IELTS Cambridge 11 - Test1 - General Writing - Task2

Essay topics: Employers sometimes ask people applying for jobs for personal information, such as their hobbies and interests, and whether they are married or single. Some people say that this information may be relevant and useful, others disagree. Discuss both the views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
You should write at least 250 words.

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While being interviewed for a position, prospective employees are likely to be asked about personal details such as their passion and marital status. There are those propounding the idea that such inquiries may be of value for the company in question. Others, however, take the opposing view. There are cogent arguments on both sides of the discussion, which will be presented in detail, followed by my own perspective on the controversy.

On the one hand, advocates of this policy assert that knowing about the staff, employers are able to make judicious decisions when necessary. In other words, this background knowledge can be employed astutely to launch bonus schemes for diligent and dedicated employees whose efforts deserve to be acknowledged and acclaimed. For instance, if a manager is aware that some of his staff members are passionate about sports, they can opt for free tickets to a sports event as an added incentive. Apart from that, both employers and the people working for them can build up a good rapport if they know each other as people rather than professionals. More specifically, they may even find a great deal of common ground.

On the other hand, others may simply interpret this as the very epitome of invasion of privacy. To clarify, a large number of people feel uncomfortable when they have to share any personal information about certain aspects of their life that they wish to keep to themselves. This is amply illustrated by a particular incident in one’s past such as a bitter divorce, which anyone might be reluctant to talk about especially when first encounters are concerned. Moreover, job seekers are likely to fear that they might be judged based on their background rather than their professional and marketable skills. This is rational since first impressions have a profound impact on how people form a lasting opinion about others’ character. 

To conclude, there are reasonable points on both sides; on balance, however, I believe that any piece of information irrelevant to the professional context should not be sought. This is mainly because the vast majority of people are unwilling to confide in total strangers and also they are afraid of judgmental interpretations.  

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Nowadays many people are being asked about their private information and leisure activities when applying for a job opportunity. While there are some benefits to exposing this information, it seems that it is not a good trend and should be...

Nowadays many people are being asked about their private information and leisure activities when applying for a job opportunity. While there are some benefits to exposing this information, it seems that it is not a good trend and should be avoided as far as possible.

One the one hand, being informed about employes interest and ambitions could be beneficial in many aspects. Having this information, the human resource would have better insight about people working at the company, As a result, they can design and implement incentives based on each individual's personality. This could definitely lead to higher motivation among people at the company. What is more, attractive perks can be provided and give to people. For example, subsidized sports center membership is given to people with athletic background and free tickers for cinema and theater for people with art enthusiasts.

However, it is perhaps more important to respect people's will in terms of private matters. Firstly, asking about people's details is definitely considered as the privacy violation. For many, these are the personal matters which they would not intend to share in the work environment. Secondly, having this information can cause discrimination among the different group of people and even unconscious segregation. Lastly, many companies might look favorably towards their workforce with knowing some family backgrounds. This may lead to favoritism in the company, which is not ideal for long run and cause dissatisfaction.

In conclusion, I would argue that questioning personal information in any forms should be stopped.

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Work-life plays an enormous role in our lives as we spend a great deal of our time in the work place. To add a new member to a team, employers have to gain a 360 degree evaluation a person as their business is reliant on their staff. Some argue...

Work-life plays an enormous role in our lives as we spend a great deal of our time in the work place. To add a new member to a team, employers have to gain a 360 degree evaluation a person as their business is reliant on their staff. Some argue that professional competencies is more than enough for adopting a new person to the companies. However, the notion that personal information of one's life should also be taken into consideration is striking to me.
Firstly, studies have long revealed that the proximity of characteristic to the type of work that one has to execute every day has a close correlation with their productivity. In this situations, one’s hobbies and interests may reflect parts of their personal characteristics. For instance, a reserved and aloof person may seem unfit to work in customer service department while may be totally competent to work in research and development department.
Secondly, employers ought to know that the amount of salary they are offering is sufficient for their employees considering their personal information such as their marital status, the number of their children, ownership of their residence, etc. At first, an employee may accept the job knowing that he cannot make ends meet with their salaries but be desperate for finding a job. In this situation, that staff is likely to leave to company once they find a new job with better salary and benefits leaving the company in hot water.
All in all, gaining knowledge of personal information is an essential part of an overview leading to hiring new staff. After all, the colleagues become the second family of everyone as they are together long hours. Being informed of each other’s personal information may can help them lift each other up by knowing every one’s advantages and strengths.

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Employers sometimes ask people applying for jobs for personal information, such as their hobbies and interests, and whether they are married or single. Some people say that this information may be relevant and useful, others disagree. Discuss...

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Employers sometimes ask people applying for jobs for personal information, such as their hobbies and interests, and whether they are married or single. Some people say that this information may be relevant and useful, others disagree. Discuss both the views and give your own opinion.
Job applicants are sometimes required by their prospect employers to provide them with some information of private nature which provokes different attitudes. Some regard this practice as intrusion of privacy, whereas others deem it proper. This policy holds both merits and demerits.
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Having occupation seekers include their personal information in the application forms may breed certain evils. The employers could share the data with some advertising companies so as to receive monatery bonuses. To commence with, as people try to reply the queries sincerely, such databases could prove of significant importance to advertising companies which usually try to analyze people's characteristics through their verbal behaviours which could later be utilized to draw up some advert plots. Moreover, this information could be misused by the potential employer in a fashion that employees' interests, needs, and fears could be employed as instruments in order to fulfill the targets of managers. Last but not least, such personal infotmation as marital status, parents' names, and hobbies could be leaked and mishandled by co-workers in the future, serving as a point of irony or mockery for the rest.
On the other hand, receiving information on prsonal aspects of job hunters could give a cause to some virtues. First, employers could analyse the applicants' mentality through the responses to such questions and decide on the best agent, or ascertain the best position to each person. There are numerous fables of those who have tried hard to attain a post and have received lots of expensive pre-service training courses at work, but have quit the job after a short while since they have reached the conclusion that they have not been built for that specific type of occupation. Furthermore, enterpreneurs could apply the insights garnered from such survey-like queries to create an ideal atmosphere at work place to maximise their workers' efficiency. Finally, occupational reasearch associations could draw upon data resources obtained by such questions to construe labour forces' mentality, and, in turn, help legislators devise some approaches to develop novel, and feasible occupational laws.
As it was discussed in the paragraphs above, there are pros and cons concerning the subject under discusdion. Yet, as far as I am concerned, I highly approve of this policy. If emplying agents utilized the insight gained via such questions constructively, applicants would be willing to provide more sincere answers.

