IELTS Cambridge 11 - Test3 - Academic Writing - Task2

Some people say that the only reason for learning a foreign language is in order to travel to or work in a foreign country. Others say that these are not the only reasons why someone should learn a foreign language.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
You should write at least 250 words.

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Recently, the number of people learning a foreign language has increased on an unprecedented scale. Some society members allege that the true explanation to acquire another language is travelling or working overseas. Contrastingly, others assume that these are not the only reasons justifying second language acquisition. There are cogent arguments on both sides, which will be discussed in detail, followed by my own perspective on the matter.

It is true that people eagerly tend to become familiar with a new language for either occupation or travel. To clarify, globalization has left a far-reaching impact on the economy of all nations and tremendously promoted the growth of multinational companies. While the number of working individuals rises, the demand to study all four skills of a foreign language will double. Accordingly, if people intend to visit a new country, they have to practice basic conversations in the target language to communicate with the locals whenever possible.

Nonetheless, travelling or working is not the only reason why many are trained for. First, students urgently feel the need to study foreign languages because many degree programs make this process of learning mandatory. As the students learn these languages, they can perceive and appreciate cultural diversity. Society members, moreover, are motivated to acquire a foreign language since many professional careers in the United Kingdom and Australia require IELTS or TOEFL certification.

In conclusion, although some of the reasons are travel or work-related, other justifications are purely personal or recreational in nature. Admittedly, I believe that making too much effort to acquire a second language will be more appreciated for either academic or professional purposes. (269 words)

شرکت‌کننده محترم،
تا ساعت 17 روز پنجشنبه 1396/9/23 فرصت دارید، برای این موضوع رایتینگ‌های خود را نوشته و به صورت کامنت، در زیر پست، ارسال نمایید. تمامی رایتینگ‌ها توسط ممتحنین بیان برتر ارزیابی شده و به آنها نمره داده خواهد شد.

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Economic growth is a debatable issue among governments and people of a country. While state consider it as their ultimate goal, some people claim that progression in other major issues are of the same importance of economy.
Undoubtedly...

Economic growth is a debatable issue among governments and people of a country. While state consider it as their ultimate goal, some people claim that progression in other major issues are of the same importance of economy.
Undoubtedly governments are direct responsible of their people’s livelihood status which result in their continued concern over economic affairs. The world with economic turmoil many people may face uncertainty in their future life; for example, current Europe financial crisis has affected more the region already in recession. Hence it is expected that the statesmen adopt more astute approach in economic reform and stability.in addition governments stabilize their political positions through making progression in economic term.
On the other hand, the idea of supporters of taking other major field into same concern as economy should be taken into account. One of the worldwide worries of people around the globe is the health status of a country and it’s people; from this perspective people have same priority in progression of health issues as economic’s specially when some serious disease break out in the world.it also affect the people’s point of view on Politicians, for example people pay serious attention to the budget allocated to the healthcare. Other people have their own preferences in education, sports, and other fields which is expected these demanding needs to be met by the state.
In coclusion, while economic growth is one of the principle in improvement of a country, the government should considered other important issues of people irrelevant to economy.

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سلام با تشکر از این که وقت میگذارید و به طور کامل همه چیز را توضیح می دهید. میخواستم چند تا سوال بپرسم. راستش یک مقدار گیج شده ام.:
1. با توجه به درس های قبلی من اینطور برداشت کردم که Thesis statement حتما باید در مقدمه گفته شود ولی در مقدمه این...

سلام با تشکر از این که وقت میگذارید و به طور کامل همه چیز را توضیح می دهید. میخواستم چند تا سوال بپرسم. راستش یک مقدار گیج شده ام.:
1. با توجه به درس های قبلی من اینطور برداشت کردم که Thesis statement حتما باید در مقدمه گفته شود ولی در مقدمه این نمونه رایتینگ Thesis statement وجود ندارد.
2. در پاراگراف دوم بادی نوشته شده که مدارک ایلتس و تافل برای مشاغل حرفه ای لازم است که من فکر میکنم این مثال برای پاراگراف اول مناسب تر است.
3. در قسمت نتیجه گیری منظور از این جمله چیست؟
آیا لازم نیست آنچه در نتیجه گیری آورده می شود خلاصه آن را در بادی توضیح داده باشیم؟ اگر منظور از recreational اهداف تفریحی باشد هیچ اشاره ای به آن در پاراگراف های بادی نشده..با سپاس از شما




other justifications are purely personal or recreational in nature

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عالی بود مرسی

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Masum:
Some people say that the only reason for learning a foreign language is in order to travel to or work in a foreign country. Other say that these are not the only reasons why someone should learn foreign language. Discuss both these views...

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Some people say that the only reason for learning a foreign language is in order to travel to or work in a foreign country. Other say that these are not the only reasons why someone should learn foreign language. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

What recently has been greatly dominant among families, especially in our society, parallel to other different intendancies toward instructive issues, is the numerous number of people tend to learn a foreign language, the reason although is different, it is of great important when knowing foreign language highly likely helps them to acquire its worthwhile merits.
The first conspicuous contributing factor in learning foreign language is enabling individuals who travel abroad to overcome their daily problems. Certainly those who are enough dominant in the second language compared with people don’t know the languages settled in new life far from tensions and anxieties their counterparts deal with. As an illustration at the commencement of traveling from entering airport to handling their daily routine they simply notice that how learning a foreign language turns to a great priority. As it substantially facilities the way they work and communicate with natives. So undoubtedly the necessity of knowing the foreign language is obvious reason for the emigrants seeking proper condition of life and work. In fact this ability extricate them from myriad struggles they would experience ahead through learning their destination country language irrespective of other capabilities they own/bore.
On the other hands, there are some of other categories encourage individuals to learn another language even without any particular plan to travel abroad. The ubiquity of the internet as well as numerous beneficial informative websites justify education seekers to acquire enough knowledge in order to comprehend those educational source on the internet or the same printed scientific journals. Moreover they cannot benefit from available information in present competitive world unless they enjoy from being dominant on other language letting them to promote their level of understanding and career as well. For instance, for most of outstanding subject specialist teachers, writers, instructors and every other key element majors it is a clear privilege to know foreign language. Even for housewives which it seems knowing foreign language wouldn’t have any particular benefit whereas whether they are educated or not their usual need of working with state- of –the- art kitchen appliance or watching some training program in the satellite are some cases prove the necessity of their language learning. Needless to say that nowadays learning a foreign language is going to be a big challenge for some ordinary group of any society too. Due to this activity as a specific aptitude enables them to overcome their common problems such as dealing with different electronic device as well as variety of smart gismo. Hence as a result of this opportunity they aren’t bound to lag behind of the current competitive trend.
All in all, through what have mentioned above, knowing a foreign language is considered as a truly advantage in most professions even for housewives. Due to the fact that it brings about various merits either in life or job for those who know foreign language. The progresses this group achieve make other more determined to follow this trend. Although learning foreign language is not just limited to the specific group traveling abroad for higher education and work, it is highly precious for this group in comparison to other when they become get rid of probable challenges the may encounter.

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با سلام.متاسفانه من تو بقیه صفحات هم نتونستم نمره رایتینگم رو پیدا کنم.اگه امکانش هست دوباره برام کامنتتون رو بزارید.سپاسگزارم

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روی این صفحه لطفا چک کنید
https://vip-talk.com/cam11-academic-test2-writing2
جزء اولین کامنت ها میباشد

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با سلام و خسته نباشید و همچنین تشکر ویزه از زحمات شما
سوالی در مورد سمپل رایتینگ جناب آقای استاد جعفری داشتم. آیا جمله آخر از پاراگراف دوم بادی، تاییدی بر پاراگراف اول نیست؟ چون گفته مشاغل حرفه ای در آمریکا و استرالیا نیاز به ایلتس و تافل دارد ...

