect management and environment factors can hurt it. According to these, I firmly believe that the use of related experts and management of water sources can control food shortage.

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With the existence of decrease in sources all around the world every day, universe gradually moves toward nutritive poverty. In many countries, food for all people is not found for days in the month. In spite of more...

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With the existence of decrease in sources all around the world every day, universe gradually moves toward nutritive poverty. In many countries, food for all people is not found for days in the month. In spite of more development in the field of agriculture technology, such conditions are unfortunate. Perhaps sources can be divided into two main aspects: at first, the human factor in the part of source management and second, environmental factor. In the following, both viewpoints and their solutions are examined.
In the more of societies’ problems exist human footprint. At the beginning of the discussion, the key role of inefficient people as manager and their decisions should be taken into consideration. For instance, because of immethodical harvesting of crops and incorrect management in Iran, the wide part of fertile grounds in southern cities, like Shiraz and Ahwaz, has changed to wastelands.
In addition to the human role, the significance of the unfavorable environmental effects in food shortage is undeniable. One of these factors is the weather. Due to fall of the annual rainfall, the current century is named as drought century about a number of countries of the world. According to a study that recently is done by Iranian Environment Organization (IEO), this country has newly entered to third of decades of its drought, therefore, agriculture in there strictly confront the problem. However, societies can with correct management in broader dimensions beside more advances created in agriculture reduce difficulties a little.
Now that reasons are mentioned, we are going to state the number of solutions. At the first, governments must take steps in direction of modification of management structures. It means that the real experts are utilized in fields of agriculture engineering and water engineering. This act not only causes systematic harvesting of crops but also results in suitable usage of related tools. For example, since some fruits, like melon, need more water for growing, Turkey has proceeded to import them from other countries in recent years.
Also, management of water sources is the most important operation for the continuation of agriculture life in regions with the poor rainfall. Although this challenging issue can somewhat solve using of drip irrigation system, some country including Iran intends to apply the technology of fertility of clouds. Anyway, applying such the technology can also cause problems like the flood which happened in Afghanistan in 2014.
To sum up, apart from what was mentioned above, in spite of many advances in the field of agriculture, incorrect management and environment factors can hurt it. According to these, I firmly believe that the use of related experts and management of water sources can control food shortage.

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It is undeniable that proportion of starvelling people over the world has developed extremely while the human progression in farming fields has been striking.this essay aims at defining the underlying causes of this event as well as some...

It is undeniable that proportion of starvelling people over the world has developed extremely while the human progression in farming fields has been striking.this essay aims at defining the underlying causes of this event as well as some practical solutions .
Perhaps the most contributing factor is the exclusive utilising of agriculture yields deriving in the capitalist system making the exploitation of farm crops in many cases.Moreover , another significant cause maybe is in packaging of these crops.however.thanks to sophisticated science of farming, the demand of high proportion of people will be responded, the inferior methods of packaging, lead to rotting production.For Instance cambridge found in a recent study that 20percen of affluent families in UK claim the problem of decaying crops is an obstacle to contribute the excessive amount of their consumpton to the impoverished persons
There are some steps which could be taken to solve the common issue.one of the logical solutions is to legislate strict rules against capitalism.Making more supervision around individual concerns of food as well as reduce the interference of unworthy authorities would be a positive action, ameliorating the existing situation
Furthermore, Initiatives in maintenance of yields making the longevity of productions more sustainable would be another blanket solution for this .undesirable issue
In conclusion, in spite of advances in agriculture methods, there is not simple solution to the problem of increasingly ratio of hunger persons. How ever,if the measures and solutions I have mentioned , introduced in the society, The current condition would be improved

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It has always been believed that food has played a crucial role in surviving human beings. Despite several advanced modifications found in agricultural system, many individuals suffer from hunger issue. This essay will outline...

