IELTS Cambridge 11 - Test4 - Academic Writing - Task2

Many governments think that economic progress is their most important goal. Some people, however, think that other types of progress are equally important for a country.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
You should write at least 250 words.

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استاد المیرا ایزدیار

Whilst a number of government officials underscore the importance of economic growth as their main objective, others advocate that attention should be equally apportioned among all types of development. There are rational arguments on both sides of this contentious topic which will be discussed in detail, followed by my own take on the matter.

On the one hand, there are those reasoning that economy is the cornerstone of a flourishing nation and therefore any development in this respect has far-reaching effects on other areas as well. That is to say, inextricably intertwined with other aspects of life, economy is believed to be of central importance. This is amply illustrated by the fact that economic vitality will automatically give rise to employment opportunities on the job market. Moreover, another justification is that economy is the sole criterion for measuring success when a regime’s achievements are concerned. This is mainly because of the masses’ raised materialistic aspirations and the significance they attach to materialism.

On the other hand, the opposing view asserts that making headway towards other accomplishments of equal value is just as necessary. The most compelling reason for their assertion is that failure in handling other equally pressing matters will cause a ripple effect, thereby impinging on national economy. Take international crippling sanctions imposed on politically isolated countries for example. Failing to launch international commerce, such nations are liable to witness a significant drop in their export revenues. Apart from that, national infrastructures may simply cease to function normally if shortcomings of the whole system are not addressed properly.  In other words, a booming economy is by no means the only key factor defining a successful and accomplished nation.

To conclude, there are valid arguments on both sides of the controversy; on balance, however it is my firm conviction that attention should be paid to the improvement of all fields including politics since political chaos can have deleterious effects on a country’s economic status as well. (326 words)

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تا ساعت 17 روز یکشنبه 1396/9/26 فرصت دارید، برای این موضوع رایتینگ‌های خود را نوشته و به صورت کامنت، در زیر پست، ارسال نمایید. تمامی رایتینگ‌ها توسط ممتحنین بیان برتر ارزیابی شده و به آنها نمره داده خواهد شد.

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سلام میشه لطفا رایتینگ من رو هم تصحیح بفرمایید ؟

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While countries used to have stable condition in economy, the recent decades have seen a rise in figures of stagnation and inflation which have caused crucial economic problems. Therefore, it seems tackling economic obstacles by government is the...

While countries used to have stable condition in economy, the recent decades have seen a rise in figures of stagnation and inflation which have caused crucial economic problems. Therefore, it seems tackling economic obstacles by government is the most important goal, however, there are many other factors which people have been expecting to proceed by governments in tandem with economic progress.

On the economy side, almost entire people worldwide suffer from financial problems. There are many companies became bankrupt due to global recession which have triggered increasing rate of unemployment. Indeed when stopped, the company would be forced to fire its staffs which it makes many people jobless, poor and anxious.

On the other side, individuals should have some entertainments because it is not deniable that they have regularly paid tax and vat; therefore having entertainment facility is their right. Likewise since they have worked a whole working week, it is essential for them to have a funny weekend with their family spiritually and virtually. For instance, having a good time with their parents or wife and children or their friend will make people happy and refresh; hence they would be ready to start a new week with a high level of positive energy.

In conclusion, I would rather concentrate on various issues and subjects by governments than focusing on one factor even if it be the most important item. Thus this will increase total factor productivity as a result of soaring the effectiveness and efficiency of resources such as work force, financial resources, production and services.

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سلام و خسته نباشید.
بنده دیروز (شنبه 96/9/25) رایتینگ خود را نوشته و همینجا پست کردم. ولی الان هر چی می گردم اصلا رایتینگ خودم را نمیبینم!!!.
خواهشمند است راهنماییی بفرمایید.
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سلام

چرا رایتینگ من رو تصحیح نکردید؟

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At present time,financial growing is considered as a significant strategy by most of governments to run their countries although the majority of politicians and forward _thinking experts believe that there are diverse matters which could be as...

At present time,financial growing is considered as a significant strategy by most of governments to run their countries although the majority of politicians and forward _thinking experts believe that there are diverse matters which could be as principal as in the future of countries.
In some politicians 's point of view,social welfare and equitable distribution of wealth are the most crucial policies that states especially developed ones should concentrate on them..Nowadays,there are some rich countries in which there is a gap between rich families and working _class families.In fact,economic _oriented outlook towards progress prompts imbalanced community.Hence,administor should be able to manage the in order that facilities and services are divided fairly throughout the state.

What is more,social security is one the most controversial issues that all of individuals are willing to prioritize it by government.Indeed,security and strong army are what every state need them to provide and boost the safety for both citizens and borders.It means that financial improving and possessing wellbuilt military must move so paralleled that the country could be protected from any harms in serious situations.

In conclusion,however,there are other ample matters which have essential portion to run and enhance the future of a country.I think,improving and protecting a developed state seems to be impossible if social welfare and security would not be considered as grand issues in corporal strategies of regime.

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باسپاس از وقت وزحمتی که برای تصحیح متقبل میشوید . یک خواهش داشتم امکانش هست رایتینگ های خوب رپ مثل اولین رایتینگ با ستاره مشخص کنید. استاد محمد حسینی اولین بار که تصحیح کردن مشخص کردند.باسپاس

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سلام استاد
لطفا بفرماييد براي حفظ لغات هر روز چند ساعت بايد وقت گذاشت؟
و ديكشنري مورد استفاده ي خودتان را نيز معرفي نماييد
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چقدر متن قشنگی نوشتید استاد. علیرغم سنگین بودن لغات چون خیلی منطقی جلو رفته رایتینگ کاملا قابل فهم است. ممنون از تیم بیان برتر

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ممممممنونم بابت توضیحاتتون خانم ایزدیار. واقعا استفاده کردم ولی فکر کنم بقیه بیان برتری ها خواب بودن که اروم صحبت میکردین

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باسلام امکان داره مطالب و کلمات متن را ترجمه و کاربردش را بفرمایید نسبت به دیگرمتنها خیلی صقیل و سنگین است.تشکر

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وقتي اينجوري براي نوشتن الگو از تزاروس و يا ديگر كتب سينونيم استفاده شود ، زبان آموز از نوشتن يك متن با كيفيت نااميد مي گردد زيرا كه در شرايط استرس و محدوديت زماني امتحان حتي به ياد آوردن لغات ساده تر هم هنر مي خواهد.

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Economic growth is a debatable issue among governments and people of a country. While state consider it as their ultimate goal, some people claim that progression in other major issues are of the same importance of economy.
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Economic growth is a debatable issue among governments and people of a country. While state consider it as their ultimate goal, some people claim that progression in other major issues are of the same importance of economy.
Undoubtedly governments are direct responsible of their people’s livelihood status which result in their continued concern over economic affairs. The world with economic turmoil many people may face uncertainty in their future life; for example, current Europe financial crisis has affected more the region already in recession. Hence it is expected that the statesmen adopt more astute approach in economic reform and stability.in addition governments stabilize their political positions through making progression in economic term.
On the other hand, the idea of supporters of taking other major field into same concern as economy should be taken into account. One of the worldwide worries of people around the globe is the health status of a country and it’s people; from this perspective people have same priority in progression of health issues as economic’s specially when some serious disease break out in the world.it also affect the people’s point of view on Politicians, for example people pay serious attention to the budget allocated to the healthcare. Other people have their own preferences in education, sports, and other fields which is expected these demanding needs to be met by the state.
In coclusion, while economic growth is one of the principle in improvement of a country, the government should considered other important issues of people irrelevant to economy.