با سلام و خسته نباشید و همچنین تشکر ویزه از زحمات شما
سوالی در مورد سمپل رایتینگ جناب آقای استاد جعفری داشتم. آیا جمله آخر از پاراگراف دوم بادی، تاییدی بر پاراگراف اول نیست؟ چون گفته مشاغل حرفه ای در آمریکا و استرالیا نیاز به ایلتس و تافل دارد که همان شغل در کشور خارجی است که نیاز به دانستن زبان انگلیسی دارد.
خیلی متشکرم اگر در این مورد توضیح دهید.

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Even though the aim of travelling and overseas occupational purpose are known to many people as the exclusive reasons of a second language acquisition, there are others who claim more factors are involved. I cannot consider these the mere facts...

Even though the aim of travelling and overseas occupational purpose are known to many people as the exclusive reasons of a second language acquisition, there are others who claim more factors are involved. I cannot consider these the mere facts and would rather the latter opinion.
Visiting other parts, enjoying exploring and go across the world, job seeking and career progression opportunities abroad, in this regard, are the most common and primitive stuffs that may people make an attempt to know more about foreign languages Indeed. But all this is a tiny part of the struggle to know a language besides native language.
Due to the speed of transmission and innovations that has brought people around the world closer together, the emphasis of learning other languages has become a major concern for the present-day man. Everybody, however, has various necessities. For instance; the greatest aid to social mobility is being informed or stay up-to-date about the latest news or developments abreast. Making new friends online with different people and cultures at universities or on the Internet. Moreover, this is a way to keep your mind healthy because learning a second language has been proven to delay the onset of dementia.
Furthermore, the need of contribution and connection with different people in other countries particularly in the private sector in order to increase investment and productivity in the domestic business can be even more vital.
On the whole, what encourages language learning not only is just in case of going abroad but also has more motivations and differs from person to person. In addition to working and traveling reasons also includes economic, commercial, social issues and ... in the homeland.

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it's done

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Even though the aim of travelling and overseas occupational purpose are known to many people as the exclusive reasons of a second language acquisition, there are others who claim more factors are involved. I cannot consider these the mere facts...

Even though the aim of travelling and overseas occupational purpose are known to many people as the exclusive reasons of a second language acquisition, there are others who claim more factors are involved. I cannot consider these the mere facts and would rather the latter opinion.
Visiting other parts, enjoying exploring and go across the world, job seeking and career progression opportunities abroad, in this regard, are the most common and primitive stuffs that may people make an attempt to know more about foreign languages Indeed. But all this is a tiny part of the struggle to know a language besides native language.
Due to the speed of transmission and innovations that has brought people around the world closer together, the emphasis of learning other languages has become a major concern for the present-day man. Everybody, however, has various necessities. For instance; the greatest aid to social mobility is being informed or stay up-to-date about the latest news or developments abreast. Making new friends online with different people and cultures at universities or on the Internet. Moreover, this is a way to keep your mind healthy because learning a second language has been proven to delay the onset of dementia.
Furthermore, the need of contribution and connection with different people in other countries particularly in the private sector in order to increase investment and productivity in the domestic business can be even more vital.
On the whole, what encourages language learning not only is just in case of going abroad but also has more motivations and differs from person to person. In addition to working and traveling reasons also includes economic, commercial, social issues and ... in the homeland.

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some parts of the task are supported better than others, there are minor problems in grammar.paragraphing could be improved.
score:6.

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با سلام و خسته نباشيد به تيم تخصصي ايلتس بيان برتر
آقاي حسيني ميشه لطفا به رايتينگ نمونه هم نمره بدهيد
چون بعيد است با توجه به سخت گيري هاي اخير در تصحيح ها بيشتر از ٦يا ٦/٥ بگيرد?
با تشكر

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سلام. متاسفانه منظور شما رو متوجه نشدیم. اگر منظور شما نمونه ارائه شده توسط استاد جعفری است، این رایتینگ حتما نمره بالایی کسب خواهد کرد. در نمرات بالا، ارائه نمره دقیق بسیار دشوار میشود. همانطوریکه در رایتینگ های ارائه شده توسط ممتحنین در انتهای...

سلام. متاسفانه منظور شما رو متوجه نشدیم. اگر منظور شما نمونه ارائه شده توسط استاد جعفری است، این رایتینگ حتما نمره بالایی کسب خواهد کرد. در نمرات بالا، ارائه نمره دقیق بسیار دشوار میشود. همانطوریکه در رایتینگ های ارائه شده توسط ممتحنین در انتهای کتاب های کمبریج نیز مشاهده میکنید، تنها ذکر شده که این رایتینگ ها توسط ممتحن نوشته شده و یک پاسخ درست و کامل از موضوع است و به آنها نمره ای ارائه نشده است.

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با سلام و احترام خدمت بورد تخصصی رایتینگ..بابت لطفتون سماسگزارم..ولی چرا چند رایتینگ اخر رو تصحیح نکردید؟ با اینکه قبل زمان مقرر ارسال شده بودند؟..تصحیح رایتینگ شماره ی ۲ با اینکه تعدادش خیلی بیشتر بود تا اواخر شب پنجشنبه تمام شده بود!

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دوست عزیز حتما تصحیح انجام میشه. با توجه به تعداد زیاد رایتینگ و مشغله های دیگر تیم رایتینگ، حق بدید ممکن است این تاخیر در پاسخگویی رخ دهد

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با سلام و خسته نباشید
ببخشید در خصوص مثالهای invented میشه بیشتر توضیح بدید؟ ممنون

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با سلام و خسته نباشید
فقط خواستم بسیار تشکر کنم از این حرکت . واقعا عالی هستند تمرینها و ارائه جواب ها مخصوصا رایتینگ . خدا خیرتون بده
فقط اگر تصیح رایتینگ ها نمره ها بر اساس چهار معیار cc,TR,GR,LS به تفکیک گفته میشد خیلی خوب بود ، گرچه با توجه...

با سلام و خسته نباشید
فقط خواستم بسیار تشکر کنم از این حرکت . واقعا عالی هستند تمرینها و ارائه جواب ها مخصوصا رایتینگ . خدا خیرتون بده
فقط اگر تصیح رایتینگ ها نمره ها بر اساس چهار معیار cc,TR,GR,LS به تفکیک گفته میشد خیلی خوب بود ، گرچه با توجه به تعداد زیاد رایتینگ ها تا همین حد هم بسار مفید است.
با سپاس فراوان

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با توجه به تعدد رایتینگ ها امکان پذیر نیست

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Learning a language apart from the mother tongue is going to be an indispensible practice of a man in this epoch. Not only does this skill play a vital role when people take a trip abroad, but also it broaden the horizon of life, however, some...

Learning a language apart from the mother tongue is going to be an indispensible practice of a man in this epoch. Not only does this skill play a vital role when people take a trip abroad, but also it broaden the horizon of life, however, some people consider it as an essential ability only for travel or work.

The more language people acquire, the more doors will be open to the individual’s life. It is true that knowing the language of the target country is inevitable practice to communicate with people when you make a journey. But it would be a shortsighted point of view if we thought the only application of a foreign language is related to business or entertainment. There are a number of fields ranging from philosophy, art, culture to science and technology where cannot be meaningful for other people unless they learn the target language. Take France language as a perfect example, which non French people never take as much pleasure as French one reading renowned and strong novels in French literature. This is due to the fact that translations often are not articulate enough to convey all the concepts and beauty of the original text.

Additionally, learning a new language has become far more normal as an effective method to promote people’s memory abilities. For instance, it is well documented in many scientific research conducted around the globe that during learning a new language the brain starts to constitute new connections between its cells, which by consequence makes a great contribution to the health of the brain and prevents memory related problems such as insomnia down the road. Thus, it is regarded as a memory practice particularly for middle-aged people.