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It has always been believed that food has played a crucial role in surviving human beings. Despite several advanced modifications found in agricultural system, many individuals suffer from hunger issue. This essay will outline possible causes followed by reasonable remedies.

To commence with, having reached an epic proportion, it is believed that the substantial population growth throughout the world is responsible for insufficient distribution of agricultural products; meaning that the majority of individuals are unable to consume enough food ,thereby facing the issue of starvation or even malnutrition. Moreover, the emergence of rampant environmental problems such as water shortages, warming, and soil erosion seen in many countries, can be taken into account as one of the main arguments in terms of an inability to use advanced agricultural methods. African countries are a good epitome of this matter, in such a way that their citizens have always faced overpopulation, besides, the issue of water shortages and warming, resulting in, vast numbers of challenging problems concerning providing sufficient food, so it is beyond doubt that their people have to struggle with malnutrition.

Turning to possible remedies, according to a great number of researches, rising public consciousness can be considered as one of the worthwhile solution to control the rate of population growth. To begin with, individuals around the world can be informed concerning the direct relation between the increase in rate of population growth and the number of people suffering from hunger, since these helpful information can act as deterrent factors in order to reduce the rate of population growth. In addition to this, there are some countries, particularly in Africa, that are in a great need of agricultural products and healthy food, due to lack of productive and modern agricultural system, however, this issue can be ameliorated by subsidizing the costs of campaigns in order to provide them with enough food and tackle the issue of hunger.

To conclude, although there can be found a considerable number of advances in agriculture, many people still suffering from starvation issue throughout the world caused by substantial population growth, as well as challenging problems in terms of the environment; however these causes can be eliminated by some measures such as rising public awareness and conducting campaigns.

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In modern day, many individuals, throughout the world, deal with the low amount of food while there are the developed agriculture’s methods. Having these methods is a key, but I believe that the other factor, the competence decision makers,...

In modern day, many individuals, throughout the world, deal with the low amount of food while there are the developed agriculture’s methods. Having these methods is a key, but I believe that the other factor, the competence decision makers, equally is important.
To use these well-qualified methods in agriculture sector is more valuable and all-important in comparison with knowing new methods. By means of having these kinds of improvement simply, they are not to blame to support every notion to solve their problem in the Food and Nutrient issues. If, although some governments assert to provide these circumstances, governments invested in expert training, they would have success to preserve their people in the fundamental issues such as the Food, Water and other equally compelling items. For example, developed countries where there are not food problems or hungry people not only they have modern knowledge and technology in the Food industry but also they attempt to train well qualified and competent staffs in a wide range areas related to the agriculture industry.
Utilising both advanced technologies, in agriculture industry, and skilful staffs is a key to solve problems due to food. Given both the appropriate knowledge and advanced agriculture, the governments and authorities enable to prepare the enough amount of food for their countries. Having invested in trained staffs, workforces and modern technologies and equipments in this fields, the governments not only should concentrate on climate changes, global warming, but also pay attention to import a number of food groups of which nutritional value are in the high level food standards. In the Uk, where people could not produce a number of fruits because of their especial climate, the government identity their needs which should import from other countries, such as Spain and France, and then mange to do this.
In conclusion, in my view, the main culprit for lacking the enough food in some countries is, undoubtedly,lack of competence at the level of decision makers in these countries, and the best way for solving this phenomena applies knowledge and modern methods alike based on their condition.

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The recent decades have seen a fall in the amount of food in some countries due to ever-increasing population ,despite agricultural breakthroughs.
Not surprisingly global warming possesses serious problems in the world such as Africa , Middle...