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The efficiency of job and performance of employees can be affected by personal attitudes and features significantly. In some cases, this specifications and personal information are...

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The efficiency of job and performance of employees can be affected by personal attitudes and features significantly. In some cases, this specifications and personal information are requested in job interview. Although some people think the answer to these questions does not include important information, I believe they can have significant influences on staff and company.
Some people think that personal information is not useful in terms of economic progress of company. First and most importantly, the efficiency of company depends on persuading employees including single or married, delighted or regretted and gregarious or solitary staff to have best performance. If the companies have specific tasks and plans compatible with positions and professional skills of personnel, it is more likely that the company be prosperous at least in financial issues. In addition to this, it has been discussed that, the staff should be trained and motivated in exact period. To clarify, in progressive and sophisticated companies, a great number of educational and recreational trainings such as team working have been planned for the staff and their families having many benefits for groups and individuals. As well as this, in some company there are some psychologist trained to identify the emotional problems and features of workers indirectly. In many cases, it may be decided to change the position or department of staff with aim to reaching best their performance.
However, knowing personal information of group’s member by leader has some benefits. To begin with, if all companies had paid more attention to behavioral and emotional features of their staff they would be more successful in their business. To clarify, there are many worker not satisfied by their job. In some cases, the activates and tasks are not compatible with skills and personality of staff. It should be considered that, for most people which are searching a proper job, the most important items is earning vacancy as well as financial issues including salary, remuneration and overtime limitations. In addition to this, unsatisfying is one the most important for a great amount of staff changing their workplaces. To clarify, all workers have different goals and aspiration in their life, and if the rules and conditions of their job or company be against it it is more likely that to leave their work, if have acceptable financial support from their family or themselves.
In conclusion, I believe that the efficiency of employees depends on both personality and skills affecting their performance significantly.

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The recent decades have seen an increase in the number of employers asking people who look for employment about personal information. Although being informed of these facts can create some merits for managers, I believe this can be against moral...

The recent decades have seen an increase in the number of employers asking people who look for employment about personal information. Although being informed of these facts can create some merits for managers, I believe this can be against moral values.

Personal details received in a job interview can provide some benefits for companies. Directors can easily determine relevant parts of organization for work of jobholders, if knowing their interests. Inasmuch as individuals enjoy divided personality traits, they are not bound to be appropriate for every section. This information, moreover, can satisfy some requirements in workplaces. A case in point is inquiring about hobbies of staff that can show their characteristics. Consequently, employers are able to deal with possible problems.

Nevertheless, questions related to private life in employment can give rise to a myriad of difficulties. Some owners of corporations unfortunately abuse their positions so as to apply this information to their own purposes. This is set to contribute to psychological disorders of workers. Furthermore, anyone does not have right to ask about passions of people, for some individuals like to keep them as a secret. Therefore, this situation would be annoying for those tending not to express their interests, hobbies and other things.

In conclusion, whereas asking personal information during employment process has been popular among plenty of employers recently, they should ask about academic achievements and work experience and try to assess social skills of applicants.

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The efficiency of job and performance of employees can be affected by personal attitudes and features significantly. In some cases, this specifications and personal information are requested in job interview. Although some people think the answer...

The efficiency of job and performance of employees can be affected by personal attitudes and features significantly. In some cases, this specifications and personal information are requested in job interview. Although some people think the answer to these questions does not include important information, I believe they can have significant influences on individuals and company.
Some people think that personal information is not useful. First and most importantly, the efficiency of company depends on persuading employees including single or married, delighted or regretted and gregarious or solitary staff to have best performance. If the companies have specific tasks and plans compatible with position and professional skills of personnel, it is more likely that the company be prosperous at least in financial issues. In addition to this, it has been discussed that, the staff should be trained and motivated in exact period. To clarify, in progressive and sophisticated companies, a great number of educational and recreational trainings such as team working have been planned for the staff and their families having many benefits for groups and individuals. As well as this, in some company there are some psychologist trained to identify the emotional problems and features of workers indirectly. In many cases, it may be decided to change the position or department of staff with aim to reaching best performance.
However, knowing personal information of group’s member by leader has some benefits. To begin with, if all companies had paid more attention to behavioral and emotional features of their staff they would be more successful in their business. To clarify, there are many worker not satisfied by their job. In some cases, the activates and tasks are not compatible with skills and personality of staff. It should be considered that, for most people finding a proper job, the most important items is earning vacancy as well as financial issues including salary, remuneration and overtime limitations.
In conclusion, I believe that the efficiency of employees depends on both personality and skills affecting their performance significantly.

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It is indisputable fact that employers have ways sought for some methods to enhance the yield of staff's productivity. While some individuals are convinced that interviewing job-seekers with questions, including their interests, hobbies and...

It is indisputable fact that employers have ways sought for some methods to enhance the yield of staff's productivity. While some individuals are convinced that interviewing job-seekers with questions, including their interests, hobbies and marital status, are sound absurd, it is more likely that these questions can be highly beneficial and reasonable.

It is plausible that some initial questions in an interview session can have a profound impact on employees who might be thought these are like intrusive questions in their private life. The advocators of this believe cite that these questions not merely can be futile, but also disturb the interviewed person's conscious, making their mind busy with such questions. Why the examiner, for examiner, asked me about my marital status? Does he want to discriminate between single and married ones? Furthermore, such kind of thoughts is closely linked to their private information and asking them might be hurt their dignity or seemed fruitless.

In another perspectives, nevertheless, these questions can be highly practical for better interview and also can be efficient for SEO to manage the future prosperity. The first and foremost justification of such a questions at start of interview is for diminishing the stress and pressure that job hopper has, calming down with routine questions to warm up the interview. Besides that, usually employers have a rational reason behind these questions, for example asking about the marital status of woman to anticipate the maternity leave that she would presumably wants in future. Meanwhile, by asking about their interests or hobbies, if they were a good employee, the company can reap applause properly, offering subsidized membership of sports clubs, if they were interested in sports or perks them in their favourites. That is why they ask such beneficial questions.