In conclusion, people who are able to read and write a foreign language are more likely to reap the benefits of engaging their brain in a useful memory activity, and take advantage of connecting to a new world so as to enrich their lives.

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this is a strong response, but there is too much emphasis on one of the views. the masterful arrangement of ideas and frequent error free sentences are exemplary
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سلام.من رایتینگم رو سه شنبه ارسال کردم ولی نیستش.ایا پاک شده

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در هر صفحه تنها 50 کامنت اخیر نمایش داده میشود. لطفا در انتهای صفحه روی "کامنتت های بیشتر" کلیک کنید تا به صفحه دوم بروید. تصحیح رایتینگ شما انجام شده است.

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ممنون از توضیحات کاملتون. در پاراگراف دوم باز توضیح ومثالی که زده شده ی قسمتش به ساپورت همون ایده کار برمیگرده .قسمتی که برای شغل ازمون ایلتس و تافل ذکر شده که به نظرم این مثال باید برای ساپورت پاراگراف یک باشه و پاراگراف دو نقطه مقابل شغل و سفر...

ممنون از توضیحات کاملتون. در پاراگراف دوم باز توضیح ومثالی که زده شده ی قسمتش به ساپورت همون ایده کار برمیگرده .قسمتی که برای شغل ازمون ایلتس و تافل ذکر شده که به نظرم این مثال باید برای ساپورت پاراگراف یک باشه و پاراگراف دو نقطه مقابل شغل و سفر رو بررسی کنه؟؟؟؟؟؟؟؟

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سلام
آيا ميتوان كل پاراگراف اول را با پَرافِريز كردن سوال جواب داد؟
آيا استفاده از سوال در جمله تاپيك پاراگراف هاي بعدي ممكن است؟؟
آيا اين جملات شمارش مي شوند؟؟

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sentences lack accuracy. mistakes do not obscure understanding .main points have been covered.
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there have been typing impediments, this refers to the first posted essay from Mr.saeed tirgar

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سلام.نوشته های من پاک شده؟

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نه دوست عزيز. به رايتينگ شما نمره هم داده شده است. از دكمه ادامه نظرات در انتهاى صفحه اول استفاده كنيد. نظرات بيش از يك صفحه است

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Along with globalization, language variety through the world has become a challenging issue. While some people believe that simply work or travel area demand learning a foreign language, I contend studying a new language pursue other intentions...

Along with globalization, language variety through the world has become a challenging issue. While some people believe that simply work or travel area demand learning a foreign language, I contend studying a new language pursue other intentions in parallel with work and journey.
On the one hand, some people claim that the only potential appliance of learning a certain language would be in either occupation or travel. From their perspective, users highly likely to be forced to speak a language merely in the second country, where communication with native comes to a priority for them. Having a fluent conversation at workplace with the colleges or a satisfactory chat in societal environments as an visitor encourage them to learn a new language; This is to say, for taking full advantage of the one relationship abroad learning the second language is essential; Otherwise, learning it has no benefit.
On the other hand, others claim that learning foreign languages aimed at developing the human communication don’t restrict to real environment, where the tourists or employees present, for instance. When it comes to globalization, it affect all aspects of peoples life from making friends to education. With the technology advancement in recent years, individuals potentially make friend all over the world. This make them required to speak on at least one common language. Moreover, results of the latest progress in all scientific branches publish in international language indicating learning a second language for a wide variety of non -English speakers is of great essence .
In conclusion, learning a new language doesn’t seem to limit to certain purposes but covers all aspects of human communication rather than simply work or travel.

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some noticeable grammatical errors can be found particularly in the third paragraph. ideas are relevant and main points are addressed.
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Opinions diverge greatly on why to learn a foreign language. Although traveling and working in another country are major reasons, it seems they are not only reasons.
There does seem to be evidence that learning a foreign language could bring...

Opinions diverge greatly on why to learn a foreign language. Although traveling and working in another country are major reasons, it seems they are not only reasons.
There does seem to be evidence that learning a foreign language could bring about undeniable benefits for travelling and working alike. First, in the global village, applying for job position in another country in which there is more opportunities, it is a way of life for people particularly live in less affluent countries; so there is a strong competition between applicants. Having a good knowledge of language of that country, therefore, is a crucial criterion for being winner in this completion. Second, tourists have a great tendency to visit beloved country on their own plan without any leader. Today's, some tourist agencies set visiting plans for tourists and people are obliged to obey its plan and they could not set times to visit. So tourists would be convinced that learn foreign langue before travelling another countries.

Further, one should not close eyes upon the fact that the mentioned reasons are not only reason for learning another language. Educating, for instance, is a common reason for the young to learn the language of that country going for continuing their education. In developing country students have a dream of being in high ranked and significant university in developed and industrial countries. To reach their goal, they must pass the language exam successfully. Another reason would be worth mention is being active in internet. There is a plenty of information on the net and to benefit from that people should know a foreign language particularly English. Every day, all users of the net are able to read cascade of news about political, financial, medicine and other fields.
In brief, we may safely arrive at the conclusion that traveling and working is not only reason for learning another language and we can account other main reasons for leaning a language.

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the answer probably contains some memorized phrases since there are errors in the use of some basic structures. key points have been discussed
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While some individuals think speaking other people’s language is necessary only if you want to study or work abroad, others believe this learning process has so many advantages and it does not involve just studying or working purposes. I...

While some individuals think speaking other people’s language is necessary only if you want to study or work abroad, others believe this learning process has so many advantages and it does not involve just studying or working purposes. I personally agree with the latter point of view.

It is believed that knowing a language only benefits you when you work or study in that specific language. Firstly, if you travel for business purposes, it is clear that most business meetings tend to be held in that country’s language makes learning it necessary. Secondly, enrolling in an abroad university has lots of obstacles including reading a variety of textbooks and journals all published in different language. Finally, nationalist would be pleased and gratified to see that you are speaking their language. In this case, they may consider a visit to your country and invest money is some industries. This investment oils the wheels of the economy.

On the other hand, I believe merits of learning a language is beyond anyone’s imagination. By speaking in another language, you familiarize yourself with other people’s way of life that you may decide to revise some of your old-fashioned customs made your life monotonous and boring. Thus, there is a lot of giving and taking in the process of learning a new language. The procedure itself improves your problem solving and critical thinking skills as mind tries to be more active and present.

In conclusion, I agree that language learning would be beneficial, not inly in studying and working in another country, but also in many aspects of our lives.

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The recent decades have faced an increase in the number of individuals mastering at a foreign language. Some people learn a foreign language owing to traveling to or enjoying better career prospect in one further country, while other contributing...

The recent decades have faced an increase in the number of individuals mastering at a foreign language. Some people learn a foreign language owing to traveling to or enjoying better career prospect in one further country, while other contributing factors can play a key role in learning a foreign language.

The most significant aspects of learning a foreign language can be the development of tourism and more employment opportunities in host countries. Most of young people in developing countries tend to learn a new language, particularly English language and boost their language skills so as to work in developed countries, for being disappointed about living standards and workplace discrimination of their country. Tourists and visitors, moreover, usually have a great deal of motivation for learning a foreign language because this enables them to make new friends and embrace diverse cultures.

Nonetheless, there may be more considerable justifications for learning a foreign language. Inasmuch as employees excelling in foreign languages usually enjoy higher self-esteem compared to their colleagues, they can easily be promoted to senior positions at work in their own countries. Furthermore, people speaking a foreign language are bound to communicate with foreign ones via social networks thanks to the advent of the internet and able to surpass language barriers such as reading international news on websites, that help them improve the quality of their lives.

On the whole, the reasons of learning a foreign language are not being limited only to traveling and migration, therefore other causes such as expanding self-confidence and social interaction can be considered. States should reinforce the knowledge of foreign languages at schools by using various ways, leading to a better society.