The recent decades have seen a fall in the amount of food in some countries due to ever-increasing population ,despite agricultural breakthroughs.
Not surprisingly global warming possesses serious problems in the world such as Africa , Middle East and South America . On the other words ,owing to decreasing sufficient source water ,agriculture industry is set to completely destroy. It is believe that lack of suitable education in term of rising public knowledge about modern agriculture is a key factor influencing global starvation. Western countries ,nevertheless,have made out standing contribution to this global problem by means of upsurge in consuming.It has been recognized,in addition,famine is rooted in the mainly concern that highly overusing ,beside weakness equally of distribution of food in the world .
Undoubtly,deficiency water for farming is attribute to global warming and thus governments should play active role in order to solve this problem by efficient ways like employing high tech techniques.Secondly ,if developed countries contribute to boost level of education with meeting educational needs of poor communities,it might lead they to address this phenomenon.Finally,ever-increasing public awareness in affluent contriesaffluent countries with international organization like FAO concerning hungry people in all over the world is more likely to provide once wealth of knowledge for less-consuming,and finding some effective means of sharing fairly source of food in the world.
In conclusion,this challenge presented by the booming population ,even with the advent of agricultural technology is Nemours and complex .Although,it is by no measuremountable,it is highly unlikely that it will be resolved in the foreseeable future.

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Agriculture has witnessed a significant breakthrough in the last couple of decades, ranging from modern machines to chemical pesticides and fertilizers. A considerable number of people, however, in the four corners of the world...

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Agriculture has witnessed a significant breakthrough in the last couple of decades, ranging from modern machines to chemical pesticides and fertilizers. A considerable number of people, however, in the four corners of the world still suffer from hunger. This lies in the fact of limited facilities for most of farmers which can be addressed by subsidized farming industry.


Although farming techniques have improved, it does not necessarily mean that food prices have reduced. Agricultural knowledge and innovation system often come at a cost which a wide majority of farmers in the world fail to afford. This results in limited facilities available for farmers that adversely affect agricultural sector. This situation when combined with effects of global warming like drought and sudden floods makes the matter worse. To put it simply, the price of food products still remains high especially when companies with profit-driven view target the higher class of society by producing expensive food in glamorous packages instead of providing products with affordable price.


To tackle this problem some solutions can be adopted by government. Food, as an essential part of families’ daily needs, should be subsidized by the government. This is more likely to pave the way for delivering food in lower price especially for the lower class of society. Bread and rice, for example, in some Middle-East countries, are considered as the materials that its price is strictly controlled by governments. As another solution, government should take more responsibility by providing modern facilities and methods for farmers. To achieve it, making low interest loans on purchasing agricultural technology and free-of-charge consultation are possible actions taken by governments.


In conclusion, starvation in undeveloped areas of the world is rooted in high price of foods. Pouring more money into agricultural sector as providing modern agricultural machinery and subsidies are the suggested solutions to mitigate the problem.

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Starvation is the oldest enemy of people. In recent decades, agriculture progressed.it was expected that hunger is died but it was not true. There are some reasons that indicate causes of this issue.

Fao is an organization about food. This...

Starvation is the oldest enemy of people. In recent decades, agriculture progressed.it was expected that hunger is died but it was not true. There are some reasons that indicate causes of this issue.

Fao is an organization about food. This association beware of poor countries and makes a lot of plan to reduce hunger in the world. The first explanation about this problem is colonialism. Growing is in the rich countries and they do not give their technologies to another countries without any money, because always they want controll them. So they can not grow on agriculture. Their policies are keeping poor and at the end to be hungry. For instance, in Africa, although they have a lot of resources, they are hungry.

As in the earth there are many oceans and seas, transfering the food is more comfortable and cheaper than other ways. Some terriotories do not have access to open seas then the second cause is they are not able to exchange their products easily because one of the best way for transportation is shipping. At the end we can point to lack of infrustructure. Many countries are suffer from money and open seas. They also poor on infrustructur then they do not reach food easily such as countries are in the middle of Africa and Asia and so on.

In conclusion, one of the most important reason is having much money. If terrioteris have enough money, they can exchange their products easily and without any problem.

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Over the past 2 decades, although agriculture is changed by the entrance of new version of machines, many countries in Africa and Asia still need to import of food ingredients. Because of some drawbacks - lack of water, soil erosion, and not...