In conclusion, although these questions can be intrusive in their private life or seem biased , I would firmly contend that these are highly fruitful for employees and employers alike.

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Most companies get personal information from individuals who want to employ in these firms.The knowledges include their leisures and favorites or their marital status.People have diverse opinion about this issue,whether it is profitable or...

Most companies get personal information from individuals who want to employ in these firms.The knowledges include their leisures and favorites or their marital status.People have diverse opinion about this issue,whether it is profitable or not.From my perspective,private information is not a key point for employers.
On the one hand,it is no doubt that administer have undeniable right to apply individuals for their jobs.They commonly have some criteria for their employees.Most companies usually have a form for job applicants.It contains personal profile، their hobbies and interests.Some of the these information can help to stuffs like being married or having a child.Employers can allocate special privileges and increase salary to encourage them.From the other side,some knowledges have private aspect like religion.Unfortunlately,most offices without attention to privacy ask their faith from people who are been considered for job.
On the other side of the coin,some features are more significant than private data that should not be neglected.They play a integral role in success of companies.Abilities and characteristics recruiters are a unwritten data.There are negligible cases that individulas can express their ambitiousness in their profile.For example,in modern country applicants write a letter in order to demonstrate their experiences and abilities for the requested position.Also,employers can carry out a psychological test such as Emotion Quotient to select the best job seekers.
To put it a nutshell,with explosion of population,the demand for occupation is increasing.It is better the personal information replace with new ways like Curriculum Vitae or EQ test.this help to employers choose qualified job sekeers.

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Mehrdad:
Employers sometimes ask people applying for jobs for personal
information, such as their hobbies and interests, and whether they are married
or single. Some people say that this information may be relevant and useful,
others disagree....

Mehrdad:
Employers sometimes ask people applying for jobs for personal
information, such as their hobbies and interests, and whether they are married
or single. Some people say that this information may be relevant and useful,
others disagree. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.



It seems to be routine among employers to interview job
seekers for their personal life. it is extremely controversial. There are
strong views for and against this fact. In this essay, both sides of this
argument will be comprehensively discussed.



Supporter of this statement express their views cogently.
They believe that employers have the right to know about every individual’s
life, habits and interests. One convincing explanation in favor of this opinion
is that some jobs are highly in connection with a person’s characteristics and
life conditions. For example, Some civil works demand for employees owning the specific
spiritual conditions and acceptable level of boredom threshold so as to be
capable of working on problematic fields. Lack of interest is considered as a
barrier for the owner of this qualification in which leads to slacking off and
low operation. moreover, employers knowingly are able to appoint the workforce
on their proper position.



In opposition to this argument, those who are against,
contend that it is almost impossible to relate employing process with private
life’s information. To simplify, asking about this matters is known as
intrusion into personal and domestic affairs. Marital status is a clear example
of this statement. In general, employers look for candidates with maximum level
of efficiency. So, married life can’t be taken into consideration as an
effective factor. That’s why this subject is recognized as irrelevant. In addition the work environment
is slightly apart from personal life ambience.



In conclusion, despite the criticism over collecting the
personal life information by the work place authorities, I personally tend to
agree with the statement of necessity for gaining such information and think that
benefits can outweigh the drawbacks.

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The Recent decades have seen a rise in number of voulantersof job in the world,which has caused problems for selecting the best appliances.however ,it seems that choosing the right people can be the neat way to this problem.سلام ببخشید من...

The Recent decades have seen a rise in number of voulantersof job in the world,which has caused problems for selecting the best appliances.however ,it seems that choosing the right people can be the neat way to this problem.سلام ببخشید من متاسفانه نرسیدم که کاملش،کنم فقط خواستم بدونم این فرمت برای مقدمه مناسب ممنونم

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As research has revealed,interview and the version of it's questions which interviewer asks the candidates could spawn to select the best workers.As a result,setting divers addresses can require different aspects of job seeker 's personality and...

As research has revealed,interview and the version of it's questions which interviewer asks the candidates could spawn to select the best workers.As a result,setting divers addresses can require different aspects of job seeker 's personality and his or her work outlook.However,some individuals believe that personal particulars towards married statue or favorite recretions are foremost.Other opponents think reruiters should focus on more information which are relation to that specific job.


About first view,belonging to a close_knite family and passing earlier milestones of life in a steable household has a huge effect on people 's character as well as having a satisfied marriage.Hence,an intelligent interviewer should consider this status regarding choosing an employee.On the other hand,how to spend leisure time or having special kinds of hobbies are such significant date that person 's potential abilities are identified.For instance,those people who participate in voluntary activities or tend travel in tour or friendly groups,are initially sociable and might have more sense of corporate.since,they cooperate with their colleagues and run the business in a smooth atmosphere.

Regarding other debatable opinions,occupational attitudes and having experience and interest about a work position are more sensible statistics.Critics believe applying a worker is paramount challenge for a manager in other that they should allocate the most efficient paths to recognize and choose successful candidates with highlight working abilities.Therefore,personal information do not have worth researching.Indeed,they allege people show independent outlooks towards their task at the work place which do not depend on family relationships.

To sum up,in my estimation,throughout a comprehensive interview,interviewee would be assessed by various scales.It means,directors should consider job seekers towards both their personality and professional abilities.

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Corporations and well-known firms in recent years have become somehow skeptical about the job vacancies they aim to fill with innovative and skillful employees. in some cases these job opportunities are associated with inquiry's and interviews...