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According to the growing trend of globalization, a great number of people are learning foreign languages. While some people believe that work in a foreign country or travel abroad are the significant reasons of learning foreign languages, others...

According to the growing trend of globalization, a great number of people are learning foreign languages. While some people believe that work in a foreign country or travel abroad are the significant reasons of learning foreign languages, others are from the opinion that the mentioned factors are not essential causes of this learning. Although taking trips and having jobs need an acceptable level of knowledge of the destination country, I firmly believe that other reasons such as getting familiar with other cultures and history is a considerable motivation for language learners.
To begin, recent decade has witnessed increased rate of migration by disparate reasons among which acquiring a better career opportunity is the most prevalent one. Therefore, learning the destination language is a necessary factor of communication for migrants. Following that, there is a new laudable belief in modern communities which says people should travel to explore valuable experiences and gain new perspectives of life. As a result, people are travelling abroad and perform as a tourist more than before so it seems to be crucial to learn foreign languages to feel convenience in communication. In general, traveling and working are significant inclinations for learning a foreign language such as an international language.
Additionally, every nation’s language is a rich source of information about their culture and history. Words, phrases, expressions and idioms are prosperous examples of people’s every day life style and behaviors. For instance, new words which are created every day by youngesters of a country exhibits their mood and social conditions. Furthermore, pondering over expressions of a language can reveal hidden history of its existence. There is a story behind a majority of expressions and idioms about their creations which leads to nice historical events.
To sum up, learning a foreign language includes various motivations and reasons. Having fun by traveling or experiencing a new career in another country, both require a rudimentary knowledge of that language. I believe that whether the reason is travel, work and learning about culture, it is a valuable act to be considered more seriously in future.

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These days,the development of technology has led to increasing communication between socities.So the importance of language as one way of communication is more than past.Some individual believe that just cause for acquiring a knowledge of another...

These days,the development of technology has led to increasing communication between socities.So the importance of language as one way of communication is more than past.Some individual believe that just cause for acquiring a knowledge of another language is journey or job in overseas,but some people express that another reasons are necessary.In my opinion,it is a misconception to say the sole purpose of learning a foreign language is trip or profession.
On one hand,it is clear that the language is one of the obstacles to connecting between communities.Nowadays,people due to explosion of information access each other effortlessly.A substantial number of people travel abroad for visiting tourism attractions.Beside,some others because of working conditions like merchants or better job opportunities commute with other nations.Both of these groups have to take a local language of an intended country in order to reduce the probable difficulties that they are confronting with them.
On the other hand,the number of students who tend to studying abroad significantly is growing day by day,now.Thus,students who migrate for educational goals should be able to speak with language of host country,in general English.Moreover,most studies and conferences are done for example,in English language over the world,todays.Hence,many researchers that their first language is not English need to learn English to do research or participate in scientefic conference.
To sum up,since the eorld became more globalised and the motto of the global village is realized,the useage of foreign language is required more than before.These help to people to communicate with each other comfortably.They can utilize from other language for another aims except travel or work.

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No one can ever deny that language has always been an integral part of each society, representing the inherent culture, customs and lifestyles of that nation. While some individuals are convinced that the need of learning new language only emerge...

No one can ever deny that language has always been an integral part of each society, representing the inherent culture, customs and lifestyles of that nation. While some individuals are convinced that the need of learning new language only emerge when people tend to travel to or work in a new country, I would contend that it sound absurd to only dedicate this learning's aim to these targets. Instead, it is likely that it can be used to a wide range of other purpose.

On the one hand, it seems that those who cite that learning foreign language can be aimed at travel or work, have several justifications. They believe that when people have to immigrant into other country, serve the purpose of employment; or the time they want to spend their leisure time in a foreign country, they would encounter to the situation to engage in a conversation or communicate with natives, therefore, assimilating the host country's language would turn into the prerequisite of their targets. To illustrate the point, a foreigner should know the language of host country to keep conversation in a polite way with appropriate words or understand the client's demands accurately at workplace. That is why it is essential to learn a foreign language for traveling or working.

In the other hand, I strongly believe that acquiring new languages are not for the aim of travel or employment, but also it opens up its necessity in various aspects. The first and foremost, some researchers and scientists need to take new language , as the most sources might be written in a specific language. Beside that, ordinary people might be passionate about a special artwork, like Hafez poems, which means that they willing to study Persian language to perceive the exact meaning of poetry. Furthermore, some professions are directly related to taking new languages, including interpreter, tourist guider, to mention but a few. Hence, there are a variety of justifications for this phenomenon of taking a foreign language.

In conclusion, although learning new languages are acknowledged to be for traveling and working purpose, I once again reaffirm that it can be used in other targets as well.

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With developing technology and communication between countries, learning foreign language especially the popular ones has become more prevalent. Some people suppose that learning another language merely has reasons of traveling or working,...

With developing technology and communication between countries, learning foreign language especially the popular ones has become more prevalent. Some people suppose that learning another language merely has reasons of traveling or working, whereas some other believe that increasing linguistic skills follow different goals. This essay discuss the both views and the writer's viewpoint about the topic.

On the one hand, some people maintain that learning more languages has no reason except travel or work. They state that the intention of learners directly or indirectly is related to the matters of travel to or work in another country. Absolutely, taking a trip to a specific country with the aid of tourism or occupation without knowing their people's formal language or atleast the itetnational language is impossible, refering the point that the language is the solitary way people can have mutual comprehension. Although, these are two major reasonable cause for knowing more language, but there are more opinions can develope this subject.

On the other hand, some other people argue that if we have a marticulous look to the aid of each person, other attractive motivations can be seen. They state that, nowadays with modern technology which has eliminated the borders of communication, there are more people interested in having the ability to speak and write without any goal to travel or work. They point to the tourism industry, where how much the people of host country know the tourists' language or a common one, can have more promotion in their economy. Also, they refer to the divers websites and Apps giving the opportunity to talk, speak and finding friends through whole countries. Furthermore, international business and dependant economies of the countries to each other make raise in the capability of knowing other languages.

As maintained above, there are more motivations leading people to be multiple language learners and it is the idea, I am agree with. As an instance, I can remind the educational goals wich is applyes about me. Therefore, thanks to inhancing and reforming the capacity of communications, the reasons of learning foreign language can be vary and it can be anticipated, in near future, the majority of people know minimum more than one language as it will be defenetly a necessity for public.

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Learning foreign languages is already grown. Some claim that they are learned just for purpose of travel to or work abroad while others think these are not the only reasons for learners. In my view, the positive aspects of learning other...

Learning foreign languages is already grown. Some claim that they are learned just for purpose of travel to or work abroad while others think these are not the only reasons for learners. In my view, the positive aspects of learning other languages are far more than working or traveling out of borders.
Language is the main key to communication. This matter is clearly true that acquiring a foreign language is crucial for gaining a job in another country. Also, it is a positive point for a traveler that knows the destination's local tongue. However, communication is not limited to being in other countries, but plenty of situations occur in which we need to comprehend foreigners. For instance, we may face with tourists in our own city and it is satisfying when we would be able to interact with them well.
On the other side, learning new languages helps us to become familiar with various cultures and modern knowledge originated from foreign countries. Take, for instance, thousands of worthwhile academic books that are published in the author's native tongue. Thus, students have to learn it so completely that they will be sure of an accurate comprehension. As another example, individuals who are interested in French literature need understanding this language before reviewing the works.
In conclusion, people might have various reasons for learning a foreign language, though they profit from that in any way. Achieving their job, communication with others and becoming familiar with different cultures are just some of its benefits.

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These days learning foreign languages is received wide currency among people. Although people should learn other languages
to visit or work in other countries, the benefit of learning foreign languages are not restricted to these aspects.
It...