Over the past 2 decades, although agriculture is changed by the entrance of new version of machines, many countries in Africa and Asia still need to import of food ingredients. Because of some drawbacks - lack of water, soil erosion, and not enough releted knowledge - new technology can not help to hungry societies. Needless to say, it appears that finding solution for these ideas would be more applicable.

There are some underlying reasons why people are hungry. One clear explanation would be lack of water. When farmers do not use water resources properly, scare water supplies are exhausted. Regrettably, deforestation plays a pivotal role to soil erosion - one of the significant reason of failure in agriculture- . Most importantly, eventhough progress machinery in farming, agriculturists do not have tendency to use these because of high price and not enough usage knowledge.

There are some major solution for these issues. If government provide modern and cheap irrigation equipment, horticulturist can use water resources optimaly. Additionally, in order to remove soil erosion plight, planting drought tolerant trees and feeding the farmlands with suitable fertilizer can prevent soil erosion. Ultimately, it is suggested to government should buy high-tech farming machines and accommodate farmers in less price and teach them how to use these manufactures.

To conclude, while agricultre industry is change by the advent of new technologies, people in some countries still go hungry. I believe that because of some pitfalls, peasants can not have good output. To resolves this problems, government should help harvesters by cheap sale and teaching how use these technologies.

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Agriculture has been progressively improving during the past decades; however, its advancements have not utterly eradicated starvation yet. There are numerous reasons concerning why the new agricultural methods are inefficient...

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Agriculture has been progressively improving during the past decades; however, its advancements have not utterly eradicated starvation yet. There are numerous reasons concerning why the new agricultural methods are inefficient including economical and geographical factors. This essay will elaborate on some proposed solutions to eradicate hunger.

The failure of agricultural advances could be the result of a plethora of factors. However, Theses factors could be divided into two main groups namely Economy and geography. Since The new breakthroughs of agriculture might not be fairly affordable even accessible for developing countries, where the eradication of hunger is desperately needed, indigent farmers are deprived of these advances and can’t take any advantage to solve the issue. A study commissioned by Edinburg University showed the final target of the newly Introduced methods of Irrigation are far expensive for the local farmers of Indonesia that prevents them from adopting them. Moreover, starvation is observed mostly in countries whose lands are barren and widely exposed to extreme radiations of sun. Consequently, the geographical location of a country can pave the way for hunger. For instance geologists claim that only 25% of African fields are fertile. Therefore, a meticulous study on economy and geography of any country might provide us with better and more practical solutions.

Having said that, In order to put an end to hunger , the government needs to revolutionize the agriculture by means of replacing the conventional farming with new methods of irrigation and also by promoting the consumption of environmentally- friendly fertilizers and pesticides. The government must subside the farmers and support them financially. Also another more effective and less costly way would be to introduce Vertical farming as an alternative which is merely dependent on water and barely in need of soil. This method is a modern farming by which some African countries will finally have overcome their infertile soil with the help of their water sources such as Nile river. In addition, Vertical farming is a green and cost effective method which developing countries won’t find it cumbersome to put it in practice.

In conclusion, The advances of agriculture would be beneficial only if they were adapted to a country’s economical and geographical status. Consequently, governmental subsides on new methods of Irrigation and introduction of vertical farming would be effective and affordable enough to eradicate starvation in deprived countries.

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While farming technologies and mechanisms have seen significant improvement during last decades, we are still witnessing a considerable number of people around the world, particularly in the developing countries, suffers from lack of sufficient...