Corporations and well-known firms in recent years have become somehow skeptical about the job vacancies they aim to fill with innovative and skillful employees. in some cases these job opportunities are associated with inquiry's and interviews that survey among multiple talents in order to choose the most elite interviewee. These interviews might include some private questions on individual's personal life which in some case can be irritating leading to this argument in which some people assert that these kinds of inquiries can be somehow offensive. there are another group of people, however, advocate the fact that thorough and meticulous survey can be of incredible assistance to both employers and even their employees.
Firstly, lets illustrate the perception of the group who conceive these question way too much personal. some concern can be aroused about the marital status and since divorce might be deemed as an unconventional and unacceptable term in some societies, therefore applicant might not feel comfortable to jot down his or her marital status. furthermore, this group might assert that excessive amount of information about likes and dislikes can not be of vital requirement and will not either contribute nor facilitate the process of socialization in the community which is related to that specific firm.
Quite in contrary, the notion which oppose abovementioned opinion on job interview information, highly allure this process and believes these sorts of questions can create far friendlier job environment and leads to innovation in terms of dealing with highly sophisticated job related problems and collaboration among colleagues as well. Take an office in which people are so close together as an example, colleagues in such environment can easily communicate to each other about their everyday life predicaments. And since they are all mindful of the possible difficulties that their mate is going through, therefore they try to contribute in the process of solving these predicaments.
In conclusion, I advocate the fact that inquiries should contain some reasonable amount of questions on applicant's private life but it should not be emphasized about the terms in which applicants are not comfortable to respond. the bottom line is that employers are right to have some information about interviewee's private life in order to choose the right person for the right job vacancy

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Over the last half-century, there has been plenty of public-spirited debate on the issue of personal data and information’s security. Taking personal information, such as hobbies, interests, and marital status into close consideration as the...

Over the last half-century, there has been plenty of public-spirited debate on the issue of personal data and information’s security. Taking personal information, such as hobbies, interests, and marital status into close consideration as the inquiries in the process of recruitment from the applicants, it should be stated that a number of candidates make the assumption that this kind of information may not be relevant and beneficial in the job interview. I tend to believe that although keeping the private data secure can benefit the person‘s safety greatly, awareness of some personal information can leave a far-reaching impact on the company’s integrity.
It is immediately evident that the most of people eagerly tend to reach their dream vocation, and achieving their goals. Accordingly, the education, competency, and innovation play an unelectable and dominant role in the successful interview and acquiring the job opportunity. Furthermore, when it comes to the personal attitudes and information, there can be found a wide variety of personalities that are equally qualified based on the job description.
However, it is true that creating an integrated and united group of people potentially can contribute to productivity and accomplishment. Admittedly, the personal questions in the interview are bound to be a solution to create an integrated team. Moreover, acquiring progress in a company is routed into the physically and mentally healthy employees as the human resources.
In conclusion, suffice to say that personal data and information is a high contention issue, giving rise to strong emotions on both sides of the debate. I hold the view that asking either personal information or attitudes can eliminate undesirable employees.

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People have different views about whether asking a job seeker’s personal information at an interview is a good idea. While there are some drawbacks, I personally think providing our ambitions and things we are really interested in as employees...

People have different views about whether asking a job seeker’s personal information at an interview is a good idea. While there are some drawbacks, I personally think providing our ambitions and things we are really interested in as employees would be quite beneficial.
I believe that workers need to talk about their enthusiasm and about what they are really passionate. Firstly, adopting this approach helps employers to find a job that suits well with job seekers. If a manager knows what is their worker’s life long ambition, they can put workers in a suitable job position. Secondly, it helps managers to separate workers giving them different workload. For example, married women need to leave the workplace sooner than others to bring up children therefore they should be given less workload. Finally, workers tended to show more honesty if they would know releasing their private information is way beneficial, as employers would love to see an honest person on their team and the chances are they may consider a promotion or salary increase down the road.

Some individuals want to preserve their anonymity at work that they would be reluctant to release their information. Introvert people have fears that the information will be leaked at the office that they will not have privacy there. Interestingly, they think other colleagues may scoff at their ambition or the real person they are. Thus, workers try not to be honest with interviewer and they may just come up with a fabricated story from start to finish. These interviews are monotonous and make the evaluation process quite difficult.

In conclusion, although I admit there are some demerits for asking employees’ personal information, this information has a positive effect on productivity of both jobseekers and the whole team.

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Since individuals tend to immigrate to metropolitans for better job and career opportunities, their information became highly significant to interviewers. Many believe that this can reduce the security of their privacies; consequently, others...

Since individuals tend to immigrate to metropolitans for better job and career opportunities, their information became highly significant to interviewers. Many believe that this can reduce the security of their privacies; consequently, others reject this point of veiw by paying attention to advantages of this idea rather than disadvantages. I wholeheartedly, support a balanced solution to this argument.

Proponents of this style of application, assume that applicants must accept that giving to management their information would, not only hurts their privacy but also it can provide advanced of ward gaining opportunities. As a matter of fact, there are many employers that can rising the world ladder, by give their supervisors enough informations. The proffessionalists find the best matched, and the most suitable career by these sort s of knowledgment. Another factor, is rules of their salary which can be risen by background that manager have from an individual.

Projectors of this opinion noticed that showing personal information, is absolutely clear example of breaking the personal security rights, and itcan be a kind of economic crime.To illustrate, many criminals used people’s identification, to robbing them by vast amounts of money. Another factor can be negative cultural point of veiw, which made many people passemistic about the managers of small companies and manufactures.During the last decades there were many explosion that happened to illegal Institute’s, as well as variety of banks and companies.

To conclude, trust is a fact that can be either absolutely useful, or ridiculously disappointing. people should pay attention to the companies identification, as well as trusting them to help them chase their dreams.

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Job seekers are often enquired about their personal information, involving marital status and pastimes. While some would see no point in such enquiries, they may appear to be pertinent as well as advantageous when it comes to recruitment.

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Job seekers are often enquired about their personal information, involving marital status and pastimes. While some would see no point in such enquiries, they may appear to be pertinent as well as advantageous when it comes to recruitment.

The opponent of such questions in personal matters point to some reasons. The major reason perhaps is that personal issues should not be a part of hiring process as all society members should have the right to work in the fields, for which they have been educated or trained. This process should in fact be based on individuals’ ability rather than their personal matters. Furthermore, there are some personal information, which if were released, is highly likely to result in the applications to be refused without noticing the applicants’ capability. To illustrate, a criminal history or a history of chronic disease would almost always lead the person to be totally ignored by managers. Last but not least, while wage levels are directly linked to the time the staff work rather than their personal requirements, it would be unfair if their private information were in the easy access of strangers, including employers.