These days learning foreign languages is received wide currency among people. Although people should learn other languages
to visit or work in other countries, the benefit of learning foreign languages are not restricted to these aspects.
It is undoubtedly true that before people travel to a foreign country for employment or holiday, it would be beneficial to have some proficiency in of that country's language. Being able to speak its language would make life easier in the country than not having any knowledge of its native language. For example, if a foreigner could communicate in Turkish, he would achieve simple daily tasks such as going to the supermarket without any difficulty. In addition, employers are more eager to recruit bilingual rather monolingual staff.Thus the majority of people start learning other languages to participate in international conferences.

From another angle, we are living in a broadless world, so learning different languages is going to be a must for every person. Learning a new language will help people not only identify other races easier but also understand other cultures. Moreover, nowadays students require to do more research in comparison with the past and they should read more recent articles many of which have been written in other languages. This way students are quite dependent on other languages, so they commence learning a new language in order to open doors to all sorts of possibilities for their educational success.
To sum up, I believe that learning a new language can be used for several reasons and nobody can restrict it to porpuses such a work or travel.

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Reasons for learning a foreign language is a matter of the debate which frequently generates great deal of heated debate with supporters which maintain that it is vital to learn a foreign langiage ,whilst, opponents argue that it is useless...

Reasons for learning a foreign language is a matter of the debate which frequently generates great deal of heated debate with supporters which maintain that it is vital to learn a foreign langiage ,whilst, opponents argue that it is useless unless, you travel or work abroad. Some of the reasons of both partied envolved have been put forward:
The most common and strongest argument in favor of learning foreign langiahe is that it helps to develop cognitive and creative skills. It enhances IQ in childre. A study in washington on children below 12 year proved that children who learn more than one language are more likely to gain higher scores and better performances at school. Furthermore, acquaintances to other languages benefits us in university years. By familiarity to foreign languages we can be able to translate books and resources which can help us in essays or thesis. Last but not least , learning new language can positively influence our life. It helps us to widen our horizon and act as a bridge to connect people from different cultures and countries.
Inspite of these benefits, however, another group of people claim that learning foreign language is wasting time and money if you dont travel abroad.
All in all, both sides are partly right but I personally think that benefits of learning foreign language far outweight any expenses

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There is no doubt that learning a second language helps people to make an excellent career move. Some people believe the only convincing reason why people should acquire another language is to either travel or work while others think there are...

There is no doubt that learning a second language helps people to make an excellent career move. Some people believe the only convincing reason why people should acquire another language is to either travel or work while others think there are more reasons beside this. Overall, in my opinion there are several reasons for it.
From a general point of view, there are many people who are concerned with learning a second language rather than those who have decided to go abroad for fun or business. For example, some people especially the young might like to apply for higher education oversea. It is an unattainable academic goal if they can not speak fluently while they are studying abroad. Moreover, it paves the way for communicating with tourists who visit their country. That is to say, it contributes to attract more tourists and to flourish this income-generating industry.
From another viewpoint, a minority group of people might think that learning a foreign language is only convincing for those who need to travel or work abroad. They might think, international students do not need to learn an international language. But, it is inevitable because they would have to communicate with their tutors and other students which need a mutual language.
In conclusion, there are multiple reasons why people should acquire a second language. They might want to go abroad as a tourist or a businessman or for their academic purposes. Moreover, some people need to socialize with tourists who visit their country. Therefore, there are several convincing reasons rather than travelling and working abroad.

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While in the earlier times people used to speak just with their local languages, the recent decades have seen a significant rise in learning foreign languages. Travelling or working in a foreign country, however, seems not to be the only reason...

While in the earlier times people used to speak just with their local languages, the recent decades have seen a significant rise in learning foreign languages. Travelling or working in a foreign country, however, seems not to be the only reason for taking in a foreign language and without doubt there could many other motivations for this goal.

Some people believe that, learning foreign language is an inefficient as well as time-consuming process. When studying and working in your home country, you do not have to waste your time for assimilating foreign languages. Instead, you could devote your time on something that is efficient for your future and country. By way of illustration, attend relevant educational classes which boost your future job prospect.

On the other hand, learning a new foreign language is bound to useful for your mind. It not only strengthens your brain but also expands your knowledge. Plenty of statistics have shown those who learn a new language are less likely to be at risk for diseases such as Alzheimer's.

Furthermore, in the process of learning a foreign language you get interested in its people, culture and society. A nation’s history and culture are largely in its language, both verbal and written. By understanding their language you start to understand their beliefs, customs and even poetry and literature. For example, a recent study of Queen’s University found that most of students who study foreign language are interested in history and culture of that country.

On the whole, I believe that take in a foreign language has some merits most of which are more important than just travelling or working in a foreign country. With learning a foreign language you could reinforce your brain and gain new information about that country which are extremely invaluable.

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Unsurprisingly, at the turn of the twenty-first century the crowd of men and women, in most cases, tends to be taught a new language. Opinions are divided as to whether learning of it must be limited to travel or work purposes when we exit our...

Unsurprisingly, at the turn of the twenty-first century the crowd of men and women, in most cases, tends to be taught a new language. Opinions are divided as to whether learning of it must be limited to travel or work purposes when we exit our country or other reasons can be beneficial? I myself strongly advocate the latter case. In the following essay, both viewpoints are brought up and discussed as well.

A camp of people share a view that only for moving from our setting to another country we are bound to learn a specific codes of communication. That is, they do suppose that without knowing a common language not only do we lose money dramatically, in this regard, but also we are surely able to satisfy our needs like buying food in an unknown area of the world where we have not been there so far. As it is commonly said, " almost all professional players do, firstly, learn a way of communication being prevalent in the universe, including- English, and German, as well as French to make a lucrative contract per annum."

Like numerous ordinary individuals, I have always long believed that if we humans have tried every possible way to master a foreign language, we would, doubtless, eliminate the prevalence of Alzheimer's disease. Precisely because passive part of our brain is activated. Furthermore, even the elderly would much rather read the drug's labels that they are using day in day out. In turn, they are by no means wholly reliant on their children in direct comparison with the past.

To put it in a nutshell, it should be noted that learning a language just for the aims of travelling and for meeting requirements with regard to a business is more ludicrous.

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These days, learning a second language is growing. Although the significant causes of learning foreign languages are travel and work, this issue has other aspects for learning. I personally agree with first idea. This essay will examine both...

These days, learning a second language is growing. Although the significant causes of learning foreign languages are travel and work, this issue has other aspects for learning. I personally agree with first idea. This essay will examine both views.

On the one hand, vast majority of people claim that the main reason of learning second language is just because of traveling and working. Firstly, language is a plus point for finding better job opportunities. In other words, the ability of speaking in other languages undoubtedly reinforce job seeker's resume. According to research done in united states universities, employers tend to hire well-educated employees with higher skills such as foreign language ability. Secondly, language is vital for interacting with local people in traveling to abroad. Moreover, without knowing language definitely will become like a blind and deaf people and obviously people will be dependent to translators and different types of applications which are more time consuming.
On the other hand, not only do languages play an important role in introducing other cultures, it is essential for societies’ improvement. First, the only way to compare and expand the knowledge of people is people’s awareness through presenting rich costumes of other countries which languages are the most effective factors in this case. Furthermore, understanding foreign languages are exactly like a tool avoid from repeating other countries defeats and make pattern from them with studying histories. Therefore, societies should have allocated a sufficient budget for learning other languages. Finally, some people are interested in learning other languages. For instance, some authors are avid reader of books in other language for imitating the method of writers how they attract their fans.

In conclusion, I believe that peoples’ improvement in social life depend on learning languages. Thus governments are responsible in these issues which need more draw attention to various aspects that travel and work are highlighted.