While farming technologies and mechanisms have seen significant improvement during last decades, we are still witnessing a considerable number of people around the world, particularly in the developing countries, suffers from lack of sufficient nutrition. This essay discusses the reasons causing this problem, and it provides some approach using which the aforementioned problem can be eradicated or at least alleviated.
First, similar to any advanced technology, the innovative mechanisms that can be leveraged to increase the efficiency of agriculture are usually devised by the companies based in developed countries. Therefore, these companies generally demand a considerable amount of money for providing such solution to whom in need of it. Unfortunately, the farmers of countries that are struggling with food shortage are not able to afford the capital demanded by those companies.
Moreover, Implementing the new farming technologies needs infrastructures that are not usually not available in the poor areas. For example, a wide range of modern agriculture technologies rely on electricity that is not available in those areas. In addition, these advanced mechanisms rely on high-tech tools using which requires educated and trained work force. For example, some of the advanced farming methods entail computer-based data gathering systems that collects data about soil, weather, type of plant and so on, applying such methods requires at least a basic computer knowledge. However, farmers of developing countries do not have the required qualifications.

It is for international and non-profit organizations that take some measure to change this situation. The organizations like World Bank and Food and Agriculture Organization (FAO) can provide the budget required to implement those technologies. Furthermore, non-profit organizations can help farmers to acquire the required qualification.
It can be concluded that while it was expected that new agricultural methods play a significant role to reduce food shortage problem. However, due to lack of enough investment this has not been achieved yet. Several measures can be taken by international organizations to change this situation.

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Although, advanced technologies in food industry help mass production of this product, we hear a lot of news about poverty and hunger from all around the world. We all have seen that harmful picture in which a vulture was waiting for death of a...

Although, advanced technologies in food industry help mass production of this product, we hear a lot of news about poverty and hunger from all around the world. We all have seen that harmful picture in which a vulture was waiting for death of a starving baby that captured in Africa.
We know that high tech in culturing plants can reduce the needed time and materials but many countries especially in Africa and south America do not access to these advances. In addition, in recent years the population of the glob is rising quickly and the resources in the earth aren’t enough for suppling food for all of them. Wars and political issues can be another reason for this problem and most of the people who live in conflagration zones face with poverty and appetite.
I believe this problem needs an international solution. Governments from all around the world should work on this issue and hold a strategic plan. Besides this anyone who live in this universe must be sensitive about wasting food individually and helps to source shortage problem of the world, particularly paucity in food and water. Also, people in poor regions have to try hard and develop their knowledge in agriculture science and its technology.
Consequently, many people in our planet are hungry though agricultural development in recent years. Defeating with this problem needs a global program and individually attention. As a member of this cosmos, I have been trying hard not to waste edible resorts to do my share in this issue.

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Nowadays, a wide range of scientific and advanced methods have been implemented in irrigation projects. However, many people all over the world are living with hunger. There are some reasons causing this trend, and some steps could be taken to...

Nowadays, a wide range of scientific and advanced methods have been implemented in irrigation projects. However, many people all over the world are living with hunger. There are some reasons causing this trend, and some steps could be taken to resolve these potential problems.
There is several key reasons why people in some regions still go hunger although many noticeable advances have been made in agricultural industry. First of all, new techniques used in modern agriculture require a huge amount of time, budget and energy. It means that outcomes of the contemporary agricultural process would be more expensive than those produced by virtue of traditional methods. Consequently, people living in in impoverished and disadvantaged regions cannot afford to buy foods due to the fact that a wide range of financial problems confronting them. Secondly, the vast majority of crops are being destroyed all over the world thanks to drought and dryness. This is mainly because global warming is increasing at an alarming rate and humankind has not been prosperous in creating resistant crops and fruits. This is why a large number of people around the globe are starving to death.
Several measures could be taken in order to overcome or at least mitigate mentioned problems. Some developed and industrialized countries should collaborate and cooperate with less developed nations to invest money in irrigation projects with latest technology, and a set of rules should be established by government to subsidize crops and foods. Furthermore, people should be encouraged to follow more environmentally-friendly behaviors. As a result, the rate of climate change will decrease.
To conclude, Although scientists have made significant progress in agriculture, there are some some underlying reasons why people are still suffering from hunger. These related problems could be easily tackled.

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