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There is always doubt between the governments that believe economic progress is the main priority while others claim that other type of progress are as important as economical advance.in this essay we discuss about both views.
It is clear that...

There is always doubt between the governments that believe economic progress is the main priority while others claim that other type of progress are as important as economical advance.in this essay we discuss about both views.
It is clear that economic growth act a vital role in making a nation better and if a country doesn’t have stable economy which it means that many industries cannot work as well as this cause whole country stuck in downturn and escalating inflation cause majority of people stop living. For example ,as statistics shows, one of the main reasons that always forbid developing country to progress well is that economy stagnate which is not allow these country obstacle with variety problems.
It is true that progress in a country it is no also depend on economy but also many factors help each society progress. For example plenty of developed countries have achieved their economic destination but they are suffering from plenty kinds of problem likes environmental pollution, epidemic disease, terrorism, crime rate and internal chaos that are cause many citizens suffer from living in this society. For example in many parts of south America and Africa many youth or even children are suffering lack of hygiene or famine any as WHO release the last statistics more than 8 children are killed in on second.
Finally, I believe that many factors should have been considered by the government for each country as the economic progress is important other factor can not neglected.

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سلام
من متاسفانه نتونستم کیبورد موبایل رو چپ چین کنم. امیدوارم متنم قابل خوندن باشه.

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governments should adopt several ways to progress community life style.one method is economic progress which some governors believe that it is the most important way by comparison with other ways.
Economic growth is a pivotal necessity in...

governments should adopt several ways to progress community life style.one method is economic progress which some governors believe that it is the most important way by comparison with other ways.
Economic growth is a pivotal necessity in societies since it will come wealth and convenience to people so they could live in a reasonable situation and pursue their objectives -As you can see in developed country with economic stability .Hence people could make work/life balance and it prevents for working long hours .besides, these situation persuade young workforces to emigrate with the intention of better life.
On the other hands , another progress like cultural progress ,scientific and educational progress are equally important specially these days that world is rapidly boosted. People are inclined to improve all aspect of their life.
In conclusion, As the economic growth program are essential and basic, the authorities should make effort to improve extendedly.

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In all around the world, most politicians believe to business and career opportunities is major reliability for their people. In contrary, most citizens consider to other issues and progresses that are same as economic matter in compared. ...

In all around the world, most politicians believe to business and career opportunities is major reliability for their people. In contrary, most citizens consider to other issues and progresses that are same as economic matter in compared. Authorities and ordinary people have own views and own reasones to support their believiablities.
In common opinion, authorities and some individuals ponder the vivid significant responsibility in front of people is economic issue. In their opinion, level of easy comes and cosy living is important. Politicians believe that when citizens make better money, they will lived in best situation. Countries authorities believe, job or jobless, the problem is that. They believe industrial countries can perform mega residential areas with cosmopolitan atmosphere and and a lot of facilities as well as amenities, so cause of these powerful economical system which effect to our world and other countries to respect to them.
In contrast, ordinary people and all of scientists consider to other problems that are important as equal to economic issue. Their believe the most important thing is culture. It is easy to see that cultural countries can be affect to other countries by their culture. Although the goverment' s members, individuals think to rate of threat to war by other countries. They prefer live to stable situation in replace of powerful economic system. Some intelligent citizens and scientists ponder to other kind of important issues like global warming of earth or ecosystem and endangered species and some famine of nutrients that can menace humans to eliminate.
In conclusion, I believe that some other type of problems is significant as equal as economic progress like culture, perform species, global warming and etc.
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Nowadays, the ultimate goal of any government is economic, and although some people say such a policy should be implemented by authorities, others, including myself, believe that other factors are as important as this notion.

On the one hand,...

Nowadays, the ultimate goal of any government is economic, and although some people say such a policy should be implemented by authorities, others, including myself, believe that other factors are as important as this notion.

On the one hand, many governments think that economic progress has lots of advantages over other aspects of life. They stand up for their belief because they believe that economic growth plays a pivotal role in the development of a nation. When a country's economy develops, it ensures domestic tranquility, provides for the common defense, promotes the general welfare and so on.

On the other hand, even though the economic progress is a key factor to fulfill its promise, governments must ensure a better living standard. for example, the politicians must decrease taxes, provide for their citizens a health care system, better political condition and improvement in the educational system and reduce traffic congestion as well. The economic condition of a country will not grow without these aspects and they must focus on increasing sustainable economic growth that sits above these strategies. If these strategies do not exist, the country will encounter global recession. However, another vital factor which leads to having a perfect society is that the country has a secure political condition. Therefore, the economic growth should accompany with other important factors.

In conclusion, I personally disagree with accepting the issue that an economic growth is an important goal of any government since it just concentrates the authority attention to this feature and besides economic progress, other aspects such as providing an advanced educational system, promoting the general welfare and so on are important. (271 words)

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People have different views about whether the economic development is the most essential achievement ir not. While financial goals are tremendously important, I so believe all sorts of progress should be taken into account.

Every step to improve...

People have different views about whether the economic development is the most essential achievement ir not. While financial goals are tremendously important, I so believe all sorts of progress should be taken into account.

Every step to improve the economy contributes to development of all industry sections as well. These developed sections provide members of society with an adequate quality of life. Furthermore, stagnant economy poses lots of problems in society. Issues like poverty are the roots of all obstacles that if any individuals can not make a living, we face a staggering rate of crime and fraud. Therefore, the economic growth could be considered the number one priority for governments.

By contrast, others believe in the progress of all sections simultaneously. I personally think this fact has been overlooked by modern societies. The nations that have forgot protecting their traditional cultures substituting them with consumerism culture. Consequently, they encounter the damage to natural resources used excessively by profitable factories and companies. These governments neglect the fact that paying attention to all sectors can increase the health index, which absorbs thousands of tourists each year and in turn causes economic prosperity. Thus, this wealthy economy, creates enormous amount of job opportunities, which it leads to a decline in unemployment rate too.

In conclusion, although I do acknowledge the critical role of financial development, this growth itself could come from the development of other areas either, especially by protecting our way of life which will be a good policy down the road.

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Economic of the country is far more central that certainly needs to be included and expanded upon in a long term strategic development plan, enabling the members of the society keep country moving. Thereby many authorities have given primacy to...

Economic of the country is far more central that certainly needs to be included and expanded upon in a long term strategic development plan, enabling the members of the society keep country moving. Thereby many authorities have given primacy to the economic activities. In my perspective, however, the expected progression cannot be imagined without considering the significance of other vital ingredients as well.

First and foremost, economic growth plays a crucial role in prosperity of the country. While sound economy can provide well breeding ground for vast arrays of fundamental development, the country’s fragile economy may prone the nation to be exposed at brink of collapse. Germany and japan, as a good instances in possession of strong economy, have maintained their commanding leads for the most advanced industrial countries in the world.