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Right from the dawn of civilization, the demand for communication has been instinctively inherited by prehistoric men and the ability to contact to each other by the mean of the tongue has been utilized. The notion in which claims that the...

Right from the dawn of civilization, the demand for communication has been instinctively inherited by prehistoric men and the ability to contact to each other by the mean of the tongue has been utilized. The notion in which claims that the ability to communicate with some language other than one's mother tongue might only be of good use whenever one is traveling abroad have had its supporters. While there is an opposition to that thought which believes that learning second language can arise plenty of opportunities in life. In this essay I will evaluate both views and assert my own thoughts on this topic.
I think advocates of the belief that does not comprehend the necessity of learning second language, unless it is meant to be used in overseas trips might consider the process of learning foreign language somehow waste of time. Furthermore, these groups of people might have some racism tendency and are probably the ones which nurture the idea of racism and believe that their language should come at the highest priority and no other language should replace or be overvalued in comparison with theirs.
In the other hand there is a second group of people that utterly support the notion in which emphasize on the necessity to communicate via foreign languages. they conceive second language as a strong asset to their skillsets which can provide huge opportunities for bilingual person in terms of job market. Moreover, they have comprehended the scientific fact that the ability to communicate in foreign language has a huge positive impact in terms of cognitive development and can prevent the brain from disease and ailments such as Alzheimer. My thoughts and beliefs are at the same side with this group of people and advocate the fact that in these days and ages having this incredibly advantageous asset is a huge demand rather than only an optional tourism-intended mean to utilize in overseas.
In conclusion, I cannot help but to definitely agree with the notion that asserts the ability to speak foreign language is an incredible requirement and every individual all around the world should deal with the challenges of attaining second language

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While people used to learn a foreign language due to travelling or working in other countries, the last decades have seen a rise of number of people who have been learning foreign languages to reach other prospects. Therefore, despite the...

While people used to learn a foreign language due to travelling or working in other countries, the last decades have seen a rise of number of people who have been learning foreign languages to reach other prospects. Therefore, despite the applicable effect of learning international language on travel or work, the crucial impact of learning other ways should be considered.

On the one hand, some individuals are of the opinion that learning a foreign language concerning travelling or working is the major inducement to study it. They assume that everybody who would rather go on their career in foreign country needs to learn their language. In addition to this, there have been a lot of tourists annually who are forced to learn international language to have a beneficial communication with others. It seems that learning another language is a tough predicament and it should be necessary for a certain group of people. Others do not have to waste a great deal of time and energy for learning so it is better to concentrate on prioritising plans.

On the other hand, opponents of these individuals are supposed that learning a foreign language is extremely significant in everyone's life. It shows that if anybody requires to revolutionise their life and obtain a magnificent occupation, should keep a great of efforts. It illustrates going on relative state-of-the-art technology and studying academic languages lead to approach essential goals such as discovering a well-paying job with astronomical salary and some fringe benefits like bonuses, financial rewards and secure retirement.

To conclude, nowadays spending time for learning a foreign language has desirable aspects such as dealing with newcomers and adequate development on people's lifestyle. I personally believe that learning a foreign language has not only plenty of advantages but also incredible impact on reaching a bright future.

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Over the last decades, a growing number of people tend to learn a foreign language. While some people think journey and migration to other countries for seeking job are the main causes of learning a second language, others are of the opinion that...

Over the last decades, a growing number of people tend to learn a foreign language. While some people think journey and migration to other countries for seeking job are the main causes of learning a second language, others are of the opinion that a number of reasons make people study another language except their mother tongue. In my opinion there are plenty of factors which motivate people to learn a foreign language. This assay will discusses both sides of the issue.
It is undeniable that knowing a second language is necessary for everyone who decides to take a trip or move abroad for occupation. You need to communicate with local people in the host country, whether you are a tourist or a job seeker. It has been showed that bilingual people are 75 percent more successful in their business than monolingual.
In addition to the reasons mentioned, there are other motivations which encourage people to get familiar with at least one foreign language. For instance, watching movies and reading books into original language is much more enjoyable than ones translated. Furthermore, learning a second language broads your horizon and helps you to nourish your mind. According to a survey in Tehran university, knowing a second language potentially enables both brain hemispheres, thereby preventing some brain diseases such as Alzheimer.
To sum up, I strongly believe people should be fluent in a foreign language because of several reasons such as communicating, understanding foreign movies and books, avoiding brain diseases etc.

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There have always been many benefits in learning foreign languages, leading to people attempt to do that. Notwithstanding some individuals claim that having a journey or an occupation abroad is the sole criterion for making a decision to learn...

There have always been many benefits in learning foreign languages, leading to people attempt to do that. Notwithstanding some individuals claim that having a journey or an occupation abroad is the sole criterion for making a decision to learn their language, others refuse that and declare other intentions to master a new language; I personally agree with the second group. following paragraphs will discuss both sides.

When you go somewhere overseas whether for a job or trip, speaking the target language could be an effective way to deal with likely issues you may come across; as a result, a group of people try to learn such a language. In fact, the only function which they consider for linguistic knowledge in other languages is performing their daily routine, especially in foreign lands. For instance, were they to travel abroad, they could book a proper hotel room and tour all over the country, or if they intended to work there, they could comply with conditions, carry out their duties and establish good communication with their colleagues. However, the rest of the people present opposing arguments for learning second language.

As language could be used for various purposes, there would potentially be a plenty of causes, except for those mentioned above, to study a foreign language. Should someone learn a language, in addition to their mother tongue, they will not only independently get acquainted with the culture of regions with that language, but also directly get access to a great store of thoughtful references, even if they do not aim to go someplace whose people talk in that particular language. All of these undoubtedly make a profound impact on their characteristic features and develop their personality. Furthermore, learning other languages could both provide better job opportunities within their own country and create better possibilities for pursuing their interests in other aspects of life, such as education.

In conclusion, it is obvious that there is the number of cogent reasons, which I absolutely concur, unless visiting foreign countries or working there to endeavor to master at least one another language.

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Undoubtedly, being able to speak in another country's language has alwayse been a significant factor for people these days. Some people believe that it is only due to our need when we are in other countries for work or even have a trip....

Rahele Z:
Undoubtedly, being able to speak in another country's language has alwayse been a significant factor for people these days. Some people believe that it is only due to our need when we are in other countries for work or even have a trip. While others argue that there are plenty of reasons to know a foreign language. I am personally a fan of learning other languages particularly with all of reasons.
You do not have to look far to find out that modernity and progress in defferent science in the world are caused many demands of knowledge for human beings. In addition globalization can be another point to illustrate the importance of this ability knowing a master language in the world. It not only can wide our harizon to the life but also help us most of needs to be met. For instance, it has been common practice to sit at home by surfing on internet, finding a university with a cheep tuation fees. Saving precious time would make a valuable contribution if you could master a foreign language even you were at your home country.
However, it is bound to know another language when you tend to travel or make money for a new bussiness in abroad. There has been an obligation or maybe potential argument in this way. Actually, students grow up believing that mother toungue is basically beneficial for making progress till they are tempted with the attraction of different countries or by force to meet most of demands.
All in all, the advantages of knowing second langouage outweigh disadvantages , either an argument for traveling second country or even in your home country. This awareness can make a nonsense of all illusions of being bilingual.

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Although many learn a new language just to meet a particular need like tourism or work-related cases in other countries, learning it for other various causes ranging from study to personal interest are common too. In this essay, both viewpoints...