Conversely, there are many people who have completely different view about the issue. They believe that employers should be aware about their workforce character, by which they would be able to realize their personnel’s potential; for example, introverts would hardly be able to adapt themselves to team spirit. Knowing about their interests and hobbies could extremely be beneficial in this recognition as well. It is also argued that some personal matters would lead to less productivity and service; therefore, to avoid making the job risky, managers should at first be informed about the applicants’ familial and social matters, including their marital status. As a case in point, a married woman with small children might devote less time and attention to work in comparison to a single one, or reversely, a married person may take more responsibility than unmarried one in order to avoid the risk of redundancy.

In conclusion, although the arguments against questioning private information seem to be rational, I aver that employers should be given the right to opt the right employees according to their personality and social life. Hence, the process of recruitment would entail the applicants’ profession and personal life alike.

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Companies often request job seekers to disclose their details about their interests and habits in a job application. Although these details seem to be highly necessary to help an organization to select the qualified employees, this personal...

Companies often request job seekers to disclose their details about their interests and habits in a job application. Although these details seem to be highly necessary to help an organization to select the qualified employees, this personal information is private and unnecessary.

On the one hand, employee’s personal information can be beneficial and relevant when they are recruited for some reasons. Firstly, if companies have known about their employee’s habits or marital status, they can provide financial benefits for them in the years ahead. The employees would be sure that they will receive house rent, child education tuition, and marriage allowance for critical situations in future. Secondly, asking a candidate about their hobbies are often required to help organization for recognizing which employees are psychologically fit. This will enable employers to reduce the risk of selecting unqualified persons for specific positions such as airline pilot.

From another angle, sharing personal information is bound to be irrelevant. Providing details about personal information, some people believe that it is like giving access to whole personal life. This practice, therefore, may lead to misuse of private information by employers and that is principal factor for hiding the truth from some applicants. Also, the employers should concentrate on skills and job requirement which every applicant must have and if interviewers ask an unrelated question, they just waste their time and probably do not have an adequate assessment.

In conclusion, I believe that providing personal details is not a preferred idea but such limited information can be used by employers for the employees’ benefit and organization.

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While people used to find work without any hesitation or interviews, the recent decades have seen a rise in the number of private information questions. Some allege that these kind of question are relevant to career. Contrastingly, others assume...

While people used to find work without any hesitation or interviews, the recent decades have seen a rise in the number of private information questions. Some allege that these kind of question are relevant to career. Contrastingly, others assume these questions are essential and beneficial. There are cogent arguments on both sides, which will be discussed in detail, followed by my own perspective on the issue.
Asking privacy questions is argued to be not necessary for applying job some people find these questions as a kind of invasion of privacy that not useful. They think it is not essential that employers know about their marital status or their interest in order to make decision whether recruit them or not. Actually, candidate abilities to overcome their tasks and duties are not related to this personal information and just make them hesitate or urge them to tie in some circumstances.
Nonetheless, it is said that requiring applicants to fill up these for me with these for me with such private questions can have positive impact on landing a job which is in the same line with their interests or abilities. For example, a married person might be qualified for being a babysitter or a single person is may be good candidate for working unsocial hours. In addition managers know successful teamwork and communication, which benefits both employees.
In conclusion, although some of these questions are private and personal. I strongly believe that answering these questions are useful and beneficial when it comes to job placement.

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while there are some stereotype intimate questions are favorite of many interviewers for whom are seeking a job,critics are believed that another more crucial facts are determinant individuals competency for gaining a position.there are some...

while there are some stereotype intimate questions are favorite of many interviewers for whom are seeking a job,critics are believed that another more crucial facts are determinant individuals competency for gaining a position.there are some reasonable arguments on this debatable issue which will be discussed in detail,following by my own attitude toward it.
according to supporters of the importance of the personal facts through an occupational interview,there are some rational justifications.being acquaintance with some social habits of employees could brings better understanding of their moral manners which are an unquestionable fact for the best staff selection.awareness of this matter that a person is fascinated by group activities could host an extensive view about his gravity to cooperation with other staffs, for example.another justification is that the marital status even having a close-knit family are a characteristic of a committed person who is reliable for extreme conditions.this is mainly because of that when one takes the charges of constituting a family with all its difficulties ,therefore he could takes risk in many carrier hesitations in the future.
on the other hand,the opposite attitude asserts that there are another subjects that are paramount importance to determining the liability of individuals ranging from their curriculum vitae as the same as their intentions behind choosing the job.the most compelling reason for their assertion is that fundamentals such as these,are representative of their skillfully and competency for achieve that carrier.apart from that gaining a well-position job just in the sake of its financial benefits is not a justified execute .what is identifier in these competitions is the sense of commitment to the profession.
to conclude,there are valid arguments on both sides of this contention,however I strongly contend on my position that the most indicator element in the job eligibility of candidates is their professional qualifications and practical skills rather than their personal information.

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In our modern world, all the employers try to gather the most information and facts about people who are applying for jobs due to the important role of these data. While many people think this is not necessary for companies, I feel strongly that...

In our modern world, all the employers try to gather the most information and facts about people who are applying for jobs due to the important role of these data. While many people think this is not necessary for companies, I feel strongly that this kind of information would be very vital for these organizations.

Generally, people don’t like to share their data with other people or organizations. The reason is they feel they are giving kind of private information to employers and basically people are not sure do employers share these facts with other organization or they do not. In addition, some people think while they are applying for a job, they are asked for some unnecessary information. For example some organization may ask people about their hobbies and interests and people believe that asking this information is an invasion of privacy. So some people do not like to be asked for these data and they become anxious while they are applying for jobs.

On the other hand, many people believe that companies have right to know more about people who intend to be a member of them. Employers are seriously concern about their workers’ qualification. For example, an organization has decided to hire single women and send them to abroad to introduce a new product. In this case the marital status is very important for employers and in fact, they really need to know it. In my opinion, companies are allowed to collect information about career candidates and it would be very useful for them, although, some people may think these data are private and unnecessary for employers.

In conclusion, these decades, everyone knows the vital role of information in our life. So I believe that companies and organizations should ask people for this information because if they want to hire appropriate people, they need to ask some private information from job candidates to analyze better which one of them are more qualify.