Another key factor which can make a profound impact on having an advanced country is promoting moral values in a society. This is not only the government responsibility to encourage these virtues throughout the community, but also every walks of life should strive to reconcile physical needs with ethical issues in order to have a developed homeland. Once again, Japan is a clear indication of that. Japanese schools teach moral principles in lessons and practical ways alike when pupils are at their very young period of their age. They repeat these vital requirements more and more in the educational environment and when they got a chance to parade their skills at work the country will benefit and experience the real prosperity.

From an overall perspective, it is true that setting an economic goal seems to be inevitable for a country evolution, but it cannot be denied that a plan for financial needs should be integrated with moral values.

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In many countries, major purpose of governments is to get economically developed, while some are of the opinion that it is of the importance to progress in other fields as science and politic to create a developed country. The following essay...

In many countries, major purpose of governments is to get economically developed, while some are of the opinion that it is of the importance to progress in other fields as science and politic to create a developed country. The following essay intends to examine both ideas.
For a variety of reasons governments take the economic progress their first goal. To begin with, general welfare of nations heavily relies on the economic circumstances of a country. In other words, if a country has a stable economy without recession and growing inflation in its market, governments would be able to provide their people with prosperity including quality accommodation, education and health care systems. Moreover, in good economic condition people are set to have a job position with adequate income in order to tackle with poverty and financial difficulties to have a prosperous life.
However, economic development seems to be inaccessible without developing in other areas. Firstly and most importantly, states abandoning foreign relations and political affairs, fail to have efficient international trade so as to boost their economy. Nations lacking peaceful relationship with their neighbor countries, for example, cannot whether export their manufactured products or import the demanded goods. Apart from this, science and education are other fields governments should consider as priorities since they are significantly money-making. By allocating enough budgets for universities and research centers, scientific inventions and advances would lead to the development of the country nationally and internationally.
To sum up, while some countries focus only on economic development, others believe that it is momentous to put efforts to progress in other areas as well. As my part, I accord with the latter opinion that development means that a country should progress in all aspects ranging from economy to politic equally.

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In modern Life, progression generally is the first priority of most governments in all over the world. The vast majority of authorities, especially in eastern countries, assert that economic growth is the paramount importance for their society,...

In modern Life, progression generally is the first priority of most governments in all over the world. The vast majority of authorities, especially in eastern countries, assert that economic growth is the paramount importance for their society, although some individuals present opposing arguments that progress in other sectors is as prominent as that. I personally agree with the second group while the following paragraphs will discuss both sides.

Todays, plenty of governments claim that the most important issue for their country is poverty; therefore, they devote all their attention to this and attempt to achieve economic progress. The main reason behind this perception is that these authorities think, were they to manage to flourish their economy, improvements in other aspects of life would automatically be attained. For instance, they declare that as a result of economic development, the share of every single family from the “cake of economy” would rise, so they could cost much more money in all fields of their life, such as education, hygiene, food and clothing, and this trend will lead to progress in the overall level of people’s life.

Conversely, some people argue that economic amelioration will not necessarily result in other types of development, because the progress in other aspects of life need civilizing; more precisely, if authorities intend to improve each of social facets, such as literacy rate, culture or public hygiene, they have to train families in these fields. Besides, these advancements not only are equally important for community in comparison with economy, but also would be essential infrastructures for every society to achieve better prospects including economic progress; otherwise, even economic growth could not bring about improvement in nation’s life.

In conclusion, notwithstanding most governments set the economic flourishing as their goal, I personally concur the opinion of some people that there have always been other important purposes which similarly need attention.

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In modern Life, progression generally is the first priority of most governments in all over the world. The vast majority of authorities, especially in eastern countries, assert that economic growth is the paramount importance for their society,...

In modern Life, progression generally is the first priority of most governments in all over the world. The vast majority of authorities, especially in eastern countries, assert that economic growth is the paramount importance for their society, although some individuals present opposing arguments that progress in other sectors is as prominent as that. I personally agree with the second group while the following paragraphs will discuss both sides.

Todays, plenty of governments claim that the most important issue for their country is poverty; therefore, they devote all their attention to this and attempt to achieve economic progress. The main reason behind this perception is that these authorities think, were they to manage to flourish their economy, improvements in other aspects of life would automatically be attained. For instance, they declare that as a result of economic development, the share of every single family from the “cake of economy” would rise, so they could cost much more money in all fields of their life, such as education, hygiene, food and clothing, and this trend will lead to progress in the overall level of people’s life.

Conversely, some people argue that economic amelioration will not necessarily result in other types of development, because the progress in other aspects of life need civilizing; more precisely, if authorities intend to improve each of social facets, such as literacy rate, culture or public hygiene, they have to train families in these fields. Besides, these advancements not only are equally important for community in comparison with economy, but also would be essential infrastructures for every society to achieve better prospects including economic progress; otherwise, even economic growth could not bring about improvement in nation’s life.

In conclusion, notwithstanding most governments set the economic flourishing as their goal, I personally concur the opinion of some people that there have always been other important purposes which similarly need attention.

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Many people are dubious about governments’ aims as to achieving economic progress, claiming that there are several other major objects to be pursued and obtained by governments. I believe, however, that government should focus to make progress...

Many people are dubious about governments’ aims as to achieving economic progress, claiming that there are several other major objects to be pursued and obtained by governments. I believe, however, that government should focus to make progress in other areas as well.

Many governments, in different countries throughout the history, have given the highest priority to the improvement of economic condition. Their advocates would maintain that only a prosperous country with sufficient infrastructures established through economic developments may think of bringing about changes in other parts of the society, because advancement in other parts is intrinsically interwoven with economy. In addition, economic advancement for them is synonymous with, for example, constructing more factories and creating more job opportunities, since more people are likely to be hired consequently more people would be better off.

In my perspective, a better developed economy cannot necessarily mean that people would not be in need of other types of advancements, for there are several important issues that deserve attention and changes for the better, if a more prosperous country is yearned for the members of each society. For example, people demand for making changes in freedom, that has nothing or little with economic status of a country. It can be rightly claimed, in my perspective, that a society however affluent without freedom has nothing at all, because we have seen many middle class people, the representative of a society with well economic condition, attempt to topple down their governments since they would demand more freedom of their government rather than only being provided with lucrative jobs.

In conclusion, acknowledging the significance of economic progress, I believe there are other critical issues, mostly neglected by authorities that should be taken under consideration and planned for if creating a better situation for people is intended.

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ideas are relevant but some of them for the most part in the third paragraph require further development. a good range of vocabulary. some minor errors
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Keen rivalry in economic progress, has become more prevalent between progressive communities. Thus, when a question arises whether a government should allocate their energy on economical issues or other social programs, people seem to have...

Keen rivalry in economic progress, has become more prevalent between progressive communities. Thus, when a question arises whether a government should allocate their energy on economical issues or other social programs, people seem to have devided opinions. I strongly believe that, a government should give priority to economic progress rather than the others.

Cultural and environmental issues is said to be the most critical barrier in development of a country. Therefore, the society, when children have appropriate education and live in a peaceful environment, would have healthier future citizens. As the population of the communities is increasing, promoting public and environmental education to prepare people for future and preserve natural resources, should consider as the first preference of related authorities. Along with this, allocating more consideration on medical treatment, counseling and detoxification centers, or redesign and renovate sanitation services in order to promote public health rate is bound to be more significant than only development in economy.