Although many learn a new language just to meet a particular need like tourism or work-related cases in other countries, learning it for other various causes ranging from study to personal interest are common too. In this essay, both viewpoints will be explained in details.
On the one hand, it is a pure waste of time and money to learn other languages with neither business-related nor tourism purposes. According to some figures, more than 60% of people in a survey claim that they would learn a new language only when they use it to do a business or settle down in such place. For example, we must know the Japanese to live in Japan for a while. This is mainly because the best way to connect locals is to communicate them in their mother tongue.
On the other hand, people sometimes learn a new language due to more reasons than a clear purpose like going abroad for a job or holiday-making. For instance, regardless of learning French for either work or living, some people love it because of its literature and music. They enjoy reading novels or listening to their favorite music in this language as the main motivating factors to instill. This is what they eagerly like and find it joyful and thrilling in their life. For that, they spend time and money on it despite whether using it or not.
To sum up, both points of view regarding the reasons to learn a foreign language were discussed in this essay. In my opinion, the above-mentioned figure shows that unless we need learning a foreign language to perform a job or spend a holiday, it will not useful to do.

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Although many learn a new language just to meet a particular need like tourism or work-related cases in other countries, learning it for other various causes ranging from study to personal interest are common too. In this essay, both viewpoints...

Although many learn a new language just to meet a particular need like tourism or work-related cases in other countries, learning it for other various causes ranging from study to personal interest are common too. In this essay, both viewpoints will be explained in details.
On the one hand, it is a pure waste of time and money to learn other languages with neither business-related nor tourism purposes. According to some figures, more than 60% of people in a survey claim that they would learn a new language only when they use it to do a business or settle down in such place. For example, we must know the Japanese to live in Japan for a while. This is mainly because the best way to connect locals is to communicate them in their mother tongue.
On the other hand, people sometimes learn a new language due to more reasons than a clear purpose like going abroad for a job or holiday-making. For instance, regardless of learning French for either work or living, some people love it because of its literature and music. They enjoy reading novels or listening to their favorite music in this language as the main motivating factors to instill. This is what they eagerly like and find it joyful and thrilling in their life. For that, they spend time and money on it despite whether using it or not.
To sum up, both points of view regarding the reasons to learn a foreign language were discussed in this essay. In my opinion, the above-mentioned figure shows that unless we need learning a foreign language to perform a job or spend a holiday, it will not useful to do

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In the past, people used to think learning second language was just necessary for those who were trying to work or travel in a foreign country. Nevertheless, in my opinion, it has several other significant benefits.
First of all, knowing second...

In the past, people used to think learning second language was just necessary for those who were trying to work or travel in a foreign country. Nevertheless, in my opinion, it has several other significant benefits.
First of all, knowing second language just for travel or work in a foreign country had become a tenet of traditional living approach. That was owing to communication was not so widespread as it is today; business, work and commercial activities had been just limited to local areas, and people were barely required to make foreign exchanges generally. Thereby, language was bound to mother tongue.
In contrast to what has been discussed above, many think that not only mastering foreign language boost creativity of young learners at school, but also it increases the chance of employability. Many studies has strived to demonstrate that despite the difficulties that pupils may face to begin second language at school, they achieve much better educational records later in life, especially in mathematics- as it rises the brain activities and consequently reinforces the process of problem solving developments. Besides, being proficient in foreign language would be considered golden selling point for taking new job position in companies; many employers give primacy to bilingual volunteers in employment process due to ever increasing rate of international companies’ growth throughout the world.
In conclusion, I strongly suppose that learning foreign language benefits not only those who are decided to work and travel abroad, but also it is considered crucial for fostering effective pupils in school and enrich professional resume for finding appropriate job. Were I government, I would make it compulsory to learn at least two languages in an educational system.

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In recent decades, there have be seen dramatic increase in the number of people who try to learn new languages of other countries for different purposes. Although most of leaners need to know foreign languages to have better job condition and...

In recent decades, there have be seen dramatic increase in the number of people who try to learn new languages of other countries for different purposes. Although most of leaners need to know foreign languages to have better job condition and earn more money, it seems there are the sheer number of reasons which encourage people to take in a second languages.
On the one hand, increased interaction between countries in the domains of cultural and business causes plenty of businessmen have to learn foreign languages in order to survive the keen competition in labor market. In the other word, nowadays most of companies prefer to take on some job-seekers who are able to speak different languages, so knowing second languages is becoming an essential factor to have well-paid and stable job. In addition, the significant increase in transnational travel in recent years which dues to improving relations between countries is another reason of learning a new language by individuals.
On the other hand, there are many people ranging from children to elderly people who are interested in languages of other cultures, to be more precise, they usually place a premium on linguistic diversity and attempt to do research on. Some students, for example, make decision to study a foreign language as academic major at university. Furthermore, having kept abreast of the latest news and developed in different fields such as technology, people try to foster their language skills. For instance, in my country, the interest of an array number of teenagers to English movies and music is a strong motivation for learning English language by them.
In conclusion, I believe that, apart from some mentioned reasons such as finding or developing job and visiting various countries, in fast-paced world there are many other main aims ( targets) which spur people to take in different languages.

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In recent decades, there have be seen dramatic increase in the number of people who try to learn new languages of other countries for different purposes. Although most of leaners need to know foreign languages to have better job condition and...

In recent decades, there have be seen dramatic increase in the number of people who try to learn new languages of other countries for different purposes. Although most of leaners need to know foreign languages to have better job condition and earn more money, it seems there are the sheer number of reasons which encourage people to take in a second languages.
On the one hand, increased interaction between countries in the domains of cultural and business causes plenty of businessmen have to learn foreign languages in order to survive the keen competition in labor market. In the other word, nowadays most of companies prefer to take on some job-seekers who are able to speak different languages, so knowing second languages is becoming an essential factor to have well-paid and stable job. In addition, the significant increase in transnational travel in recent years which dues to improving relations between countries is another reason of learning a new language by individuals.
On the other hand, there are many people ranging from children to elderly people who are interested in languages of other cultures, to be more precise, they usually place a premium on linguistic diversity and attempt to do research on. Some students, for example, make decision to study a foreign language as academic major at university. Furthermore, having kept abreast of the latest news and developed in different fields such as technology, people try to foster their language skills. For instance, in my country, the interest of an array number of teenagers to English movies and music is a strong motivation for learning English language by them.
In conclusion, I believe that, apart from some mentioned reasons such as finding or developing job and visiting various countries, in fast-paced world there are many other main aims ( targets) which spur people to take in different languages.

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As learning another language brings about some positive outcomes, some people strongly believe migration and visiting other countries incent them to commence learning a new language. In contrast, the others think that knowing other cultures...

As learning another language brings about some positive outcomes, some people strongly believe migration and visiting other countries incent them to commence learning a new language. In contrast, the others think that knowing other cultures through their languages would be beneficial even if you do not leave your country. I agree with the second group, while this essay will discuss both views.

Learning a new language for working in other countries has become a worrying challenge for the ones who just rely on their maternal tongue. Not only is learning a new language advantageous to pursue our career in other countries, but also it leads to easily finding places worth visiting in other countries since it enables us to interact with people. As well as this, one impressive parameter in recruitment process is to present yourself in the most possible effective way in their own language. Besides, strucking relationships with both the chief manager and your colleagues could ameliorate our collaboration with the company to make profit.

The other people think that learning another language would be beneficial even in your own country. As an instance, for a Japanese student, knowing English can boost his ability to read various resources written in English for his research. Furthermore, for the ones who are quite eager to change their contemporary tedious occupations to a better one, a second language could possibly be a potential option since most Japanese firms work with European companies.

To conclude, getting familiar with other languages could enhance our productivity for people who either tend to settle in other countries or preferably choose their home countries. I think studying other languages has changed to a vital need for all people whether migrate or stay in their countries.

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be careful about choosing your words, for example "incent" is not a verb. topic sentences lack precision.
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There are differing views on the issue of “what is the main reason of learning foreign language?”. According to some, travel is the only motivational aspect for this issue, however, others declare that it’s not the only reason and learning new...