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Some society members allege that putting irrelevant questions in a job interview is not essential, nevertheless other advocate that a job seeker should be asked about every aspect of his life either marital status or recreation interests. There...

Some society members allege that putting irrelevant questions in a job interview is not essential, nevertheless other advocate that a job seeker should be asked about every aspect of his life either marital status or recreation interests. There are cogent arguments on both sides, which will be discussed in detail, followed by my own take on the matter.
It is true that companies owing to become more familiar with prospective employees eagerly tend to know much more about their private life .To clarify, an array of personal traits amply illustrated by the fact that whether they have ever joined a club or had a membership of community groups. This information is set to knock-on-effect on how they have a sense of belonging to a team as well as working community. Furthermore, finding out if an employee had a happy marriage and believed in marriage, would prompt job interviewers to recruit someone or not.
So as to have qualifications for a job, individuals must not have to bring information about and give data for their private life, nonetheless. The most compelling reason for this is that when being had to speak about how his marriage has recently ended in divorce, a jobholder is bound to feel both humiliated and demoralized. Unlike developed countries, women in Islamic nations do not seriously tend to have a conversation in this respect due to the cultural or social considerations. Another justification is that paper qualifications are the sole criterion for measuring success when employee’s achievements are concerned. Thus, how you are spending spare time and having fun are not also essence of applying for a part- or full time job.
To conclude, there are valid arguments on both sides of the controversy; on balance this is my firm conviction that attention should be paid to the C.V and attached qualifications rather than less relevant or beneficial

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Employees are called for private information by employers in the stream of the interview. Whether this process it is taken for granted suitable or not; it should be discussed in detail. Thus, followed by my own take on the matter.

On the one...

Employees are called for private information by employers in the stream of the interview. Whether this process it is taken for granted suitable or not; it should be discussed in detail. Thus, followed by my own take on the matter.

On the one hand, some people argue that company owners should be aware of family and personality traits of their personnel. This enables them to avoid emerging unpredictable problems. In fact, nearly all of the employers are bound to establish a determined discipline. Moreover, those who are hired by the company, it should have a sense of cooperation as a result of the high-interest rate of company or organization. Hence, employees are asked such a private questions so as to bosses are more unlikely to hire neither isolated individuals nor depressed.

On the other hand, others allege that it would proximately be a natural and impartial process, although employers are willing to be an ingenious leader of their workforce and much more exploit them as possible as they can. It is thought that, for example, the owners of means of production such as employers feel by no means sorry for their workers. They are set to think that not only could it be a messy bait, but it would also prevent them from carrying on progress.

In conclusion, I can understand why many of society members tend to become skeptical to requesting private information. I aver that, however, it would potentially be fundamental for the company, for it can play a crucial role in boosting of company members cooperation and coordination.

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Recently, owner of companies are underscore the importace of personal details for accepting some one to begin the work.Some society members argue that the personal informatin...

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Recently, owner of companies are underscore the importace of personal details for accepting some one to begin the work.Some society members argue that the personal informatin is as nessecity of employment program.While, some people believe that the private data is not important.

On the one hand, some individuals think that personal information could be beneficial for confirming staff to work.Hence, these days manager of various companies have rational argument that this information is effective to promote their offices.For instance,nowadays,there are wide range of job position which the need of them is much more different,so the date such as marital status,entertainment,and favorite activities could play a povital role to choose the best staff.

On the other hand, the opposing view assert that the personal data is not essencial and other factors such as experience, career,and educational level are by far the most useful to employee.Therefore,day by day,the aspects of select staff is changable.Bosses have to add professional staff to enhace the level of different parts.To examplify, in the previous years workers could overcome problems and deal with limit devices but now , they sould have knowledge to use the programs,tools,and do enormous work by network.The employer should approach the technical issues for applying.

In conclusion,people seem to have divided oppinions ,some people have sticker perspective which emphasis to importance of privatte details such as spend leisure time,single or married,keen on something.Some other believe that the personal data is not efficent to choose employees.I believe that experiment and skills are much more valuable.

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Recently, owner of companies are underscore the importace of personal details for accepting some one to begin the work.Some society members argue that the personal informatin is as nessecity of employment program.While, some people believe that...

Recently, owner of companies are underscore the importace of personal details for accepting some one to begin the work.Some society members argue that the personal informatin is as nessecity of employment program.While, some people believe that the private data is not important.

On the one hand, some individuals think that personal information could be beneficial for confirming staff to work.Hence, these days manager of various companies have rational argument that this information is effective to promote their offices.For instance,nowadays,there are wide range of job position which the need of them is much more different,so the date such as marital status,entertainment,and favorite activities could play a povital role to choose the best staff.

On the other hand, the opposing view assert that the personal data is not essencial and other factors such as experience, career,and educational level are by far the most useful to employee.Therefore,day by day,the aspects of select staff is changable.Bosses have to add professional staff to enhace the level of different parts.To examplify, in the previous years workers could overcome problems and deal with limit devices but now , they sould have knowledge to use the programs,tools,and do enormous work by network.The employer should approach the technical issues for applying.

In conclusion,people seem to have divided oppinions ,some people have sticker perspective which emphasis to importance of private detals.Some other believe that the personal data is not efficent to choose employees.

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Whether or not organizations should solicit personal information of job seekers in the job application forms has turned into a controversial issue recently. In this essay, both merits and demerits of collecting private information of applicants...

Whether or not organizations should solicit personal information of job seekers in the job application forms has turned into a controversial issue recently. In this essay, both merits and demerits of collecting private information of applicants by prospective employers will be discussed, followed by my personal perspective on it.
Employers, on the one hand, can take overt advantage of personal preferences and interests of candidates. First and foremost, some personal data such as marital status are more likely to help the managers to choose the best-fit applicant for the job vacancy. Consider, for example, a job needing holiday working as well as business trips to various cities and countries; it is evident that this position is not suitable for a married person, particularly a mother. Secondly, sometimes, leisure-based subsidies motivate staff far more than perks and financial rewards. Therefore, bosses require personal interests to provide them with the best-fitted pursuit activities.
On the other hand, collecting personal information of prospective employees in the employment application forms is bound to have some drawbacks. The crux of the matter is that the interviewer discriminate between candidates based on their personal preferences and interests such as religions, hobbies and marital status. Thus, the employee is not selected based on his or her competency and qualifications.
On the whole, both perspectives for and against soliciting personal information of job seekers by potential employers has been argued. I personally side with the latter group who believe that advantages of this practice outweigh its disadvantages.