Is it possible that more consideration on cultural and environmental issues and relinquishing economical progress could be in any way detrimental to a community? This is a controversial question, but there are some hidden pitfalls. While preserving natural resources and social norms are really important, economic progression is likely to be the first step to flourish a country. Economic ability, plays a crucial role in fulfilling the needs of employment. Not only do it create a vast range of infrastructure, but also is projected to increase the number of literate citizens.

On balance, it seems that, government should be more active and consider economical aspects to achieve the potential ability of reinforcing infrastructures of a society.

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a very good range of sentence forms though there are frequent errors . key elements have been addressed with a clear position by the writer
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سلام. ببخشید نتایج رو کی اعلام می کنید.

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While countries once focused wars and survival, this epoch has seen a considerable attempt to reach an Ideal society with high standard of living. Opinions diverge greatly on which sector of a society could have more vital role to enhancement of...

While countries once focused wars and survival, this epoch has seen a considerable attempt to reach an Ideal society with high standard of living. Opinions diverge greatly on which sector of a society could have more vital role to enhancement of a country. Many governments believe that economic progress is necessery for reaching most important goal of a country. It seems, however, other progresses share equal importance just as economic progress.

There does seem to be evidence that economic progress in each society could bring about undeniable benefits. First, it would potentially unfold the possibility of more occupations in society. The solving unemployment is one of the major concerns for government; having a good job with high salary and perks is bound to eliminate people's various problems. This in turn could enhance the level of wealth and comfort among people. Second, economic progress directly causes to reduce crime and violence. The poor, for instance, would resort to robbery and illegal actions for earning the bread. They might be pushed to criminal groups, hence decrease in society secure.

Nonetheless, development in other sections like education and culture could foster social living standard as the economic progress. A good education lead to more educated and enlighten people in society. This, consequently, result in having better circumstance for living. Moreover, culture and art are indispensable parts of man's living and more attention to this section could enrich the culture of a society and heighten public awareness. As it is seen in developed country government allocate a large amount of money to this section and conduct several festivals and events. Those sections would be individually able to contribute to have an ideal society.

In brief, economic progress is of necessity to have a good society, but the government should not close eyes upon other sections. I strongly believe that progress in other sections of a society is as important as economic one.

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Taking economic progress in to close consideration as the most significant goal of many countries, it should be stated that a number of individuals make the assumption that other types of development are equally crucial for a country. I tend to...

Taking economic progress in to close consideration as the most significant goal of many countries, it should be stated that a number of individuals make the assumption that other types of development are equally crucial for a country. I tend to believe that political and security stability, advanced education system, equality and cultural enhancement are as worthwhile as economic advancement.
It is immediately evident that economic growth plays a vital role in the development of diverse aspects of a society. The primary reason a government should take into consideration is that economic improvement can contribute to create more job opportunities which is one sign of advanced countries. Not only are more job vacancies bound to be a solution to provide a social welfare, but also it potentially can lead to less poverty. Numerous recent research studies indicate convincingly that the rate of committing crime and poverty has dropped steadily approximately 20 and 30 percent respectively in modern societies compare to developing countries over the last decade. Furthermore, when it comes to a country development, infrastructure of country is an unneglectable criterion which is not attainable without high economic support and the government’s special plans. Economic growth results in building and constructing the infrastructure for public services, e.g., transportation, insurance and health system.
On the other hand, the fact that development of some other indexes to have advanced societies needs to be treated as important as economic progress is known to everyone. It is strongly believed that having a standard and advanced education system in many countries is the prime factor in building the principles of development. A welfare society with inappropriate education and insufficient health care system would not efficiently develop. Social welfare concepts are defined by all of the political, social, economic, and cultural terms. The more a country pays attention to the human rights, freedom, and social stability, the more sustainable economic progress can be achieved. Moreover, the physically and mentally healthy population, high level of education and solid infrastructure can contribute to a sustainable economic growth.
To conclude, economic development of a country is undeniable and dominant factor of a country 's advancement; nonetheless, personally, I hold the view that various sorts of progress are as significant as economic growth.

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There is a belief amongst many governments that economic growth is their key duty, whilst some people are oppose this view and argue that there are other duties that are as important as economic growth. This essay will discuss both sides of...

There is a belief amongst many governments that economic growth is their key duty, whilst some people are oppose this view and argue that there are other duties that are as important as economic growth. This essay will discuss both sides of views, and agrees that government's main goals are not limited to only one aspect, which is economic progress.

On the one hand, prime ministers and presidents, who are main decision makers in countries, set economy improvement as their priority. They reckon that economic growth leads to higher cash flow which has great impact on other aspects of citizen's lives, such as creating more job opportunities, and this can drop the rate of crimes that are relevant to economic crisis, either directly or indirectly.

On the other hand, the opponents of this view claim that there are many factors that are essential to be tackled in a society. Education is a prime example, the more people are educated in a country, the more progress will be made in country. Education plays an important role in improvement of both individuals lives and governments circumstances, this is due to the fact that education can rise the level of people's competencies, thus it helps people find well-paid occupations that surge the standard of their livings, also developes industries and science in a society.

In conclusion, however many governments put economic progress in their priorities,I strongly believe that there are many other aspects that are important at same level of economic like Education.

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supporting ideas need more development, for example. in the second paragraph " higher cash flow" . try to use referencing tools and a wider range of words
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Many governments believe that their important role is making progress in the economy,but some people believe that making progress in other parts is as important as economic issues. While there are persuasive argument in favor of being economic...

Many governments believe that their important role is making progress in the economy,but some people believe that making progress in other parts is as important as economic issues. While there are persuasive argument in favor of being economic progress the most important thing, I would agree that it is better to pay attention to other types of progress.
On the one hand, governments argue that there are advantages to making progress in economic issues. From their point of view, this matter leads to expanding jobs and reducing the toll of joblessness. Because of existing variety types of work, labor force has
enough opportunities to select its interested and talented job which will be encouraged on that and even a creator of new methods on ding this.It is also maintained that this procedure leads to reducing the toll of committing crimes.
On the other hand, there are those who subscribe to the view that making progress in other parts like: education and transportation has several benefits. They argue that unless the country does not a suitable and efficiency educational system, it will not be successful in other regards. In fact it is a good education guarantees the good future. It is also believe that progressing in
transportation is inevitable. They ratiocinate the basement of economic booming is developing transportation in every aspects of this.
In my opinion, developing medical service is another important part. This service should not limited in treatment, like it should subtend periodic checkup for prevention and free insurance for all of the people.
In conclusion, economic progress can be useful under different circumstances, but I generally prefer to pay attention to education, transportation and medical service as well.

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The past 50 years have seen a dramatic increase in the economics , as the pase of life increases. This flow of evolution, gas been significant for numerous governments . However, some people seem to have divided opinions,though, they feel other...

The past 50 years have seen a dramatic increase in the economics , as the pase of life increases. This flow of evolution, gas been significant for numerous governments . However, some people seem to have divided opinions,though, they feel other reasons would be equally importantly. In this essay I intend to argue some point of each view individually.