There are differing views on the issue of “what is the main reason of learning foreign language?”. According to some, travel is the only motivational aspect for this issue, however, others declare that it’s not the only reason and learning new language depend on several arguments. In this essay, both views along with my own opinion are intended to be discussed.
It’s clear that communication plays a vital rule for human to progress in life. So language is the important tool that convey information between people very easy. Therefore, by learning new language apart from making travel to other countries more convenient, opening a new window to world and actually become friendship more accessible.
Another point that lead people to learn foreign language is having this chance to improve their job and business. For example, many people such as physicians, lawyers, artists… need to broaden their knowledge and gain information in their subjects. So learning new language is necessity regard to communicate with other people from different countries to familiar with the latest information. Survey of 2000 student in Xantania university in Japan showed that the main reason for learning English and other language was this point that they can research more and also analyze information much easy.
To conclude, I affirm my position that although travel is one reason for learning new language, it is not the only reason for it. While many other justifications such as having better communication and accessing to latest information would probably be the most important one.

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there seems to be lack of development particularly in the second paragraph. a range of vocabulary is attempted.
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The question arises whether about the reasons of learning new language, people seem to have divided opinion. Primary group believe the only reason of have learning only travel or study to abroad. The other say learning new language have rooted...

The question arises whether about the reasons of learning new language, people seem to have divided opinion. Primary group believe the only reason of have learning only travel or study to abroad. The other say learning new language have rooted in several items. I am still unconvinced that the only reason of deal with not mother tongue is immigration to work or learning new science.

One the one hand, people are expected study new language for two mean reasons travel and learning. Since mother tongue meet the up all need particularly in every own country there is no obvious reason to learn other nationality language. Firstly. When it comes to immigration to another country to find new opportunity, speaking altered to mean reason to combine with new society and undergo new culture indeed .secondly, thanks to advent of new kind of science in development countries the huge amount of student convince to attain Master and PHD degree in well-known university in interesting majors which has big if, take reasonable marks in international exams such as IELTS, TOFEL and GRE.As result new language new word.
One the other hand, merits of new language is not limited to study and working in others country. The first, Tourism has been industry with70 percent benefits time more than oil which need several language expert as interpreter to deal with foreign tourist in own countries. Employment in this industry is integral reason to learn other occur foreign languages. In addition improve of personality knowledge for scholarly or university professors to teaching student of foreign language are reasonable reasons to potentially study new language The another group of people who try to learning new language is businessman for deal with other exporter in other countries.
At sum up, in my idea learning new language so useful for several reason not only to work and study abroad. [

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Learning a new language has received a wide currency among people these days. People have diversity perspective about the reason behind this ranging from compulsory to optional. Learning a new language not only adds up skill but also offers...

Learning a new language has received a wide currency among people these days. People have diversity perspective about the reason behind this ranging from compulsory to optional. Learning a new language not only adds up skill but also offers enormous
benefit for brain and personal growth.

The major driving factor behind individual decision for learning a foreign language could be the essential demand for communicate
in order to travel or work in a country. When traveling to a country, people are required to meet their fundamental needs such as food and accommodation; hence learning the country language or English –the universal language- is of the essence to eliminate basic needs.


Nonetheless, some people desire to learn another language regardless of work or travel. In fact, it is consider as a way to foster personal growth. Despite making extra effort, this provides essay access to other culture result in deeper insight into the life as well as a conscious about life challenges. A cursory examination of bilingual and multilingual reinforces this belief that most of them live life to the full and have positive self-image even they have to counter a plenty of difficulties. It, moreover, is beneficial for brain. When occupied by learning language, the brain demolish is bound to postpone. Figures show that Alzheimer-the problem occasionally have seen in elderly people-is unlikely to appear in bilingual people

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In conclusion , there are a cascade of reasons for learning a new language .Whatever they are ,we should appreciate the importance of learning language for personal growth and enhance communication skill .

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In the new millennium, undoubtedly, an ever-increasing demand has been sensed for learning foreign language. It is explicitly stated that traveling or having a job abroad is simply the single motivation of these learning, whilst others go...

In the new millennium, undoubtedly, an ever-increasing demand has been sensed for learning foreign language. It is explicitly stated that traveling or having a job abroad is simply the single motivation of these learning, whilst others go against this outlook by emphasizing on the universal trade system and the necessity of having a common language in between.
Being familiar with the target language, people are highly likely to experience a far more exciting travel; they can communicate with people as well as meet their general demands since they are bound to know this foreign language. As for pursuing a career beyond the borders, using a foreign language fluently comes as a bonus apart from being well-qualified for a specific job. Foreign language have considered as a secondary requirement needing to be learned when one embarks on relocating abroad.
However, due to the advent of universal trade throughout the world, numerous international products have been produced; infinite variety of multi-national companies is set up. Having online or face-to-face communications with a shared language to foreigners is set to be essential. Managers and employees capabling of encouraging a fluent one with their foreign counterparts are at an advantage for their potential perspective progression. This seems, hence, a quality worthwhile aiming for without any intention of traveling abroad.
In conclusion, learning a foreign language appears to be a pivotal factor influencing success and composure nowadays; individuals can take the full advantage of this ability in their potential career. Whether they travel out of the country or not, I suppose.

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These days ,learning a new language is quiet common among people. Some of the people assert that learning a second language is only for working or traveling purposes in a foreign country while the others claim that working or traveling are not...

These days ,learning a new language is quiet common among people. Some of the people assert that learning a second language is only for working or traveling purposes in a foreign country while the others claim that working or traveling are not the only reason for learning and the other goals stimulate individuals for taking in a second language. The ideas of both groups will be elucidated in the following paragraphs followed by the opinion of the writer.

Having better working conditions in a foreign country or traveling for passing leisure time is the reason having triggered people to learn a new language. Bilingual individuals can persuade their authorities by explaining their abilities and convincing them to have proper qualifications for occupying that vacant job. In addition they would happier moments for hanging out in a foreign country if they could communicate with other dwellers of the host country.

The second group is of the conviction that, in a borderless world learning a second language is going to be essential . people do not learn a new language only for working or traveling goals. For instance, if an academic person can speak English ,he/she would able to connect with other professor in his/her field and use the precious experiences of them in all of the world ; it can help them broaden their horizons and be more successful.

According to preceding discussion, I strongly believe that learning a new language affects all aspects of individuals’ life. In other words, it is an integral part of future life. Being bilingual is not only foe particular aims , but also for passing routine life.

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As our would is becoming more and more connected through technological advances, it becomes increasingly obvious that learning another language is beneficial for many reasons. I strongly believe that far more reasons rather than traveling to or...

As our would is becoming more and more connected through technological advances, it becomes increasingly obvious that learning another language is beneficial for many reasons. I strongly believe that far more reasons rather than traveling to or working in abroad could be represented in so as to be bilingual.
Employers are significantly bound to recruit a person, who knows at least one foreign language more than his mother’s tongue. Thus Your chances of being employed, if a language proficiency evidence attached to the C.V , might be highly greater not only in your homeland but definitely also in overseas It can be considered as a value which playing a major role both in job prosperity and the amount of salary you are going to be paid. Knowing , furthermore, a second language opens up your vacations destination possibilities. Traveling through a foreign country, if you were able to speak the language of that country, would be much more easier.as well as providing a golden opportunity to communicate with foreigners.
Nevertheless studying a new language owing to find a proper job in abroad or to go on a trip there could be reasonable reasons, there can be found a great deal of positive cognitive effects of second language on brain. This can train the brain to analyze and process different linguistic structures. Another compelling reason for acquiring a new language is that bilingual people may be more at the risk of Alzheimer. Thanks to bilingualism the amount of neural pathways will be obviously increased more than monolingual ones.
On balance, a new language opens doors to new worlds and also it may boost our advantages. I completely and truly believe that this issue should be considered as a priority not only for working and traveling purposes but also because of its positive effects on mental health.
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