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while there are some stereotype intimate questions are favorite of many interviewers for whom are seeking a job,critics are believed that another more crucial facts are determinant individuals competency for gaining a position.there are some...

while there are some stereotype intimate questions are favorite of many interviewers for whom are seeking a job,critics are believed that another more crucial facts are determinant individuals competency for gaining a position.there are some reasonable arguments on this debatable issue which will be discussed in detail,following by my own attitude toward it.
according to supporters of the importance of the personal facts through an occupational interview,there are some rational justifications.being acquaintance with some social habits of employees could brings better understanding of their moral manners which are an unquestionable fact for the best staff selection.awareness of this matter that a person is fascinated by group activities could host an extensive veiw about his gravity to cooperation and accompanying with other staffs, for example.moreover,another justification is that for some particular carrier situations the marital status even having a close-knit family are a characteristic of a committed person who is reliable for variety extreme conditions.this is mainly because of that when one takes the charges of constituting a family with all its difficulties ,therefore he could takes risk in many carrier hesitations in the future.
on the other hand,the opposite attitude asserts that there are another subjects that are paramount importance to determining the liability of individuals ranging from their curriculum vitae as the same as their intentions behind choosing the job.the most compelling reason for their assertion is that fundamentals such as these,are representative of their skillfully and competency for achieve that carrier.apart from that gaining a well-position job just in the sake of its financial benefits is not a justified execute .what is identifier in these competitions is the sense of commitment to the profession.
to conclude,there are valid arguments on both sides of this contention,however I strongly contend on my position that the most indicator element in the job eligibility of candidates is their professional qualifications and practical skills rather than their personal information.

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As employment plays a vital role in various aspects of a person`s life, day by day, the subject of how recruitment should be carried out is being checked from different perspectives. Human resources departments believe that besides considering...

As employment plays a vital role in various aspects of a person`s life, day by day, the subject of how recruitment should be carried out is being checked from different perspectives. Human resources departments believe that besides considering about someone`s CV, those who apply should be asked about other types of information such as what the person does in his /her leisure time or what the marital status of the person is. There are rational arguments on both sides regarding that whether an employer is allowed to question about somehow people`s private subjects or not.
On the one hand, some professions cannot be limited just to some skills and expert-backed articles have shown that it is essential to know about the candidates’ preferences more. As a best prototype we can refer to physicians who work in pediatric wards. It is so crystal clear that small children need to be treated with higher sensivity and delicacy. If the health care system does not think about the characteristics of the doctors, nurses or therapists, these children might bear some severe psycho-physical traumas which can be hard or sometimes impossible to treat in future.
On the other hand, although the type of things that a person does in the spare time is so crucial, in most cases investigating people`s personal life is an action that puts morals and ethics into the question. That an engineer or a teacher is married or not should not be looked as one of the necessary questions. It is the adroitness and thinking power of the person which is valuable. Carried out surveys reveal that focusing on the topics that is defined as private life makes people frustrated, nervous and anxious. The thought that somebody is analyzing their life or beliefs and trying to meddle with issues that should be considered as someone`s privacy area has a crippling effect on the quality of the activity done by the hired people.
To sum up, I think paying respect to each person`s personal matters such as being married or single is a rudimentary right of each person. But in the jobs that a special type of behavior is needed strongly, the authorities can go further and scan widely their candidate to make a correct selection for the vacancy.

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Business owners occasionally put too personal questions in the job applications. While some groups found this as a positive process for hiring, the others are totally against this assertion. Both these views will be discussed in details by my own...

Business owners occasionally put too personal questions in the job applications. While some groups found this as a positive process for hiring, the others are totally against this assertion. Both these views will be discussed in details by my own perspective.
Some individual might found this personal information as a vital requirement for employer to place the employee in the suitable position. As a matter of fact, these data are dramatically decreased the errors of using a person in wrong job title by estimating his or her individual abilities. Accordingly, in some so sensible and vital position the personal information even the medical situation of the job volunteer ought to be reveals for employers. For instance, the pilots have to clarify their every single detail for hiring and it is mandatory because if they get in the cockpit and riding the airplane they will be in charge for many humans’ lives.
Contrastingly, some people assume that there might be some managers who take advantages of these personals information. For instance, many global companies have branches in different countries with lack of human right .In these situations some employers are free use these data in inappropriate way .Meanwhile; they might be claimed that they need these for the origin company. To illustrate this, as I personally work in same atmosphere every day I am hearing a cascade of complains of my colleagues who have been faced a sexual harassment by our human resources, thanks to the personal details he has been earned via our applications form.
In conclusion, I personally think not only asking too personal questions to fill the resume are good idea for all jobs categories but also it have be to localized for each different zone.

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In some companies, human resources section put variety of personal questions in application hiring forums. This make an assertion that this information is too private while some other people believe it can be useful. Both these views will be...

In some companies, human resources section put variety of personal questions in application hiring forums. This make an assertion that this information is too private while some other people believe it can be useful. Both these views will be discuss in details by my own perspective.

The ones who believe this information even could be efficient claim that some personal information can be as advantage for them. For example some people interest in mysterious things such as playing video games or reading some related book. They can be hired by police centers or private detective. Sometimes having this sort of information can prevent of happening some dreadful consequence such as reject the person who suffering of some mental disease by being participate in group of unsuitable playing team.

As a view of people who disagree with this kind of information, they believe that sometimes working in overseas for foreign companies can make a trouble for them. For instance if they have divorced and mentioned it to the forum, the company imagine his or her personality is not stable to take a position. Sometimes they have no control over some their private things such as family status or parental issues that is why they do not eager to reveal some their own secret of lives.


In conclusion, as a point of view I agree with provide any question from companies and it needs to have a regular society behavior and have an acceptable family which is lead to get proper job.