First of all, it is an undeniable fact that, person’s prosperity as well as facilitated life would be result in certain measures in improving economic precisely. As poses countries moving towards progress. One particularly good example of this is expanding export along with reducing imports. This triggers to save environment and natural resources like oil, gas , wood, and etc. Admittedly, when governments try to vast export not only increases their interactions with other countries but also foreign exchange earnings increase and undoubtedly more oil reserves will remain for the next generation.

On the other side, apart from the economic issues, social justice or human rights is a vital. Indeed the problem is emphasized by the growing number of people over the world. People are aware to their rights so predominantly claim their rights from governors. One salient example of this would be about confront with crime and theft in the community. As if the security of people in society will imperil in lack of regulation.

By way of conclusion,although, the other factors are by no mean insurmountable, it is highly unlikely that, the government could improve without valuable economic foundations that I believe, it is an indisputable fact that would be based of factors in societies. So the nations should attempt to resolve this issue in the foreseeable future.

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Every government is expected to provide a wide range of facilities with its citizens. But when it comes to the most important onus, a serious question arises to whether economic policy is the case that government should pay the most attention....

Every government is expected to provide a wide range of facilities with its citizens. But when it comes to the most important onus, a serious question arises to whether economic policy is the case that government should pay the most attention. While a group of people are in favour of financially development, others put forward this idea that other matters should receive the equal portion of the importance.

There are undoubtedly true explanations for struggling with economic challenges to ease people’s life. It would be meaningless idea that governments do not put emphasize on economic development if public members miserably were engaged in financial problems like unemployment, inflation and insufficient public amenities. In the presence of the mentioned issues, the society is bound to face considerable problems in reaching a sustainable development. For example, inasmuch as high rate of unemployment, crime rate is more likely to rise, where some people illegally try to meet their authentic needs. Thereby, benefiting from a stunning economic climate makes significant contributions to society’s movement towards better living standards and people’s well being.

Setting aside economic considerations, however, other issues related to society are vital to some extent that ignorance of them leads to dire consequences. Each country never maintains a sustainable development unless whole society takes advantage of a sensible judicial system and equality among society members. Take some Arabic countries as a perfect example where, although their wealthy governments boost their economy conditions and offers unprecedented monetary opportunities for people, the shortage of freedom of speech and gender inequality alike, jeopardize the wellbeing of people. Thereby, non-profit driven point of view towards the main responsibility of government is the prerequisite for developing a prosperous nation.

In conclusion, not only do state authorities contribute to what people materially require, but also they ought to be concerned about spiritual needs of mass population.

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Undoubtedly, among various factors contributing the countries progress, economy’s portion seems to be higher. Other important categories such as industry blossom, medical research and other continuous glorious achievement in tourism, productive...

Undoubtedly, among various factors contributing the countries progress, economy’s portion seems to be higher. Other important categories such as industry blossom, medical research and other continuous glorious achievement in tourism, productive agriculture and every other crucial cases, however, are of the great importance to lead country to its summit of progress as equal as economy can.
Ostensibly, considerable achievements as a result of economic growth stimulates most of countries to boost their economy irrespective to other key features which bring about economic improvement too. In fact, sufficing to be prosperous solely in this scope gives rise to troubles created due to the less attention is paid toward other mentioned categories playing a pivotal role in economy’s thriving. Some government deceive that assumption of economic progress as the only goal might help them not to lag behind of other countries in in their economy’s triumphal procession. Nonetheless they undermine other contributing domains abstained from total prosperity as a result. As an illustration, Middle East countries claiming can that much reliance on their economy owing to higher proportion of their petroleum treasure can be extremely beneficial. The enormous profit earning from selling their miner of black gold may affect other sections positively, it doesn’t necessarily reap the better conclusion in comparison to countries without even any source of petroleum which equally have taken other parameters into account.
Truly, the sheer influences of flawless economy on industrial domains is undeniable. Not only does it ascend the progress in fundamental key element sections, but also as all of them are highly likely related together, if one of them acquire progress, continuously affect other categories too. Hence this idea as an indispensable belief cannot be neglected providing that not underestimate other options merits in a global ranking. Needless to say that, the economic growth is a direct consequence of the improvements in other effective parameters. Besides, considering only one option to enjoy prosperity is not plausible. Whereas there is a kind of cohesion among different contributing factors which induce worthwhile effect in economy progress as a whole. Tourism industry is an obvious epitome proving that how glorious it can be regarding to its outstanding result on regional economy. When it comes to enormous money earned at this way nobody can neglect it portion, agriculture is also another instructive enterprise domain at the same way would have its too.
All in all, through what have cited above, it is cynical to confine the progress of the country just in economy, whereas there are any influential domains affecting the total progress of our country equally. As overestimating one option is bound to pose disorder in other areas, so as result of this kind of imbalance none of those golden plans can be concluded either in economy or in industry.

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Many governments think that economic progress is their most important goal. Some people, however, think that other types of progress are equally important for a country.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Although a vast number...

Many governments think that economic progress is their most important goal. Some people, however, think that other types of progress are equally important for a country.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Although a vast number of governments consider the country advancement in mere economic growth, it is believed that there are more aspects of progress than simply economic one.
On the one hand, some claim that the economic progress has the most significant role to play in every nation’s status; the first and perhaps foremost prerequisite for any sort of amenities is highly likely financial resources. Offering comprehend healthcare services, equipped hospitals and specialized workforce for instance, demand financial independency. As this example shows money is set to be the first stride into the progress of a certain nation. It is, therefore, understandable why many assume the economic advancement as the most essential factor of a communication development.
On the other hand, many contend that social and cultural growth is of the same importance as the economic one. In their perspective unless human rights, express freedom and gender equality for instance, is implemented properly, community suffer from lack of emotional health. Considering the importance of individual freedoms in a society growth it is understandable how some society members, particularly human rights activists, contend social and cultural development of a nation should be raised up parallel to economic one.
In conclusion, although many contend that economy issues is bound to be in incomparable status than other aspects of growth, It is agreed that social and cultural development is pivotal alike.

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the response discusses both views. avoid using repetitive patterns. some grammatical errors
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Economic level is an undeniable factor that can cause many improvement in some country specially in developing country. The role of economic success has been the subject of debate. I argue that there are other factors like education, healthcare,...

Economic level is an undeniable factor that can cause many improvement in some country specially in developing country. The role of economic success has been the subject of debate. I argue that there are other factors like education, healthcare, and personal freedom.
On the one hand, some people believe that economic growth is the crucial goal to achieve. To begin with, economy means a better standards of living for the people. When the country is on a good economic state it leads to more financial achievement and government can spend it to provide more services like transportation. Furthermore, it attracts foreign investors to to finance business and thus it generates more opportunities for people to find job with good salary.
On the other hand, I believe that there are more categories of development that are equally valuable. Firstly, education as one of the main factor can raise public awareness. With regards to criminal issues, people are less likely to commit crime, since a sizable number of people know the rules and punishment for offenders. Secondly, personally freedom has a great significant importance in the every country. In order to voice their mind every person need to have speech right. If people are not allowed to talk about their ideas, it will cause people do not express their beneficial ideas which leads to country improvement, so government may use its old methods. Finally, the last but not the least criteria is healthcare system. Government should invest on healthcare system especially the public one. When government pay attention to healthcare facilities people do not suffer from health problem, so a health society is a good achievement.
In conclusion, although economic has some good impact on country process, it is important for government to consider other categories such as education, personal freedom, and health care to be success.

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be careful and check your sentences, there are a number of errors in grammar. ideas are almost supported
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By and large, it is well established in today's world we live in, where everyone government men want to do best, to make the society better place for live, it comes as no surprise that some of them think the best way for improving the society is...

By and large, it is well established in today's world we live in, where everyone government men want to do best, to make the society better place for live, it comes as no surprise that some of them think the best way for improving the society is that to economic progress, but other disagree. In my own perspective, I believe that economic is the most importance thing that a government should be consider. In the ensuing paragraphs, I delve into some outstanding reasons.
One of the reasons coming to mind at first is that economic progress put direct impact on other progress in society. We have considered this fact that in all field money and economical play a pivotal role. To shed light this matter, I went mention an example. When we want a good educational system we must have a good facility, equipment, and laboratory to use for training the students, and all of this need money. Also, the importance of financial issue in art or others visual art. when we want hold a gallery in need to have an excellent building to represent the art in the best way. As you see, economic have an important role in other issue in the society.
In approaching this issue, apart from what mentioned above, one should mention another subtle point meticulously that thanks to the good economy we have calmer and more relax life. If we always be worry about economy, our live was less cheerful. For instance, consider a family in bad financial condition, the father must work until late, so he haven't enough time to spend with the family. Her spouse isn’t satisfied, and her boy have problem in the school because of her father didn't put enough time for her boy and a lot of other problem just because of financial problem and ruin economic situation. A noteworthy intelligible statistic, revealed by recent survey in my country, Iran, demonstrated that about 88 percent of students that have family with economical problem also have problem in their learning.
To wrap it up, All the aforementioned reasons lead us to the conclusion that the better economic condition, the more prosperous society will be. But, it was a story in nutshell. There are some other reasons and example to back up this argument, which are not mentioned above. All in all, I strongly believe that economic is the most importance thing that each government man considers to have active, happy, and boosted society.

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too many errors in grammar and punctuation. some relevant ideas are presented.
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In the recent decades,many governments have considered economic prograss as their ultimate and more significant aim.However,some on the other hand beleives this factor is as much as important the other factors are.It seems financial aspect...

In the recent decades,many governments have considered economic prograss as their ultimate and more significant aim.However,some on the other hand beleives this factor is as much as important the other factors are.It seems financial aspect together with some other point such as culture of a society making enrichment of a country manage to be golden purpose of governments.
There is no doubt,in the last century,many societies even developted countries are faced some financial priblems having severe drawbacks on them as a whole (both people and governments).Thanks to such situation most authorities have decuded to concentrate on economic prograss as their main goal.Regarding this they support financial purposes such as autonomos companies and businesses,widespreading firms (expanding companies branch in other places or countries),new and more creative ideas about economy and so on...
They believes it make their societies more affluent and well_known in all over the world.
Although,the economy have had the direct impact on society but it is not cause to ignor the cultur and educational parts;as we all know that they are the integral part of any society.They make the enrichment of a country ,It is somehow reflected the heritage of predecessors to new generation and absolutely the whole world.So the youngs shoud educate and get familiar with their roots and with the culture of the country that their fathers remain for them;it is their duty to conserve it for future;And as a whole the government should consider it as a goal.
At the end;not only the economic but also the culture and education part of a society should be consider as important keys for goverments .

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there are a lot of errors in structures. try to check your sentences more carefully. ideas are relevant .
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The economy of every country should be powerful to have wealthy societies, so governments, nowadays, are trying to improve it as their main purpose. Individuals, however, state that other aspects of a nation should progress in parallel as well....

The economy of every country should be powerful to have wealthy societies, so governments, nowadays, are trying to improve it as their main purpose. Individuals, however, state that other aspects of a nation should progress in parallel as well. This essay will discuss both points of views.
Making improvement in the economy is likely to profit people’s personal life and communities alike. Powerful economy would enable governments not only to present better educational facilities like state-of-the-art laboratories, ensuring the quality of education, but also to construct new entertainment infrastructures which could spread a sense a happiness among society members. States, in addition, could be able to increase the salaries, resulting in better living standards. People, for example, will be financially able to have special healthy diets, or to check their health conditions up regularly in specialized health centers.
However, some people would argue that progress in all aspects of a country is just as important as the economy. Take, for instance, the fact that possessing the knowledge available for making new police robots, facilitate the process of defusing bombs and saving people’s lives, therefore scientific developments, in turn, should be considered. Moreover, it is medical improvements that allow doctors to maintain and restore ill people’ lives. Doctors, these days, by taking the advantages of technology even could treat chronic disease like cancer and HIV.
In conclusion, improvements in the economy would benefit both people and societies, yet progress in other fields like science and medicine should be the aim of officials too. Although the economy is important, I believe governments should make efforts to improve various aspects of countries.

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a clear progression throughout the response, with good use of cohesive devices .however in the third paragraphs there are some inaccuracies
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The recent decades have faced a rise in the rate of economic and other type of progress. Some society members believe that the main important aim for many states is economic progress. Constantly, others assume that there are other progresses...

The recent decades have faced a rise in the rate of economic and other type of progress. Some society members believe that the main important aim for many states is economic progress. Constantly, others assume that there are other progresses which have important roles. There are cogent arguments on both sites, which will be discussed in detail, followed by my own perspective on the issue.
It is said that economic growth as a fundamental goal for countries can have positive impact on welfare benefits. Economic progress ensures government that more money is available for state to spend on welfare services and enhances the level of standard life of citizens. In another words government is bound to invest on employment, health services, insurances and housing in order to have safe and health societies with satisfied residents.
However, it is generally argued that other kinds of progress have equal importance. Even though economic growth plays an essential part. Government should not forget other issues such as educational progress which has tremendous effect on economy of countries and may support it easily especially when education and industry make a firm bond together. The figures show that in developing countries more than before also by far from third world countries pay attention to these services bonds and never let ties weaken.
In conclusion, I believe that economic progress is one of the important purposes to develop countries and besides, better education social welfare and security are equally important and essential for every societies.

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the response covers both sides, but lack of coherence and poor punctuation make comprehension a little difficult
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There are different views about economic issue as an important matter for government. Some governments allege that first and foremost goal is economic progress. Contrastingly, others assume that there are some vital issues that are equal economy...

There are different views about economic issue as an important matter for government. Some governments allege that first and foremost goal is economic progress. Contrastingly, others assume that there are some vital issues that are equal economy in terms of importance. There are cogent arguments on both sides which will be discussed in detail along with my own perspective on the matter.
On the one hand, the economy is an inseparable issue from authorities’ concerns. By looking at historical events, it’s obvious that one major reason for wars was lack of progress in economy. Additionally, unpleasant condition in economy lead society toward unemployment, inflation and so forth. Therefore, nowadays many governments are scrimmaging with economics problems to solve them.
On the other hand, some other factors are necessary for progressing a country. For example, politicians should pay attention about education because it’s really sensitive organs that has trained children who are future decision makers. Another item is health section which these days, health problems are increasing because of pollutions and nonorganic food. However, some developed countries have excellent economy, they still suffer from some dangerous health problems.
In conclusion, although economy is really important and some government consider this issue as an important target, I affirm that other factors such as education and treatment section for progressing a country are very necessary.