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Asking for private information from people who desire to start working in a company has become norm in the past few decades. Whilst a number of employers underscore the importance of such information as a part of a plan for the future of their...

Asking for private information from people who desire to start working in a company has become norm in the past few decades. Whilst a number of employers underscore the importance of such information as a part of a plan for the future of their company, others subscribe to the viewpoint discovering applicants’ hobbies, interests, and marital status is not only irrelevant and useless, but considered as a kind of invading to the privacy of humans. There are rational arguments on both sides of this contentious issue which are intended to be discussed in detail, followed by my own take on this matter.
On the one hand, personal information can play a crucial role in boosting the productivity of the company. If knowing favorite interests of personnel, employers would probably be able to manage beneficial subsidiary programs such as sport-program subsidiaries which can presumably result in high-efficiency. That is to say, woven tightly into human-resource management, private information has far-reaching effects on company’s prosperity. A cursory examination of successful company has reinforced this belief that high performance would not be achieved unless target-based incentives have scheduled based on employees’ interests. Personal questions, furthermore, can contribute to choose the most appropriate person for desired position. By way of illustration, single applicants are highly likely to be suitable for those position in which there is necessity to fulfil overseas assignments.
On the other hand, opposing view asserts that recognizing appropriate people for a certain position should be carried out without asking private questions. The most compelling reason for this assertion is that enquiring such information recognized as violating humans right as well as invading to the individuals’ privacy. Apart from that, statistics have shown pointless performance of these information in practice and demonstrated that a large amount of them have been used against morale rules. Consider remarkable numbers of people who suffered from sexual harassment in the United States between 2000 to 2010 inasmuch as some employers had used information to make a relationship with their staff.
By way of conclusion, whereas there are valid arguments on both sides of this controversial topic, I am inclined to agree that personal information could be useful provided that they were safely preserved under certain circumstances and applied only for obvious purposes.

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It is commonly observed that employers place a premium on personal information of their employees , and require them to give this information when applying for the job. Although some people are against of asking these facts, I am inclined to...

It is commonly observed that employers place a premium on personal information of their employees , and require them to give this information when applying for the job. Although some people are against of asking these facts, I am inclined to believe that it can be extremely practical.
There are those who subscribe to the view that personal information of workforces can be inapplicable to company’s success. To clarify , people should be recruited according to their level of qualifications or whether they are diligent or not. Their sense of responsibility can also play an integral role in both success of the company and their career prospects , these factors , however, are all irrelevant with their marital status or their favorite pastime . Accordingly , it is argued that compelling workers to give this information is inappropriate as employers ought to respect employers privacy. It is , effectively , evident that many workers are reluctant to share their confidential concerning their personal lives.
Nonetheless , I am of the notion that knowing personal information regarding either workers’ family or their favorites can open up certain avenues for progress in company from social and personal perspectives. Once colleagues are aware of families or hobbies of other workers , they will be able to be more socially active through , for example, sharing the same interests or holding parties. In this way , they manage to tie a closer bond together , which can potentially lead to a pleasant working environment. Additionally, if managers were conscious of families of their workers, then they would be able to find out whether their income is sufficient or not , which in turn assist them to provide job security for them.
To conclude, my firm conviction is that personal information of employees can tremendously contribute to companies ‘ success , even so it is mentioned by some that it may be pointless an against their privacy.

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There are some employers who tend to know the personal information of the applicants when interviewing them. While some believe this concept to be beneficial, there are others who find it unnecessary. This essay will discuss why despite of the...

There are some employers who tend to know the personal information of the applicants when interviewing them. While some believe this concept to be beneficial, there are others who find it unnecessary. This essay will discuss why despite of the belief of the latter group, this personal information are rather useful.

Some individuals are to consider the matter of asking applicants for their personal information as a necessity. They regard this perception as important as the qualification of the job the workers are doing as it can affect the time they are spending at the work place. For example, the knowledge about the hobbies and interests of one's employee can help the employer to know his or her employer better. In addition, it would make it possible for the employers to give tasks which are more appealing to their employee so the latter is more likely to be able to complete the task which is given to her or him. Therefore, the reason why some people tend to find the knowledge about an applicant's personal information usful, is now obvious.

On the other hand, there are some others who are under the impression that asking an applicant for personal information is indeed an unnecessary job to do. They believe that what is personal is better to remain personal regardless of the impact it is going to have on the kind of job the applicant is applying for. As an instance, a person is quite capable of being interested in brutal computer games and at the same time be a police officer whose job is to capture criminals and murderers who are similar to the role the police officer gets when playing. This is why these group of people is rarely capable to imagine why knowing one's personal information is relevant when applying for a job.

In conclusion, asking for an applicant's personal information is a job some employers prefer to do. This essay discussed why it is still beneficial to ask such questions while some do not find it a proper job to do. In my opinion, increasing one's knowledge of the hobbies and interests of their employees can help developing the function of the job itself.

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When some owners are willing to hire their staffs, they sometimes inquire some private information such as marital status or preferred leisure activities. While some people think this information may be irrelevant, I believe they could be...

When some owners are willing to hire their staffs, they sometimes inquire some private information such as marital status or preferred leisure activities. While some people think this information may be irrelevant, I believe they could be practical.

On the one hand, the majority of people say that companies should not know about the personal lives of their employees. They think working situations must be apart from their behavior at home, and employers are seeking for details that could have negative impacts on workers career. For instance, females may feel uncomfortable that some managers know their marital status because if they were single, they could be a case of sexual harassment. In such situations, it is acceptable that some persons, especially women, agree that there is no need for participating family and personal related subjects to work circumstances.

On the other hand, this information would be quite useful for giving personnel desirable benefits in case of doing their duties successfully. When employers were satisfied by their staffs' tasks, they can reward them something that they know it is desirable for those staffs. For example, companies could offer traveling to a specific destination that they know most of their workers like to go, for motivating them to optimize working. Therefore, in my opinion, both workers and manager could profit from this method of working.

In conclusion, I can understand some individuals find these questions personal and not related to their jobs, but I think they could benefit by giving this information in order to receive related rewards or promotions.

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try not to get affected by your first language. good use of common items . a wider range of vocabulary is needed
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