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Many authorities restricted their goal in economic matter. Contrastingly, others assume that other progress is equally vital for country. By my own perspective, all aspects of progress ought to be run for country.
There are several reasons why...

Many authorities restricted their goal in economic matter. Contrastingly, others assume that other progress is equally vital for country. By my own perspective, all aspects of progress ought to be run for country.
There are several reasons why variety of the governments assume that only powerful economic would be the major target and it would be enough to support all aspect of community. It might be considered if the economic does not work for good it would be waste of time and sources to care about others aspects of society. While, it has been proved people in the country with golden economic are much happier than the others countries with minimum rating income .However they were poor in culture and education but these are not make any effort to help them to achieve a fine life-style.
Nonetheless, it is true that some members of society tend to believe not only the economic but also all aspects of social matter ought to be run in equal process .for instance, Finland has the maximum Gini coefficient-the method of access to the social wealth for every individual of society-but there are many patients who are suffering from loneliness. Accordingly, it can be justifying there would be a cascade of plans for country in many scales for have a standard community. The plans for sport facilities, leisure, the center for psychological care among peoples and activities like that.
In conclusion, I personally believe the government should be allocated their strength equally in all types of progress not only just zoom in economical field.

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The government's officials worldwide have to brush up on their economies to make more money and then flourish social well-being as a result. Some experts believe that although it can be a practical approach to meet this goal, there are...

The government's officials worldwide have to brush up on their economies to make more money and then flourish social well-being as a result. Some experts believe that although it can be a practical approach to meet this goal, there are alternative and at the same time more constructive strategies. Overall, I think a great deal of importance should be placed on the whole sorts of progress in a country, simultaneously.
Generally speaking, almost all governments see the economy as a main source of income. In fact, a large proportion of available capital has been investing in building up the industry as the chief economic driver. Without any doubt this enables them to create more capital needed for sorting out financial problems in other sectors. For instance, when a cutting-edge plant is installed, it generates some jobs and cuts down unemployment percentage. Moreover, it contributes to rise the Gross Domestic Product (GDP) as an important indicator for life-quality level.
On the other hand, in some countries there might have been more income-generating capable sectors rather than economy which can be counted on to resolve greater issues like the environment, security and so on. Needless to say, ecological balance and security are bedrock of a green development. Particularly, if the industry is developed without taking environmental aspects into account, it might not be sustainable because industrial pollution can bring about devastating impact on our ecosystems which might be insoluble.
In conclusion, although the economic development is noteworthy, the governments seemingly should not restrict their entire attention to that. In fact, the progress should be made in all divisions based on the priorities and capabilities. Furthermore, other aspects such as the environment and security might be more important than economy.

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both sides are addressed but some parts lack development particularly in the third paragraph. some errors in grammar
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People have different views about whether governments should place a premium on economic progress or being successful in other issues should be considered as significant as economic growth. In my opinion , while  economic growth is extremely...

People have different views about whether governments should place a premium on economic progress or being successful in other issues should be considered as significant as economic growth. In my opinion , while  economic growth is extremely necessary for  our society , the importance of other progression such as country’s  education should not be overlooked. On one hand , countries with economic-oriented outlooks are in advance in every fields such as science and other infrastructures. strong economy can lead to more advancement and development in other circumstances. countries with high rate of economic growth gain a perfect reputation from all around the world therefore an array of people intend to immigrate to these countries and prefer to invest there, so these countries benefit from both  money and fresh ideas. In addition , residents of wealthy countries benefit from higher standard of living ,For example, they receive excellent public services , health care, education and etc, so they do not struggle with poverty and they do not have to tackle financial problems as much as poor countries. on the other hand , governments with best management of economy should take an approach to support their education system strongly.in my opinion, firstly , a sound education system is a vital key for each nation to be succeed in variety areas.if people of society were well-educated, extreme growth woyld be seen in diversity areas.secondly , education produces well-cultured citizens which the entire nation would get benefit from . Finally, educated societies are well-organized in each area since they benefit from intellectual citizens. . In conclusion, although the economic progression plays an essential role in every society , other valuable issues such as culture and education should equally be considered to governments.

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A great amount of budget of most governments is allocated to provide suitable condition for progression in economic fields. Although some people believe there are many non-financial issues that should be paid attention to them the same as...

A great amount of budget of most governments is allocated to provide suitable condition for progression in economic fields. Although some people believe there are many non-financial issues that should be paid attention to them the same as economic advancement, but I somewhat think economic problems should be considered as the most priority.
There are many benefits in economic progress. First and most importantly, the future of family offspring is depended on financial issues. To clarify, not only a great amount job opportunities are prepared, but also most of industrials companies, which have crucial rolls in developing of countries, can be supported. In other words, if in developing countries had been paid more attention to economic issues by their statesmen, the situation of underprivileged citizens in them would be acceptable. In addition to this, many infrastructure facilities, which show the quality of society member’s life, need a huge amount of money to be constructed. Apart from these, there are many offenders that the main reason for their crimes has been mentioned financial problem.
However, there are many non-financial issues, which should be considered by governments. To begin with, a great number of diseases, such as type 2 diabetes, heart attacks and some mental problems are stemmed from culture, which burden many financial cost for governments and societies. Many of these items would be prevented if some plans had been done by governments. For example, if doing sports were prevalent among people, it is more likely that many of detrimental materials and thought, which cause most of sickness, would be prevented. In addition to this, there can be found many educational courses in school, universities and training centers, which can have significant effects on learners. For example, there are some training that help youths to be more gregarious and sociable. Also, some genial and affable people, which establish charity organizations, to attract philanthropic and magnanimous people, in order to support in poverty people do not have any support from government and have been trained in the university of life, which show the importance of society. As well as these, many crimes that have been rampant in society can be limited if the societies members be more delighted and satisfied by holding some happy ceremonies and festivals, which have not been considered in most developing countries.
In conclusion, I believe that nevertheless, some non-economics issues are very important, but economic progress should be more considered by governments.

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less common words and complex forms can be seen but they do not seem natural.
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Many states have achieved progress in a diverse range of issues in recent decades. Although an array of governments give priority to economic growth, some individuals allege that other kinds of development should be considered by politicians and...

Many states have achieved progress in a diverse range of issues in recent decades. Although an array of governments give priority to economic growth, some individuals allege that other kinds of development should be considered by politicians and officials in authority.

It is true that governors should raise medical and educational standards in their countries. To clarify, public health and welfare can form significant part of expansion programs. If ordinary people have easy access to specialized clinics and hospitals when suffering from mental and physical disorders, societies are bound to witness a substantial increase in well-being. Providing satisfying education system, furthermore, can be useful and efficient. Schools and universities equipped with a variety of facilities and adopting innovative approaches by teachers can nurture gifted next generation. Accordingly, while the number of talented individuals rise, the level of that country is promoted to a higher rank among other nations.

Nevertheless, majority of countries prefer to develop their economy. This can have a far-reaching impact on the improvement of living standards, for other types of progress are highly likely to depend on financial success. For example, the states putting great emphasis on economic growth are able to pay citizens high salaries. Moreover, increasing economic activities contribute to close industrial relations with advanced countries and boost international trade. A case in point is growing export of unique natural resources such as oil and precious metals to other countries.

In conclusion, despite the difference between the kinds of progress in different societies, I believe governments should make effort for economic development.

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In the last two century, the policies and people’s lifestyle of all around the world have been changed. It is obvious that there is a big competition between countries to alter a developed country. For this purpose, any country has special...

In the last two century, the policies and people’s lifestyle of all around the world have been changed. It is obvious that there is a big competition between countries to alter a developed country. For this purpose, any country has special strategies. Although a significant number of countries just focus on economic progress, it cannot be a comprehensive decision for the future of countries without considering of education and local technology development.
Provision of the annual budget for each country plays an important role in its progress. This matter is undeniable that economic development depends on products which countries produce for sale in the world marketing and nowadays, many of country trying to have a vast quote in. Countries sell either their extra natural resources like oil, gas, wood, etc. or their technology. If countries decide to have just economic progress, they must sale their natural resource. It causes to these countries always depend on the other countries for access to recent technology.
On the contrary, countries which consider other factors to progress are able to use both natural resource and recent technology sale. Using of natural resources needs to access a new technology, accessing the new technology needs knowledge and local specialized. So, all of these parameters can help a county to become a developed country. Such countries can sell their updated technology beside their natural resource. Also, they will not depend on other countries.
To sum up, although economic progress undeniable to alter a developing country to a developed country, it is not adequate to have an independent country and education and local technology are essential to developing.

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Nowadays several mental and physical disorders have become a conflict at increasing rate. The recession brings about those problems. Although a great numbers of governments hold the view that economic growth is a main object, others believe that...

Nowadays several mental and physical disorders have become a conflict at increasing rate. The recession brings about those problems. Although a great numbers of governments hold the view that economic growth is a main object, others believe that other opportunities should be created. In my perspective, both ideas are essential and in this essay I will elaborate briefly on the matter.
It is true that, economic growth play a vital role in each country. As a matter of fact, this is a pillar of society and other factors are closed o it. for instance, in north Korea, the war industry is focused by the president. As a result of that there are not seen enough development among cities as well as people's lifestyle. Therefore, the authority demand giving priority to their organizational program do it social or political.
Irrespective of crucial aspects of economic progress, undeniably, some factors such education, creativity, natural recourses, and other sorts could affect not only the standard of living but also development of country. In order to clarify this matter, if there were not provided enough facilities for children, this society would face poverty, illegal activities and other serious issues. Hence, progressing in science, medication, tourism could lead to better economical development for any nation.
To sum up, while other factors is necessary to include in governors' program, the economic growth is a basic priority for them. I strongly believe providing a balanced plan between economic and other objects can result in healthier and wealthier community.

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Throughout history nations all have endeavored to progress in many terms. However, when it comes to the relative importance of various different progression fields, there are divided opinions; while some limit it to realm of economy; I aver that...

Throughout history nations all have endeavored to progress in many terms. However, when it comes to the relative importance of various different progression fields, there are divided opinions; while some limit it to realm of economy; I aver that it must be beyond that, since to have sustainable progressive trend many interweaved measures should be addressed to call a country developed.

It is plausible that satisfying the first financial needs of people is of the essence in a developed country. Following this approach and often aiming at raising the public satisfaction level, many governments place the premium on maintaining the national economical demands in terms of affordable and ubiquitous amenities, infrastructure and other social services. However, the bitter fact is that despite the great deal of investments, many of these countries can hardly fulfill the relative standards to be named in the list of developed countries.

Convincingly, it is argued that this is on account of mistakenly pursuing development in a single thread way; i.e. economy. While it is a widely accepted notion that states should take arrays of measures in to account to enjoy a ceaseless multi-dimensional progression. To set an evident example, many western communities are globally reputed for making headway toward a long term progressive trend in terms of economic achievements, culture and art, scientific breakthroughs and etc., primarily owing to their modern political transparent system. In contrast, Arab nations in middle-east have suffered for decades from the inherent corruption of authorities who have not been elected in a democratic way to be the true nation’s proxy, in effect, leading to lag behind their less affluent but more developed westerns counterparts.

To wrap it up briefly, although economic growth is the first evident aspect of a stable improvement trend, I believe that simultaneously numerous fields should be pursued to fulfill thoroughly multi-aspects development standards.

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Material consideration is a paramount destination for many governments. However, some people believe that governments should consider to other aspects of a country. And developing in other features is as important as economic progress. In this...

Material consideration is a paramount destination for many governments. However, some people believe that governments should consider to other aspects of a country. And developing in other features is as important as economic progress. In this essay we look at different aspects of issues in a country. I believe, two issues in the world are above the all problems, and government should give them on the peak of all matters.
Undoubtedly, economic progress is a key factor for governments, and could not be deny. But, it could not answer to all problems in the world lonely. And, most important issues in the world are critical , which should be consider before money.
Nowadays, environmental problems that is the most substantial issues in the world. The world encounters with vital problems, Such as global warming.in addition many problems such as domestic and industrial waste would be contaminate the water and soil, because of this wild animals in the world endangered with distinction. For example, Caspian seal threated by water tainted in recent years. Additionally societies have been facing with a phenomenon which it called deforestation. Deforestration and logging destroyed wild life animals and governments should be care about it more. For instance, Asian tigers lost their habitat, because of this they dwindling numbers.
Another factor, should be consider by governments is migration. Many young ambitious people migrate to another country to find better job and opportunity. While, the infrastructure limit and date back to many years ago and overcrowding cause that they breakdown. In addition, increase in population that need more facilities such as schools, hospitals and more care homes for elderly people. In this situation governments should find a solution for over migration and it is more important than trading for earn more money.
In conclusion, it seems to me that however, economic progress is an important goal, but environmental issues and care about migration, are vital issues for a country to be stable.

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It is argued that for some governments economic growth is in center of attention. While, some people opine that other social matters should be taken into account as well. I slightly believe that strong economy is fundamental prerequisite for...

It is argued that for some governments economic growth is in center of attention. While, some people opine that other social matters should be taken into account as well. I slightly believe that strong economy is fundamental prerequisite for other progressions and needs to be considered more.
There are many reasons in support of having special view on economy rather than other topical issues. In recent years there has been a vast increase in number of nations facing to economic recession. So making efforts and strategic plans to keep a country away from economic downturn and leading to prosperity would be in priority. A typical example of this point is globalization. Related to this issue, many countries are bound to expand their monetary relationship with so called global village. In such societies engaging with global trade is inevitable. Outcome of a poor economy causes these nations to lose the competitive and beneficial markets. In view of this, opportunities to attract the investments will be lost. That’s why governments struggle in significant way to keep the economy alive.
Another logical reason to support this issue is that economy is infrastructure of a country. There is a proven association between economy and other aspects of governing. Regarding to this, a booming economy has positive effects on other social affairs and vice versa. To exemplify this issue, it can be mentioned to inflation; coming from flagging economy. The result brings economic hardship for member of society. Unemployment, business collapses, increase in criminal rate and social dissatisfaction are other cases in point.
In conclusions, although all of social matters should be considered as well as economy by governments, regarding to importance of the economy in different sides of a society, it is necessary to have a special view on that prior to other affairs.

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simple and complex sentence forms can be seen. some points are better supported than others. cohesion seems natural.
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